Here we go, chapter 2. I figured that before I hope to get decent reviews I
should put some action in. So I am not delaying chapter two at all. I'll
probably wait for a few reviews after this though. Tell me what you readers
think!
Chapter 2: Master Swordplay. Gundam Maxter faces the Expert. Ready, GO!!!
Muteki pushed his way through the crowded streets of Neo America. Muteki had now aged ten years. After all that training, he was glad to be granted a vacation. His hair was a dark brown, so were his eyes. He was above average height and he was reasonably built. As he pushed his way through the streets, bumping at least twenty shoulders along the way, he began to wonder why he had chosen a place as populated as Neo America as a vacation spot.
"Hey, you!" called out someone from behind him. Muteki turned slowly and scanned the area with his eyes, unable to find where the voice came from. Suddenly, the crowd cleared out and he instinctively jumped backwards as a man about his age landed inches away from him in a kicking position. Muteki cocked and eyebrow and asked, "Any particular reason for doing that?" The attacker quickly made his point, "Muteki of Neo Gannya, I challenge you to a Gundam fight!"
Muteki chuckled to himself, "And who might you be?" The man paused for a second and closed his eyes and spoke, "I am Chibodee Crockett of Neo America, I just received word that a new gundam fighter had arrived in town and I thought I'd test you." Muteki responded excitedly, "Now you're talking! I'll do anything to get out of these cramped streets!"
He raised his arm in the air and began to call for his gundam when four women came up behind Chibodee shouting, "Stop! STOP!" Muteki stopped and looked at them. "Chibodee, you can't fight yet! The Gundam Maxter is still under maintenance from your last fight. "Well...damn!" he responded with a look of pure embarrassment. He turned again, "Hey, how about you stay at the hotel I'm at for a while? I can get you a week or two for free. As soon as my gundam is repaired, I will fight you," said Chibodee. Muteki only nodded and followed behind Chibodee, the crowd cleared a path as Chibodee walked.
Muteki entered the huge hotel to find himself in an extremely fancy lobby. He suddenly remembered why he chose to visit Neo America. As he took everything in, Chibodee barely made it through the door as he was surrounded by beautiful women. His four partners didn't seem to enjoy this, and they forced him through the crowd and to the elevator. Muteki chuckled to himself and followed them.
Chibodee stopped them and reminded them they had to check Muteki in. They nodded reluctantly and Chibodee made his way through his fan club to the desk. "My friend here needs a place to stay for the week. I trust you have room for him?" said Chibodee winking at the female attendant. She turned beat red and nodded and handed over a key without another word. Muteki couldn't begin to imagine the advantages that gave Chibodee, but he didn't bother anyway because it would just depress him.
Chibodee tossed him the keys, "Here, catch." Muteki caught it and read the number '256'. He got on the elevator with Chibodee and his partners. "As soon as my gundam is repaired I'll tell you. Until then, you might as well just check the city out," Chibodee suggested. "Thanks, I think I'll do that," responded Muteki.
A couple hours later Muteki had unpacked and left the hotel. This late at night, the streets were less crowded as the weak of heart went to bed. He sighed in relief, only to be rudely interrupted by shouts. He turned into a window to see a man break through it, he just barely ducked him as the man fell to the ground tattered. Muteki hopped through the window to see what the commotion was about. A man was raising his hand in the air boasting about that last punch, "I got him real good! There's not a man alive who can handle me!" This guy was conceited, Muteki hated him.
"Hey, buddy. How about you prove that bullshit to me before you celebrate?" Muteki said. The guy looked at him, clearly angry with him. "Who the hell do you think you are?! Fine, if you want a match, you've got one!" he said as he dashed towards him. It happened in an instant. The crowd backed off, Muteki nimbly dodged. Before the cape could catch up with Muteki his foot had connected with the fighter's head and sent him out the window right onto his last victim. He slowly lowered his leg down as his cape fell. "I thought as much," he said in a disgusted tone.
He left out the door; every spectator's jaw had dropped as far as it could go without unhinging. He came upon a bar and heard a familiar laugh inside. He pushed the door open and entered. There was that girl again, she laughed and hugged him tightly. He heard the laugh again and blinked and the girl was gone. "Hey, fancy seeing you here!" called out a hammered Chibodee as he nearly fell off his seat when he tried to turn and face him. "Sit you down, have a drink.*hiccup*Tomorrow we fight!" remarked Chibodee as he lost consciousness and lay face down on the counter. Muteki had to stop himself from bursting into laughter; he lifted the unconscious Chibodee onto his shoulder and brought him back to the girls at the hotel.
