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Chapter 6
Draco, hurrying through the corridors of Hogwarts, was confronted by Dawn. "Why are you back already?" Dawn asked admonishingly. "She wasn't changing again, was she? Because that should be the only reason why you aren't up there, trying to befriend her." Dawn said in a steely voice. "Well, was she dressing?" This accompanied by a poke in Draco's chest.
"No," Draco began, about to explain how he saw Weasley was crying and thought that this wasn't a good time to be trying to befriend her. But inexplicably and suddenly, his mouth clicked shut; apparently his mouth decided that explaining would violate Weasley privacy, and what his mouth decided, Draco had to follow.
"Well?"
Draco started. He had forgotten that Dawn still needed an explanation. `uh oh, she's tapping her foot', Draco thought with trepidation. "Actually," Draco began again, hanging his head in what he hoped passed for an ashamed manner. "I didn't even go to Wea- Ginny's dorm room. I just stopped by the bathroom."
"Why?"
Draco plunged into a plausible story. "You know how much she dislikes me. Without you there, she probably would throw me right out no matter how open-minded you say she is. So I didn't want to waste her, yours, and my time," Draco finished, secretly proud at how quickly he came up with such a believable lie.
"Oh," Dawn said doubtfully, knitting her eyebrows in thought. Then her face brightened. "That's okay! I'll just go with you and remind her how she agreed to give you a chance and I'll stay there in case she throws you out or something. It's not like I have anything else to do."
"NO!!!"
Dawn looked at him askance.
"Uh, what I meant to say was, I'm sure you have something else to do; like, don't you need to go eat or something? In fact, I'm starved, we could both go to eat," Draco said as he began to usher Dawn into the Great Hall.
"Draco, I'm sure all you're doing is looking out for your little sister, but the fact of the matter is that I had a little snack just a little while ago. And, due to my recent illness, I have a very small appetite. So thanks, but no thanks." Dawn grinned at him, "Now, come on!"
"B-but..."
"No buts! I said we're going, so we're going!" Dawn said, catching hold of his hand and dragging him a little way.
Noticing the looks he was getting, Draco stopped in his tracks- or, at least, tried to. Finally, despairing, he said desperately, "Ok, Ok! I'll go to Wea- I mean Ginny's room; you don't have to drag me to it!"
"Are you sure?"
"Yes! I swear!"
"Well, ok then. Follow me."
Making sure that Dawn was wholly intent on her evil plans, Draco whispered, "duplicatas," He took one step forward, and there was still a Draco behind him. Draco grinned. Whispering instructions to his magically induced twin, Draco hurried to get away from his half-sister. He was almost into the boys bathroom when he was intercepted by... Dawn! But, looking backward, Draco saw Dawn still leading his duplicate. Draco groaned inwardly. 'I have taught her too well'. And with a smug smirk on her face, Dawn caught hold of him and, since the illusion of the two duplicates was shattered, they too, shattered and became part of the ground. Sighing, Draco gave up. Dawn recognized the expression in his eyes, and pulled him along.
Dawn led him swiftly through the ever-chattering crowd that always seemed to be there and up the girl's dormitory's staircase. When they were ten paces away from Ginny's door, Dawn stopped abruptly, with Draco almost crashing into her. Being Dawn, she didn't notice. She whispered, "I'll go check to see if she's respectable. Knowing her, she's probably changing bras or something," Dawn said, completely unaware of the slight blush that had come to Draco's cheeks. Dawn went ahead, motioning furiously to Draco to stay where he was.
Dawn opened the door and went in Ginny's room, ready to be bombarded with anxious questions about which bra accentuated her figure and so on. She was not ready for what she did see: a bereft Ginny sobbing into her hapless pillow, pummeling that same hapless pillow.
Draco waited outside with a smug smirk on his face. She would see Ginny crying and would call off this day's bonding session and that horrible task would be held off for a little while more. He would have sighed in relief if he weren't too busy smirking. Draco was leaning against the wall casually when Dawn came out, his smirk fell away; he wasn't supposed to know that Dawn would postpone the bonding session. He expected to see a somber Dawn, shooing him off. The Dawn he saw instead unnerved him so much he straightened from his post.
