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First, I want to say that I've put a great deal of time into this project and that I am very proud of the results.
Having said that, I realise that my skill as a writer is like a muscle untrained. I need to practice, build up my workmanship.
To do that, I need critisism. Both honest and constructive.
Perhaps I failed to introduce a character properly, or maybe the dialogue seemed a bit forced. Not to mention any potential
spelling and grammatical errors I may have missed.
This is where you come in.
Sure, this sounds like the makings of a great story, but if you see something that can be improved, I would hope you won't
shy away from showing me.
Now, as to the story, this takes place in a world much like our own, save for a few differences. For one, underneath the
veneer lies a darker, less pleasant reality of corruption and greed. Yes, our own world is like that, but here, it is even
more so. And then there is the supernatural. The werewolves mages, and vampires that share the world along with a host
of other mystical creatures.
This story also is a reflection of events that take place in New Bremen, a city in the middle of Georgia. New Bremen is
the focus of the chat found at the web site http://www.white-wolf.com visited by hundreds of role-players every day.
So, feel free to enjoy as I weave a tale that will enrichen your understanding of the World of Darkness.
Feel free to comment, as well.
Jason Davis