Disclaimer: A little while ago I had an idea for a story. It should be about this dead guy who comes back to revenge his and his girlfriend's death. "He should have supernatural powers." I thought. Too bad......I found out someone else had this idea earlier and copyrighted it. So I don't own these characters okay?!
Chapter 1: Peace disturbed
Eric's life had been easier the last two weeks. Sure, he still missed Shelly, and then there was this `dead' thing. The crow however didn't show himself and it seemed the city didn't have any problems that needed to be resolved. He passed his time by playing his guitar, or just by sitting on the floor looking at the broken glass in the window. Often Sarah came to visit him. That lifted his spirit for a while, but as soon as she left, Eric felt lonely and he often longed for death. Real death that is. Not the kind of dead he was now. He wanted to rest and be with Shelly forever.
Winter was drawing nearer and the sky turned darker each day. Eric was playing his favourite tune, when he saw the big black bird flying into the room. "So my friend," he stated "it's been a long time." The crow had a piece of cloth in its beak. Eric took it in his hands and immediately got a vision.
Albrecht walked into the room with his gun in his hand. He seemed nervous as a drop of sweat rolled down his face. Outside stood his car. Backup was on the way, but Albrecht couldn't wait for them. They had to drive across the city, and with this traffic, it could take at least half an hour. Albrecht continued his path, crossing the large room. It looked like an abandoned warehouse or factory. Albrecht now stood in the middle of the room. He looked up, and he froze. Half a dozen men aimed their rifles directly at him. Albrecht could do nothing but surrender and throw down his gun, and so he did. The seventh man walked into the room. He came through a door on the far end of the room. Albrecht knew this man. He had put him away for life. Or so he thought. "Hiya officer Albrecht," he said, "remember me?" "Yeah I remember you. Hoyle Crater. You raped and murdered sixteen women. How'd you get out of jail?!" Then everything went black as he got hit in the neck with the end of a
rifle. When two of the men dragged him out of the room, Albrecht came to and tore a piece of his coat and dropped in on the ground.
"So, it begins again." said Eric, and he walked towards the window. He could now hear the sirens of a squad police cars. Far away he saw their lights flashing blue against the buildings. "Too late boys." Eric mocked with a grim smile on his face " Now I'm on the case." In a way Eric was glad something happened. He didn't want to see Albrecht in trouble, but it would do him good to get out of his attic and walk the streets again. He looked for his coat and when he walked over to the door Sarah came in. "Going out?" she asked. "Albrecht's in trouble. Gotta help him." Eric answered. A troubled look came across Sarah's face. "Albrecht in trouble? Where...I mean, who.., what happened?" " I'll tell you on the way to the police station."
They both left the room and went down the stairs. As soon as their feet touched the pavement Eric told the girl what he knew, but he didn't tell her what else he felt. When they left the building Eric almost instantly felt something pressing down on him. It was almost as if a great power had come to town. Eric somehow knew Albrecht's situation wasn't what it looked like. He felt something bad was coming, but he couldn't quite see what it was. People had succeeded before in deceiving him. Some had even come close to defeating the crow, because they had that good a plan. Anyway, those were worries for later. Now he had to find out who this `Hoyle Crater' guy is.
Well this was kind of an intro. Let me know what you think and whether or not I should continue....
Chapter 1: Peace disturbed
Eric's life had been easier the last two weeks. Sure, he still missed Shelly, and then there was this `dead' thing. The crow however didn't show himself and it seemed the city didn't have any problems that needed to be resolved. He passed his time by playing his guitar, or just by sitting on the floor looking at the broken glass in the window. Often Sarah came to visit him. That lifted his spirit for a while, but as soon as she left, Eric felt lonely and he often longed for death. Real death that is. Not the kind of dead he was now. He wanted to rest and be with Shelly forever.
Winter was drawing nearer and the sky turned darker each day. Eric was playing his favourite tune, when he saw the big black bird flying into the room. "So my friend," he stated "it's been a long time." The crow had a piece of cloth in its beak. Eric took it in his hands and immediately got a vision.
Albrecht walked into the room with his gun in his hand. He seemed nervous as a drop of sweat rolled down his face. Outside stood his car. Backup was on the way, but Albrecht couldn't wait for them. They had to drive across the city, and with this traffic, it could take at least half an hour. Albrecht continued his path, crossing the large room. It looked like an abandoned warehouse or factory. Albrecht now stood in the middle of the room. He looked up, and he froze. Half a dozen men aimed their rifles directly at him. Albrecht could do nothing but surrender and throw down his gun, and so he did. The seventh man walked into the room. He came through a door on the far end of the room. Albrecht knew this man. He had put him away for life. Or so he thought. "Hiya officer Albrecht," he said, "remember me?" "Yeah I remember you. Hoyle Crater. You raped and murdered sixteen women. How'd you get out of jail?!" Then everything went black as he got hit in the neck with the end of a
rifle. When two of the men dragged him out of the room, Albrecht came to and tore a piece of his coat and dropped in on the ground.
"So, it begins again." said Eric, and he walked towards the window. He could now hear the sirens of a squad police cars. Far away he saw their lights flashing blue against the buildings. "Too late boys." Eric mocked with a grim smile on his face " Now I'm on the case." In a way Eric was glad something happened. He didn't want to see Albrecht in trouble, but it would do him good to get out of his attic and walk the streets again. He looked for his coat and when he walked over to the door Sarah came in. "Going out?" she asked. "Albrecht's in trouble. Gotta help him." Eric answered. A troubled look came across Sarah's face. "Albrecht in trouble? Where...I mean, who.., what happened?" " I'll tell you on the way to the police station."
They both left the room and went down the stairs. As soon as their feet touched the pavement Eric told the girl what he knew, but he didn't tell her what else he felt. When they left the building Eric almost instantly felt something pressing down on him. It was almost as if a great power had come to town. Eric somehow knew Albrecht's situation wasn't what it looked like. He felt something bad was coming, but he couldn't quite see what it was. People had succeeded before in deceiving him. Some had even come close to defeating the crow, because they had that good a plan. Anyway, those were worries for later. Now he had to find out who this `Hoyle Crater' guy is.
Well this was kind of an intro. Let me know what you think and whether or not I should continue....