Hi!!!!
This is my first fanfic.
EVER!!!
I dunno much about writing but I've read LOTS!!!
Anyway, please drop a comment to tell me what you think of this, no flames!!! Just keep it low heat =P
Oh yeah, I rewrote small parts of this.
Disclaimer: I do not own Harvest Moon 64, I'm not doing this for profit either!!!
Anyway, here's the story
A new arrival.
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A sad sad story
Chapter 1
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*.* thoughts
"." speech
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She watched from the distance as the new boy arrived with his suitcase in hand. Koro, his grandfather's old dog ran up to him and licked his face. This must be the guy taking over the ranch, she thought, "Karen!" her thoughts were interupted as an angry voice called out for her from the Vineyard. "Coming dad." She said resigningly.
The next day, she woke up to find her father dozing off on the couch. He had too many to drink again, she though with disgust. "Kai!" she called, "Get my father up! How do you expect this Vineyard to make money with the two of you slacking off doing nothing all day?" "Yes Miss Karen, you are right." The boy with the purple bandanna said, with some guilt. "But why don't you let your father rest for a while? He's had a bad day." "Bad day? Bad day?! Everyday's like his bad day! What kind of a father is he anyway? And how does he expect to pay for the bills huh?" she screamed in disbelief, her father was beyond having a bad day, he was having a bad life.
Karen's father chose that moment to wake up. "Shut up you two, I'm trying to get some rest!!!" he got up and started yelling at Karen, at the same time walking out the door. The argument had continued outside, and neither men noticed a boy looking their way. But from the corner of her eye, Karen caught a glinpse of blue, and upon realising it was the new boy, she blushed. Embarrased that he'd seen her like this, taking a quick exit, she stomped back into the house, and walked up to her room, muttering, "I do not like the baka, what's wrong with me?" over and over again.
As the days went by, Jack got working, he started planting spring crops and grass, in preparation for the animals, he also started introducing himself to all the townsfolk, giving them occasional presents and most often, talking, flirting and giving gifts to the girls. All the girls, that is, except for her. Not that he didn't try, everynight he'd be at the bar, with some tacky present or other, wether it was a leftover potato, a bunch of flowers, or veryberries, and try to talk to her, after the 5th try though, he gave up, like many before him. The 1st time she threw the gift on the floor and told him to go away. The 2nd time was the same, and the 3rd time she told him not to talk o her so much. After that, she stopped talking to him altogether, and chose not to aknowledge his existense. He gave up after that.
The sowing festival came along and Karen went, not to see the stupid baka off course, she told herself. At the festival, she found Jack there too. Off course, she thought, he's the kind of guy who wants to befriend everyone, unlike me, who has no friends except for Ann. She saw him with, Popuri. That little tramp, gets all the luck. She thought, angry for no apparent reason. She saw the pink haired flower girl say something to him, he smiled, shaking his head, as if to say, girls will be girls and Popuri playfully punched him on the arm. He then walked over to Lilia, Popuri's mother, and asked for two balloons, one for him and he handed the other to Popuri. He glanced around, saying hi to everyone he saw, and the he saw Karen, standing there all alone, and walked over to her, motioning Popuri to follow.
Karen wathced in plain horror as she saw Jack walk towards her, Popuri tagging behind. To her surprise, he simply waved, and said hi with a slight smile. Popuri bounced over and started her usual babbling, "hi Karen, have you met the guy taking over that Ranch? He's name is Jack and he took me to this festival." *God that bitch!* Karen thought, fuming inside, feeling the sudden urge to strangle her. But she repressed her anger and jealousy and said quietely, "Yeah, he goes to the bar from time to time."
"Maybe I should start going to the bar eh?" Popuri said with a giggle, completely unaware of the fact that Karen was about to slap her. "see this flower?" She then pointed to her hair, in it was a beautiful blue flower that made a nice contrast with her pink hair. "Jack gave it to me this morning, isn't he sweet?" He blushed, not so used to the attention he was getting. And he could see that Karen was getting a little edgy for some reason, but shrugged it off, thinking, *she probably had an argument with her father again, but better not ask, don't wanna make it worse, pity though, I kinda liked her.* Still, he was feeling rather uncomfortable. Luckily, the mayor announced it time to fly the hot-air balloon. They let off their balloons and went home. Karen cried herself to bed that night, not knowing why.
