Well, here I go again. Thanks for the great reviews I've recieve, specially the one that told me that I've got grammar mistakes. I'm sincere with that I said, thanks. But I think I did a good job with it knowing that English is not my main languaje. Sorry if I make more mistakes or if I invent a word. Please tell me if I do so ^_^.
I got the fic almost complete but I don't have the end. I don't know whether who's the best for Lina; if Zel, Gourry or Xellos. I like them all. So I'm asking for your help, please, when you review my fic, vote for who do you like best and why.
Hard Love (2nd part)
The night was about to end. The cave was very dark and was only lightened by the candle in Xellos' left hand.
There was a kind of bed in front of him. It was like a plane stone with some sheets. Lina was lying down on the bed. She was wearing a beautiful dress in which she looked very atractive. Suddenly, she woke up and saw the priest standing there. With a fast movement, he turned his face to avoid the girl's glance. Confused, she sat on the stone and complained about her headache. She looked at Xellos one more time.
-What am I doing here? You better answer me or I... -But she wasn't getting any reply. The mazoku didn't say a word. And as Lina couldn't see his face she didn't realise he was crying.
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Gourry and Zelgadiss ran to the sorcerer's room. They had heard her voice and the sound of a Drag Slave. They passed through the broken door and found nothing inside but a lock of black hair.
- I know whose is this from -said Zel with a weak voice. He wasn't completely cured.
- Whose? -asked Gourry.
-Xellos'. And he's got Lina with him. He's very dangerous.
The two men left the inn. The sun was showing its first rays. It was early in the morning. They walked into the empty streets without talking to each other. They were deep down in their thoughts. Gourry was afraid. He didn't know what to do without Lina. He felt lost. He remembered her smile. And how it made the grey days brighter. In a moment like that she'd say "Hey Gourry. Don't worry Everything is going to be just fine." Then he realised how much he needed the red-haired girl and confesed himself that although she was younger than him, he loved her. And when he meets her again he would admit his love in front of her.
Zelgadiss was thinking of Lina too. He was sure that he loved her every since they met. It was beause of her that he wanted to find his cure as sooner as he could. Sometimes he felt as she loved him back, but others no. Maybe it was because he was a quimera, or that Ameria had admited that she was in love with Zel and Lina didn't want her friend to suffer. Or maybe Gourry? Everybody knew that he loved Lina, although he had never admited it. But Zel didn't mind and he had made up his mind to propose Lina. So he decided to talk to Gourry about this.
-Gourry, I'd like to tell you... -but the swordsman cut his words.
-Look, Zel! -he shouted, pointing to something white over the ground. They ran to it and found out that was one of Lina's gloves.
-She must have dropped it so we could find the way -said Zel.
-Nah. I don't think so.
-How can you say that?
-Because I know her, and I'm sure that... -Gourry couldn't keep talking. His eyes were full of tears. Zel had never seen him like that. It made him feel very sad. He wanted to cry but he stopped himself.
-Come on Gourry. Let's find Lina -he said coldly.
In the distance they could see a mountain. As it wasn't very far, they saw the light in a cave. The friends ran upon it.
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A little light came out of Lina's hands. She couldn't throw a fire ball.
-Don't even try it. You'll hurt yourself. -said Xellos in a kindly way. Lina never heard him talking like that.
-Like if you care! -shouted Lina standing up. -Let me go now, Xellos, or I... -just then she noticed the beautiful dress on her.
-Did you put your hands on me?! -said Lina with her cheeks red.
-Please, shut up! -cried Xellos with anger. He turned his face and Lina saw the tears in his eyes. They weren't a trick. It was a sad crying.
-Xellos... why...-murmured the girl.
The Mazoku began to talk again, but it didn't seem as if he was talking to Lina.
-I thought it would be easy -he stopped and show a dagger in his hands. -I just can't take this!!
-Xel...-tried Lina.
-But I can't go on. I WON'T GO ON! DO YOU HEAR ME?!
