I decided to bring Bling back! Next Chapter
Wedding dress shop.____________________________________________
Max in a beautiful wedding gown with thin straps it is perfect. And Kate has a beautiful flower girl dress on.
"Mommy you look pretty." Kate comments.
"Thank You Kate so do you."
"She's right you know." Oc says
"I don't know." Max says still checking out the dress.
"Come on Max I know it's your wedding day but this is the 6th dress place we have been to and you finely find one you like." OC states.
"I want it to be perfect." Max answers still unsure.
"OC understands but lil Kate needs a nap she so tired she's gonna fall over."
"Mommy I now tired."
"I know but…" Max looks herself over one more time. "I think this is the dress. Kate come hear."
They stand next to eachother in front of the mirror. Max listens to the Clarks up front with her super hearing. Kate doses the same. OC stand clearly lost
__________________________Behind the front register______________
"Can you believe she is trying on a white dress, that little girl has to be her daughter look at how much that look alike," The first Clerk states.
"She is cute though." The second clerk states.
_______________________Max and Kate_________________________
"Mommy are they talking about us?" Kate asks.
There is no lying to a solder and Kate is just as much a solder as Max.
"Yes baby girl."
__________________________Clarks__________________________
"Yea she's cute lets hope she doesn't grow up to be a tramp like her mom." The first clerk states.
______________________Max and Kate____________________
"Mommy you aren't gonna let them say that are you?" Kate asks.
"Let is go baby, go get outta of that dress" Kate reluctantly complies.
"Max what did they say a bought ya?" OC asks
"Just about how they can't believe that I am wearing a white dress. With Kate and all." Max says.
Then Max goes into the dressing room to take off the dress.
____________________Front counter_______________________
After some pushing from OC Max get her and Kate the dress'
"Your daughter is absolutely beautiful." The first clerk says.
"Thanks." Kate answers polity.
"And the total comes to 25,000.00."
"Damn." Oc states
"Will that be credit?"
"Cash." Max pulls a wad of $$ outta her pocket after counting a few bills she hands the clerk the cash.
The clerk quickly counts it.
______________________ Outside the shop______________________
Max has a sudden feeling that she is being watched. With good reason a man stands on top of the shop watching her every move. Max hands the dress bags to OC and grabs Kate carrying her on her hip. Something was definitely not right. Trying to act as natural as possible she walks away.
I need a beta reader any volunteers Kyliak@aol.com or say so in your review!
Wedding dress shop.____________________________________________
Max in a beautiful wedding gown with thin straps it is perfect. And Kate has a beautiful flower girl dress on.
"Mommy you look pretty." Kate comments.
"Thank You Kate so do you."
"She's right you know." Oc says
"I don't know." Max says still checking out the dress.
"Come on Max I know it's your wedding day but this is the 6th dress place we have been to and you finely find one you like." OC states.
"I want it to be perfect." Max answers still unsure.
"OC understands but lil Kate needs a nap she so tired she's gonna fall over."
"Mommy I now tired."
"I know but…" Max looks herself over one more time. "I think this is the dress. Kate come hear."
They stand next to eachother in front of the mirror. Max listens to the Clarks up front with her super hearing. Kate doses the same. OC stand clearly lost
__________________________Behind the front register______________
"Can you believe she is trying on a white dress, that little girl has to be her daughter look at how much that look alike," The first Clerk states.
"She is cute though." The second clerk states.
_______________________Max and Kate_________________________
"Mommy are they talking about us?" Kate asks.
There is no lying to a solder and Kate is just as much a solder as Max.
"Yes baby girl."
__________________________Clarks__________________________
"Yea she's cute lets hope she doesn't grow up to be a tramp like her mom." The first clerk states.
______________________Max and Kate____________________
"Mommy you aren't gonna let them say that are you?" Kate asks.
"Let is go baby, go get outta of that dress" Kate reluctantly complies.
"Max what did they say a bought ya?" OC asks
"Just about how they can't believe that I am wearing a white dress. With Kate and all." Max says.
Then Max goes into the dressing room to take off the dress.
____________________Front counter_______________________
After some pushing from OC Max get her and Kate the dress'
"Your daughter is absolutely beautiful." The first clerk says.
"Thanks." Kate answers polity.
"And the total comes to 25,000.00."
"Damn." Oc states
"Will that be credit?"
"Cash." Max pulls a wad of $$ outta her pocket after counting a few bills she hands the clerk the cash.
The clerk quickly counts it.
______________________ Outside the shop______________________
Max has a sudden feeling that she is being watched. With good reason a man stands on top of the shop watching her every move. Max hands the dress bags to OC and grabs Kate carrying her on her hip. Something was definitely not right. Trying to act as natural as possible she walks away.
I need a beta reader any volunteers Kyliak@aol.com or say so in your review!