Oops... Well, I had a sudden burst of inspiration, so ;)
You will see which idea(s) was/were chosen below the review replies.
Snowfall16- Wow, that really helped! I love that :3 Tension is great! *evil grin* I do really like your idea. You'll have to see... ;)
Pikachudragon- It's actually pretty good! :) Sadly, I need Runningpaw for a later chapter where everyone trusts her... x3
LakeStream- Thanks! :3 I think I might do the idea for the part that talks about a cat back home, maybe in about one or two chapters. :)
Stealthstar of StealthClan- That would be great, but I need you-know-who for a later chapter X3
Frostdawn- Ha, she really is, isn't she. I can tell you really ship AshxRain! ;3
Dawnlight25- Ha, you're welcome X3 and seriously, thank you so much for egging me on ;) I needed that. I love all of your ideas, but in particular I like the ones where Stormpaw loses it on Runningpaw, Rain/Storm/Ash nearly die, and where Rainpaw and one of those three get lost in the mountains. I'll probably combine the last two I mentioned with another idea (if that's alright, of course) and put the first one and another idea in the same chapter. I can really tell you don't like Runningpaw xD And also, I'm going to split that last idea into a third chapter and add the second into the chapter, plus one of my own. That was probably really confusing xD And PLEASE GET AN ACCOUNT BECAUSE YOU ARE AWESOME! ;D
Amberflame805: I know you stole my cookies! But- *takes cookies from behind back* LakeStream got them back for me! xD
Zion the Cookie Empress- Thanks ;) Here's the update!
catbooklover2004- ME LIKEY THAT IDEA VERY MUCH!
Crystalstar of LightClan- Aww, but I already killed off Moss :,( Thanks for reviewing! ;)
Rainstorm of ShadeClan- That corresponds with anther idea, so I'm combining them ;) That means a lot, btw
ZM- Thanks!
haven1elizabeth- Thanks! Yeah, someone told me that when I first joined FFN, and this was one of my first stories so I corrected that a while ago. Thanks, though ;)
Nightfrost-of-shadowclan- Lol, you really like AshxRain XD
Shira the Mage- No, I love that idea! I actually think I'm going to use parts of it for after the mountains, if that is okay ;)
gms14- I do like it ;) Thanks!
Silverwillow of the Freljord- Well... *grabs cookies and runs away, cackling and adds to "secret" cookie collection
Ciara1214- Thanks for reviewing! Well, Runningpaw is sort of evilish... And I can tell you don't like Sunpaw at all! LOL! ;)
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Sorry if I forgot to respond to your review, it's been so long that I might have missed a couple.
Winning Ideas
*cue the drum-roll*
This Chapter: Lakestream's idea
Next Chapter: Combo of Snowfall16's, Rainstorm of ShadeClan's and Dawnlight25's ideas
After the Next Chapter: The next half of Dawnlight25's idea, catbooklover2004's idea and one of my own
You all had really awesome ideas! It was a hard choice. The reason that some of them are combined is because they corresponded very well with each other, and I could lay out a plot line leading from one event to another (which I should practice more often xD)
Chapter 23: Back in the Clans
Sunpaw grumbled, ripping moss out of the old bedding in the Elder's nest. The golden she-cat glared out at Petalcloud, the cream elder resting herself in the weak sunlight.
"Who made dirt in your fresh-kill?" a voice rumbled beside her. She sighed and slowly turned around, casting Lionpaw an agitated glance.
"What do you want, Lionpaw?"
He shrugged and continued to fix the bedding. "You've been so... I don't know how to put it- grumpy since your siblings left for the mountains."
"Too right!" Sunpaw burst out, kneading her claws in the moss. "Featherstar should have chosen me to go. I'm the strongest apprentice we have."
At the same moment, Quailpaw trotted through the entrance with another bundle of moss. "Yeah, right," he mumbled, rolling his eyes at Sunpaw's small and fragile body in comparison to Lionpaw's huge and muscular one.
