Longships
Part 2
I woke with a start, my head was throbbing. I could not see, I tried to sit up but I just could not. It was like if someone was holding me down, I felt around for my glasses. I grabbed a hold of them when I found them, I put them on. And everything focused, I was being held down by a wide leather strap. I could not move it, and I was not strong enough to break it. I looked around the room where I was being held, it had strong walls upon which many banners were tacked to the wall. I saw the door was made of a wood I did not know, from the looks of the stones I would guess I
was in a castle or some other mid-evil setting. I noticed my shirt and clothes were gone to be replaced by some other clothes, by some tunics and hose.
If Jack were here he would be laughing, or making some jokes about my new apparel. Then the door opened, a young girl appeared. She seemed about 14-15, and she looked like she would be countinulsy giggling. She approached me and held me a bowl to sip out of, it was gruel. I made a face and she giggled some more, all I could do though was frown at her. And that did not do much good, she left the room after a while. I could tell from the shadows on the wall that it was about sunset now, I would be left alone in a place I did not know. Without any kind of light, how utterly charming. I closed my eyes, and fell to sleep. The gruel helped me go to sleep strange enough, and I went into a deep sleep.
There was a flicker of candle light as the door opened, there behind the flickering flames stood the lady who had knocked me out. Her eyes reflecting the flame, making them even more blazing then they already were. Her hair jet black, held out of her face by the silver circlet. She was still the most beautiful woman I had ever seen, with her strange almond shaped eyes and love of crimson. She seemed like she floated into the room, she moved so gracefully. I made sure I looked asleep, my eyes were squinted shut. I could see her, but she did not know that I was not asleep. She went over to me, and laid her palm on my forehead. All
I felt was the palm of her small gentle hand and this
overwhelming sense of peace, I even felt small pleasure.
She sat down on my bed, she was light. I could see her form in the candle light, I could tell she was quite young. She put something on my forehead, and took out a small stone out of a pouch. The stone was a azure color, and was small it was set in gold. She placed the stone around my neck with a small chain, it was heavier then expected. And it set a weight down on my chest, I could hardly keep my breath. But I breathed steadily not wanting to give away that I was really awake, I laid there. The thing she placed on my forehead grew moist, it felt like a wet rag. When she bent over to do something else I grabbed her around the waist, she gasped. She tried to call out but the door had
blew shut, and I placed my hand over her mouth. Using her hand I unbound myself, and sat up. She looked shocked, she maybe had thought that a human could not even think as much as I could.
We both stood there, I had let her go. She turned to run, but I stepped on her cloak. That made her fall, she fell to the ground at my feet. I reached down there and jerked her up, she stood up. She really was light as air, she stood there. And I stood there, she did not say a word. I shook her, she still did not speak so I spoke in a rather harsh tone.
"What is your name!?"
"I shall not tell you anything human!"
She spat in my face, I felt like hitting her but I only
shook her. She was soon almost limp in my arms as I shook her, she would not answer any of my questions so I would have to take her with me. I continued to shake her until she slipped away, she was now unconscious. I picked her up, she was to light. It felt like she was not even here. I walked out the door, no one tried to stop me. I walked through the halls, which were dimly lit with torches hanging in posts on the wall. She hung limp in my arms, she did not wake. I noticed that her face was flawless, like she had never had any flaw. Could she be real? Was she human and just did not know about it, if she was human was she a model of the perfect human?
What if she was? What if she was some superior being, who was more powerful then any gun or man? I found the door out, and pushed the heavy doors open. I let it slam, and walked out into the night. Instead of one moon there in the sky hung five, five of very different colors. One looked like our own moon, but it was only larger. Taking up ten times the sky of our own moon, the others ranged from a deep blue to a beautiful exotic jungle green. The stars here on this world were the brightest I had ever seen, they shone with a radiance earth would never see until it's final days. I walked along the path, I had never seen so much beauty in one place. The path was lined with trees that rose to the point of infinity, they were not green. But a glorious blue and gold, they did not have leaves. They had blooming golden lined blue flowers of a family I did not recognize, I turned to look at the building I had just came out of. It was indeed a castle of some of the largest proportions, I had never seen such a building. A master architect could never even dream of such a place with all it's grand pillars and glorious towers blessed with a crimson flag on each top. I turned back around and walked on the brick path toward the gate I was heading to. When I reached the gate it activated
on it's own after scanning my eyes, maybe it activated on DNA codes sometimes. I walked in once I knew for sure it was earth's gate that I was going to, and I returned to my planet.
So how did you like the second part? Well please review so I can know where I am messing up. I'll review you back, even if it takes me a year.
