Hi!
I read your reviews and loved them, and so sorry about the swearing thing, I guess I was stressed. That also adds humor. I guess it was alittle confusing, or you guys where trying to gang up on me -_-(). So, here's a recap of this that might have confused you in the past you chapters.
-When Pan went home after Goku left she buried a box of Trunks, Bra and Goten goodies.
-Her mother found it ten years later.
-She obviously called her uncle Goten to arrange something, then called Bulma (that might have confused you.)
-Pan is the President of a Company called 'Son Industries' (originally made by Gohan)
-She had a meeting with the President of Capsule Corps. (Trunks)
-Trunks was sleeping when Pan showed up.
-Pan made fun of Trunks for being an idiot.
-After Pan mentions how she isn't "little" anymore, Trunks asks her "What size?", referring to her bra.
-Trunks realizes what he said, *instead* of just thinking it.
-He locks himself in the bathroom.
-Bulma tells Trunks and Bra that they have a trip to go on.
-They meet a dark figure when they entered the ship. (Goten)
-The ship lifts off mysteriously.
-The figure says the last time they were supposed to go on a trip like this, the missed it.
-Trunks has deja vu.
-They run in to see Pan at the controls.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~= Flashback
= Song
This that better? Do remember this is rated PG-13. Thanks!
Disclaimer: nopey
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Goten, Bra, Trunks, and Pan sat there.
And stared.
Trunks was uneasy. Pan was proud. Goten was feelin' sneaky. Bra was... tired? Pan was the first to speak. "Ahem."
"Talk to me and die."
"Now I'm scared."
Trunks and Pan sat at opposite side of the small room of the ship. Goten and Bra watched as if the ten years apart had never happened.
"Forget it," Pan said standing and starting for the door to the hallway. Suddenly, the ship began to shake. Pan felt herself being rocked back and forth. As she attempted to turn, she was knocked to the floor and landed on her tush.
Goten scrambled to hold onto something. As he did so, Bra was knocked out by some random flying object. Bra's unconscious body feel and hit Goten to the floor, sending Goten into a panic.
Trunks pulled himself to the controls. He hit a few buttons to try and control the ship. It crashed on several objects, rocking them back and forth. Pan stood and pulled herself towards Trunks, "What is going on?"
"We're in an astriod field genius."
"No kidding."
"I'm gonna try and land this sucker, so be quiet and let me concentrate."
"Oh yes," Pan said sitting down, "Trunks, ye greath of allth ye space shipth landers."
Before Trunks could retort, the ship blasted onto a large planet. Every (conscience) member of the ship screamed as the landed.
Goten and Bra slammed into the seats. Trunks and Pan where thrown from their seats, and through the windshield.
Right on top of each other.
Trunks landed first, banging his head on the ground. Pan landed second, right on top of the lavender haired wonder.
"Oww," Pan said. Then. realizing how she was laying stood up, "thank you for the landing Trunks."
"You're welcome."
They could hear Goten coming to in the ship, "Bra? Bra? Oh my Dende, is she breathing?! I know! Mouth to mouth!"
Pan rolled her eyes. Trunks slowly sat up and looked at Pan. For the first time in the several hours they'd been together, he'd realized what she had on. Pan was wearing grayish boot-cut capris, a red shirt with yellow lining the exposed her stomach slightly, and the orange bandanna on her head. Trunks looked down at his own clothes. Black long sleeved short, tan shorts, blue scarf. 'Damn,' Trunks thought, 'What is this? GT2?'
"Hey Trunks!" Pan said standing, "Do you realize where we are?!"
Trunks looked around, "Umm... no?"
Pan pulled on his arm to make him stand, "We were here before, on the Grand Tour! At the same time of year! This MUST be the same festival!"
"Huh?" Trunks asked as Trunks pulled him into the festival with people.
Summer air was heavy and sweet
"Pan-chan, I don't remember this, why are you dragging me here?" Trunks asked, annoyed.
"Oh Trunks, you're just getting old!" Pan said, "I've never had as much fun at a festival before we came here ten years ago! Let loose and have fun!"
You and I on a crowded street
"I still CAN NOT remember this!" Trunks was mad now.
