I asked my dear beta-reader:Lindsay Winter to corrected the first 2 chapters and side-story. And this is a result.
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Chapter 2. : Re-correct issue.
All the first year students at Hogwarts started their
breakfast in the great hall. Everyone seemed to be
happy, excepted one person, Severus Snape. He just sat
there, looking at his meat. His face was paler than
usual.
"Hey! Don't act like you're going to die. What's
wrong with being in Gryffindor." Sirius asked, feeling
annoyed.
A black owl with a letter flew near Gryffindor table.
It landed near the pale boy.
" That." Severus Snape muttered, removing the letter.
It was covered with red smoke. He took a deep breathe
and opened it.
"NEVER...NEVER IN MY LIFE HAVE I FELT ASHAMED LIKE
THIS!" The thundering sound spread through the great
hall, "Y..YOU USELESS LOWEST GRYFFINDOR,
HOW DARE YOU EMBARRASS THE FAMILY NAME. WELL, SINCE
YOU ARE NOW A GRYFFINDOR, THAT MEANS YOU ARE NOT MY
SON ANY MORE. YOU ARE NOT WELCOME IN MY FAMILY. I
DON'T WANT ANY THING TO DO WITH YOU AND I WILL MAKE
SURE YOU DON'T SHAME MY FAMILY MORE THAN THIS!
DON'T SHOW YOUR FACE TO ME AGAIN!
JENIFER R. SNAPE."
When the sound ended, everyone looked at the boy. His
face was paler than it had been. He didn't say a word,
only picked up his belongings and left.
When he left, the great hall was filled with
criticism, especially at Gryffindor table.
"I CAN'T BELIEVE IT! What kind of mother is she!
Treaingt her own son like that just because he was
sorted in Gryffindor! She doesn't even deserve to be
human!" Sirius exploded, very angry at what he had
heard.
"I AGREE with your EVERY WORD! Sirius." James Potter
growled, sharing the same anger as his friend.
"What will we do now?" Remus said. He was the only
one in his group who had not lost control.
"First we will check him, make sure he is ok. Then we
will be his friend, do everything to make sure he is
not alone and has a good time in Gryffindor!" James
made a decision. He got up, prepared to leave. His
two friends nodded and followed him.
The group's task seemed to be more difficult than it
looked. Severus didn't cooperate. He didn't wish to
share anything with them anymore. He tried
to keep himself alone, only speaking when nessary. His
behavior worried not only his friends but also the
teachers. Professor McGonagall,head of Gryffindor, and
even the head master Dumbledore tried to talk to him.
But the boy just said he was alright and kept quiet.
It didn't help when the next day a pack of documents
was sent to the quiet boy by the same owl. They were
the legal documents that said he wasn't a Snape
anymore. He still had some money of his father's(who
had already died) which could keep him in school for
the next 7 years. But it was now set apart from
the family's treasure. The letter said it was the last
bit of mercy from the Snapes to him.
The mood of Severus became darker. He was not only
keeping himself apart but also became annoyed at every
one who tried to befriend him, especially his
roommates. The last straw for them was when he had
called Lily Evans, first year Gryffindor, Mudbood.
After that they left him and it was the first time
that Severus could be totally alone.
It looks like sometimes friendship can not help. But
you will surprise to know what the opposite power can
do.
The opposite power in this case is called Enemy.
The event happened in potions class. It was two weeks
since school had started. Severus sat alone at the far
end of the table, kepping himself apart from
the other Gryffindors. He was successful. But it also
put him near the most annoying Slytherin, Lucius
Malfoy. The Slytherin boy had been trying to annoy him
since the first day. But Severus didn't play attention
to him. He focused his mind on the subject, which for
him was very boring. Severus had a gift in potions and
learned far more quickly than the class. When the
teacher let them work, Severus made the perfect potion
without any help in no time. With that, he provided
Gryffindors 10 points (fortunately the potions teacher
was Ravenclaw and had nothing against Gryffindor;
unlike someone we known.)
On the contrary, Lucius Malfoy did the worst job. As
he was trying to annoy Severus, he didn't pay
attention in class. He missed the most important
instruction. In the end, he blew up his potion. The
pink smoke covered his skin and made him look foolish.
He also lost his house 10 points.
That was not the only thing he lost. Out side class,
he shed some of his blood on the ground when he
crossed the line by saying:
" At least I'm not a worthless son who's rejected by
his own mother." Certainly mistake.
