Disclaimer: blah, blah, blah (You get the idea). The ad. idea is from a John Wyndham short story from the book Jizzle called Confidence Trick.(The tube-train to hell).
Thanks for the reviews full of advice and encouragement, they helped a lot. I'm going to re-write the first two chapters but I'll keep going with the story anyway. There shouldn't be any major changes. This is gonna be a short chapter which I will probably regret writing later.
Anyway, the last chapter they found themselves in Fairytale land, sounds lovely and cheerful doesn't it! No, think more dark and evil and your halfway there. The true fairytales were never 'happy ever after'.
They took the Maru and landed on the planet. By this time Dylan was back to himself and Trance was sobering up.
They walked into the only apparent entrance in the only apparent building on the planet. In the entrance hall they found a statue.
As they walked up to it, the statue began to talk.
"Welcome friends! It is the season of Easter..."
Rommie interrupted the statue, " Actually Easter is not a season, it's a festive time of year and, what you call the 'season of Easter' ended over two earth weeks ago"
The statue glared at her, muttered something about androids and began again.
"Welcome acquaintances! It is the season of Easter, also known as Ostara. Join in the festivities and enjoy the theme'd rooms. Your rooms are awaiting you, up the stairs, to your left and past the door to hell. If you need any assistance contact the nearest statue. Enjoy your stay!."
Dylan addressed the statue. "We aren't staying, we are just here to look for a guy called Poltz because he kidnapped my friends baby and we need to rescue her and kill him. Where would we find him?"
The statue turned it's glare on Dylan and began again.
" Welcome enemies! ........"
The group walked on past the statue and found themselves at the bottom of a staircase that winded round and round and round upwards into the building. (Kind of like the one Giles used in the very, very original pilot episode of Buffy, when he was giving her the 'chosen one' lecture and kept disappearing behind the stairs!)
"Do we go up?" Harper asked.
"Well I don't see a door marked 'Tori's in here' so, yeah unless you want to go talk to the dumb statue out there"
"Beka!", Trance was sober enough to protest, "Don't be statue-ist, he might have been really friendly for a statue"
They headed up the stairs which appeared to go on forever. They passed advertisements like "Burn cream - for all those nasty scorch marks and limb glue - for re-attaching those essential parts."
Harper wasn't paying attention to the ads. He was lagging behind the rest. He noticed a button on the panel on the wall. It read "Push button"
'No, I won't press it' He continued on walking up the stairs and to his surprise the button followed him.
He thought he could hear it taunting him "press me, press me, Harper, press the button........"
Finally he couldn't stand it anymore. He pressed the button.
Immediately the stairs turned into a giant slide and they all slid faster and faster, round and round back down the stairs. Past the reception area and down further, underground.
Finally they stopped or rather came to an abrupt stop as they were all flung off the slide into the air and landed on the grass.
They got up and brushed themselves off.
The land looked almost artificial, with it's green grass, and perfectly small, round hills. Little windmills were in the ground and a small breeze pushed them round and round.
Tyr spoke up. " I know this place, we used to be told about it as a scary story to frighten children into being good. This is tellytubbyland!!!!"
Everyone looked horrified. At that moment a brown rabbit hopped over to Trance. She smiled and reached down to pet it. Abruptly, she jumped back screaming. There was blood covering her hand.
She ran over and hid behind Dylan screaming "The bunny tried to kill me, it tried to kill me. The bunny is evil!!"
Trances hand wasn't badly hurt, so they continued on walking toward the nearest hill to get a better look around.
As they were climbing up they realised there were more rabbits. Actually there were a lot of rabbits and they were moving en masse, towards them. There must have been hundreds.
By the time they reached the top of the hill, they were surrounded. Suddenly Dylan and Trance disappeared.
Tyr and Beka ran over to where they had been, followed closely by Rommie. Then all three of them, disappeared. Harper was the only one left cos they had left Rev back on the andromeda. He glanced at the quickly approaching rabbits then turned and jumped into the hole the others had disappeared into.
Where did they go, what's going to happen next? We're hoping for a guest appearance by Bob next chapter but that depends on how his custody case goes. Just a note on the statue-ist comment. For example, if I refuse to hug trees on my way home from school with my friend, she calls me a tree hugger-ist. When she doesn't hug every single tree on our way home I call her a tree-ist cos she's leaving some of them out. You can use the -ist for almost anything (doorist, potato-ist, machine-ist).
