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"Were could they be." Niko fretted pacing in the main room of their cottage. The dishes were clean and the kids sat talking about there trips. They had only been back together for nearly a week. "Niko calm down its not like the girls ran away." Lark said staring outside into the dark night. Torches lit up the walks. "Yes, I agree with Lark the children would not run away, they have no were to go and from what were telling them, they are from a distant world." Frostpine said running his hand threw his long gray hair. "Your right but then why do I feel so worried," he said stopping his pacing in front of the door. "Well don't worry anymore here they are." Rose said as Niko turned to face the door it whipped open in his face hitting him in the head. He stumbled back as the three girls stood there horrified. "Opps." Cooper said childishly covering her mouth as Niko mumbled in foreign tongues rubbing his forehead. Annie let out a snort of held back laughter Kate to. Cooper tried to hide it when the teachers burst out laughing followed by the rest of the kids. "Don't stand so close next time." Rose Thorn said just shrugging as she laughed at Niko. "Well I don't find it funny!" he snapped at them. "lovely and all but um can we ask a question?" Annie asked said to the adults as she cleaned her glasses. "Sure ask away." Rose said sitting down. And Annie began to ask away.
Meanwhile on the flattest part of the roof four friends sat talking
"So what do you think about those new girls." Tris said looking out onto into the stars. Daja looked over to her friend who had disrupted the silence. "Odd, very odd. In all my traveling I've never seen girls like them." She said with a heavy sigh. "Or heard of earth, or the US. Maybe they were hit in the head by something." "Ya and happen to fall out of are magic by accident." Sandry asked Daja and Tris. "I don't know but there has to be a logical explanation, there always is" Tris said. "I agree, things like this don't happen everyday three has to be something telling us what's going on." Daja sighed rolling over to look at the stars. "Screw logic." A guys voice said from the window. They tilted their heads back to see Briar walking down the slop of the thatched roof to his friends. They smiled "Hey Briar." They said in unison and then went back to looking at the stars. "Ok so let me get this straight" he said sitting down above them to ponder. "We have three girls are age sitting in our rooms downstairs." He spoke as if he were sizing things up. "They were obviously pulled out from some place to get here, they have odd cloths and speech, and seem friendly enough except the short haired one." He said grumbling about Cooper. "Ya and" Tris said. Briar smacked himself in the side of the head in annoyance. There not getting it, he thought as though he was going to scream, what do I have to do to make them understand! "So get your ass down there and talk to them. There's nothing like this in your fucking books and if you don't then I will, and when I have more friends I can complain about you to, then don't come running and crying to me saying 'briar briar we miss you, please come to town with us.'" he practically yelled at them. They all stared at briar now. He was never like this. Why now. "Someone's cranky." Tris said as she rolled over onto her stomach looking up at them "if we go and try to be nice will you leave this be." Daja yawned as if bored. "Yes." He said folding his arms. "Fine then lets get this over with so I can go to bed." Tris said getting up and headed inside followed by Daja and Sandry who was unusually quiet. Briar followed behind them smiling. "I think you like the short haired one." Sandry spoke up finally as they went into the hall. "I do not." Briar gasped "Do so, why mention only her and she seems your type cranky and streetwise." She grinned matchmaker played over here eyes.
"NO, no way. I am not one of the courts little children that the mothers love to match up to other girls, nope, never, don't thing of it." He went on and on. "if you don't care so much then why go on." She giggled flicking him in the nose and ran off to catch up to her sisters leaving briar behind to catch up.