Severus pushed the boy to the ground. His last straw
of endurance gone. His eyes filled with hatred. Never
in his life had he hated someone this much.
Lucious tried to fight back but he had no chance.
Before Severus managed to make himself a killer, Remus
Lupin grabbed his hand.
" Don't pay attention to him. He is worthless," the
brown hair boy said calmly.
" I'm not! He is!" Still sitting on the floor, Lucius
pointed to Severus (Of course, after he had seen that
his Slytherins followers were near by). "I'm not the
one who was disowned by my family."
" Too bad for them." Remus replied. His voice still
calmed and full of control. The voice also made
Severus gain some of his control.
" Maybe you're right, Remus." The pale boy said. He
even managed to smiled, " but I'm not sure what his
family will do when they know what happen in potions
class. They are PURE-BLOOD after all. They will not
stand any mistakes."
" At LEAST I was not put in Gryffindor!"
" It isn't my fault that Slytherin's not good enough
to have me." Severus grined, "I always thought
Slytherin was the best. But I am starting to doubt it.
It can't be that good if you could be sorted into it."
Lucius was boiling. He wanted a fight but he still
remembered what had happened in the last one.
Before the argument continued, the teacher came.
Twenty points were taken from each house. But no one
seemed to care. They were enjoying the scene too much.
Remus looked at his friend. His first image of the
boy was totally ruined. Severus was not the same boy
who screamed from nightmares nor was he the
same pitiable boy that he and his friend always
worried about. The real Severus was someone who you
didn't want to have as an enemy. He was dangerous
and knew how to pay back several times what ever was
done to him. It was the first time that Remus was
really glad to had the boy in the same house.
'If Severus was put in Slytherin and we had, say,
Peter here...Well, I should not think about that! Too
frightening.'
Two boys walked silently back to Gryffindor's common
room. Remus started to worried that his friend had
returned to avoiding him. Suddenly the pale boy said:
" Why were you there, Remus? Where are James and
Sirius?"
" I were there because I think you are my friend.
James and Sirius thought you were their friend too,
but they weren't happy with that Mudblood
incident."
" And why not you? Don't said you agree with what I
said. Unlike me, you are not that type." Severus said,
almost bitter, but also filled with curiousity.
" I am not happy, either. But word can be only words
if you choose not pay attention. And from what I saw,
you didn't mean it. You just do anything to
drive us away."
" Then you should get the message and leave me
alone." The boy replied,returning to his "avoiding"
mode.
Remus ignored his comment and still followed him.
They were near the end of the path when Severus
suddenly stoped and almost fell. He tried to lean
himself against the wall.
" Are you alright?" Remus asked, trying to help his
friend stand.
Severus took a deep breath, "I'm fine now. Maybe it's
just the sunlight."
" Are you sure? Want me to take you to the hospital
wing?"
" Not necessary," Severus now could stand on his own.
" By the way, thank you for asking."
" It's nothing. What are friends for. "
" Funny. I never considered you guys as friends. The
first night was close, but still not." The pale boy
said what was in his thought.
" Why not?"
" Because I hate you all."
Remus stopped walking. His companion's words echoed
in his mind.
He grabbed the other boy's hand, dragging him to the
nearest spot where they could have a private
conversation.
" What did we do? Why do you hate us?" Remus asked,
almost whispering.
Severus looked at the other boy. He didn't want to
answer. But something inside him ignored this and made
him speak.
" Because you pity me."
" Pardon?"
" Yes, all of you. Don't deny it! After the Howler,
everyone pitied me but you guys are worse. Maybe I'm
worthless like Malfoy said, but I still have some
self-respect. I don't need friends that come from
pity." The pale boy couldn't stop. He tried but he
couldn't stop pouring hisheart out. " It made me feel
worse, if that's possible."
" You are not worthless, you know." Remus protested.
" What do you know?" Severus said bitterly, "my
brother never liked me. And now my mother hates me.
Maybe they are not kind, but family was all I had.
And now I have none."
" You still have us." Remus tried to comfort.
" Like I said I don't want pity," again Severus tried
to stop himself from speaking, he didn't want more
pity. But he lost himself to the flow of
emotion. "Beside, unlike you guys, I'm not good. I
don't have a golden heart. I can't do anything with
out thinking of myself first. I'm a rogue. And I
prefer it that way. It is who I am."