The next few days were quiet, she went to town as little as she could, avoiding Jack but more Popuri, she did not want her to blab on about 'her Jack'. For some reason she felt hurt, hurt that Jack abandoned her, but deep inside, she knew he wasn't to blame. She was. She had rejected him when he tried to be friendly and now she's paying the price. A week later, the 16th, it started raining and she caught a cold. To her great surprise, Jack came by in the afternoon, carrying a slice of hot pie. "It's fresh frm the oven," he said timidly, almost expecting her to eat him alive. "um.. it'll make you feel better" there was an awkward silence. For a long time, none of them spoke. Until he cekced his watch and realised that it was timeto go back home. Karen finally found her voice. "thanks for coming today, Jack" He smiled at that and left, saying a very quiet "You're welcome" Karen took a bite of the pie he'd bought her, it was cold, but she didn't care, it tasted like the best thing she's ever had.
The next day, she didn't know why, but when she started avoiding him. Perhaps she was afraid of been friendly, but she did, and Jack did not seem to notice. From Kai, who's quite good friends with him now, she heard that the 4 girls, Ann, Popuri, Elli and Maria all seemed to like him, a lot, and that he was also becoming quite popular amongst the townspeople now. Especially with the three little kids, Stu, Kent and May.
The 22nd came around, and Karen found herself voted as the goddess. She was overwhelmed with joy, but sobered after she realised that Jcack must like one of the other girls better, because only the King gets to dance with the flower goddess and that wasn't Jack this year. Disheartened, she went to her room and moped. Her mother noticed and knocked on her door, "Karen dear, are you alright? I thought you'd be happy that you were voted the Spring Goddess." She didn't answer, tired, her mother gave up.
On the 23rd of Spring, the annual flower festival, Karen dressed herself in the goddess costume, around her were the 4 other girls, they were talking about Jack. "He's so sweet," said Maria, who was usually shy, too shy, in Karen's opinion. "he came round to the library yesterday and helped me restack the bookshelves." "yeah," agreed Elli, the bakery girl. "we were out of milk the other day, so he went back to his ranch and got us a fresh bottle." "Yeah, and Cliffguard really likes him." Added Ann, the daughter of the Green Ranch owner, "he even let Jack ride him." "yeah," said Popuri excitedly, "who do you think he'll dance with?" noticing that her best friend has been awfully quiet about this, Ann asked Karen, "what do you think of Jack eh?" "I.I. don't think anything of him." She stammered, blushing horribly, "I don't even know him." " Announcing The Flower Goddess and her entourage." The mayors voice could be heard, and the girls' conversation was cut off, as the 4 girls stood in each corner, with Karen in the middle.
They made their way out, craning their heads looking for Jack. Sure enough, he was standing near the front, watching. "Please choose a dance partner" the mayor announced. Right away, the girls started invading him. "Ask me Jack," "no, ask me" "jack, you'll ask me won't you?" "get out of here, he's gonna aske me right?" "what about me?" Karen asked softly, Popuri gave a soft laugh, "you Karen? Get out of here. He voted for you coz he didn't want to dance with you. Don't you know that?" seeing the chaos he's created, he shook his head and walked towards May. "do you wanna dance with me May-Chan?" he asked, extending a hand out. "all the other girls are busy." "sure, oniisan, I'd love to dance with you." And the music started, with Jack twirling May in the air, and May squealing happily. The other girls starred in shock as their crush pranced around with a little girl.
To be continued.
Note: oniisan means big brother (I think), and -chan is a suffix for people younger than you or as a term of affection.
Hello, Just to warn you that my English ain't all that crash hot so please excuse the mistakes in there. Apologies for anyone who'd be offended by this. =O
Please review this, like I said, this is my first fic and any critisism are welcome. =D
ReikoChan 2001
This is my first fanfic.