Downstairs
"So let me get this straight," Niko said pacing the floor of the living room. "If he doesn't stop that he's gonna carve a trench there soon." Kate whispered to Annie and Cooper. When the teachers students came bumbling down the stairs the girls first the boy trying to run up and catch them "Either that or light it on fire from the friction, like a match." Cooper added. She and the girls giggled at that causing Niko to stop and look in their directions there heads whipped up to the corners of the room the ceiling or the window. He sighed rubbing his temples. "What you want to do it some form of ritual, to try and ask why you're here, and when or how you can go home." He said dropping his hands to his sides and looking at them. "Precisely." Cooper nodded. "But in more detail" Annie added folding her hands in her lap. She was always the one to be specific. "And it's a bit more complicated then what you're saying." Kate added in. he arched his eyebrows at that. "What." All three girls said innocently "We never asked for your help only if we can get the stuff we need." Cooper continued defensively. "The gods aren't there as puppets to please your little whims." Rosethorn snapped at them." It is foolish, why bother, it was like asking the king to supervise your harvest because your sick, its not going to work." She said folding arms. "Why not." Daja said they looked to the others kids who were bringing chairs from the table to sit down. "Why not you want me to start listing." Niko said. "Well why not give it a go," Tris said biting her lip. "Ya we ow them that after pulling them from there world, what harm can it cause." "Ya if the gods are there to help us then they should be able to tell us something about why we were dragged to this place." "That doesn't even have a fast food join." Cooper added. Her friends nodded. "Fine you can do it on one condition." He sighed leaning back. "What's that." Kate said excitedly. "We want to watch, you must do it away from here in the fields, and our students get to take part." Frostpine spoke up. "What." Cooper said angered. Annie looked to her "What other choice do we have." "Fine but we should make sure they just watch and concentrate nothing else." Cooper said "Agreed." Kate said looking over to them and smiled. She would try and be friendly. "so you in." "We don't have much of a choice do we." Tris shrugged. "We might as well try it." "Sure were 'in' as you call it." Sandry said looking at them oddly. "Though we also have one condition." She said "Why do I suddenly fear this." Cooper said shaking her head and looked up then to them. The girls giggled at Cooper playing miss drama queen. "Name it." She declared finally. "You get some well more appropriate clothing you all look like Tarts." She declared "Why I outa." Cooper said moving to get up when four hands grabbed her pulling her down. Annie covered coopers mouth as Kate tried to hold her flailing hands down. They both grinned.
"Deal." They said in unison.
So what you think huh. I know a bit boring. Wait till the ritual whoawhahaha I already got it written and all that. I really want to see what you think. If you love me enough ill give you another chapter JUST CLICK RIGHT HERE FOLLOW THER ARROW Ow | the next chapters gonna be a bit longer due to the ritual | the girls are gonna be having. Stay tuned. That chapter will be | loaded this Friday kk. bye \_/
"Were could they be." Niko fretted pacing in the main room of their cottage. The dishes were clean and the kids sat talking about there trips. They had only been back together for nearly a week. "Niko calm down its not like the girls ran away." Lark said staring outside into the dark night. Torches lit up the walks. "Yes, I agree with Lark the children would not run away, they have no were to go and from what were telling them, they are from a distant world." Frostpine said running his hand threw his long gray hair. "Your right but then why do I feel so worried," he said stopping his pacing in front of the door. "Well don't worry anymore here they are." Rose said as Niko turned to face the door it whipped open in his face hitting him in the head. He stumbled back as the three girls stood there horrified. "Opps." Cooper said childishly covering her mouth as Niko mumbled in foreign tongues rubbing his forehead. Annie let out a snort of held back laughter Kate to. Cooper tried to hide it when the teachers burst out laughing followed by the rest of the kids. "Don't stand so close next time." Rose Thorn said just shrugging as she laughed at Niko. "Well I don't find it funny!" he snapped at them. "lovely and all but um can we ask a question?" Annie asked said to the adults as she cleaned her glasses. "Sure ask away." Rose said sitting down. And Annie began to ask away.
