Author's note: This is a rewrite of my fanfic of the same name as I was dissatisfied with the original version.
I hope you enjoy this new version.
Poor Twisted Soul (rewrite)
Chapter 1
A Music Concert Gone Wrong
It was a windy day above the sea. Sea lions and dolphins played above the waves before diving back under the surface as a large wooden ship came into view as gulls glided on the ocean's air currents. On the ship, serval sailors were throwing nets over the boards and hauling them back up once the nets were filled with fish, singing as they did so. Also on the might ship a young man. He had short black hair and wore a white shirt and blue trousers. With the young were his pet white and grey sheepdog, Max, barking happily as he followed his master. The young man stood over the deck and let the ocean wind blow through his hair.
"Isn't this great? The salty sea air, the wind blowing in your face... a perfect day to be at sea!" the young man said to a man who was leaning over the deck, throwing up into cold salty water.
"Oh yes.. delightful..." Grimsby said after losing the last of his launch.
A fine strong wind and a following sea. King Triton must be in a friendly-type mood.
"King Triton?" The young man asked.
"Why, ruler of the merpeople, lad. Thought every good sailor knew about him." another sailor said.
"Merpeople! Eric, pay no attention to this nautical nonsense." Grimsby said.
"But it ain't nonsense, it's the truth! I'm tellin' you, down in the depths of the ocean they live." the second sailor said as he wildly waved a fish in Grimsby's face.
Suddenly the sailor lost his grip on the fish and the fish in his hand wiggles away and lands back in the ocean. The fish swam as fast as it could, down into the deep water until it was sure that it was safe. The fish looked back and signed in relief before swimming off and joining another school of fish.
Across the sea serval, sea creatures from gigantic whales to microscopic planktons were all making their way to the great music hall of Atlantica to watch the newest performances of Triton's daughter. Atlantica was the home of the merfolk. It was a kingdom of peace and harmony, filled with joyful merfolk and was ruled, frim but fairly by its king. The kingdom was filled with the sound of joy, laughter and beautiful music that no human could ever replicate.
Backstage Trition's daughters were getting ready. Their names were Attina, Aquata, Andrina, Alana, Adella, and Arista.
Attica was the oldest of the sisters. She had a red tail and seashells. Attica was the most mature of her sisters. She would often do what she could to help her sisters with their problems and was their self-proclaimed leader. Attica had a red tail and red seashells and wore a red spiky band in her brown hair.
Alana was the second oldest daughter of Triton. She had black hair, a purple tail, purple seashells and wore a small pink crown. Alana, just like her sisters, was kind-hearted, however, Alana did love her looks a little too much, and often spend more time looking in the mirror than anything else.
Adella was the third princess of the sea. Adella had dark brown hair which she wore in a large ponytail, a dark yellow tail and green seashells. Out of all of the daughters of the sea king, Adella was by far the most boy crazy often trying to get a kiss of any young merman who captured her fancy.
Aquata was the middle child of the family. For the last serval years, Aquata had been practising her dancing, in the past, she was by far the worst dancer in all the seven seas. Now she had improved greatly and was one of the greatest dancers in all the seas from coast to coast.
Arista was the third youngest. She had blond hair that she wore in a ponytail and had one side at the front going over her right eye, a red tail and red seashells. Arista was the most bubbly of the sisters and had a bad habit of taking their things without permission.
Andrina was the second youngest. She had short blond with half of a pink shell, a purple tail and purple seashells. Andrina did love her sisters but she wasn't afraid of taking jabs at them.
"Do you think Derik will notice me?" Adella asked Alana and Andrina. Alana just rolled her eyes.
"He'll notice you just like any other boy does." Andrina said in a sarcastic voice.
Arista was putting on some cherry red lipstick when Aquata noticed something.
"Hey, that's my lipstick." Aquata said snatching the lipstick from her sister's hand.
"It has my initial on it." Arista said with an innocent smile.
"All of our names begin with latter A, Arista." Aquata said putting her hands on her hips.
"Then how do you know it's yours?" Arista asked.
"Because it was on my desk." Aquata said sternly.
"Was not." Arista said
"Was too." Aquata retorted.
"Attina." Aquata and Arista yelled.
"Where is she?" Attina asked in a worried voice, not hearing Aquata and Arista.
The other sisters looked at Attina as the oldest sister swam around the room. The other sisters then noticed that the seventh member was missing.
"She's cutting it close again." Andrina said.
"Daddy's going to be frustrated again." Arista said worriedly.
"Ok ladies, one minute." the fish said.
"Have you seen our sister?" Attica asked.
"No, I haven't. Now break a tail fin, ladies." the blue fish said. Then he swam away.
"She's dead." Aquata said.
"What are we going to do?" Alana asked.
"We'll just have to start without her and hope she arrives. Come on girls." Attina said.
In the hall, the last of the spectators were taking their seats as some fishes with trumpet-like noses play a fanfare. A tiny seahorse with a ruffled collar appeared. He coughs before he speaks.
"His royal highness, King Triton!" The seahorse said.
Triton entered the room dramatically, being pulled on a seashell chariot by a trio of dolphins to wild cheering. Sparks shoot from his trident and light a chandelier.
"And presenting the distinguished court composer, Horatio, Thelonious, Ignatius Crustaceous Sebastian!" the seahorse said.
A fanfare of kazoos play. Sebastian, a tiny red crab, entered the room riding a small seashell chariot being pulled by two orange fish. He is met with mild applause. He pulls up beside King Triton.
"I'm really looking forward to this performance, Sebastian."
"Oh, Your Majesty, this will be the finest concert I have ever conducted. Your daughters, they will be spectacular!" the crab said.
The fish flip Sebastian upside down.
"Yes, and especially my little Ariel". Triton said proudly.
"Yes, yes, she has the most beautiful voice. Hmm?" Sebastian said as he readjusted himself."If only she'd show up for rehearsals once in a while." he muttered under his breath
A spotlight appears over Sebastian and he rides his chariot out over the stage and takes his place at the podium. He takes out a book of music. He taps his baton and directs the orchestra of fish.
The sisters swim out of giant clam shells as they sang their song, trying not to look worried about their youngest sibling. As the song continued, a large shell rose up. The sisters surround it. The shell opened to reveal that Ariel hadn't arrived for her part. The sisters and Sebastian look worried with the latter putting his craws to his head.
"Oh no." Attina said as Arista hid behind Aquata.
"ARIEL!" Triton yelled as the trident glowed red.