"Shhh," Pan said stopping and holding her arms around Trunks waist, and moving to the music. "Think hard now Trunks."
There was music everywhere
I can see us there
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
"Hey Pan-chan look at this!" 28 year old Trunks said pointing to a festival, "Doesn't that look think fun?!"
"No..." Pan remarked. She was tired, and thirsty, and not in the mood for a party.
"Come on Pan!" Chibi Goku shouted, "This'll be fun!"
Pan moped down to the festival.
In a happy little foreign town
Where the starts hung upside down
"Fish scoops!" Pan shouted as she got excited, "Trunks catch me one!"
"What are we gonna do with a fish?" Trunks ask quizzically.
"It's just for fun Trunks!" Pan said pushing him towards the fish tank.
"Pan-chan..."
A half a world away
Far, far away
"Music!" Pan pulled on Trunks' sleeve, "Come on, let's dance!"
"Ummmm..." Trunks looked around, "Sure?"
"Okay," Pan said, "But you gotta do this 14 year old style."
"How would that beeeeeeeeeeee!" Trunks lagged on his "e" as Pan grabbed his arms and started to spin him around.
Trunks started to laugh really hard.
I remember
You were laughing
We were so in love
We were so in love
Pan giggled and laugh along with Trunks. Any feelings she'd had for him increased 10 fold right then.
And the band played
Songs that we had never heard
But we danced anyway
"What do you think they're saying in this song Pan-chan?" Trunks choked out through his laughter. Something about Pan made him feel like a kid again.
"I have no idea!" Pan replied.
"Well, let's make some up then!" Trunks said. He waited for the right moment, then, he shouted, "OH!"
Pan laughed and said, "La la la la la la la la la!"
We never understood the words
We just sang: "Oh!" and "La la la la la la la la la!"
And we danced anyway!
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
"You remember yet old man?" Pan asked as she pulled Trunks out to the area they danced in last time.
"Yes I do young lady," he replied, "And you were right, it was fun!"
They say you can't go back
"Then come on!" Pan shouted, "We're gonna dance!"
"Uhhh," Trunks got nervous, "Can't we just... do the fish scoop?"
"Sorry Trunks," Pan said looking at him out the corner of her eye, "You lost that opportunity 10 years ago."
Well baby I don't believe that
"Okay," Trunks said, "But you'll have to dance like a 14 year old again!"
"No problem!"
Come along with me
Come on and dance with me
Trunks and Pan spun until the song died down and the inhabitants of the planets got closer together. Pan, without thinking, pressed herself closer to Trunks as they started to dance slowly.
Maybe if I hold you close
"Trunks..." Pan whispered, "What are you thinking?"
Trunks inhaled, "I guess I was wondering why I stopped talkin' with you and Goten after that one night."
Maybe we can just let go
"You had plenty of chances," Pan told him.
"When?"
"Goten and I called a few times, but no one was home. We even came to CC once, but you were in a meeting..." Pan sighed. She was sad, but showing she was sad was not an option.
Of these things that tie us down
Pan rested her head on Trunks shoulder. 10 years. Had it really been that long? 10 years and she still held on to her crush for Trunks. But she was 24 now, was it really a crush? No, not a crush. But love? Could Pan possibly be in love with Trunks? No way... It's been 10 years. She didn't know Trunks anymore. He didn't know her anymore.
We'll come back around
Pan caught herself sniffling. It had begun to rain. "Trunks..." she began.
"Yes Pan-chan?" Trunks asked, slightly surprised.
"Nothing," she shook her head, "forget it."
You remember
We were laughing
We where so in love
So in love
Pan rested her head on his shoulder again. Trunks leaned in, and is if he heard what she had been thinking, sang softly, "They say you can't go back.... well baby I don't believe that.... come on with me, come on and dance with me. Maybe if I hold you close baby we can just let go of these things that tie us down, we'll come back around..."
Pan lifted her head and looked him in the eyes, "What was that?"
"That song," he said, "That what this tune reminds me of."
Pan wanted to cry.
And the band played
Songs that we had never heard
But we danced anyway
We never understood the words we just sang:
Trunks whispered to her again, "Oh..."
Pan smiled, "And la la la la la la la la la..."
And we dance anyway
******************************
End!