She had a manic gleam in her eye.
Draco had only seen that manic gleam once in his life and that was when she had roped him into helping her set Draco's mother's annoying cat on fire. `Keep calm. Just stay calm. Maybe it's just the lighting or something. Please be the lighting. Please...`
"Draco, this is perfect!" Draco could almost see Dawn rubbing her hands together gleefully; could hear the evil laughter. "Ginny's in there crying, and it's the perfect time for you two to bond!"
"H-how is that?" Draco said, tamping down the wave of anxiety that threatened to drown him.
"You could comfort her and then you guys will establish an everlasting bond of friendship!" Dawn said triumphantly, leaning forward in her eagerness. "It'll be fantastic! I'm the best at this bonding thing! Now go on there, come on now, we don't have all day-" Dawn paused, thought for a moment than said. "Actually, we do have all day. But I want you to finish comforting her so I could hear the details!" Dawn was now pushing him toward the door; her excitement the only thing that moved Draco who, although lean, was very strong when he wanted to be.
"But Dawn...!!!"
"You know her much better, and she hates me, so right now me trying to comfort her will only end up with her throwing me out the window! With or without you! You are much better at comforting people than I am, and a familiar face will make her feel better than one she hates..." Draco's vehement protests trickled to a reluctant stop.
Seeing Dawn's expression, one that Draco had seen on Dawn's face when she had accidentally broken her broomstick; one that was about to cry, Draco sighed. "Alright, I'll do it." A sense of deja vu came over him; he had said the very same thing when he had agreed to befriend Ginny in the first place. "But you can't blame me if I make her feel worse." And with that dire warning, he went in.
Ginny looked up from her soaking pillow, hoping against hope that it was her dear Harry. It wasn't. The exact opposite, Ginny thought sourly. How could Dawn DO this to her? She just didn't feel like dealing with Draco right now. He came up to the bed and sat down, the mattress not even creaking under his lean body.
"Go away, Malfoy," Ginny said indistinctly, muffled by her pillow.
"Believe me, I want to. But I promised Dawn that I would try to make you feel better," Came Draco's surprisingly confiding tone.
"What, Malfoy? You actually keep your promises???" This punctuated with a derisive 'Ha!'.
"Look, Weasley, I want to get this over with, so just tell me what happened and I'll leave and make up a story about how I comforted you to satisfy Dawn, ok?" Draco said, his voice impassive.
"Fine! I'll tell you, but only to get you out of here," Ginny spat. (Poor pillow) "Just read that thing and leave." She waved vaguely at where she remembered she had tossed the letter.
She felt Draco move away from her and heard a rustle that indicated that he had found it. Draco finished it in a few seconds. "So, Potter stood you up," Draco said, quietly derisive.
"NO!" Ginny said, shaking her head vehemently, sitting up. "He probably had some important things to do involving He-Who-Must-Not-Be- Named, and he's probably in Dumbledore's office. There can't be any other reason! There just can't be," Ginny said, glaring at Draco for trying to sully Harry's name. "He's too noble to cancel our date for any other reason, I know it."
"Do you really believe that? I wouldn't put it past a Weasley to be so stupid, but it's ridiculous if you actually believe that bullshit," Draco said coolly, calmly. "Harry stood you up for no other reason then because he doesn't want to go out with you." Draco held up a hand when Ginny started to interrupt, signaling to let him finish. "Although there is a possibility that what you say is true, it's a very small possibility." He shrugged. "It was probably because of that incident with the mashed potatoes."
"You know, you really should've watched what you were doing around him; the only reason he possibly showed any interest in you was out of pity, or for a quickie... just accept the truth, Weasley."
Ginny was silent.
Draco turned, about to ask her if it was really that hard to come up with a comeback, and his eyes widened. `oh shit. Oops` Ginny was crying again. Draco had tried to cheer her up in a twisted way by making her angry at him. It didn't work. Draco sighed. Now he probably had to cheer her up in a nicer way. What should he do?