He gave up and continued. "I know I would do well in Slytherin. All I had to do was make some respect and hate
Gryffindor. In Slytherin I don't need to be
friends with anyone. But now I'm a Gryffindor and
still I can't change what I am. I don't belong there.
You Gryffindors don't want some crook like me."
" Are you so sure about that?" The familiar sound
came from behind.
" Yes, someone who could do that to Malfoy is a good
addition." the other voice said, "besides from what I
saw today, I'm very happy to have you in
Gryffindor, not in Slytherin."
" How long have you been following us?" Remus asked,
seemingly surprised.
" Since the beginning." James answered. " We don't
like what that Malfoy said but we still didn't want to
forgive Severus too easily. So we just watched."
" And when we saw what you two did to Malfoy. We were
curious, so we followed." Sirius said. " And when you
dragged Severus here. We hid behind the pillar,
listening while you two talked.
" You should not sneak around like that." Remus shook
his head.
" Yes, I shouldn't. But I'm glad I did." James looked
in Severus's eyes. " Severus, I want to be your
friend. This time for real. Not for pity or anything
like that. I swear."
"Yes, I don't think pity is suited for someone who
can do something like that to Malfoy. You did a good
job." Sirius grinned.
" Do you want to be friends?" James offered.
A part of Severus's mind wanted to said no, but his
mouth betrayed. "Yes."
" Then we are friends!" James patted his new friend's
back. Suddenly his mood changed to serious. " But
first, you must apologize to Lily. Did you feel
sorry for what you did?"
" Well, a little." Severus muttered.
" Not necessary." Lily, who had been hiding, popped
up. "I forgive you."
She hugged the pale boy and whispered something in
his ear.
Severus was stumped, his eyes widened from shock and
disbelief.
" Lucky boy! Lily, can I have a hug like that
too?"Sirius laughed.
Lily relieved the shocked boy. She smiled, "No way,
Sirius. No way."
"I'm hurt! What does he have that I don't?" Sirius
compained, pretending to be hurt.
" Stop compaining, Sirius. Let's celebrate!" James
smiled.
Then three boys and a girl dragged their still
shocked friend along. The new strange friendship now
officially began.
And someone learned his lessons.
TBC.
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The next one isn't chapter three. It is the side-story name 'The true behind'(unofficial, chapter 1 3/4). Yes! A secret behind chapter two that you still don't know. Wait and find it!
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Chapter 2. : Re-correct issue.
All the first year students at Hogwarts started their
breakfast in the great hall. Everyone seemed to be
happy, excepted one person, Severus Snape. He just sat
there, looking at his meat. His face was paler than
usual.
"Hey! Don't act like you're going to die. What's
wrong with being in Gryffindor." Sirius asked, feeling
annoyed.
A black owl with a letter flew near Gryffindor table.
It landed near the pale boy.
" That." Severus Snape muttered, removing the letter.
It was covered with red smoke. He took a deep breathe
and opened it.
"NEVER...NEVER IN MY LIFE HAVE I FELT ASHAMED LIKE
THIS!" The thundering sound spread through the great
hall, "Y..YOU USELESS LOWEST GRYFFINDOR,
HOW DARE YOU EMBARRASS THE FAMILY NAME. WELL, SINCE
YOU ARE NOW A GRYFFINDOR, THAT MEANS YOU ARE NOT MY
SON ANY MORE. YOU ARE NOT WELCOME IN MY FAMILY. I
DON'T WANT ANY THING TO DO WITH YOU AND I WILL MAKE
SURE YOU DON'T SHAME MY FAMILY MORE THAN THIS!
DON'T SHOW YOUR FACE TO ME AGAIN!
JENIFER R. SNAPE."
When the sound ended, everyone looked at the boy. His
face was paler than it had been. He didn't say a word,
only picked up his belongings and left.
When he left, the great hall was filled with
criticism, especially at Gryffindor table.
"I CAN'T BELIEVE IT! What kind of mother is she!
Treaingt her own son like that just because he was
sorted in Gryffindor! She doesn't even deserve to be
human!" Sirius exploded, very angry at what he had
heard.
"I AGREE with your EVERY WORD! Sirius." James Potter
growled, sharing the same anger as his friend.
"What will we do now?" Remus said. He was the only
one in his group who had not lost control.
"First we will check him, make sure he is ok. Then we
will be his friend, do everything to make sure he is
not alone and has a good time in Gryffindor!" James
made a decision. He got up, prepared to leave. His
two friends nodded and followed him.
