Hi.
Thank you.
But first:
Answer to the first TheSlySage review:
Well, I thought about it, while I was writing stories, to connect under one roof, but each story has its own name, its own (my) annotation. The stories "White", "Motivation" and "Duel" can generally be read separately from the entire list of stories. Therefore, I did not and did not intend to do it. It's easy to read all my stories, it only takes time.
Answer to the second TheSlySage review:
The power of my stories is which they are.
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Answer #3: But, thanks for the feedback| reviews. Maybe then (afterwards) I'll make a anthology and put the stories in the confederation/federation.
Although ... invisible roof.
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Well, I think some my notes are needed:
In the story "Under moon":
1) No, Blake is not bad girl (she is a good girl).
Weiss heard Blake's loud voice.
2) And of course, the word "bench" is the word "bench" for the garden.
3) The "Drama" teg is also appropriate for this story.
4) And, I didn't mark the white ship in the Story Properties.
5) I noticed an mistake, an inaccuracy, so the two sentence sounds like this:
«Weiss closed her copybook and put pen on the table. Rising from chair, she stretched.»
Well…
6) Weiss is "beautiful, intelligent, mannered, and polite." Yes. She has been taught that. She also sees that Jaune looks at her, Jaune has changed (read the short story "Motivation") she sees this. She is more benevolent in her attitude toward him. Consequently, she changes (imperceptibly for her?) her attitude toward other people: Ruby makes a request of her at the end of the story "The Dance," Weiss asks Jaune to help her with the books in the library (the story "The Kiss").
Wow, that's character development. In both Weiss and Jaune. It for the romance, which is not the canon. Well, the show is about Ruby. Ha-ha.
And the romantic story "White" ... romance.
He doesn't pay attention to Yang, for him Weiss is more beautiful. Look the story "The Dance".
7) Well, as for "she looks like a lonely moon", [then] her face looks like the moon, color of moon, then this is a comparison in the East [of the Earth]. Sorry, in the Mistral [Remnant]. Culture. Ren will confirm. The other girls may be beautiful, but the moon is bigger than the stars.
8) Blake's question: "… If I told you she was here, right next to you?"
It has a double bottom. Two meanings... It's about Weiss and Blake at the same time.
But first about Weiss.
9) Blake's phrase: "Go that way," she pointed her hand in the opposite side to where beauty was standing, "You won't meet anyone there so that no one will talk about us."
She complied with Jaune's request, only he didn't understand it.
10) Blake's answer: "You go first, I'll follow you so that Yang doesn't suspect something."
This phrase is first about Weiss going first to the room, going back there, and then Blake goes, so Young doesn't suspect something.
But there's a second meaning here...
11) As for Blake's feelings towards Jaune, I wouldn't say they were big. It wouldn't be the size of a ship. Well, you understood. ) (it is a ship that sails the seas)
12) And in the canon, in the series, Jaune didn't seem to know about the conflict between Weiss and Blake. Wow.
Returning to Weiss: in other fics, many people show her flaws. And here (in the story "Under the Moon") a completely different picture. Look at the virtues of Weiss. I think it may seem unusual to some readers.
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Well, I thought: so maybe it's worth reading [the story] "Under the Moon" again?
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Notes for the story "Night in Beacon":
0) Here, after reading all the previous stories, we read this story.
In general, I thought that the story of "The Kiss" is the final one. It is the main one, the main one as the final one. But then I thought, "And the dance at the dance evening? Are readers waiting?" Ok. But the "The Kiss" remains as the main one, the main one as the final one. It seems. Yes. And the story "Night in Beacon" is (also) about romance.
1) The tegs "Reflections" and "Psychology" may also fit here (the story "Night in Beacon").
2) Returning to Jaune: And how did Jaune realize that he and Weiss were from different social classes, stratums? (Remembering the story of "The Kiss")
Well...
maybe he read books, and also understood because he saw Weiss in her conversation with Blake, and it all affected?
Just don't think that Jaune refused to ask Weiss to dance (the story of the "The Kiss") because of the Fauns and Blake, okay?
3) The word "beauty" means "beautiful girl", and not in the meaning of "beauty as a phenomenon".
4) To read the word "fun" is not in the meaning of the word "pleasure".
5) In the phrase: "There will be no such time anymore..." the word "time" does not have the meaning of the "time" that the clock shows. This word means "time", "one".
5) The word "bout" which does not mean "fight".
6) The words spoken by Weiss ("It is...") at the end of the story do not refer to herself.
New: And 7) The word "momentary" does not mean "minute".
NEW words in text: "It seems like they were having a good time."
NEW words in text: "...and pulled out the that [thing] from his pants pocket..."
