I HAVE GONE THROUGH THIS AND TRYED TO EDIT THE SPELLING MISTAKES FOR THIS CHAPTER!
I don't own the Zelda game or any of the characters so pleeeeeeezzz don't sue (sew?) me. I was wondering, does this spacing of the paragraphs make it easier to read? Or should I carry on like before? Pleez review, cuz I'm getting a little paranoid about my story. Anyway, this chapter should be a little more Zeldarish; the last two were basically setting the scene.
As the room gave way, I felt myself falling toward, I don't know, I guess Hyrule, but I couldn't see anything.
I couldn't see Lucy or Link anymore; I was getting a little freaked. If I couldn't see them then they couldn't see me and then I would be lost. I kept imagining all the horrible things that could happen, not a good thing to think about.
It felt like I had been falling forever, the unchanging scenery of blackness. I shut my eyes to block out the never ending nothing.
"S***" I hit the bottom
"You ok?" I heard a voice ask, that was quick, obviously the tunnel wasn't never ending, I opened my eyes.
"That was such a cool trip" I heard Lucy chattering, the person who had asked me about my state of health began to help me up and I got a good look at them. Zelda Of Hyrule was standing over me looking a little worried. Around were all the sages and Impa, obviously the welcoming party Link had gathered
"Are you ok?" she repeated
"Yep" I smiled, "Have I got to bow or something?" I made an attempted curtsey but nearly toppled over
"Don't worry about it" Zelda said grinning. I could see why Link was taken with all the girls in Hyrule, they were all so pretty in real life, and even Zelda beat the models like Naomi Campbell and actresses like Drew Barrymore.
"So you landed" Link and Lucy came up to Zelda and me
"Isn't this soooooo cool?" Lucy said excitedly
"Yeah" I said slowly looking around, it was beautiful. Hyrule was stretched before us in pattern of colors. We were on top of Death Mountain looking over the world. Below was Kakariko village, I knew all these places off by heart from the game, but it was nothing compared to real life.
"Much better here isn't it?" Link said absently to Lucy and me
"It's so pretty" Lucy breathed
"Yeah" I agreed
"Well" we turned round to face Dariuna "They don't look like much" we were about to protest "But then neither did Link when he was little, a regular ugly duckling he was"
"Thanks a lot" Link muttered
"Don't take it to heart my boy" Dariuna laughed heartily
"What are you?" Lucy said without thinking
"What am I?" Dariuna swelled up a little "What am I? I am a sage my dear child, a sage"
"A what?" Lucy replied
"I'll explain later" I said quietly
"Oh OK" Lucy muttered.
One by one, everyone was introduced to Lucy and myself. All of them were much more impressive than they seemed on a game.
Ruto was shimmering in the sunlight, Impa's amour glittered fiercely, Dariuna was like a Hercules, Saria was the color of a spring leaf and Nabooru was the image of the desert goddess.
"You were brought here" Zelda announced "Because we need your help"
"Our help?" Lucy said surprised "What are we to help with?"
"A war has broken out between races" Zelda explained "After Ganondorf was defeated, the realm of Hyrule was peace, all were in harmony. But, a few days ago, the Gerudos of the west, and the Zoras of the East, began to argue, before anyone knew what was happening, they were on Hyrule field fighting to the death. Then as if that were a signal, Gorons, humans, Kokiri, they all joined the battle. A few hours ago the sounds of that one battle stopped. But, our spies tell us another attack is waged for tomorrow" she motioned to the sages "Although these are our races, we have no input on their actions, we cannot use our power on them"
"Why not?" I asked
"When the fighting began" Saria said "The sacred realm was sealed off, with Rauru inside. Our powers were drained from the temples. Even Link felt the change in auras"
"It was like everything was reversed" he supplied thoughtfully "All good, went to evil, evil pulled everything in"
"Fair is foul, and foul is fair" I muttered
"What was that?" Ruto asked
"Lines from a play in our world" I replied "So you say even the Kokiri have joined in?"
"Yes" Zelda nodded
"But the Deku tree shouldn't allow that should it?" Link said
"No" Saria sighed, "It could be sick I suppose, Ganondorf killed the last one"
"We have no idea what's going on, goddesses help us" Impa made an oath
"Din, Nayru, Farore. The great Fairies have been sealed away by the races they guard, the goddesses, well, we haven't seen them since the creation" Zelda said flatly
"So why are we here again?" Lucy piped up
"I'm getting to that" Zelda replied, "You're here cause the people outside this world know Hyrule better than the people who live here"
"And?"
"And we need your help in finding out what the f***'s going on" Nabooru finished
"I don't know if we can do that" I said
"Why not?" asked Ruto
"Cause it's only a game in our world you know, we can't really use a joystick here can we?"
"No problem" Dariuna boomed, "We can have Link old boy be your body guard and teacher of combat" he patted Link on the back, it nearly knocked him over
"Wahoo" Lucy said sarcastically "I'm starting to regret coming here"
I didn't say it, but I was too.
"So what do we have to do?" I asked
How was that? Should I keep writing in this form or not? Tell me...I'll have the next chapter
up soon u guys, thanks 4 reading!