The group's task seemed to be more difficult than it
looked. Severus didn't cooperate. He didn't wish to
share anything with them anymore. He tried
to keep himself alone, only speaking when nessary. His
behavior worried not only his friends but also the
teachers. Professor McGonagall,head of Gryffindor, and
even the head master Dumbledore tried to talk to him.
But the boy just said he was alright and kept quiet.
It didn't help when the next day a pack of documents
was sent to the quiet boy by the same owl. They were
the legal documents that said he wasn't a Snape
anymore. He still had some money of his father's(who
had already died) which could keep him in school for
the next 7 years. But it was now set apart from
the family's treasure. The letter said it was the last
bit of mercy from the Snapes to him.
The mood of Severus became darker. He was not only
keeping himself apart but also became annoyed at every
one who tried to befriend him, especially his
roommates. The last straw for them was when he had
called Lily Evans, first year Gryffindor, Mudbood.
After that they left him and it was the first time
that Severus could be totally alone.
It looks like sometimes friendship can not help. But
you will surprise to know what the opposite power can
do.
The opposite power in this case is called Enemy.
The event happened in potions class. It was two weeks
since school had started. Severus sat alone at the far
end of the table, kepping himself apart from
the other Gryffindors. He was successful. But it also
put him near the most annoying Slytherin, Lucius
Malfoy. The Slytherin boy had been trying to annoy him
since the first day. But Severus didn't play attention
to him. He focused his mind on the subject, which for
him was very boring. Severus had a gift in potions and
learned far more quickly than the class. When the
teacher let them work, Severus made the perfect potion
without any help in no time. With that, he provided
Gryffindors 10 points (fortunately the potions teacher
was Ravenclaw and had nothing against Gryffindor;
unlike someone we known.)
On the contrary, Lucius Malfoy did the worst job. As
he was trying to annoy Severus, he didn't pay
attention in class. He missed the most important
instruction. In the end, he blew up his potion. The
pink smoke covered his skin and made him look foolish.
He also lost his house 10 points.
That was not the only thing he lost. Out side class,
he shed some of his blood on the ground when he
crossed the line by saying:
" At least I'm not a worthless son who's rejected by
his own mother." Certainly mistake.
Severus pushed the boy to the ground. His last straw
of endurance gone. His eyes filled with hatred. Never
in his life had he hated someone this much.
Lucious tried to fight back but he had no chance.
Before Severus managed to make himself a killer, Remus
Lupin grabbed his hand.
" Don't pay attention to him. He is worthless," the
brown hair boy said calmly.
" I'm not! He is!" Still sitting on the floor, Lucius
pointed to Severus (Of course, after he had seen that
his Slytherins followers were near by). "I'm not the
one who was disowned by my family."
" Too bad for them." Remus replied. His voice still
calmed and full of control. The voice also made
Severus gain some of his control.
" Maybe you're right, Remus." The pale boy said. He
even managed to smiled, " but I'm not sure what his
family will do when they know what happen in potions
class. They are PURE-BLOOD after all. They will not
stand any mistakes."
" At LEAST I was not put in Gryffindor!"
" It isn't my fault that Slytherin's not good enough
to have me." Severus grined, "I always thought
Slytherin was the best. But I am starting to doubt it.
It can't be that good if you could be sorted into it."
Lucius was boiling. He wanted a fight but he still
remembered what had happened in the last one.
Before the argument continued, the teacher came.
Twenty points were taken from each house. But no one
seemed to care. They were enjoying the scene too much.
Remus looked at his friend. His first image of the
boy was totally ruined. Severus was not the same boy
who screamed from nightmares nor was he the
same pitiable boy that he and his friend always
worried about. The real Severus was someone who you
didn't want to have as an enemy. He was dangerous
and knew how to pay back several times what ever was
done to him. It was the first time that Remus was
really glad to had the boy in the same house.
'If Severus was put in Slytherin and we had, say,
Peter here...Well, I should not think about that! Too
frightening.'
Two boys walked silently back to Gryffindor's common
room. Remus started to worried that his friend had
returned to avoiding him. Suddenly the pale boy said:
" Why were you there, Remus? Where are James and
Sirius?"
" I were there because I think you are my friend.
James and Sirius thought you were their friend too,
but they weren't happy with that Mudblood
incident."
" And why not you? Don't said you agree with what I
said. Unlike me, you are not that type." Severus said,
almost bitter, but also filled with curiousity.