(I removed the previous ones)
New: I added claritifity: "...[she was brushing her hair with this right now]"
THE BEGINNING OF THE STORY
_ Night in Beacon_
The day came with an evening of dancing.
"Are you going to ask him to dance? You still haven't invited anyone."
She turned around at Yang's question.
The two of them were in the room getting ready for the event.
"You're not saying anything? Is that a 'yes'?"
But Weiss didn't dignify it with an answer.
"Look..."
Soon she heard:
"Mirror."
"[I] standing, and looking in the mirror."
"Mirror."
"Smoothing my hair."
"Mirror."
"Beauty[girl] looks... in the mirror."
"Jaune fights for her."
"In the... [her] mirror."
Yang was singing and looking in the mirror, a comb was in her hand... [she was brushing her hair with this right now]
Then she[it is Weiss] heard the words of the one:
"What will you do if I go near him? ... It would be hard for him to refuse me in front of everyone, unless..."
She glanced at Weiss out of the corner of her eye.
"... if it is someone else..."
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He stood looking at the dancers. Nearby Ruby was doing the same, holding a cup of non-alcoholic cocktail.
Who would he ask to dance? If that was what he wanted, of course.
Ruby?
Meeting Young didn't bode well for fun.
His eyes found Blake. Standing next to her stood Sun.
It seems like they were having a good time.
He wasn't going to get in way of this guy.
Of course, there was still one other option...
"Jaune," he was interrupted, "can we talk?"
He saw Weiss approaching him.
"Will i take he from you? For some time," she looked in Ruby's side.
"Jaune," his neighbor looked at him.
"I'll return."
"Okay."
She uttered and moved away from them.
And they walked forward.
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Weiss led them to the balcony, then closed the doors behind them.
"May I ask?" [pronounced he].
"Of course. Can we... dance?"
"Miss Schnee..."
"It's just a dance, and call me 'Weiss'." she looked at him.
He looked at her.
"Just..."
"Yes, just. You called us friends yourself."
"Yes. And it all unaccustomed..."
"Today, just now [and] here." she moved closer to him, taking the last two steps.
"Neptune...I guess I shouldn't ask..." [pronounced he].
She blinked her eyes quickly.
"We're not going out downstairs," he looked at her, speaking of the dancers in the hall.
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"And this... is that all? I expected more," she said with wait, after they made the first square.
"I endeavoured," he answered her.
They looked into each other's eyes.
"I see," she said, still as softly as before, without judgment.
"Do you mind if we continue..." his voice revealed a man who had read...
In response, she silently supported his initial movements [toward the dance] after her momentary silence.
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Night stood over Beacon.
Couples were changing in the hall, music, lighting. And the moon illuminating the two dancers on the balcony.
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They were just moving the whole time. She would have said he lacked practice.
It seemed that...
At [some] one moment...
His face creased, he removed his hand and pulled out the that [thing] from his pants pocket that interrupted them.
After a few seconds (while he looked at the display), his face stretched.
He removed his second hand.
"What happened?" she asked... it was clear from his appearance that...
"Ruby's missing, there was an invasion in the communications tower, I have to go."
"But," she certainly hadn't expected that.
If her father had texted him, she would have taken it as a matter of course.
"But isn't there anyone else to do it?"
(If someone had heard that [now], then she would have called her his girlfriend, and then they would have been on a…)
"I told Ruby that I would come to her."
"Jaune..." she tried...
"You yourself said it was 'just a dance,'" he reminded her of her words.
And turned his back to her.
"There won't be such a time anymore..." [her words sounded].
"I understand."
["And don't look at me anymore after the bout."]
["I know."]
(In his defense, it's worth saying, that he didn't look at her after each of his infrequent bouts, waiting for her reaction.)
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When the door closed behind him.
She stomped her foot.
Can't there be another girl he could look at?
...Pyrrha, she is the same as her, and although she also has money, but she is not as rich, she would suit him.
But no, he looked at her.
And he even said why exactly...
Then who could have written him?
Blake...
She had no doubts.
She remembered what had happened in the library...
How once he and Blake had exchanged slight nods as greetings.
She wrote off this moment as a simple acquaintance at the time, but now...
Weiss pushed open the doors to the hall and searched with her eyes...
Yang is just a provocateur...
...who, upon seeing her, saluted her with a smile (and removing two fingers from his forehead).
She looked to her left: on the second floor gallery stood director Ozpin and his assistant which holding the communication device, the man took a sip from his mug and adjusted his glasses on the bridge of his nose...
The girl did not look at Blake and closed the doors back.
"It's a fairy tale," she pronounced, looking at the moon.
Midnight had already passed.
Tomorrow it will be exactly Jaune Arc and Weiss Schnee who will wake up and get up.
Oh, this night in Beacon.