"Thank you, Muteki. Good thing you got him. If he drank too much there'd be no way he could face you tomorrow," said Bunny as the three other women dragged Chibodee into the room. He was mumbling something along the lines of 'it's raining women.halle..' Then he'd just start over again. "So...his gundam is repaired?" asked Muteki trying to hold back another laugh. "Yep!" she said smiling. "Well, I better go back to my room, it's already three a.m., I don't want to face Chibodee half asleep," responded Muteki to no one in particular. Bunny nodded and he left.
Muteki slept surprisingly well that night, he was visited by no phantom children and no lingering fog. He awoke at the break of dawn; he was used to only sleeping a few hours, so it suited him just fine. He got up and quickly showered and threw his clothes on. He went down to the lobby to find Chibodee waiting for him, and he was fully conscious. 'He sure rebounds fast," thought Muteki. "Ah, finally I get to see what you're made of," remarked Chibodee.
Muteki and Chibodee stood facing opposite to each other. Each standing in the palm of their gundam. They were both lifted to the cockpits and hopped in. Muteki emerged in the fighting suit and threw a warm-up punches and kicks. Chibodee spoke first, "Alright, are you ready?" "You bet, READY!" said Muteki. "GO!!!!!!" they both said in unison. Muteki drew the humongous blade and dashed forward; Chibodee dashed forward as well and threw a quick jab. Muteki was caught in the jaw and he stumbled back slightly. Chibodee seized the opportunity and threw a flurry of rapid punches. Muteki was being pummeled, an invisible force hammering him everywhere above the waist. He lifted his knee up quickly and Chibodee was caught in the stomach as he advanced.
Muteki quickly nailed him in the jaw and swung the sword, slashing him across the chest. Chibodee shouted and jumped backward, just barely avoiding a deadly vertical slash. "Whoa.you're no push-over," complimented Chibodee. "You're not so bad yourself," was Muteki's modest response. "I still have an ace up my sleeve though," said Chibodee. Chibodee reeled back then thrust his arm forward with all his might, "Hurricane punch!" A tornado rose up and tossed Muteki backwards. A second followed shortly after, and then other. Soon he was being rapidly tossed around by them.
"Damn! I have to find a way to end this fast!" said Muteki through grit teeth as he took another hit. He jumped up and the wind from the tornado tossed him high above the attacks. Chibodee was reeling back to throw another one, and suddenly everything seemed to slow down. Muteki had an idea. Chibodee thrust his hand forward and the chest plate of the Expert Gundam flung open, safely out of range it examined the attack and on a screen to the side of Muteki it showed two boxing gloves and an explanation of the Hurricane Punch.
Muteki grinned, his plan was half finished. He shouted out, "The expert of all fighting techniques! Prepare for the Hurricane Punch!" This caused the system to use the Hurricane Punch data. Bright sparkles appeared in front of the Expert Gundam and it stayed suspended in the air. Soon, they formed into two gundanium alloy boxing gloves. They fitted over the Expert Gundam's fists. He reeled back and let loose an even stronger version of the Hurricane Punch. A large twister erupted in front of him and tossed Chibodee like a rag doll.
Chibodee was just barely getting up when he heard from behind him, "Let's see if you can deal with this! Master Swordplay!" The Expert Gundam's sword was glowing bright. He suddenly spinned and dragged the sword around the chest of the Maxter, he rose up it up then brought it down vertically and repeated this several times. Then he thrust it into the chest of the gundam and pulled back and leapt into the air. "Show me what you've got!" he shouted. His blade knocked the badly damaged Gundam Maxter backwards and shortly after a large burst of enough erupted in all directions and fully trashed the Maxter.
Chibodee got out, wide eyed in shock. "W-What an attack. Before I knew what happened, I was finished!" he shouted. Muteki leapt out from the gundam. He walked towards Chibodee. "You're a very skilled gundam fight, Muteki," said Chibodee. They shook hands and returned to the hotel. Muteki was ready to celebrate his first victory.