-Go on with what? Who are you talking to, Xellos?
Suddenly, there was a noise behind them. It seemed that the mountain would fall down. Some rocks covered the entrance to the cave and then stopped. A dark figure walked towards the priest.
-Who are you? -Lina inquired. But there was no answer.
-Did I listen well?. You're not going to continue, huh? What happend to you Xellos? You were my best servant, always obey my orders. What does THIS supose to mean?
There was a huge silence in the cave.
-Now, stop your plays that I know them well. Take the dagger and finish your job now that she's weak. You know we can't have her alive, It would ruin all of our plans.
A hand raised from the dark clothes and threw a ray of light to Lina. She fell on the floor, all her body with pain. Xellos ran to where she was and hugged her strongly in his arms.
-Leave me alone, Xellos!-she said with difficulty. -I just don't know why you didn't kill me when you have a chance.
- You want to know why? Because I love you Lina Inverse. I love too much. And I rather die, than see you suffering. -After he said those words, he kissed her softly and tenderly. She was so weak that she coludn't pull him off or answer the kiss. And, of course, she didn't know what to do. That act of love made her think in Xellos in other way.
Then, the mazoku stood up and faced the figure.
-Don't you dare to do that again, Zelas! -he said firmly.
-Don't bother me with that crap. And if you don't finish her, I'll take your act as betray.
-I won't do it. I rather die -repited the mazoku.
-Then you won't die. You'll watch her suffering till death. -Having said that, Zelas made a kind of stony cage to Xellos and began to cast a powerfull spell against Lina.
In that same moment in which all seemed lost, there was a flashing sound outside the cave. Zelgadiss broke the wall made with rocks that covered the entrance and passed through it followed by Gourry. The quimera saw Xellos and tried to get him out of the cage to kill him but he couldn't. Gourry saw Lina on the floor and ran towards her. He hugged her and felt very happy to find her. But none of them saw Zelas in the back of the cave...
IT WILL CONTINUE...
Well, I hope you like the fic and review it. AH! And don't forget to vote who's best and why. Gourry, Zel or Xellos. Help me to find the best end for this fanfic!!
I got the fic almost complete but I don't have the end. I don't know whether who's the best for Lina; if Zel, Gourry or Xellos. I like them all. So I'm asking for your help, please, when you review my fic, vote for who do you like best and why.
Hard Love (2nd part)
The night was about to end. The cave was very dark and was only lightened by the candle in Xellos' left hand.
There was a kind of bed in front of him. It was like a plane stone with some sheets. Lina was lying down on the bed. She was wearing a beautiful dress in which she looked very atractive. Suddenly, she woke up and saw the priest standing there. With a fast movement, he turned his face to avoid the girl's glance. Confused, she sat on the stone and complained about her headache. She looked at Xellos one more time.
-What am I doing here? You better answer me or I... -But she wasn't getting any reply. The mazoku didn't say a word. And as Lina couldn't see his face she didn't realise he was crying.
********************
Gourry and Zelgadiss ran to the sorcerer's room. They had heard her voice and the sound of a Drag Slave. They passed through the broken door and found nothing inside but a lock of black hair.
- I know whose is this from -said Zel with a weak voice. He wasn't completely cured.
- Whose? -asked Gourry.
-Xellos'. And he's got Lina with him. He's very dangerous.
The two men left the inn. The sun was showing its first rays. It was early in the morning. They walked into the empty streets without talking to each other. They were deep down in their thoughts. Gourry was afraid. He didn't know what to do without Lina. He felt lost. He remembered her smile. And how it made the grey days brighter. In a moment like that she'd say "Hey Gourry. Don't worry Everything is going to be just fine." Then he realised how much he needed the red-haired girl and confesed himself that although she was younger than him, he loved her. And when he meets her again he would admit his love in front of her.
