Alright. Well, 4 reviews. I'm gonna say not bad, and since I'm a newb, I
don't know if 4 is good, or bad for one day. So anyway I liked them, and
I'm gonna answer questions.
Vsd2oc said -This so cool, and interesting and MOIST.
I say – What the hell does moist mean? Heh jk. But really, no offence but wth does it mean? Thx for the review.
vsd2oc said-Hercule is great, Hercule is powerful... that shit was funny. I'm loving where this story is going. Gohan a cute school guy is going to ignore all them cute school chicks and Go with the outcast 'Videl'. This should be fun.
Anyhoos -- great story. update soon.
I say – Yeah… I know… I'm pretty damn funny. Thx for reviewing. Btw, I like the way you reviewed twice. Made it look like I got more than I should have.
Jennie says -HOw come you don't accept anonymous reviews? Anyway, good start. I like Goten's "But I thougt I was your Sweety". Cute. And, basically everything. It's a really good start, and different from most. Please continue.
I say – Yeah it is pretty different. I got tired of those sappy love stories. Just to tell you, later on in the story, it's going to get very dark.(I'll try. Any objections, review me, because it's hard to write dark) The rating will be changed to R. Here's a preview of something going to happen : "Oh shit Goten what's wrong?!?!" Yelled Gohan. "I'm sorry Brother!" And Goten was crying so hard. "No don't be sorry. We have to get you to the hospital!" (Later on) "He has cancer. He's going to die." – Oh yah, I don't accept anonymous reviews because I like to know who's liking my story, or who isn't. Thx for reviewing.
1.1 AnimeAngelVidel
-I'm not gonna copy your message, but I will right more. Thx for the review. (Don't you just love good reviews?
Okay, since (**A/N*..*) is too hard to write, I'm changing it to (A/N-…)
Disclaimer : I don't own Dragonballz. Yet…. HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAH………..*cough*
A Loner and A SuperHero
Chapter3:
RING! BRING! DING! (A/N-I don't know what a telephone sounds like) FLING! (Ah whatever……)
"Hello?" (A/N-Or moshi moshi, but you'll have to imagine it.) Said Videl as she answered.
-*Hey baby…..*-
"Get lost Sharpener!!!"
-*Hah hah! I was just kidding! This is Gohan.*-
'Shit, Gohan, that's not nice!"
-*Hah hah! Sorry! So what's up?*- Asked Gohan.
"Well, first you walked me home, and 10 minutes later you call. What else could be up? You know, I think you're becoming obsessive."
-*Well I was actually wondering if you wanna – Oh – Get away mom!! – hey – what - *-
-*Hi is this my little Gohan's girlfriend*-
"What?!"
-*Listen, Hun, you don't have to be shy. When I met my Goku, I wasn't shy. I just let him throw me down and – (A/N-Sorry, ZippyDragon*43, but I had to use it.)*- -*MOM!!! GO AWAY!!!*- -*LISTEN MISTER!!! DON'T RAISE YOUR VOICE AT ME!!! I CAN HAVE YOU THROWN OUT OF THIS HOUSE SO FAST – *- -*Okay, okay. Geez….*- -*Don't swear!*- And she stomped off.
"Swear?" Videl wondered through the phone.
-*I dunno. So I was wondering if you'd want to - *- -*HEY GOHAN!!!!!!! TRUNKS TAUGHT ME HOW TO YELL REALLY LOUD!!!!!*- -*Doesn't this family ever knock? Go away squirt or I'll tell Mom about that magazine in your bedroom with all the girls….*- -*YOU WOULD NEVER DO THAT!!!*- He ran away crying.
"Who's Goten?"
-*Oh that's my little nightmare, I mean brother. Don't get me wrong I really love him, but sometimes him and his friend Trunks get into a little, did I say a little? I meant A LOT of mischief.*-
"So what did you want to ask me?"
-*I was wondering if you – *- -*Hey Bro!!!*- -*Oh my god not Krillin….*- -*Hey where are you, bro? I brought the whole gang over! Hey everybody! He's in his room on the phone! Who's that, your girlfriend…….?*- And as everybody stared waiting for him answer, a sweatdrop formed at the back of his head.
"Psst.. Just say yes. It will get them off your back" Said a little voice in his ear.
-*YES SHE IS AND WE'RE GOING TO GET MARRIED AND HAVE LOTS OF CHILDREN!!!*- He said a little too loudly and enthusiastically.
-*Grandchildren!!! Yes!!!!*- Yelled Chi-Chi. Everybody was satisfied that they made him crack, so they left.
"So when do you want to have our grandchildren?"
-*Well how about – WHAT?!?*-
"WHAT DO YOU MEAN, "How about??!!"
-*I, uh… well….Got to go!*- He hung up.
-=-=-=-=-=-
I thought about putting some events in, but I figured Chi-Chi and Goten didn't have enough character yet. I also wanted to get some Krillin action in there.