Settling beside her, Draco scooped her up in his arms and deposited her in his lap. Gathering her close to his lean frame, he began rocking her back and forth, murmuring soothing words that sounded suspiciously like, "Don't worry, don't cry, he doesn't even deserve you.", stroking her hair calmingly. He rested his head gently on top of Ginny's blazing red hair. Ginny buried her face in his soft, warm Hogwarts robes, and continued crying. She cried so hard and so long that she was reduced to dry sobs, her body having run out of tears. At last, even those shuddering sobs stopped completely. Draco lifted his chin from her head and looked warily at her. She was fast asleep, her hands fisting his robes.
Draco sighed and thought, 'Now I can't move'.
(Then the author toyed with the idea of making Dawn burst in on them... or maybe Harry...)
~
Dawn woke up from the little nap she had taken in the common room, glancing at the clock above the fireplace. It was eight o'clock, two hours after she had left Draco with Ginny. She smiled wickedly and hurried up the winding staircase to Ginny's room. She was about to open the door, but decided instead to check on what was going on through a convenient hole in the door. She could be seen, peering into the hole, and then gasping and stiffening, then hitting her head on the doorjamb. Dawn started toward her own room, thinking, 'not exactly what I planned but this change of plans is perfectly fine with me!'
The manic gleam was back...
A/N: WOW! I know this chapter may have been shorter then you're used to, but I think it was pretty good. If you agree, review. If you don't agree, review! Why, reviewing is simplicity itself! And remember: I need SIX reviews before I continue. SIX I tell you!
(w)= authors on ffn (a)=anonymous *.*= their review Thanks To:
The Quiet One (w): I'm so glad that you have continued reading, and I am soo sorry that I haven't uploaded this much much sooner. Dawn is in Gryffindor because most of her life she has lived outside of the evil influences of Lucius Malfoy. and the mysterious intruder is not revealed. sorry *I am very satisfied this time. You explained enough, posted quick enough, and answered enough. I know that probably dosent mean a whole lot to you though. Anyway, awsome chapter. I like the whole Dawn and Draco are brother and sister thing. Though if thats true, why is Dawn in Gryfenndor? Maybe she's not all evil and all that? I don't know. I'll just keep checking back on this story, to see if you've updated or told us who the mysterious intruder is!*
VirtualFaerie (w): Well, this isn't the rest, but it's a part of the rest. hope that's enough! **cries* Silver! where's the rest? I'm dying here!*
yoyo (a): I have kept writing, (duh), and thanks for the encouragement! I'm ashamed to say I didn't update this chapter is soon as possible. but you guys forgive me right? /nervous chuckle/ Right? Uh, guys? Why are you looking at me like that. *i luv this story! please keep writing! update the next chapter as soon as possible!*
Shelly (a): Did I say that? Well, I meant that Dawn is in her fifth year. aheheheh, sorry. Yeah, I like Crystal also- I'm not sure yet what role she plays in this fic. but I'll think of something! Never fear, the plot bunnies are ALWAYS there! I like Seamus's response also, and I'm glad others like it too! *Hey, that's not fair! Pleeeeez write the next chapter soon!
You said that Dawn was in sixth year, but how could she be if she was normally in Ginny's (fifth year) Muggle Studies class? But cool extra characters, though. I like Crystal, although she does seem kinda Cordelia- esque. I wouldn't be surprised if she was American instead of Israelian. Do they have cheerleaders in Israel? Anyway, great story, loadsa funny bits! I especially liked Seamus's response to the "I DO NOT LIKE SEAMUS FINNIGAN!" in the first chapter. Now I'm going to say something extremely cliched to finish because all my witty quips are saved for my own fanfic: keep up the good work!*
azalai (w): Really??? REALLY??? YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! I'm so glad you were laughing so hard! You know, when I was young, I wanted to be a jester. I even had a jester's hat I stole from my brother. wonder what happened to it? Wait a minute. /rummages around/ AHA! I've found it! /jams it onto head/ Now where are those shoes with the bells. *Looks like your comp did the same thing to you as it did to me. You need help fixing it? I ken help. Great story, btw, is real funny. I was laughing so hard I was almost crying when i read the fourth chapter. Write more, please!