Zelgadiss was thinking of Lina too. He was sure that he loved her every since they met. It was beause of her that he wanted to find his cure as sooner as he could. Sometimes he felt as she loved him back, but others no. Maybe it was because he was a quimera, or that Ameria had admited that she was in love with Zel and Lina didn't want her friend to suffer. Or maybe Gourry? Everybody knew that he loved Lina, although he had never admited it. But Zel didn't mind and he had made up his mind to propose Lina. So he decided to talk to Gourry about this.
-Gourry, I'd like to tell you... -but the swordsman cut his words.
-Look, Zel! -he shouted, pointing to something white over the ground. They ran to it and found out that was one of Lina's gloves.
-She must have dropped it so we could find the way -said Zel.
-Nah. I don't think so.
-How can you say that?
-Because I know her, and I'm sure that... -Gourry couldn't keep talking. His eyes were full of tears. Zel had never seen him like that. It made him feel very sad. He wanted to cry but he stopped himself.
-Come on Gourry. Let's find Lina -he said coldly.
In the distance they could see a mountain. As it wasn't very far, they saw the light in a cave. The friends ran upon it.
***********************
A little light came out of Lina's hands. She couldn't throw a fire ball.
-Don't even try it. You'll hurt yourself. -said Xellos in a kindly way. Lina never heard him talking like that.
-Like if you care! -shouted Lina standing up. -Let me go now, Xellos, or I... -just then she noticed the beautiful dress on her.
-Did you put your hands on me?! -said Lina with her cheeks red.
-Please, shut up! -cried Xellos with anger. He turned his face and Lina saw the tears in his eyes. They weren't a trick. It was a sad crying.
-Xellos... why...-murmured the girl.
The Mazoku began to talk again, but it didn't seem as if he was talking to Lina.
-I thought it would be easy -he stopped and show a dagger in his hands. -I just can't take this!!
-Xel...-tried Lina.
-But I can't go on. I WON'T GO ON! DO YOU HEAR ME?!
-Go on with what? Who are you talking to, Xellos?
Suddenly, there was a noise behind them. It seemed that the mountain would fall down. Some rocks covered the entrance to the cave and then stopped. A dark figure walked towards the priest.
-Who are you? -Lina inquired. But there was no answer.
-Did I listen well?. You're not going to continue, huh? What happend to you Xellos? You were my best servant, always obey my orders. What does THIS supose to mean?
There was a huge silence in the cave.
-Now, stop your plays that I know them well. Take the dagger and finish your job now that she's weak. You know we can't have her alive, It would ruin all of our plans.
A hand raised from the dark clothes and threw a ray of light to Lina. She fell on the floor, all her body with pain. Xellos ran to where she was and hugged her strongly in his arms.
-Leave me alone, Xellos!-she said with difficulty. -I just don't know why you didn't kill me when you have a chance.
- You want to know why? Because I love you Lina Inverse. I love too much. And I rather die, than see you suffering. -After he said those words, he kissed her softly and tenderly. She was so weak that she coludn't pull him off or answer the kiss. And, of course, she didn't know what to do. That act of love made her think in Xellos in other way.
Then, the mazoku stood up and faced the figure.
-Don't you dare to do that again, Zelas! -he said firmly.
-Don't bother me with that crap. And if you don't finish her, I'll take your act as betray.
-I won't do it. I rather die -repited the mazoku.
-Then you won't die. You'll watch her suffering till death. -Having said that, Zelas made a kind of stony cage to Xellos and began to cast a powerfull spell against Lina.
In that same moment in which all seemed lost, there was a flashing sound outside the cave. Zelgadiss broke the wall made with rocks that covered the entrance and passed through it followed by Gourry. The quimera saw Xellos and tried to get him out of the cage to kill him but he couldn't. Gourry saw Lina on the floor and ran towards her. He hugged her and felt very happy to find her. But none of them saw Zelas in the back of the cave...
IT WILL CONTINUE...
Well, I hope you like the fic and review it. AH! And don't forget to vote who's best and why. Gourry, Zel or Xellos. Help me to find the best end for this fanfic!!