EVER!!!
I dunno much about writing but I've read LOTS!!!
Anyway, please drop a comment to tell me what you think of this, no flames!!! Just keep it low heat =P
Oh yeah, I rewrote small parts of this.
Disclaimer: I do not own Harvest Moon 64, I'm not doing this for profit either!!!
Anyway, here's the story
A new arrival.
++++++++++++++++
A sad sad story
Chapter 1
++++++++++++++++
*.* thoughts
"." speech
. effects
She watched from the distance as the new boy arrived with his suitcase in hand. Koro, his grandfather's old dog ran up to him and licked his face. This must be the guy taking over the ranch, she thought, "Karen!" her thoughts were interupted as an angry voice called out for her from the Vineyard. "Coming dad." She said resigningly.
The next day, she woke up to find her father dozing off on the couch. He had too many to drink again, she though with disgust. "Kai!" she called, "Get my father up! How do you expect this Vineyard to make money with the two of you slacking off doing nothing all day?" "Yes Miss Karen, you are right." The boy with the purple bandanna said, with some guilt. "But why don't you let your father rest for a while? He's had a bad day." "Bad day? Bad day?! Everyday's like his bad day! What kind of a father is he anyway? And how does he expect to pay for the bills huh?" she screamed in disbelief, her father was beyond having a bad day, he was having a bad life.
Karen's father chose that moment to wake up. "Shut up you two, I'm trying to get some rest!!!" he got up and started yelling at Karen, at the same time walking out the door. The argument had continued outside, and neither men noticed a boy looking their way. But from the corner of her eye, Karen caught a glinpse of blue, and upon realising it was the new boy, she blushed. Embarrased that he'd seen her like this, taking a quick exit, she stomped back into the house, and walked up to her room, muttering, "I do not like the baka, what's wrong with me?" over and over again.
As the days went by, Jack got working, he started planting spring crops and grass, in preparation for the animals, he also started introducing himself to all the townsfolk, giving them occasional presents and most often, talking, flirting and giving gifts to the girls. All the girls, that is, except for her. Not that he didn't try, everynight he'd be at the bar, with some tacky present or other, wether it was a leftover potato, a bunch of flowers, or veryberries, and try to talk to her, after the 5th try though, he gave up, like many before him. The 1st time she threw the gift on the floor and told him to go away. The 2nd time was the same, and the 3rd time she told him not to talk o her so much. After that, she stopped talking to him altogether, and chose not to aknowledge his existense. He gave up after that.
The sowing festival came along and Karen went, not to see the stupid baka off course, she told herself. At the festival, she found Jack there too. Off course, she thought, he's the kind of guy who wants to befriend everyone, unlike me, who has no friends except for Ann. She saw him with, Popuri. That little tramp, gets all the luck. She thought, angry for no apparent reason. She saw the pink haired flower girl say something to him, he smiled, shaking his head, as if to say, girls will be girls and Popuri playfully punched him on the arm. He then walked over to Lilia, Popuri's mother, and asked for two balloons, one for him and he handed the other to Popuri. He glanced around, saying hi to everyone he saw, and the he saw Karen, standing there all alone, and walked over to her, motioning Popuri to follow.
Karen wathced in plain horror as she saw Jack walk towards her, Popuri tagging behind. To her surprise, he simply waved, and said hi with a slight smile. Popuri bounced over and started her usual babbling, "hi Karen, have you met the guy taking over that Ranch? He's name is Jack and he took me to this festival." *God that bitch!* Karen thought, fuming inside, feeling the sudden urge to strangle her. But she repressed her anger and jealousy and said quietely, "Yeah, he goes to the bar from time to time."
"Maybe I should start going to the bar eh?" Popuri said with a giggle, completely unaware of the fact that Karen was about to slap her. "see this flower?" She then pointed to her hair, in it was a beautiful blue flower that made a nice contrast with her pink hair. "Jack gave it to me this morning, isn't he sweet?" He blushed, not so used to the attention he was getting. And he could see that Karen was getting a little edgy for some reason, but shrugged it off, thinking, *she probably had an argument with her father again, but better not ask, don't wanna make it worse, pity though, I kinda liked her.* Still, he was feeling rather uncomfortable. Luckily, the mayor announced it time to fly the hot-air balloon. They let off their balloons and went home. Karen cried herself to bed that night, not knowing why.