Thanks for the reviews full of advice and encouragement, they helped a lot. I'm going to re-write the first two chapters but I'll keep going with the story anyway. There shouldn't be any major changes. This is gonna be a short chapter which I will probably regret writing later.
Anyway, the last chapter they found themselves in Fairytale land, sounds lovely and cheerful doesn't it! No, think more dark and evil and your halfway there. The true fairytales were never 'happy ever after'.
They took the Maru and landed on the planet. By this time Dylan was back to himself and Trance was sobering up.
They walked into the only apparent entrance in the only apparent building on the planet. In the entrance hall they found a statue.
As they walked up to it, the statue began to talk.
"Welcome friends! It is the season of Easter..."
Rommie interrupted the statue, " Actually Easter is not a season, it's a festive time of year and, what you call the 'season of Easter' ended over two earth weeks ago"
The statue glared at her, muttered something about androids and began again.
"Welcome acquaintances! It is the season of Easter, also known as Ostara. Join in the festivities and enjoy the theme'd rooms. Your rooms are awaiting you, up the stairs, to your left and past the door to hell. If you need any assistance contact the nearest statue. Enjoy your stay!."
Dylan addressed the statue. "We aren't staying, we are just here to look for a guy called Poltz because he kidnapped my friends baby and we need to rescue her and kill him. Where would we find him?"
The statue turned it's glare on Dylan and began again.
" Welcome enemies! ........"
The group walked on past the statue and found themselves at the bottom of a staircase that winded round and round and round upwards into the building. (Kind of like the one Giles used in the very, very original pilot episode of Buffy, when he was giving her the 'chosen one' lecture and kept disappearing behind the stairs!)
"Do we go up?" Harper asked.
"Well I don't see a door marked 'Tori's in here' so, yeah unless you want to go talk to the dumb statue out there"
"Beka!", Trance was sober enough to protest, "Don't be statue-ist, he might have been really friendly for a statue"
They headed up the stairs which appeared to go on forever. They passed advertisements like "Burn cream - for all those nasty scorch marks and limb glue - for re-attaching those essential parts."
Harper wasn't paying attention to the ads. He was lagging behind the rest. He noticed a button on the panel on the wall. It read "Push button"
'No, I won't press it' He continued on walking up the stairs and to his surprise the button followed him.
He thought he could hear it taunting him "press me, press me, Harper, press the button........"
Finally he couldn't stand it anymore. He pressed the button.
Immediately the stairs turned into a giant slide and they all slid faster and faster, round and round back down the stairs. Past the reception area and down further, underground.
Finally they stopped or rather came to an abrupt stop as they were all flung off the slide into the air and landed on the grass.
They got up and brushed themselves off.
The land looked almost artificial, with it's green grass, and perfectly small, round hills. Little windmills were in the ground and a small breeze pushed them round and round.
Tyr spoke up. " I know this place, we used to be told about it as a scary story to frighten children into being good. This is tellytubbyland!!!!"
Everyone looked horrified. At that moment a brown rabbit hopped over to Trance. She smiled and reached down to pet it. Abruptly, she jumped back screaming. There was blood covering her hand.
She ran over and hid behind Dylan screaming "The bunny tried to kill me, it tried to kill me. The bunny is evil!!"
Trances hand wasn't badly hurt, so they continued on walking toward the nearest hill to get a better look around.
As they were climbing up they realised there were more rabbits. Actually there were a lot of rabbits and they were moving en masse, towards them. There must have been hundreds.
By the time they reached the top of the hill, they were surrounded. Suddenly Dylan and Trance disappeared.
Tyr and Beka ran over to where they had been, followed closely by Rommie. Then all three of them, disappeared. Harper was the only one left cos they had left Rev back on the andromeda. He glanced at the quickly approaching rabbits then turned and jumped into the hole the others had disappeared into.
Where did they go, what's going to happen next? We're hoping for a guest appearance by Bob next chapter but that depends on how his custody case goes. Just a note on the statue-ist comment. For example, if I refuse to hug trees on my way home from school with my friend, she calls me a tree hugger-ist. When she doesn't hug every single tree on our way home I call her a tree-ist cos she's leaving some of them out. You can use the -ist for almost anything (doorist, potato-ist, machine-ist).