Anyway for the next few days I'll try to get daily updates (starting Wednesday) I've got a two week break from uni so I can use that to my advantage.
Review thanks
Z thanks its good to see another aussie too, the fight detail is something I'm going to be working on with lynx (who I've previously mentioned) he has a habit of killing everyone off in his fics but otherwise ( I think) can write a good fight scene. ohh he's also an aussie and thanks again for telling me how good this fic is (my ego needs stroking as much as anyone else's )mind you your fics aren't bad either. ohh and on the subjects of aussie's I know there's at least one parody fic of cheese tv out there too so it's good to know that people understand what we have to put up with to get our daily dose of DBZ.
Tm no i'm not british but bear in mind that aussie's do (or at least use'd to) use british phrases ie breakfast,dinner,tea more than american breakfast,lunch,dinner. When i'm writing I tend to use a more formal style than what i'd otherwise use. And as for Dende making the saiyan-jins pink well Vegeta's already had that pink shirt Bulma forced him to wear, other fics have had him get pink hair and I'm not trying to outright copy anyone else so I wonder if I could dye his spandex pink hmmmmmm?
Zombat14 about the gaps if you mean the one at the end that's word's fault and what you have to put up with if I post at uni (if I'm posting for home I use lotus smartsuite) if you mean the gaps between paragraphs there's not much I can do unless you want me to compress the rest of the paragraph and only have a one line gap and that's hard on the eyes. I managed to have a quick look at your fics but not really enough to form an opinion about them I'll get back to them eventually.
Adbzfan2k03 good to see you again and yes I want to write about the saiyan-jins on earth too Unfortunately I'm not good at long chapters or fast story movement (I'm working on this) So they won't be here this chapter but should (hopefully) get to earth in the next and not just in time for a cliffy.
Lynz I don't know why i'm going one for you but oh well I think I'll let you do the fight scenes happy now.
Disclaimer : as lynx hasn't been around for a bit I'm starting to feel a bit safer but the knowledge that entails means that I don't know what he is up to, which knowing lynx could be scary, however until I know what he's up to I don't own dbz.
Repentance Chapter 11 :A Night at the Son's
As Gohan left to find taz aka Goten, Chichi dragged Videl into the kitchen so she could teach her future daughter-in-law the finer arts of cooking for a saiyan-jin , though Chichi had an ulterior motive she didn't want to be cooking for 3 saiyan-jins forever and with four (that she knew about) staying for tea tonight she needed some help to get the meal ready. That left (drum fanfare) Goku and Vegeta alone in the lounge.
"So Kakkarot how do you feel now given that our race has been wished back?" Vegeta enquired.
"I really don't know Vegeta, the only experiences I've ever had with our race have initially all been bad ones even you wanted to destroy those that stood against you when you first came to earth, what's going to make the rest any different from what you were?" Goku wondered standing and starting to pace the room pensively.
"Hmm the real Goku the one that doesn't always have to pretend he's a clueless idiot. You do make a good point though Kakkarot, Radditz, Nappa and I didn't exactly come here looking to make a good first impression but with frieza gone I'm willing to bet that the saiyan-jin are looking to make up for their past mistakes throughout the galaxy, not just here on earth, 38 years in hfil tends to change a race's perspective on their actions in the past. Hfil is not a nice place all your wrongs are thrown at you with no sugar coating, there's no comforting lies in hfil, there you really see the truth in what you've done." Vegeta told Goku with more respect than was his usual.
"So you think that they'll be actually looking to make amends then Vegeta, I thought you said that our race was one of bloodthirsty warriors?" Goku asked Vegeta still pacing the room but not quite as pensively.
"Warriors certainly, thirsting for battle, you yourself know the thrill you get from a challenging opponent Kakkarot, but thirsty for the blood of our victims no we weren't always that way, that was what Frieza did to us Kakkarot, that was how he cursed our race thoughout space. Before we came into contact with him and were forced to make alliance to save ourselves we as a race were similar to how you conduct yourself. Not as naive certainly we were a serious people, and though generally we may have had more battle lust than you that was just the way we were brought up. Like you we would kill in a fight only if there was no other alternative we actually preferred to spare our opponents for two good reasons one that way if we were facing a losing battle we would not be ruthlessly slaughtered if we had a record of sparing others we defeated and two the ones who were defeated would train harder so that next time they might beat us which then gave us a reason to keep on our toes and improve because our pride wouldn't let us slack of. So actually Goku we were similar to what you try to be, so put yourself in their shoes, you've just been wished back to life and find that the chief enemy of your people is dead and now your trying to reorganise everything back to the way it was. That will be another reason they want to come here, to see how you have managed to do that and retain the pride that gives us our purpose" Vegeta answered pride evident in his words as he recounted some of the traditions of the Saiyan-jin warriors.
