Chapter 2: Smile
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Conventions
1)*Character thought*
2)"Character Dialouge"
Enjoy!
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Jann-Lee didn't really care if he was let out early. He enjoyed his line of work. He lived for it. With a resignated sigh, Jann-Lee exited through the back door. He wasn't too fond of all the clubbers and the music, they just didn't suit him. Walking through the back alley, Jann-Lee noticed the sillouette of a woman walking alone in his direction. Another man came up to her and started speaking to her.
"Hey sweetie, what're you doin' alone at night?" the man said reeking with alcohol.
"None of your bussiness." the woman snapped back.
"Hey now, no need to be rude. How 'bout we go to my place? I'll teach you how to be a little more friendly, huh?"
"How 'bout no!"
The woman stomped away. Jann-Lee watched, but couldn't make out faces on either figures. The man looked at her in anger, grabbed her wrist and forced her against the wall.
"Listen girl! I always get what I want! If you know what's good for you, you'll listen to me!"
The man leaned in on the woman.
*Damn these women, always getting themselves into trouble! Heh, atleast I can have a little fun now.*Jann-Lee approached the two, but stopped.
"You dirty bastard!" the woman yelled.
The woman kneed the man in the stomach, then swiftly followed with a strong, firm punch in the chest. The woman then stomped on the man when he fell to the ground.
"Teach me how to be a little friendly huh? YOU need learn how to treat a lady properly, you punk!"
Jann-Lee looked at the woman as she walked away. *...ooks like this one has a few tricks up her sleeve.*
Just then, one of the woman's friends came from the back door of the club.
"Yo, Lei Fang! We herd you yell, is everything alright?"
"Yeah, I'm fine. It's just that some guys don't know how to behave..." Lei Fang said looking back at the man laying on the ground.
"I don't know why I bother sometimes, you should go a little easy on some guys. They don't know what they're in for."
"Well it serves them right for not being polite!"
*Who is she?* Jann-Lee thought.
Lei Fang's eyes shot up. *Some one is looking...* She turned around again, only to see Jann-Lee looking at her. *It's that guy..* Lei Fang smiled.
Jann-Lee noticed Lei Fang. *Why is she smiling at me?* Jann-Lee looked to his side and walked off. Lei fang watched him walk away.
"Who's that?" Lei Fang's friend asked.
"Uh, I don't know, just some guy."
"Oh really? He seemed kinda cute to me!"
"Whatever you say."
Jann-Lee looked back at Lei Fang as he walked. *She was looking at me, twice... Why didn't she avoid me like everyone else? Why did she smile?*
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[Takes deep breath. Still a bit scared about quality of wrting.] Well, I changed the format. I don't think this one will be perminent. There are some scenes that seems to fit better with narration and others that do better with just character thought. I'm probably going to switch between this format and the the one from the first chapter. Oh yeah, I should've mentioned this earlier, I don't have spell check and I don't edit well so bare with grammer mistakes and such. So what do you think? It's only chapter two, there's still more to come! Comments and suggestions always welcomed. Standard disclaimers go here.
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Conventions
1)*Character thought*
2)"Character Dialouge"
Enjoy!
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Jann-Lee didn't really care if he was let out early. He enjoyed his line of work. He lived for it. With a resignated sigh, Jann-Lee exited through the back door. He wasn't too fond of all the clubbers and the music, they just didn't suit him. Walking through the back alley, Jann-Lee noticed the sillouette of a woman walking alone in his direction. Another man came up to her and started speaking to her.
"Hey sweetie, what're you doin' alone at night?" the man said reeking with alcohol.
"None of your bussiness." the woman snapped back.
"Hey now, no need to be rude. How 'bout we go to my place? I'll teach you how to be a little more friendly, huh?"
"How 'bout no!"
The woman stomped away. Jann-Lee watched, but couldn't make out faces on either figures. The man looked at her in anger, grabbed her wrist and forced her against the wall.
"Listen girl! I always get what I want! If you know what's good for you, you'll listen to me!"
The man leaned in on the woman.
*Damn these women, always getting themselves into trouble! Heh, atleast I can have a little fun now.*Jann-Lee approached the two, but stopped.
"You dirty bastard!" the woman yelled.
The woman kneed the man in the stomach, then swiftly followed with a strong, firm punch in the chest. The woman then stomped on the man when he fell to the ground.
"Teach me how to be a little friendly huh? YOU need learn how to treat a lady properly, you punk!"
Jann-Lee looked at the woman as she walked away. *...ooks like this one has a few tricks up her sleeve.*
Just then, one of the woman's friends came from the back door of the club.
"Yo, Lei Fang! We herd you yell, is everything alright?"
"Yeah, I'm fine. It's just that some guys don't know how to behave..." Lei Fang said looking back at the man laying on the ground.
"I don't know why I bother sometimes, you should go a little easy on some guys. They don't know what they're in for."
"Well it serves them right for not being polite!"
*Who is she?* Jann-Lee thought.
Lei Fang's eyes shot up. *Some one is looking...* She turned around again, only to see Jann-Lee looking at her. *It's that guy..* Lei Fang smiled.
Jann-Lee noticed Lei Fang. *Why is she smiling at me?* Jann-Lee looked to his side and walked off. Lei fang watched him walk away.
"Who's that?" Lei Fang's friend asked.
"Uh, I don't know, just some guy."
"Oh really? He seemed kinda cute to me!"
"Whatever you say."
Jann-Lee looked back at Lei Fang as he walked. *She was looking at me, twice... Why didn't she avoid me like everyone else? Why did she smile?*
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[Takes deep breath. Still a bit scared about quality of wrting.] Well, I changed the format. I don't think this one will be perminent. There are some scenes that seems to fit better with narration and others that do better with just character thought. I'm probably going to switch between this format and the the one from the first chapter. Oh yeah, I should've mentioned this earlier, I don't have spell check and I don't edit well so bare with grammer mistakes and such. So what do you think? It's only chapter two, there's still more to come! Comments and suggestions always welcomed. Standard disclaimers go here.
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