I'm very sorry about the delay, but the end of the year is coming up,
so I hope you all understand.
A few of the reviewers brought up some good points, which I'm going to try to summarize. Yes, this was my first fanfic, and yes, I'm sure I'll improve as a writer in the future. I know McCane wasn't very convincing, and I know it was kind of anticlimactic (I think I'm anticlimactic as an author; I just don't want the story to end, and when I do, I'm not sure of how to end it.)
But you can always count on a story being finished. I just have to get them off my back before it's too late. This story started out being serious, but it just ended up silly. I hope none of you minded. I don't think I'm ever going to change my silly style.
Now, on with the story!
*
The helicopter landed on top of the Nautilus (Sawyer had helped Skinner with the landing this time,) and the four men got out.
"Not perfect," said Nemo, commenting on the landing. "But at least we didn't land in a football field."
Skinner just frowned at Nemo sourly, but Sawyer laughed. "I would have stuck around to play!"
"I don't know how," said Skinner.
"Neither do I," added Nemo.
"You two don't know how to play football?" asked McCane, his mouth open. "We'll have to show them, won't we, Tom?"
"We most certainly will!"
"But first things first," said Nemo. "Let's go to Mina."
"Yes, let's," agreed Tom.
They went to the storage room, where McCane had left her, but she wasn't there.
McCane was confused. "She couldn't have woken up, I'm sure of it!"
"Maybe one of the crewmen moved her to her room," suggested Skinner.
"Skinner, that's the best suggestion you've ever had," said Nemo. "Come on, we'll go to Mina's room."
In Mina's room, they found Mina asleep in bed, with her head cradled in Henry Jekyll's arms. Jekyll was sobbing, and his tears were falling onto Mina's cheeks.
"She'll never wake up!" Jekyll cried. "I've tried everything!"
"Yes, she will," Nemo urged him. "We have just the thing that will wake her up."
McCane took another syringe out of the bag he had with him. "Don't worry, she's going to be perfectly fine," he said. "She's been under tranquilizers. All she needs is the antidote."
McCane gently injected Mina with the antidote. Within seconds, Mina was blinking her eyes and looking around, confused.
"Where am I?" she asked weakly. She noticed everybody in her room. "What happened?"
"I apologize, Mrs. Harker," McCane said. "I had to put you to sleep. It was all part of my plan to get rid of an evil force trying to destroy to the League."
Mina still looked confused. Jekyll also looked confused. McCane, Skinner, Sawyer, and Nemo had to take turns describing what had happened to Sawyer, what Skinner and Nemo had done to try and save him, and what McCane had done to Que.
At the end of the story, Mina and Jekyll just looked at each other. Mina shook her head in confusion. "I'm sorry, but could you please repeat all of this tomorrow? It's too much to take in at the moment."
"Certainly." Nemo turned to the rest of them. "Gentlemen? Let us leave Mrs. Harker alone to collect her thoughts."
There were mumblings of "Excellent idea," and "I'm with you on that, Captain," as the rest of the men filed out of Mina's room.
"So, what now?" asked Skinner.
McCane glanced at him. "Still want to learn how to play football?"
Skinner grinned. "Sure!"
* * *
The next evening, all five members of the League, plus McCane, sat down to dinner in the Nautilus' Grand Dining Room.
"Where have you two been?" asked Nemo, eyeing McCane and Skinner, who had walked in a few minutes late. "I must have sounded the dinner gong five times!"
"We apologize for our tardiness, Captain," said Skinner. "McCane was helping me fix something."
"Oh?"
McCane stomped on Skinner's foot under the table (which was easy, because Skinner was wearing big, black boots) and smiled. "Yes. Rodney showed me his experiments in the lab, and I was just telling him that if I worked on it, I could probably make a potion that makes him visible again." He slipped Skinner a wink.
"Exactly," Skinner nodded, impressed at McCane's quick thinking.
"Isn't that lovely," said Sawyer sarcastically. "Well, let's dig in, before dinner gets cold."
"I agree," said Nemo, "but before we do that, I think that we should have a toast to our newfound luck." He held up his water glass in a toast. "I propose a toast for the death of Quinicia Moriarty, and for our new friend, Andre McCane. To life and death."
"To life and death," Mina, Jekyll, Sawyer, Skinner, and McCane said, raising their glasses. The six of them joined together in a toast, and then proceeded to drink.
Mina put down her glass, looked down at herself, and screamed.
Nemo dropped his knife and fork and looked at her. "Mina, what's--- AHHHHHH!!!!! SKINNER!!!!!!!!!"
Nemo got up and started chasing Skinner around the dining room. Sawyer just laughed, and Jekyll stared in disbelief.
"He could have started chasing me," McCane shrugged. "I was the one that fixed Skinner's potion to make it work." He slipped a spare glass of water that had been set at his place over to Mina. "Here, Mina. The antidote. You know, you should really keep those. I think they look interesting on you."
Mina looked down at her breasts, which had been doubled in size by Skinner's potion. "You know," she said thoughtfully, pushing the glass back towards McCane, "they may come in handy. I think I will."
*
That's the end of the story, but don't worry, I'm not done writing yet. I'm going to write an epilogue. There's so much here that's not finished!