-azalai*
ChasingMaybe (w): /lip trembles/ T-T I'm sure all you're doing is trying to help, but you could explain to me HOW it is unrealistic, HOW it is rushed, and everything. /sniffle/ /looks imploringly at readers/ You don't agree with her do you? DO YOU??? *First of all, this would be a good story, IF it actually made sense and wasn't being rushed along like the end of the world was tommorrow. Second, this is actually the MOST UNREALISTIC D/G fic that I've encountered so far. And third, you need paragraph breaks, and more spacing. Also, try not to go so abruptley from one topic to another.
I'm sorry if that sounded harsh, but I'm just trying to help. *Chamelophants and ruffly hedgehogs!!!!**
Rubyjuls1722 (w): Really? I DO??? Oh frick!!! I THINK I fixed that, but sorry I confused you! This chapter should be better. and less confusing. I hope. @_@ *well I must say that you do have me very confused, on why you have the same thing repeated later down. ::looks confused:: I think it was pretty good, but i'll tell you more later. ttul! tootles!*
Mystical Kiwi (w): /nods/ True, true, all of it. Poor Draco. BUT! Oh well, what can you do? I MIGHT make her less clueless, but I'm scared that'll disrupt the image of Ginny that has been erected in every ffn reader (or fanfiction for that matter), and I may be bombarded and might make a whole new Ginny. hey, that might not be so bad. AAAAAH!!! EVIL PLOT BUNNIES! AWAY! AWAY I TELL YOU! Sorry about that, hehe, I just need to go hunting for wabbits. hope you liked this chapter as well! *grr... doesn't she realize what a JERK Harry is!?!?! Draco is just so misunderstood by everyone... *sniffles* nobody understands him... he's only mean cuz his mean ol' daddy makes him... ahem, yeah anyways, great chapter!*
TO ALL REVIWERS: A big thank you for those who encouraged me and for those who helped me with some of my mistakes. You guys are all so nice to take time away from your busy busy life to review my lowly fic. (It doesn't hurt to be humble :p)
Chapter 6
Draco, hurrying through the corridors of Hogwarts, was confronted by Dawn. "Why are you back already?" Dawn asked admonishingly. "She wasn't changing again, was she? Because that should be the only reason why you aren't up there, trying to befriend her." Dawn said in a steely voice. "Well, was she dressing?" This accompanied by a poke in Draco's chest.
"No," Draco began, about to explain how he saw Weasley was crying and thought that this wasn't a good time to be trying to befriend her. But inexplicably and suddenly, his mouth clicked shut; apparently his mouth decided that explaining would violate Weasley privacy, and what his mouth decided, Draco had to follow.
"Well?"
Draco started. He had forgotten that Dawn still needed an explanation. `uh oh, she's tapping her foot', Draco thought with trepidation. "Actually," Draco began again, hanging his head in what he hoped passed for an ashamed manner. "I didn't even go to Wea- Ginny's dorm room. I just stopped by the bathroom."
"Why?"
Draco plunged into a plausible story. "You know how much she dislikes me. Without you there, she probably would throw me right out no matter how open-minded you say she is. So I didn't want to waste her, yours, and my time," Draco finished, secretly proud at how quickly he came up with such a believable lie.
"Oh," Dawn said doubtfully, knitting her eyebrows in thought. Then her face brightened. "That's okay! I'll just go with you and remind her how she agreed to give you a chance and I'll stay there in case she throws you out or something. It's not like I have anything else to do."
"NO!!!"
Dawn looked at him askance.
"Uh, what I meant to say was, I'm sure you have something else to do; like, don't you need to go eat or something? In fact, I'm starved, we could both go to eat," Draco said as he began to usher Dawn into the Great Hall.
"Draco, I'm sure all you're doing is looking out for your little sister, but the fact of the matter is that I had a little snack just a little while ago. And, due to my recent illness, I have a very small appetite. So thanks, but no thanks." Dawn grinned at him, "Now, come on!"
"B-but..."
"No buts! I said we're going, so we're going!" Dawn said, catching hold of his hand and dragging him a little way.