(A/N Okay, guys, I don't know why but I just LOVE Quailpaw. I sort of based his personality off of Jayfeather's in my mind, so that might make sense. And Jayfeather is awesome, so... XD)
Sunpaw lifted her chin. "I bet I could beat Lionpaw in a fight anytime, anywhere."
"Oh yeah?" Lionpaw snorted. "You can try."
"Good idea!" With that phrase, she leaped at the tom.
Quailpaw let the noises of fighting fade into the background as his mind recalled past events.
A moon ago, Grassclaw, Larkleaf, Coppermouse, Coalblaze, Mossywing and Cheetahspots had all earned their warrior names during an assessment. A half-moon later, Treeheart, Nightberry and Birdleap had all earned their warriors names by driving away a family of badgers. It was hard to see his siblings move on without him, but he was a medicine cat and wouldn't earn his name for a long while. The warrior names of his siblings seemed particularly hard on Sunpaw, who was older than them and expected to be made a warrior first. However, she seemed to be lagging behind in her training and was worse than ever at fighting and hunting.
An exhausted mew broke into his thoughts. "Okay! Okay, I give up!"
Sunpaw was gasping, pinned down on her back with Lionpaw simply holding her down with one paw. He yawned and released her, seeming unscathed and almost bored.
Sunpaw narrowed her eyes and spat, "You won't beat me next time!" She whipped around and stalked away.
Quailpaw and Lionpaw exchanged a glance. "What's with her?"
"She's jealous about Rainpaw and Thrushpaw leaving without her," Lionpaw shrugged, closing his mouth as she stalked inside with more moss.
"It's all Rainpaw this, Rainpaw that!" She hissed, dropping the fresh moss in place of the old. "My mouse-hearted sister gets all the love and fame while I sit here, cleaning moss! Moss!"
"Great StarClan, what's this racket?!" A new voice intervened. "You youngsters done with my bed yet?"
Instantly, Sunpaw widened her eyes, making her look completely innocent. "Yes, Petalcloud!" She mewed sweetly. "I just finished!"
"Good," the old she-cat croaked. "You can go now."
Sunpaw smiled brightly and pranced away and across the clearing, changing back to her dark mood once she was concealed by the leaves of the apprentice's den.
Sunpaw leaped down from the tree-bridge, a frown pulling down the corners of her mouth as pebbles clinked around her paws. She pushed through the ferns surrounding the island, scenting the air with her pink nose.
"ShadowClan is late to the Gathering," she snorted. The golden tabby flicked her tail and began to pad towards a group of apprentices, only to halt as a voice called her name.
"Hey Sunpaw!"
She whipped around, spotting a light brown tom loping towards her. Sunpaw racked her brain for his name. Bumblepaw? No... Beechpaw? Berrypaw? Bramblepaw? That was it!
"Hi Bramblepaw!" She greeted. "Have you seen Stormpaw? He went on the journey, right?"
The tom stopped beside her and nodded. "I hope my brother comes home soon. Is Rainpaw here tonight?"
Sunpaw narrowed her eyes. "Why does everyone want to know about my stupid sister?! It's not like she's special or anything!"
Bramblepaw flinched. "Well, I was going to ask her-"
"Forget it. She's on that mouse-brained journey. Why should I care?!"
He twitched his ears. "Don't you care? She is your sister."
The reply made his pelt prickle with anxiety.
"She's not my sister."
Yes, she is her sister; she meant it figuratively. XD
I am proud! I updated! XD Sorry if this seems rushed or of bad quality, I started to have an inspiration drain at the beginning.
Attention: For those of you like like Lord of the Rings and/or the Hobbit, PLEASEPLEASEPLEEEAAASSEE check out my fan fiction:
Wings of Destiny: Book One: Arising Shadows. PLLLEEEEAAASSSEEEE.
Oh, and I am watching the Battle of Five Armies AGAIN tomorrow XD I was going to today, but we had to move it to tomorrow, sooo yup.
