I'm sorry, but this wont be a chapter. This is to clarified something. THE CHARACTERS WILL BE OOC. That means out of character.
MARSH ANGEL: The first you say is that you're not trying to flame me. Yea sure. You must not know a flame if it did hit you in the face. That be funny if we could see. [Snickers to myself]. Well I did read 'When dawn comes.' It's a really good story. So you got one thing right. So far.
But I would like to apologize to the owner of the story. If I did copy a little of your story. I am truly sorry. Out of my whole group [And we are all sailor moon fans] I was the only person to read your story. Not to put you down. I think it is really good. But I was never good at beginning stories, so I got Starchick to help me. She never read your story. All I did was type what she said. But if you want to report me for copying. Do it. I have lots of facts concluding that I didn't mean to copy your work.
Ok back on Marsh angel. Why are you going to tell someone that their work is very weak I know my grammar is bad? Princess Pepper told me. But you had to try and put me down. tsk tsk tsk. No one is perfect. Especially if it was their first time writing a story. With no help from other authors. But if you put ' Battle of the bands' and ' Promise of the white rose' together. It would make two. I said that just In case you couldn't count. So lay off on me. For not being perfect on my second time. Similarities. Who cares? I already apologize for that. So why did you have to put ' it has similarities to when dawn comes.' Don't know. And don't care.
What is ' Choppy' and ' Rushed.' I mean I don't always remember definitions. I never do. But could some one that reads this please tell me. All the people I showed it to, didn't even know. Lacking of description and development. GOSH. Are you pointing everything out? You must be one of those people that is ' must be perfect. Got to have everything perfect,' [No offense to the other people who is organize. I am and I like it like that.] Could you clarify more on what doesn't make sense? So I don't do it twice.
I put at the end of the chapter saying Serena is seventeen. Andrew said ' All you have to do is finish one more year of high school.' There are two prime examples of telling her age. I'm a fourteen-year-old girl, which is turning fifteen. Would you expect me to know how many drinks it would take someone to pass out? Or maybe I should walk up to someone that was a drunker and ask ' How many drinks would it take to get someone hyper and to do something idiotic.' GOSH you think I'm that stupid. How dumb do you think I am? (Starchick: That Dumb.) [Scares Starchick off with a evil glare.]
I didn't say I was going to keep them in character. Serena is sailor moon. Andrew runs the arcade. The girls are the scouts. ect ect ect. I put in there something like ' I've never drank alcohol before. But I'll try it.'' That was something similar to what Serena said. I couldn't clarify it correctly because Star chick has the disk, with our information on it. And Serena is so different in the manga than the series. So it depends on what information your looking at. Serena could do what every she wants.
I'm not even going to bother on the ' the rule on good story.' I could switch the p.o.v if I want to. Creativity and flexibility, people could want to keep it simple. Like me. My family, [well most of them] like to go on the computer, and I must live my life, especially in the summer. [We are in summer break now]. I'm still learning the dialogue, so I read other stories and try to understand it myself. Trying to do it myself. So thank you for you concern [=cough=cough=] But keep your information to yourself. If you don't like the story. Don't read it. Thank you.
CRYSTAL ROSE: I know what you meant by how it looked like I was copying other people's work. I wouldn't even think about it. In a story we are doing. [We might not want to put it out because we have so many things to work on] We needed to get permission to use a part of someone else's story, so I IM her and asked her. I will give her credit by saying 'thank you' and telling every one it was hers. Well we will change it a little to suit our story. Well I'm not understanding what you meant by the description is bad. Could you please clarify it to me? I guess I will have to edit it more than I do and see what I think I'm doing wrong. But thank you for saying if I would change this stuff it would be good. Thank you.
And if any one would like to be a editor over the Internet. Please e-mail me or Star chick at
Silverstarchick6 = AOL
Starchick4ever = hotmail
I will have the next chapter out and readable. Soon. Thank you. JA NE