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I read your reviews and loved them, and so sorry about the swearing thing, I guess I was stressed. That also adds humor. I guess it was alittle confusing, or you guys where trying to gang up on me -_-(). So, here's a recap of this that might have confused you in the past you chapters.
-When Pan went home after Goku left she buried a box of Trunks, Bra and Goten goodies.
-Her mother found it ten years later.
-She obviously called her uncle Goten to arrange something, then called Bulma (that might have confused you.)
-Pan is the President of a Company called 'Son Industries' (originally made by Gohan)
-She had a meeting with the President of Capsule Corps. (Trunks)
-Trunks was sleeping when Pan showed up.
-Pan made fun of Trunks for being an idiot.
-After Pan mentions how she isn't "little" anymore, Trunks asks her "What size?", referring to her bra.
-Trunks realizes what he said, *instead* of just thinking it.
-He locks himself in the bathroom.
-Bulma tells Trunks and Bra that they have a trip to go on.
-They meet a dark figure when they entered the ship. (Goten)
-The ship lifts off mysteriously.
-The figure says the last time they were supposed to go on a trip like this, the missed it.
-Trunks has deja vu.
-They run in to see Pan at the controls.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~= Flashback
= Song
This that better? Do remember this is rated PG-13. Thanks!
Disclaimer: nopey
*****************************************
Goten, Bra, Trunks, and Pan sat there.
And stared.
Trunks was uneasy. Pan was proud. Goten was feelin' sneaky. Bra was... tired? Pan was the first to speak. "Ahem."
"Talk to me and die."
"Now I'm scared."
Trunks and Pan sat at opposite side of the small room of the ship. Goten and Bra watched as if the ten years apart had never happened.
"Forget it," Pan said standing and starting for the door to the hallway. Suddenly, the ship began to shake. Pan felt herself being rocked back and forth. As she attempted to turn, she was knocked to the floor and landed on her tush.
Goten scrambled to hold onto something. As he did so, Bra was knocked out by some random flying object. Bra's unconscious body feel and hit Goten to the floor, sending Goten into a panic.
Trunks pulled himself to the controls. He hit a few buttons to try and control the ship. It crashed on several objects, rocking them back and forth. Pan stood and pulled herself towards Trunks, "What is going on?"
"We're in an astriod field genius."
"No kidding."
"I'm gonna try and land this sucker, so be quiet and let me concentrate."
"Oh yes," Pan said sitting down, "Trunks, ye greath of allth ye space shipth landers."
Before Trunks could retort, the ship blasted onto a large planet. Every (conscience) member of the ship screamed as the landed.
Goten and Bra slammed into the seats. Trunks and Pan where thrown from their seats, and through the windshield.
Right on top of each other.
Trunks landed first, banging his head on the ground. Pan landed second, right on top of the lavender haired wonder.
"Oww," Pan said. Then. realizing how she was laying stood up, "thank you for the landing Trunks."
"You're welcome."
They could hear Goten coming to in the ship, "Bra? Bra? Oh my Dende, is she breathing?! I know! Mouth to mouth!"
Pan rolled her eyes. Trunks slowly sat up and looked at Pan. For the first time in the several hours they'd been together, he'd realized what she had on. Pan was wearing grayish boot-cut capris, a red shirt with yellow lining the exposed her stomach slightly, and the orange bandanna on her head. Trunks looked down at his own clothes. Black long sleeved short, tan shorts, blue scarf. 'Damn,' Trunks thought, 'What is this? GT2?'
"Hey Trunks!" Pan said standing, "Do you realize where we are?!"
Trunks looked around, "Umm... no?"
Pan pulled on his arm to make him stand, "We were here before, on the Grand Tour! At the same time of year! This MUST be the same festival!"
"Huh?" Trunks asked as Trunks pulled him into the festival with people.
Summer air was heavy and sweet
"Pan-chan, I don't remember this, why are you dragging me here?" Trunks asked, annoyed.
"Oh Trunks, you're just getting old!" Pan said, "I've never had as much fun at a festival before we came here ten years ago! Let loose and have fun!"
You and I on a crowded street
"I still CAN NOT remember this!" Trunks was mad now.