" I am not happy, either. But word can be only words
if you choose not pay attention. And from what I saw,
you didn't mean it. You just do anything to
drive us away."
" Then you should get the message and leave me
alone." The boy replied,returning to his "avoiding"
mode.
Remus ignored his comment and still followed him.
They were near the end of the path when Severus
suddenly stoped and almost fell. He tried to lean
himself against the wall.
" Are you alright?" Remus asked, trying to help his
friend stand.
Severus took a deep breath, "I'm fine now. Maybe it's
just the sunlight."
" Are you sure? Want me to take you to the hospital
wing?"
" Not necessary," Severus now could stand on his own.
" By the way, thank you for asking."
" It's nothing. What are friends for. "
" Funny. I never considered you guys as friends. The
first night was close, but still not." The pale boy
said what was in his thought.
" Why not?"
" Because I hate you all."
Remus stopped walking. His companion's words echoed
in his mind.
He grabbed the other boy's hand, dragging him to the
nearest spot where they could have a private
conversation.
" What did we do? Why do you hate us?" Remus asked,
almost whispering.
Severus looked at the other boy. He didn't want to
answer. But something inside him ignored this and made
him speak.
" Because you pity me."
" Pardon?"
" Yes, all of you. Don't deny it! After the Howler,
everyone pitied me but you guys are worse. Maybe I'm
worthless like Malfoy said, but I still have some
self-respect. I don't need friends that come from
pity." The pale boy couldn't stop. He tried but he
couldn't stop pouring hisheart out. " It made me feel
worse, if that's possible."
" You are not worthless, you know." Remus protested.
" What do you know?" Severus said bitterly, "my
brother never liked me. And now my mother hates me.
Maybe they are not kind, but family was all I had.
And now I have none."
" You still have us." Remus tried to comfort.
" Like I said I don't want pity," again Severus tried
to stop himself from speaking, he didn't want more
pity. But he lost himself to the flow of
emotion. "Beside, unlike you guys, I'm not good. I
don't have a golden heart. I can't do anything with
out thinking of myself first. I'm a rogue. And I
prefer it that way. It is who I am."
He gave up and continued. "I know I would do well in Slytherin. All I had to do was make some respect and hate
Gryffindor. In Slytherin I don't need to be
friends with anyone. But now I'm a Gryffindor and
still I can't change what I am. I don't belong there.
You Gryffindors don't want some crook like me."
" Are you so sure about that?" The familiar sound
came from behind.
" Yes, someone who could do that to Malfoy is a good
addition." the other voice said, "besides from what I
saw today, I'm very happy to have you in
Gryffindor, not in Slytherin."
" How long have you been following us?" Remus asked,
seemingly surprised.
" Since the beginning." James answered. " We don't
like what that Malfoy said but we still didn't want to
forgive Severus too easily. So we just watched."
" And when we saw what you two did to Malfoy. We were
curious, so we followed." Sirius said. " And when you
dragged Severus here. We hid behind the pillar,
listening while you two talked.
" You should not sneak around like that." Remus shook
his head.
" Yes, I shouldn't. But I'm glad I did." James looked
in Severus's eyes. " Severus, I want to be your
friend. This time for real. Not for pity or anything
like that. I swear."
"Yes, I don't think pity is suited for someone who
can do something like that to Malfoy. You did a good
job." Sirius grinned.
" Do you want to be friends?" James offered.
A part of Severus's mind wanted to said no, but his
mouth betrayed. "Yes."
" Then we are friends!" James patted his new friend's
back. Suddenly his mood changed to serious. " But
first, you must apologize to Lily. Did you feel
sorry for what you did?"
" Well, a little." Severus muttered.
" Not necessary." Lily, who had been hiding, popped
up. "I forgive you."
She hugged the pale boy and whispered something in
his ear.
Severus was stumped, his eyes widened from shock and
disbelief.
" Lucky boy! Lily, can I have a hug like that
too?"Sirius laughed.
Lily relieved the shocked boy. She smiled, "No way,
Sirius. No way."
"I'm hurt! What does he have that I don't?" Sirius
compained, pretending to be hurt.
" Stop compaining, Sirius. Let's celebrate!" James
smiled.
Then three boys and a girl dragged their still
shocked friend along. The new strange friendship now
officially began.
And someone learned his lessons.
TBC.
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The next one isn't chapter three. It is the side-story name 'The true behind'(unofficial, chapter 1 3/4). Yes! A secret behind chapter two that you still don't know. Wait and find it!