So, what did you guys think? Send me any suggestions, complaints or compliments that you like. Of course, take into account this is my first fic. :\
Chapter 2: Master Swordplay. Gundam Maxter faces the Expert. Ready, GO!!!
Muteki pushed his way through the crowded streets of Neo America. Muteki had now aged ten years. After all that training, he was glad to be granted a vacation. His hair was a dark brown, so were his eyes. He was above average height and he was reasonably built. As he pushed his way through the streets, bumping at least twenty shoulders along the way, he began to wonder why he had chosen a place as populated as Neo America as a vacation spot.
"Hey, you!" called out someone from behind him. Muteki turned slowly and scanned the area with his eyes, unable to find where the voice came from. Suddenly, the crowd cleared out and he instinctively jumped backwards as a man about his age landed inches away from him in a kicking position. Muteki cocked and eyebrow and asked, "Any particular reason for doing that?" The attacker quickly made his point, "Muteki of Neo Gannya, I challenge you to a Gundam fight!"
Muteki chuckled to himself, "And who might you be?" The man paused for a second and closed his eyes and spoke, "I am Chibodee Crockett of Neo America, I just received word that a new gundam fighter had arrived in town and I thought I'd test you." Muteki responded excitedly, "Now you're talking! I'll do anything to get out of these cramped streets!"
He raised his arm in the air and began to call for his gundam when four women came up behind Chibodee shouting, "Stop! STOP!" Muteki stopped and looked at them. "Chibodee, you can't fight yet! The Gundam Maxter is still under maintenance from your last fight. "Well...damn!" he responded with a look of pure embarrassment. He turned again, "Hey, how about you stay at the hotel I'm at for a while? I can get you a week or two for free. As soon as my gundam is repaired, I will fight you," said Chibodee. Muteki only nodded and followed behind Chibodee, the crowd cleared a path as Chibodee walked.
Muteki entered the huge hotel to find himself in an extremely fancy lobby. He suddenly remembered why he chose to visit Neo America. As he took everything in, Chibodee barely made it through the door as he was surrounded by beautiful women. His four partners didn't seem to enjoy this, and they forced him through the crowd and to the elevator. Muteki chuckled to himself and followed them.
Chibodee stopped them and reminded them they had to check Muteki in. They nodded reluctantly and Chibodee made his way through his fan club to the desk. "My friend here needs a place to stay for the week. I trust you have room for him?" said Chibodee winking at the female attendant. She turned beat red and nodded and handed over a key without another word. Muteki couldn't begin to imagine the advantages that gave Chibodee, but he didn't bother anyway because it would just depress him.
Chibodee tossed him the keys, "Here, catch." Muteki caught it and read the number '256'. He got on the elevator with Chibodee and his partners. "As soon as my gundam is repaired I'll tell you. Until then, you might as well just check the city out," Chibodee suggested. "Thanks, I think I'll do that," responded Muteki.
A couple hours later Muteki had unpacked and left the hotel. This late at night, the streets were less crowded as the weak of heart went to bed. He sighed in relief, only to be rudely interrupted by shouts. He turned into a window to see a man break through it, he just barely ducked him as the man fell to the ground tattered. Muteki hopped through the window to see what the commotion was about. A man was raising his hand in the air boasting about that last punch, "I got him real good! There's not a man alive who can handle me!" This guy was conceited, Muteki hated him.
"Hey, buddy. How about you prove that bullshit to me before you celebrate?" Muteki said. The guy looked at him, clearly angry with him. "Who the hell do you think you are?! Fine, if you want a match, you've got one!" he said as he dashed towards him. It happened in an instant. The crowd backed off, Muteki nimbly dodged. Before the cape could catch up with Muteki his foot had connected with the fighter's head and sent him out the window right onto his last victim. He slowly lowered his leg down as his cape fell. "I thought as much," he said in a disgusted tone.
He left out the door; every spectator's jaw had dropped as far as it could go without unhinging. He came upon a bar and heard a familiar laugh inside. He pushed the door open and entered. There was that girl again, she laughed and hugged him tightly. He heard the laugh again and blinked and the girl was gone. "Hey, fancy seeing you here!" called out a hammered Chibodee as he nearly fell off his seat when he tried to turn and face him. "Sit you down, have a drink.*hiccup*Tomorrow we fight!" remarked Chibodee as he lost consciousness and lay face down on the counter. Muteki had to stop himself from bursting into laughter; he lifted the unconscious Chibodee onto his shoulder and brought him back to the girls at the hotel.