The next few days were quiet, she went to town as little as she could, avoiding Jack but more Popuri, she did not want her to blab on about 'her Jack'. For some reason she felt hurt, hurt that Jack abandoned her, but deep inside, she knew he wasn't to blame. She was. She had rejected him when he tried to be friendly and now she's paying the price. A week later, the 16th, it started raining and she caught a cold. To her great surprise, Jack came by in the afternoon, carrying a slice of hot pie. "It's fresh frm the oven," he said timidly, almost expecting her to eat him alive. "um.. it'll make you feel better" there was an awkward silence. For a long time, none of them spoke. Until he cekced his watch and realised that it was timeto go back home. Karen finally found her voice. "thanks for coming today, Jack" He smiled at that and left, saying a very quiet "You're welcome" Karen took a bite of the pie he'd bought her, it was cold, but she didn't care, it tasted like the best thing she's ever had.
The next day, she didn't know why, but when she started avoiding him. Perhaps she was afraid of been friendly, but she did, and Jack did not seem to notice. From Kai, who's quite good friends with him now, she heard that the 4 girls, Ann, Popuri, Elli and Maria all seemed to like him, a lot, and that he was also becoming quite popular amongst the townspeople now. Especially with the three little kids, Stu, Kent and May.
The 22nd came around, and Karen found herself voted as the goddess. She was overwhelmed with joy, but sobered after she realised that Jcack must like one of the other girls better, because only the King gets to dance with the flower goddess and that wasn't Jack this year. Disheartened, she went to her room and moped. Her mother noticed and knocked on her door, "Karen dear, are you alright? I thought you'd be happy that you were voted the Spring Goddess." She didn't answer, tired, her mother gave up.
On the 23rd of Spring, the annual flower festival, Karen dressed herself in the goddess costume, around her were the 4 other girls, they were talking about Jack. "He's so sweet," said Maria, who was usually shy, too shy, in Karen's opinion. "he came round to the library yesterday and helped me restack the bookshelves." "yeah," agreed Elli, the bakery girl. "we were out of milk the other day, so he went back to his ranch and got us a fresh bottle." "Yeah, and Cliffguard really likes him." Added Ann, the daughter of the Green Ranch owner, "he even let Jack ride him." "yeah," said Popuri excitedly, "who do you think he'll dance with?" noticing that her best friend has been awfully quiet about this, Ann asked Karen, "what do you think of Jack eh?" "I.I. don't think anything of him." She stammered, blushing horribly, "I don't even know him." " Announcing The Flower Goddess and her entourage." The mayors voice could be heard, and the girls' conversation was cut off, as the 4 girls stood in each corner, with Karen in the middle.
They made their way out, craning their heads looking for Jack. Sure enough, he was standing near the front, watching. "Please choose a dance partner" the mayor announced. Right away, the girls started invading him. "Ask me Jack," "no, ask me" "jack, you'll ask me won't you?" "get out of here, he's gonna aske me right?" "what about me?" Karen asked softly, Popuri gave a soft laugh, "you Karen? Get out of here. He voted for you coz he didn't want to dance with you. Don't you know that?" seeing the chaos he's created, he shook his head and walked towards May. "do you wanna dance with me May-Chan?" he asked, extending a hand out. "all the other girls are busy." "sure, oniisan, I'd love to dance with you." And the music started, with Jack twirling May in the air, and May squealing happily. The other girls starred in shock as their crush pranced around with a little girl.
To be continued.
Note: oniisan means big brother (I think), and -chan is a suffix for people younger than you or as a term of affection.
Hello, Just to warn you that my English ain't all that crash hot so please excuse the mistakes in there. Apologies for anyone who'd be offended by this. =O
Please review this, like I said, this is my first fic and any critisism are welcome. =D
ReikoChan 2001