Noticing the looks he was getting, Draco stopped in his tracks- or, at least, tried to. Finally, despairing, he said desperately, "Ok, Ok! I'll go to Wea- I mean Ginny's room; you don't have to drag me to it!"
"Are you sure?"
"Yes! I swear!"
"Well, ok then. Follow me."
Making sure that Dawn was wholly intent on her evil plans, Draco whispered, "duplicatas," He took one step forward, and there was still a Draco behind him. Draco grinned. Whispering instructions to his magically induced twin, Draco hurried to get away from his half-sister. He was almost into the boys bathroom when he was intercepted by... Dawn! But, looking backward, Draco saw Dawn still leading his duplicate. Draco groaned inwardly. 'I have taught her too well'. And with a smug smirk on her face, Dawn caught hold of him and, since the illusion of the two duplicates was shattered, they too, shattered and became part of the ground. Sighing, Draco gave up. Dawn recognized the expression in his eyes, and pulled him along.
Dawn led him swiftly through the ever-chattering crowd that always seemed to be there and up the girl's dormitory's staircase. When they were ten paces away from Ginny's door, Dawn stopped abruptly, with Draco almost crashing into her. Being Dawn, she didn't notice. She whispered, "I'll go check to see if she's respectable. Knowing her, she's probably changing bras or something," Dawn said, completely unaware of the slight blush that had come to Draco's cheeks. Dawn went ahead, motioning furiously to Draco to stay where he was.
Dawn opened the door and went in Ginny's room, ready to be bombarded with anxious questions about which bra accentuated her figure and so on. She was not ready for what she did see: a bereft Ginny sobbing into her hapless pillow, pummeling that same hapless pillow.
Draco waited outside with a smug smirk on his face. She would see Ginny crying and would call off this day's bonding session and that horrible task would be held off for a little while more. He would have sighed in relief if he weren't too busy smirking. Draco was leaning against the wall casually when Dawn came out, his smirk fell away; he wasn't supposed to know that Dawn would postpone the bonding session. He expected to see a somber Dawn, shooing him off. The Dawn he saw instead unnerved him so much he straightened from his post.
She had a manic gleam in her eye.
Draco had only seen that manic gleam once in his life and that was when she had roped him into helping her set Draco's mother's annoying cat on fire. `Keep calm. Just stay calm. Maybe it's just the lighting or something. Please be the lighting. Please...`
"Draco, this is perfect!" Draco could almost see Dawn rubbing her hands together gleefully; could hear the evil laughter. "Ginny's in there crying, and it's the perfect time for you two to bond!"
"H-how is that?" Draco said, tamping down the wave of anxiety that threatened to drown him.
"You could comfort her and then you guys will establish an everlasting bond of friendship!" Dawn said triumphantly, leaning forward in her eagerness. "It'll be fantastic! I'm the best at this bonding thing! Now go on there, come on now, we don't have all day-" Dawn paused, thought for a moment than said. "Actually, we do have all day. But I want you to finish comforting her so I could hear the details!" Dawn was now pushing him toward the door; her excitement the only thing that moved Draco who, although lean, was very strong when he wanted to be.
"But Dawn...!!!"
"You know her much better, and she hates me, so right now me trying to comfort her will only end up with her throwing me out the window! With or without you! You are much better at comforting people than I am, and a familiar face will make her feel better than one she hates..." Draco's vehement protests trickled to a reluctant stop.
Seeing Dawn's expression, one that Draco had seen on Dawn's face when she had accidentally broken her broomstick; one that was about to cry, Draco sighed. "Alright, I'll do it." A sense of deja vu came over him; he had said the very same thing when he had agreed to befriend Ginny in the first place. "But you can't blame me if I make her feel worse." And with that dire warning, he went in.
Ginny looked up from her soaking pillow, hoping against hope that it was her dear Harry. It wasn't. The exact opposite, Ginny thought sourly. How could Dawn DO this to her? She just didn't feel like dealing with Draco right now. He came up to the bed and sat down, the mattress not even creaking under his lean body.
"Go away, Malfoy," Ginny said indistinctly, muffled by her pillow.