Part 2
I woke with a start, my head was throbbing. I could not see, I tried to sit up but I just could not. It was like if someone was holding me down, I felt around for my glasses. I grabbed a hold of them when I found them, I put them on. And everything focused, I was being held down by a wide leather strap. I could not move it, and I was not strong enough to break it. I looked around the room where I was being held, it had strong walls upon which many banners were tacked to the wall. I saw the door was made of a wood I did not know, from the looks of the stones I would guess I
was in a castle or some other mid-evil setting. I noticed my shirt and clothes were gone to be replaced by some other clothes, by some tunics and hose.
If Jack were here he would be laughing, or making some jokes about my new apparel. Then the door opened, a young girl appeared. She seemed about 14-15, and she looked like she would be countinulsy giggling. She approached me and held me a bowl to sip out of, it was gruel. I made a face and she giggled some more, all I could do though was frown at her. And that did not do much good, she left the room after a while. I could tell from the shadows on the wall that it was about sunset now, I would be left alone in a place I did not know. Without any kind of light, how utterly charming. I closed my eyes, and fell to sleep. The gruel helped me go to sleep strange enough, and I went into a deep sleep.
There was a flicker of candle light as the door opened, there behind the flickering flames stood the lady who had knocked me out. Her eyes reflecting the flame, making them even more blazing then they already were. Her hair jet black, held out of her face by the silver circlet. She was still the most beautiful woman I had ever seen, with her strange almond shaped eyes and love of crimson. She seemed like she floated into the room, she moved so gracefully. I made sure I looked asleep, my eyes were squinted shut. I could see her, but she did not know that I was not asleep. She went over to me, and laid her palm on my forehead. All
I felt was the palm of her small gentle hand and this
overwhelming sense of peace, I even felt small pleasure.
She sat down on my bed, she was light. I could see her form in the candle light, I could tell she was quite young. She put something on my forehead, and took out a small stone out of a pouch. The stone was a azure color, and was small it was set in gold. She placed the stone around my neck with a small chain, it was heavier then expected. And it set a weight down on my chest, I could hardly keep my breath. But I breathed steadily not wanting to give away that I was really awake, I laid there. The thing she placed on my forehead grew moist, it felt like a wet rag. When she bent over to do something else I grabbed her around the waist, she gasped. She tried to call out but the door had
blew shut, and I placed my hand over her mouth. Using her hand I unbound myself, and sat up. She looked shocked, she maybe had thought that a human could not even think as much as I could.
We both stood there, I had let her go. She turned to run, but I stepped on her cloak. That made her fall, she fell to the ground at my feet. I reached down there and jerked her up, she stood up. She really was light as air, she stood there. And I stood there, she did not say a word. I shook her, she still did not speak so I spoke in a rather harsh tone.
"What is your name!?"
"I shall not tell you anything human!"
She spat in my face, I felt like hitting her but I only
shook her. She was soon almost limp in my arms as I shook her, she would not answer any of my questions so I would have to take her with me. I continued to shake her until she slipped away, she was now unconscious. I picked her up, she was to light. It felt like she was not even here. I walked out the door, no one tried to stop me. I walked through the halls, which were dimly lit with torches hanging in posts on the wall. She hung limp in my arms, she did not wake. I noticed that her face was flawless, like she had never had any flaw. Could she be real? Was she human and just did not know about it, if she was human was she a model of the perfect human?
What if she was? What if she was some superior being, who was more powerful then any gun or man? I found the door out, and pushed the heavy doors open. I let it slam, and walked out into the night. Instead of one moon there in the sky hung five, five of very different colors. One looked like our own moon, but it was only larger. Taking up ten times the sky of our own moon, the others ranged from a deep blue to a beautiful exotic jungle green. The stars here on this world were the brightest I had ever seen, they shone with a radiance earth would never see until it's final days. I walked along the path, I had never seen so much beauty in one place. The path was lined with trees that rose to the point of infinity, they were not green. But a glorious blue and gold, they did not have leaves. They had blooming golden lined blue flowers of a family I did not recognize, I turned to look at the building I had just came out of. It was indeed a castle of some of the largest proportions, I had never seen such a building. A master architect could never even dream of such a place with all it's grand pillars and glorious towers blessed with a crimson flag on each top. I turned back around and walked on the brick path toward the gate I was heading to. When I reached the gate it activated
on it's own after scanning my eyes, maybe it activated on DNA codes sometimes. I walked in once I knew for sure it was earth's gate that I was going to, and I returned to my planet.
So how did you like the second part? Well please review so I can know where I am messing up. I'll review you back, even if it takes me a year.