~ Alisonia
A few of the reviewers brought up some good points, which I'm going to try to summarize. Yes, this was my first fanfic, and yes, I'm sure I'll improve as a writer in the future. I know McCane wasn't very convincing, and I know it was kind of anticlimactic (I think I'm anticlimactic as an author; I just don't want the story to end, and when I do, I'm not sure of how to end it.)
But you can always count on a story being finished. I just have to get them off my back before it's too late. This story started out being serious, but it just ended up silly. I hope none of you minded. I don't think I'm ever going to change my silly style.
Now, on with the story!
*
The helicopter landed on top of the Nautilus (Sawyer had helped Skinner with the landing this time,) and the four men got out.
"Not perfect," said Nemo, commenting on the landing. "But at least we didn't land in a football field."
Skinner just frowned at Nemo sourly, but Sawyer laughed. "I would have stuck around to play!"
"I don't know how," said Skinner.
"Neither do I," added Nemo.
"You two don't know how to play football?" asked McCane, his mouth open. "We'll have to show them, won't we, Tom?"
"We most certainly will!"
"But first things first," said Nemo. "Let's go to Mina."
"Yes, let's," agreed Tom.
They went to the storage room, where McCane had left her, but she wasn't there.
McCane was confused. "She couldn't have woken up, I'm sure of it!"
"Maybe one of the crewmen moved her to her room," suggested Skinner.
"Skinner, that's the best suggestion you've ever had," said Nemo. "Come on, we'll go to Mina's room."
In Mina's room, they found Mina asleep in bed, with her head cradled in Henry Jekyll's arms. Jekyll was sobbing, and his tears were falling onto Mina's cheeks.
"She'll never wake up!" Jekyll cried. "I've tried everything!"
"Yes, she will," Nemo urged him. "We have just the thing that will wake her up."
McCane took another syringe out of the bag he had with him. "Don't worry, she's going to be perfectly fine," he said. "She's been under tranquilizers. All she needs is the antidote."
McCane gently injected Mina with the antidote. Within seconds, Mina was blinking her eyes and looking around, confused.
"Where am I?" she asked weakly. She noticed everybody in her room. "What happened?"
"I apologize, Mrs. Harker," McCane said. "I had to put you to sleep. It was all part of my plan to get rid of an evil force trying to destroy to the League."
Mina still looked confused. Jekyll also looked confused. McCane, Skinner, Sawyer, and Nemo had to take turns describing what had happened to Sawyer, what Skinner and Nemo had done to try and save him, and what McCane had done to Que.
At the end of the story, Mina and Jekyll just looked at each other. Mina shook her head in confusion. "I'm sorry, but could you please repeat all of this tomorrow? It's too much to take in at the moment."
"Certainly." Nemo turned to the rest of them. "Gentlemen? Let us leave Mrs. Harker alone to collect her thoughts."
There were mumblings of "Excellent idea," and "I'm with you on that, Captain," as the rest of the men filed out of Mina's room.
"So, what now?" asked Skinner.
McCane glanced at him. "Still want to learn how to play football?"
Skinner grinned. "Sure!"
* * *
The next evening, all five members of the League, plus McCane, sat down to dinner in the Nautilus' Grand Dining Room.
"Where have you two been?" asked Nemo, eyeing McCane and Skinner, who had walked in a few minutes late. "I must have sounded the dinner gong five times!"
"We apologize for our tardiness, Captain," said Skinner. "McCane was helping me fix something."
"Oh?"
McCane stomped on Skinner's foot under the table (which was easy, because Skinner was wearing big, black boots) and smiled. "Yes. Rodney showed me his experiments in the lab, and I was just telling him that if I worked on it, I could probably make a potion that makes him visible again." He slipped Skinner a wink.
"Exactly," Skinner nodded, impressed at McCane's quick thinking.
"Isn't that lovely," said Sawyer sarcastically. "Well, let's dig in, before dinner gets cold."
"I agree," said Nemo, "but before we do that, I think that we should have a toast to our newfound luck." He held up his water glass in a toast. "I propose a toast for the death of Quinicia Moriarty, and for our new friend, Andre McCane. To life and death."
"To life and death," Mina, Jekyll, Sawyer, Skinner, and McCane said, raising their glasses. The six of them joined together in a toast, and then proceeded to drink.
Mina put down her glass, looked down at herself, and screamed.
Nemo dropped his knife and fork and looked at her. "Mina, what's--- AHHHHHH!!!!! SKINNER!!!!!!!!!"
Nemo got up and started chasing Skinner around the dining room. Sawyer just laughed, and Jekyll stared in disbelief.
"He could have started chasing me," McCane shrugged. "I was the one that fixed Skinner's potion to make it work." He slipped a spare glass of water that had been set at his place over to Mina. "Here, Mina. The antidote. You know, you should really keep those. I think they look interesting on you."
Mina looked down at her breasts, which had been doubled in size by Skinner's potion. "You know," she said thoughtfully, pushing the glass back towards McCane, "they may come in handy. I think I will."
*
That's the end of the story, but don't worry, I'm not done writing yet. I'm going to write an epilogue. There's so much here that's not finished!
~ Alisonia