I don't own the Zelda game or any of the characters so pleeeeeeezzz don't sue (sew?) me. I was wondering, does this spacing of the paragraphs make it easier to read? Or should I carry on like before? Pleez review, cuz I'm getting a little paranoid about my story. Anyway, this chapter should be a little more Zeldarish; the last two were basically setting the scene.
As the room gave way, I felt myself falling toward, I don't know, I guess Hyrule, but I couldn't see anything.
I couldn't see Lucy or Link anymore; I was getting a little freaked. If I couldn't see them then they couldn't see me and then I would be lost. I kept imagining all the horrible things that could happen, not a good thing to think about.
It felt like I had been falling forever, the unchanging scenery of blackness. I shut my eyes to block out the never ending nothing.
"S***" I hit the bottom
"You ok?" I heard a voice ask, that was quick, obviously the tunnel wasn't never ending, I opened my eyes.
"That was such a cool trip" I heard Lucy chattering, the person who had asked me about my state of health began to help me up and I got a good look at them. Zelda Of Hyrule was standing over me looking a little worried. Around were all the sages and Impa, obviously the welcoming party Link had gathered
"Are you ok?" she repeated
"Yep" I smiled, "Have I got to bow or something?" I made an attempted curtsey but nearly toppled over
"Don't worry about it" Zelda said grinning. I could see why Link was taken with all the girls in Hyrule, they were all so pretty in real life, and even Zelda beat the models like Naomi Campbell and actresses like Drew Barrymore.
"So you landed" Link and Lucy came up to Zelda and me
"Isn't this soooooo cool?" Lucy said excitedly
"Yeah" I said slowly looking around, it was beautiful. Hyrule was stretched before us in pattern of colors. We were on top of Death Mountain looking over the world. Below was Kakariko village, I knew all these places off by heart from the game, but it was nothing compared to real life.
"Much better here isn't it?" Link said absently to Lucy and me
"It's so pretty" Lucy breathed
"Yeah" I agreed
"Well" we turned round to face Dariuna "They don't look like much" we were about to protest "But then neither did Link when he was little, a regular ugly duckling he was"
"Thanks a lot" Link muttered
"Don't take it to heart my boy" Dariuna laughed heartily
"What are you?" Lucy said without thinking
"What am I?" Dariuna swelled up a little "What am I? I am a sage my dear child, a sage"
"A what?" Lucy replied
"I'll explain later" I said quietly
"Oh OK" Lucy muttered.
One by one, everyone was introduced to Lucy and myself. All of them were much more impressive than they seemed on a game.
Ruto was shimmering in the sunlight, Impa's amour glittered fiercely, Dariuna was like a Hercules, Saria was the color of a spring leaf and Nabooru was the image of the desert goddess.
"You were brought here" Zelda announced "Because we need your help"
"Our help?" Lucy said surprised "What are we to help with?"
"A war has broken out between races" Zelda explained "After Ganondorf was defeated, the realm of Hyrule was peace, all were in harmony. But, a few days ago, the Gerudos of the west, and the Zoras of the East, began to argue, before anyone knew what was happening, they were on Hyrule field fighting to the death. Then as if that were a signal, Gorons, humans, Kokiri, they all joined the battle. A few hours ago the sounds of that one battle stopped. But, our spies tell us another attack is waged for tomorrow" she motioned to the sages "Although these are our races, we have no input on their actions, we cannot use our power on them"
"Why not?" I asked
"When the fighting began" Saria said "The sacred realm was sealed off, with Rauru inside. Our powers were drained from the temples. Even Link felt the change in auras"
"It was like everything was reversed" he supplied thoughtfully "All good, went to evil, evil pulled everything in"
"Fair is foul, and foul is fair" I muttered
"What was that?" Ruto asked
"Lines from a play in our world" I replied "So you say even the Kokiri have joined in?"
"Yes" Zelda nodded
"But the Deku tree shouldn't allow that should it?" Link said
"No" Saria sighed, "It could be sick I suppose, Ganondorf killed the last one"
"We have no idea what's going on, goddesses help us" Impa made an oath
"Din, Nayru, Farore. The great Fairies have been sealed away by the races they guard, the goddesses, well, we haven't seen them since the creation" Zelda said flatly
"So why are we here again?" Lucy piped up
"I'm getting to that" Zelda replied, "You're here cause the people outside this world know Hyrule better than the people who live here"
"And?"
"And we need your help in finding out what the f***'s going on" Nabooru finished
"I don't know if we can do that" I said
"Why not?" asked Ruto
"Cause it's only a game in our world you know, we can't really use a joystick here can we?"
"No problem" Dariuna boomed, "We can have Link old boy be your body guard and teacher of combat" he patted Link on the back, it nearly knocked him over
"Wahoo" Lucy said sarcastically "I'm starting to regret coming here"
I didn't say it, but I was too.
"So what do we have to do?" I asked
How was that? Should I keep writing in this form or not? Tell me...I'll have the next chapter
up soon u guys, thanks 4 reading!