Meanwhile on the flattest part of the roof four friends sat talking
"So what do you think about those new girls." Tris said looking out onto into the stars. Daja looked over to her friend who had disrupted the silence. "Odd, very odd. In all my traveling I've never seen girls like them." She said with a heavy sigh. "Or heard of earth, or the US. Maybe they were hit in the head by something." "Ya and happen to fall out of are magic by accident." Sandry asked Daja and Tris. "I don't know but there has to be a logical explanation, there always is" Tris said. "I agree, things like this don't happen everyday three has to be something telling us what's going on." Daja sighed rolling over to look at the stars. "Screw logic." A guys voice said from the window. They tilted their heads back to see Briar walking down the slop of the thatched roof to his friends. They smiled "Hey Briar." They said in unison and then went back to looking at the stars. "Ok so let me get this straight" he said sitting down above them to ponder. "We have three girls are age sitting in our rooms downstairs." He spoke as if he were sizing things up. "They were obviously pulled out from some place to get here, they have odd cloths and speech, and seem friendly enough except the short haired one." He said grumbling about Cooper. "Ya and" Tris said. Briar smacked himself in the side of the head in annoyance. There not getting it, he thought as though he was going to scream, what do I have to do to make them understand! "So get your ass down there and talk to them. There's nothing like this in your fucking books and if you don't then I will, and when I have more friends I can complain about you to, then don't come running and crying to me saying 'briar briar we miss you, please come to town with us.'" he practically yelled at them. They all stared at briar now. He was never like this. Why now. "Someone's cranky." Tris said as she rolled over onto her stomach looking up at them "if we go and try to be nice will you leave this be." Daja yawned as if bored. "Yes." He said folding his arms. "Fine then lets get this over with so I can go to bed." Tris said getting up and headed inside followed by Daja and Sandry who was unusually quiet. Briar followed behind them smiling. "I think you like the short haired one." Sandry spoke up finally as they went into the hall. "I do not." Briar gasped "Do so, why mention only her and she seems your type cranky and streetwise." She grinned matchmaker played over here eyes.
"NO, no way. I am not one of the courts little children that the mothers love to match up to other girls, nope, never, don't thing of it." He went on and on. "if you don't care so much then why go on." She giggled flicking him in the nose and ran off to catch up to her sisters leaving briar behind to catch up.
Downstairs
"So let me get this straight," Niko said pacing the floor of the living room. "If he doesn't stop that he's gonna carve a trench there soon." Kate whispered to Annie and Cooper. When the teachers students came bumbling down the stairs the girls first the boy trying to run up and catch them "Either that or light it on fire from the friction, like a match." Cooper added. She and the girls giggled at that causing Niko to stop and look in their directions there heads whipped up to the corners of the room the ceiling or the window. He sighed rubbing his temples. "What you want to do it some form of ritual, to try and ask why you're here, and when or how you can go home." He said dropping his hands to his sides and looking at them. "Precisely." Cooper nodded. "But in more detail" Annie added folding her hands in her lap. She was always the one to be specific. "And it's a bit more complicated then what you're saying." Kate added in. he arched his eyebrows at that. "What." All three girls said innocently "We never asked for your help only if we can get the stuff we need." Cooper continued defensively. "The gods aren't there as puppets to please your little whims." Rosethorn snapped at them." It is foolish, why bother, it was like asking the king to supervise your harvest because your sick, its not going to work." She said folding arms. "Why not." Daja said they looked to the others kids who were bringing chairs from the table to sit down. "Why not you want me to start listing." Niko said. "Well why not give it a go," Tris said biting her lip. "Ya we ow them that after pulling them from there world, what harm can it cause." "Ya if the gods are there to help us then they should be able to tell us something about why we were dragged to this place." "That doesn't even have a fast food join." Cooper added. Her friends nodded. "Fine you can do it on one condition." He sighed leaning back. "What's that." Kate said excitedly. "We want to watch, you must do it away from here in the fields, and our students get to take part." Frostpine spoke up. "What." Cooper said angered. Annie looked to her "What other choice do we have." "Fine but we should make sure they just watch and concentrate nothing else." Cooper said "Agreed." Kate said looking over to them and smiled. She would try and be friendly. "so you in." "We don't have much of a choice do we." Tris shrugged. "We might as well try it." "Sure were 'in' as you call it." Sandry said looking at them oddly. "Though we also have one condition." She said "Why do I suddenly fear this." Cooper said shaking her head and looked up then to them. The girls giggled at Cooper playing miss drama queen. "Name it." She declared finally. "You get some well more appropriate clothing you all look like Tarts." She declared "Why I outa." Cooper said moving to get up when four hands grabbed her pulling her down. Annie covered coopers mouth as Kate tried to hold her flailing hands down. They both grinned.
"Deal." They said in unison.
So what you think huh. I know a bit boring. Wait till the ritual whoawhahaha I already got it written and all that. I really want to see what you think. If you love me enough ill give you another chapter JUST CLICK RIGHT HERE FOLLOW THER ARROW Ow | the next chapters gonna be a bit longer due to the ritual | the girls are gonna be having. Stay tuned. That chapter will be | loaded this Friday kk. bye \_/