"Thank you, Muteki. Good thing you got him. If he drank too much there'd be no way he could face you tomorrow," said Bunny as the three other women dragged Chibodee into the room. He was mumbling something along the lines of 'it's raining women.halle..' Then he'd just start over again. "So...his gundam is repaired?" asked Muteki trying to hold back another laugh. "Yep!" she said smiling. "Well, I better go back to my room, it's already three a.m., I don't want to face Chibodee half asleep," responded Muteki to no one in particular. Bunny nodded and he left.
Muteki slept surprisingly well that night, he was visited by no phantom children and no lingering fog. He awoke at the break of dawn; he was used to only sleeping a few hours, so it suited him just fine. He got up and quickly showered and threw his clothes on. He went down to the lobby to find Chibodee waiting for him, and he was fully conscious. 'He sure rebounds fast," thought Muteki. "Ah, finally I get to see what you're made of," remarked Chibodee.
Muteki and Chibodee stood facing opposite to each other. Each standing in the palm of their gundam. They were both lifted to the cockpits and hopped in. Muteki emerged in the fighting suit and threw a warm-up punches and kicks. Chibodee spoke first, "Alright, are you ready?" "You bet, READY!" said Muteki. "GO!!!!!!" they both said in unison. Muteki drew the humongous blade and dashed forward; Chibodee dashed forward as well and threw a quick jab. Muteki was caught in the jaw and he stumbled back slightly. Chibodee seized the opportunity and threw a flurry of rapid punches. Muteki was being pummeled, an invisible force hammering him everywhere above the waist. He lifted his knee up quickly and Chibodee was caught in the stomach as he advanced.
Muteki quickly nailed him in the jaw and swung the sword, slashing him across the chest. Chibodee shouted and jumped backward, just barely avoiding a deadly vertical slash. "Whoa.you're no push-over," complimented Chibodee. "You're not so bad yourself," was Muteki's modest response. "I still have an ace up my sleeve though," said Chibodee. Chibodee reeled back then thrust his arm forward with all his might, "Hurricane punch!" A tornado rose up and tossed Muteki backwards. A second followed shortly after, and then other. Soon he was being rapidly tossed around by them.
"Damn! I have to find a way to end this fast!" said Muteki through grit teeth as he took another hit. He jumped up and the wind from the tornado tossed him high above the attacks. Chibodee was reeling back to throw another one, and suddenly everything seemed to slow down. Muteki had an idea. Chibodee thrust his hand forward and the chest plate of the Expert Gundam flung open, safely out of range it examined the attack and on a screen to the side of Muteki it showed two boxing gloves and an explanation of the Hurricane Punch.
Muteki grinned, his plan was half finished. He shouted out, "The expert of all fighting techniques! Prepare for the Hurricane Punch!" This caused the system to use the Hurricane Punch data. Bright sparkles appeared in front of the Expert Gundam and it stayed suspended in the air. Soon, they formed into two gundanium alloy boxing gloves. They fitted over the Expert Gundam's fists. He reeled back and let loose an even stronger version of the Hurricane Punch. A large twister erupted in front of him and tossed Chibodee like a rag doll.
Chibodee was just barely getting up when he heard from behind him, "Let's see if you can deal with this! Master Swordplay!" The Expert Gundam's sword was glowing bright. He suddenly spinned and dragged the sword around the chest of the Maxter, he rose up it up then brought it down vertically and repeated this several times. Then he thrust it into the chest of the gundam and pulled back and leapt into the air. "Show me what you've got!" he shouted. His blade knocked the badly damaged Gundam Maxter backwards and shortly after a large burst of enough erupted in all directions and fully trashed the Maxter.
Chibodee got out, wide eyed in shock. "W-What an attack. Before I knew what happened, I was finished!" he shouted. Muteki leapt out from the gundam. He walked towards Chibodee. "You're a very skilled gundam fight, Muteki," said Chibodee. They shook hands and returned to the hotel. Muteki was ready to celebrate his first victory.
So, what did you guys think? Send me any suggestions, complaints or compliments that you like. Of course, take into account this is my first fic. :\