"Believe me, I want to. But I promised Dawn that I would try to make you feel better," Came Draco's surprisingly confiding tone.
"What, Malfoy? You actually keep your promises???" This punctuated with a derisive 'Ha!'.
"Look, Weasley, I want to get this over with, so just tell me what happened and I'll leave and make up a story about how I comforted you to satisfy Dawn, ok?" Draco said, his voice impassive.
"Fine! I'll tell you, but only to get you out of here," Ginny spat. (Poor pillow) "Just read that thing and leave." She waved vaguely at where she remembered she had tossed the letter.
She felt Draco move away from her and heard a rustle that indicated that he had found it. Draco finished it in a few seconds. "So, Potter stood you up," Draco said, quietly derisive.
"NO!" Ginny said, shaking her head vehemently, sitting up. "He probably had some important things to do involving He-Who-Must-Not-Be- Named, and he's probably in Dumbledore's office. There can't be any other reason! There just can't be," Ginny said, glaring at Draco for trying to sully Harry's name. "He's too noble to cancel our date for any other reason, I know it."
"Do you really believe that? I wouldn't put it past a Weasley to be so stupid, but it's ridiculous if you actually believe that bullshit," Draco said coolly, calmly. "Harry stood you up for no other reason then because he doesn't want to go out with you." Draco held up a hand when Ginny started to interrupt, signaling to let him finish. "Although there is a possibility that what you say is true, it's a very small possibility." He shrugged. "It was probably because of that incident with the mashed potatoes."
"You know, you really should've watched what you were doing around him; the only reason he possibly showed any interest in you was out of pity, or for a quickie... just accept the truth, Weasley."
Ginny was silent.
Draco turned, about to ask her if it was really that hard to come up with a comeback, and his eyes widened. `oh shit. Oops` Ginny was crying again. Draco had tried to cheer her up in a twisted way by making her angry at him. It didn't work. Draco sighed. Now he probably had to cheer her up in a nicer way. What should he do?
Settling beside her, Draco scooped her up in his arms and deposited her in his lap. Gathering her close to his lean frame, he began rocking her back and forth, murmuring soothing words that sounded suspiciously like, "Don't worry, don't cry, he doesn't even deserve you.", stroking her hair calmingly. He rested his head gently on top of Ginny's blazing red hair. Ginny buried her face in his soft, warm Hogwarts robes, and continued crying. She cried so hard and so long that she was reduced to dry sobs, her body having run out of tears. At last, even those shuddering sobs stopped completely. Draco lifted his chin from her head and looked warily at her. She was fast asleep, her hands fisting his robes.
Draco sighed and thought, 'Now I can't move'.
(Then the author toyed with the idea of making Dawn burst in on them... or maybe Harry...)
~
Dawn woke up from the little nap she had taken in the common room, glancing at the clock above the fireplace. It was eight o'clock, two hours after she had left Draco with Ginny. She smiled wickedly and hurried up the winding staircase to Ginny's room. She was about to open the door, but decided instead to check on what was going on through a convenient hole in the door. She could be seen, peering into the hole, and then gasping and stiffening, then hitting her head on the doorjamb. Dawn started toward her own room, thinking, 'not exactly what I planned but this change of plans is perfectly fine with me!'
The manic gleam was back...
A/N: WOW! I know this chapter may have been shorter then you're used to, but I think it was pretty good. If you agree, review. If you don't agree, review! Why, reviewing is simplicity itself! And remember: I need SIX reviews before I continue. SIX I tell you!
