So… I'm putting this on hold, it has been pointed out that the dialogue is wooden and Jaune and Sienna don't have much character, now before you blame the reviewer, don't, I've felt the same way. And I have no one to blame but myself, so I'm putting this on hold until I can afford the Dragon age games and will rewrite the chapters, manly to give Jaune and Sienna actual character, cut out the game feel of talking to anyone with a name floating over their head, and show it from Jaune's prospective. Sorry to everyone who actually enjoys this story, but I have to do this, as much as it pains me to, see you all when I have a hopefully have a decent story to write, and the means to stick with it.
This is Bmwoodstock signing off.