Next Episode:
I should stop putting this in here, because I never know what's going to happen next.
-AoU
Vsd2oc said -This so cool, and interesting and MOIST.
I say – What the hell does moist mean? Heh jk. But really, no offence but wth does it mean? Thx for the review.
vsd2oc said-Hercule is great, Hercule is powerful... that shit was funny. I'm loving where this story is going. Gohan a cute school guy is going to ignore all them cute school chicks and Go with the outcast 'Videl'. This should be fun.
Anyhoos -- great story. update soon.
I say – Yeah… I know… I'm pretty damn funny. Thx for reviewing. Btw, I like the way you reviewed twice. Made it look like I got more than I should have.
Jennie says -HOw come you don't accept anonymous reviews? Anyway, good start. I like Goten's "But I thougt I was your Sweety". Cute. And, basically everything. It's a really good start, and different from most. Please continue.
I say – Yeah it is pretty different. I got tired of those sappy love stories. Just to tell you, later on in the story, it's going to get very dark.(I'll try. Any objections, review me, because it's hard to write dark) The rating will be changed to R. Here's a preview of something going to happen : "Oh shit Goten what's wrong?!?!" Yelled Gohan. "I'm sorry Brother!" And Goten was crying so hard. "No don't be sorry. We have to get you to the hospital!" (Later on) "He has cancer. He's going to die." – Oh yah, I don't accept anonymous reviews because I like to know who's liking my story, or who isn't. Thx for reviewing.
1.1 AnimeAngelVidel
-I'm not gonna copy your message, but I will right more. Thx for the review. (Don't you just love good reviews?
Okay, since (**A/N*..*) is too hard to write, I'm changing it to (A/N-…)
Disclaimer : I don't own Dragonballz. Yet…. HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAH………..*cough*
A Loner and A SuperHero
Chapter3:
RING! BRING! DING! (A/N-I don't know what a telephone sounds like) FLING! (Ah whatever……)
"Hello?" (A/N-Or moshi moshi, but you'll have to imagine it.) Said Videl as she answered.
-*Hey baby…..*-
"Get lost Sharpener!!!"
-*Hah hah! I was just kidding! This is Gohan.*-
'Shit, Gohan, that's not nice!"
-*Hah hah! Sorry! So what's up?*- Asked Gohan.
"Well, first you walked me home, and 10 minutes later you call. What else could be up? You know, I think you're becoming obsessive."
-*Well I was actually wondering if you wanna – Oh – Get away mom!! – hey – what - *-
-*Hi is this my little Gohan's girlfriend*-
"What?!"
-*Listen, Hun, you don't have to be shy. When I met my Goku, I wasn't shy. I just let him throw me down and – (A/N-Sorry, ZippyDragon*43, but I had to use it.)*- -*MOM!!! GO AWAY!!!*- -*LISTEN MISTER!!! DON'T RAISE YOUR VOICE AT ME!!! I CAN HAVE YOU THROWN OUT OF THIS HOUSE SO FAST – *- -*Okay, okay. Geez….*- -*Don't swear!*- And she stomped off.
"Swear?" Videl wondered through the phone.
-*I dunno. So I was wondering if you'd want to - *- -*HEY GOHAN!!!!!!! TRUNKS TAUGHT ME HOW TO YELL REALLY LOUD!!!!!*- -*Doesn't this family ever knock? Go away squirt or I'll tell Mom about that magazine in your bedroom with all the girls….*- -*YOU WOULD NEVER DO THAT!!!*- He ran away crying.
"Who's Goten?"
-*Oh that's my little nightmare, I mean brother. Don't get me wrong I really love him, but sometimes him and his friend Trunks get into a little, did I say a little? I meant A LOT of mischief.*-
"So what did you want to ask me?"
-*I was wondering if you – *- -*Hey Bro!!!*- -*Oh my god not Krillin….*- -*Hey where are you, bro? I brought the whole gang over! Hey everybody! He's in his room on the phone! Who's that, your girlfriend…….?*- And as everybody stared waiting for him answer, a sweatdrop formed at the back of his head.
"Psst.. Just say yes. It will get them off your back" Said a little voice in his ear.
-*YES SHE IS AND WE'RE GOING TO GET MARRIED AND HAVE LOTS OF CHILDREN!!!*- He said a little too loudly and enthusiastically.
-*Grandchildren!!! Yes!!!!*- Yelled Chi-Chi. Everybody was satisfied that they made him crack, so they left.
"So when do you want to have our grandchildren?"
-*Well how about – WHAT?!?*-
"WHAT DO YOU MEAN, "How about??!!"
-*I, uh… well….Got to go!*- He hung up.
-=-=-=-=-=-
I thought about putting some events in, but I figured Chi-Chi and Goten didn't have enough character yet. I also wanted to get some Krillin action in there.
Next Episode:
I should stop putting this in here, because I never know what's going to happen next.
-AoU