"So what you're telling me is that the saiyan-jins were basically just a serious version of me before Frieza got to them and are now trying to get back to that way of life" Goku summarised.
"Exactly the only major difference between what we were and what you are is that we didn't run our fingers through our hair every time some one asked us a difficult question." Vegeta said grinning.
"Okay I'm back is tea ready yet" Gohan announced as he walked in dragging a disheveled Goten who was holding an extremely confused looking pink Kiwi bird.
"Hahahahahahaha" Vegeta took one look at the scene and bust into laughter.
"Gohan what did Goten do to that poor bird, it can't figure out what's going on." Asked Goku.
"Pink Kiwi bird Bwhahahahaaa" Vegeta clutched at his stomach as he started rolling on the floor.
"What up with Mr Vegeta daddy, its only pink" Goten wondered not appreciating the full significance of that colour to Vegeta.
"Well Vegeta has had to many bad experiences with pink, I think he's liking the fact that something else is getting the treatment that fanfic authors normally dole out on him" Goku explained to his youngest son.
"Ohh daddy what a fanfic author" Goten asked.
"I'll tell you when you're older son" Goku answered
"Foods ready everyone" Chichi yelled before standing behind the connecting doorway to avoid the normal wild stampede.
Gohan and Goku stood and headed toward the table, Vegeta still clutching at his stomach managed to stagger toward the table and Goten brought up the rear gingerly holding a very confused and pink looking kiwi bird.
"Right well this isn't normal" Chichi observed as she watched the procession toward the table.
Tea after the unusual start turned into the usual grab it before Vegeta or dad does affair. Once Videl had to grab the poor kiwi bird to stop it being inhaled by Vegeta he was nonplussed for a moment that someone had attempted to steal his food then realised that it was the kiwi bird that had been saved. Vegeta liked the Kiwi bird he knew what it was going through, he'd had to under go the same torture many times himself, with the Kiwi bird he had an empathetic friend.
"Right Vegeta now that tea's over can you tell us what you meant by 'umm sort of' when I asked about what had caused Bulma and Trunks to be out of it and what are you doing to that poor bird " Chichi demanded of her guest.
"Umm well basically I was just expanding on the ahh relatives that Bulma and Trunks would now have given that they ahh saiyan-jins have been wished back and this kiwi bird is my new friend I know exactly what it's going through" Vegeta managed to stutter out while stroking the kiwi bird's back .
"Riiight" Chichi sarcastically answered. "So what are you doing now"
"Well I was planning to go home and get some rest and then with Videl meet up with Kakkarot and his sons up at the lookout to see what Dende got planed for the welcoming party" Vegeta said.
"Why take Videl this doesn't really concern her" Chichi wondered.
"Gohan's her boyfriend, she deserves to know about his heritage" Vegeta stated managing to keep Videl's heritage a secret for now.
"Okay that's resonable I guess" Chichi consented the point.
"Right then I'll see you in the morning at the lookout Kakkarot" Vegeta said while walking to the door stroking his Kiwi bird.
"Yeah I'll see you then too Gohan" Videl waved to the others as she followed Vegeta and took off in the direction of capsule corps.
Along the way Videl noticed Vegeta was still carefully stroking the kiwi bird in mid flight.
"Vegeta isn't that going a bit far"
"Why if movie villain Dr evil can have Mr bigglesworth can't I have my Kiwi bird" Vegeta said with a smug look on his face.
"Bulma never should have taken you to see austin powers 1&2 (a/n I haven't see 3 yet so I can't include the happenings there) it gives your evilness something to aim for" Videl groaned.
"Why it lets me see where other evil geniuses have gone wrong so that way I can correct there mistakes and be the ultimate evil genius" Vegeta had that far off glazed look in his eyes now.
"Right well as were at capsule corps i'm going to bed see you in the morning" as Videl landed and then found a bedroom "sleep well"
"Now I can go to bed were would you like to sleep kiwi bird"
"Anywhere will be fine thankyou" //translated from varias bird noises//
"Okay here you are sleep well"
"Thankyou" zzz zzz zzz
"Quick sleeper now where's my room"
Okay the rest will be tomorrow and depending on how much I put in the saiyan-jins may or may not appear.
Mind you more reviews may just be the incentive I need to write that little bit extra so until tomorrow R&R.