"Shhh," Pan said stopping and holding her arms around Trunks waist, and moving to the music. "Think hard now Trunks."
There was music everywhere
I can see us there
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
"Hey Pan-chan look at this!" 28 year old Trunks said pointing to a festival, "Doesn't that look think fun?!"
"No..." Pan remarked. She was tired, and thirsty, and not in the mood for a party.
"Come on Pan!" Chibi Goku shouted, "This'll be fun!"
Pan moped down to the festival.
In a happy little foreign town
Where the starts hung upside down
"Fish scoops!" Pan shouted as she got excited, "Trunks catch me one!"
"What are we gonna do with a fish?" Trunks ask quizzically.
"It's just for fun Trunks!" Pan said pushing him towards the fish tank.
"Pan-chan..."
A half a world away
Far, far away
"Music!" Pan pulled on Trunks' sleeve, "Come on, let's dance!"
"Ummmm..." Trunks looked around, "Sure?"
"Okay," Pan said, "But you gotta do this 14 year old style."
"How would that beeeeeeeeeeee!" Trunks lagged on his "e" as Pan grabbed his arms and started to spin him around.
Trunks started to laugh really hard.
I remember
You were laughing
We were so in love
We were so in love
Pan giggled and laugh along with Trunks. Any feelings she'd had for him increased 10 fold right then.
And the band played
Songs that we had never heard
But we danced anyway
"What do you think they're saying in this song Pan-chan?" Trunks choked out through his laughter. Something about Pan made him feel like a kid again.
"I have no idea!" Pan replied.
"Well, let's make some up then!" Trunks said. He waited for the right moment, then, he shouted, "OH!"
Pan laughed and said, "La la la la la la la la la!"
We never understood the words
We just sang: "Oh!" and "La la la la la la la la la!"
And we danced anyway!
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
"You remember yet old man?" Pan asked as she pulled Trunks out to the area they danced in last time.
"Yes I do young lady," he replied, "And you were right, it was fun!"
They say you can't go back
"Then come on!" Pan shouted, "We're gonna dance!"
"Uhhh," Trunks got nervous, "Can't we just... do the fish scoop?"
"Sorry Trunks," Pan said looking at him out the corner of her eye, "You lost that opportunity 10 years ago."
Well baby I don't believe that
"Okay," Trunks said, "But you'll have to dance like a 14 year old again!"
"No problem!"
Come along with me
Come on and dance with me
Trunks and Pan spun until the song died down and the inhabitants of the planets got closer together. Pan, without thinking, pressed herself closer to Trunks as they started to dance slowly.
Maybe if I hold you close
"Trunks..." Pan whispered, "What are you thinking?"
Trunks inhaled, "I guess I was wondering why I stopped talkin' with you and Goten after that one night."
Maybe we can just let go
"You had plenty of chances," Pan told him.
"When?"
"Goten and I called a few times, but no one was home. We even came to CC once, but you were in a meeting..." Pan sighed. She was sad, but showing she was sad was not an option.
Of these things that tie us down
Pan rested her head on Trunks shoulder. 10 years. Had it really been that long? 10 years and she still held on to her crush for Trunks. But she was 24 now, was it really a crush? No, not a crush. But love? Could Pan possibly be in love with Trunks? No way... It's been 10 years. She didn't know Trunks anymore. He didn't know her anymore.
We'll come back around
Pan caught herself sniffling. It had begun to rain. "Trunks..." she began.
"Yes Pan-chan?" Trunks asked, slightly surprised.
"Nothing," she shook her head, "forget it."
You remember
We were laughing
We where so in love
So in love
Pan rested her head on his shoulder again. Trunks leaned in, and is if he heard what she had been thinking, sang softly, "They say you can't go back.... well baby I don't believe that.... come on with me, come on and dance with me. Maybe if I hold you close baby we can just let go of these things that tie us down, we'll come back around..."
Pan lifted her head and looked him in the eyes, "What was that?"
"That song," he said, "That what this tune reminds me of."
Pan wanted to cry.
And the band played
Songs that we had never heard
But we danced anyway
We never understood the words we just sang:
Trunks whispered to her again, "Oh..."
Pan smiled, "And la la la la la la la la la..."
And we dance anyway
******************************
End!
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