(w)= authors on ffn (a)=anonymous *.*= their review Thanks To:
The Quiet One (w): I'm so glad that you have continued reading, and I am soo sorry that I haven't uploaded this much much sooner. Dawn is in Gryffindor because most of her life she has lived outside of the evil influences of Lucius Malfoy. and the mysterious intruder is not revealed. sorry *I am very satisfied this time. You explained enough, posted quick enough, and answered enough. I know that probably dosent mean a whole lot to you though. Anyway, awsome chapter. I like the whole Dawn and Draco are brother and sister thing. Though if thats true, why is Dawn in Gryfenndor? Maybe she's not all evil and all that? I don't know. I'll just keep checking back on this story, to see if you've updated or told us who the mysterious intruder is!*
VirtualFaerie (w): Well, this isn't the rest, but it's a part of the rest. hope that's enough! **cries* Silver! where's the rest? I'm dying here!*
yoyo (a): I have kept writing, (duh), and thanks for the encouragement! I'm ashamed to say I didn't update this chapter is soon as possible. but you guys forgive me right? /nervous chuckle/ Right? Uh, guys? Why are you looking at me like that. *i luv this story! please keep writing! update the next chapter as soon as possible!*
Shelly (a): Did I say that? Well, I meant that Dawn is in her fifth year. aheheheh, sorry. Yeah, I like Crystal also- I'm not sure yet what role she plays in this fic. but I'll think of something! Never fear, the plot bunnies are ALWAYS there! I like Seamus's response also, and I'm glad others like it too! *Hey, that's not fair! Pleeeeez write the next chapter soon!
You said that Dawn was in sixth year, but how could she be if she was normally in Ginny's (fifth year) Muggle Studies class? But cool extra characters, though. I like Crystal, although she does seem kinda Cordelia- esque. I wouldn't be surprised if she was American instead of Israelian. Do they have cheerleaders in Israel? Anyway, great story, loadsa funny bits! I especially liked Seamus's response to the "I DO NOT LIKE SEAMUS FINNIGAN!" in the first chapter. Now I'm going to say something extremely cliched to finish because all my witty quips are saved for my own fanfic: keep up the good work!*
azalai (w): Really??? REALLY??? YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! I'm so glad you were laughing so hard! You know, when I was young, I wanted to be a jester. I even had a jester's hat I stole from my brother. wonder what happened to it? Wait a minute. /rummages around/ AHA! I've found it! /jams it onto head/ Now where are those shoes with the bells. *Looks like your comp did the same thing to you as it did to me. You need help fixing it? I ken help. Great story, btw, is real funny. I was laughing so hard I was almost crying when i read the fourth chapter. Write more, please!
-azalai*
ChasingMaybe (w): /lip trembles/ T-T I'm sure all you're doing is trying to help, but you could explain to me HOW it is unrealistic, HOW it is rushed, and everything. /sniffle/ /looks imploringly at readers/ You don't agree with her do you? DO YOU??? *First of all, this would be a good story, IF it actually made sense and wasn't being rushed along like the end of the world was tommorrow. Second, this is actually the MOST UNREALISTIC D/G fic that I've encountered so far. And third, you need paragraph breaks, and more spacing. Also, try not to go so abruptley from one topic to another.
I'm sorry if that sounded harsh, but I'm just trying to help. *Chamelophants and ruffly hedgehogs!!!!**
Rubyjuls1722 (w): Really? I DO??? Oh frick!!! I THINK I fixed that, but sorry I confused you! This chapter should be better. and less confusing. I hope. @_@ *well I must say that you do have me very confused, on why you have the same thing repeated later down. ::looks confused:: I think it was pretty good, but i'll tell you more later. ttul! tootles!*
Mystical Kiwi (w): /nods/ True, true, all of it. Poor Draco. BUT! Oh well, what can you do? I MIGHT make her less clueless, but I'm scared that'll disrupt the image of Ginny that has been erected in every ffn reader (or fanfiction for that matter), and I may be bombarded and might make a whole new Ginny. hey, that might not be so bad. AAAAAH!!! EVIL PLOT BUNNIES! AWAY! AWAY I TELL YOU! Sorry about that, hehe, I just need to go hunting for wabbits. hope you liked this chapter as well! *grr... doesn't she realize what a JERK Harry is!?!?! Draco is just so misunderstood by everyone... *sniffles* nobody understands him... he's only mean cuz his mean ol' daddy makes him... ahem, yeah anyways, great chapter!*
TO ALL REVIWERS: A big thank you for those who encouraged me and for those who helped me with some of my mistakes. You guys are all so nice to take time away from your busy busy life to review my lowly fic. (It doesn't hurt to be humble :p)