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Renee: Thanks for the support, and you read my mind about Luke. *************************************************************************** The Skywalkers make it to their old apartment with Anakin and Lei bonding well; but Padme' couldn't play with them. She still isn't whole; she wants Luke to be with them. Anakin and Lei feel her troubled feelings and stop smiling.
"Are you alright Padme'?"
"I miss Luke."
"Luke, who's Luke?" Padme' realizes then on that she never told Lei of her brother.
"He's your twin brother Lei."
"Why isn't he with us mommy?"
"Because sweetie, he is very powerful, more powerful than you; he is of more value to the Sith Lords."
"Where is he?" but before could Padme' answer, something happened to Lei.
She had scrunched her eyelids closed, and fell on her butt; she opened them, but fixed her eyes on the floor, as if there is something else there.
"What's the matter Lei," asks Anakin kneeling next to her?
"I hear screaming, I see blood; two people are screaming something."
"What are they screaming Lei," asks Anakin?
"There screaming, Luke." She finally blinks and looks like she is going to faint.
"Are you alright Lei?"
"Yes I'm ok." Lei and Anakin rise and face Padme'.
"We have to go to Tatooine," Padme' says suddenly. She gets up and gathers some supplies with Lei.
"Tatooine? Why Tatooine," asks Anakin puzzled.
"Because that's where he's staying."
"With who?"
"You're Stepbrother Owen and his wife Beru. Now enough questions we must hurry." She takes her pack with Lei taking hers; Anakin leads the way in the hall to a craft. But then someone, accidentally, bumped into them.
"Oh sorry let me help you," says the strange voice picking up their fallen supplies.
"Thanks," says Anakin.
The man looked at him strangely, "I know that voice, are you a Padawan here?"
"Not anymore, I left The Order five years ago."
"It is you then, Ani it's me Lucas."
"Lucas? Lucas." They hug their 'manly' hug.
"It's been awhile friend," says Lucas with a smile.
"It has."
"And this must be Padme', and Lei."
"Hello," they both say politely, but waiting impatiently.
"Where are you off to in such a hurry?"
"We have to fetch our son Luke, Lei here sensed trouble brewing there, something horrible."
"I'll help then," says Lucas switching his smile to a face of concern.
"Lucas you don't hav-" Anakin would of said more, but Lucas cut him off.
"Ani, you're my best friend, of course I'll help you; and besides I won't take no for an answer."
"Alright then follow us." They all walk out the corridor, and hop on a craft; they zoom off setting their course to Tatooine. ***************************************************************************
Two hours later.
"Ok we're here," says Padme'.
"Are you sure," asks Anakin, glancing at her for a few seconds while driving?
"Yes I can feel him."
"So can I," speaks up Lei looking mostly out the window.
As Anakin flies the ship, they all see sweltering smoke rising up in the air along with the scorching flames below.
"Uh no, we're too late," says Lei.
Ani lands the ship and they all get out immediately; the house where Luke lived, they run as close as they could to the house, but the flame licked higher and almost burning their skin.
"Search for survivors, Lucas you come with me, and you two that way." Lei and Padme' nod back to him, and then run the other direction.
Lei scans her surroundings, something catches her attention.
"Look!" she points to two bodies, one moving and the other lifeless. Padme' and Lei run as fast as their legs can carry them. They stop with a halt and kneel down to the barely alive being. Padme turned the human over and sees it's Beru; she had slashes upon her once angelic face, with dried blood and dirt crusted over it.
"Beru, what happened here?"
"So many," she began vividly, "They took him." Her voice is scratchy from screaming earlier.
"Took who Beru?"
"Luke- the black man took him- He struggled- trying to- break free. {Cough} We- screamed for- him."
"Don't worry we'll save him Beru."
"Tell Luke- {Takes a deep breath} tell him- that- that Owen and I- love-him- " right then and there she passed away next to her dead husband. Padme' know they have gone to a better place, a place without pain and turmoil. Instead a place filled with serenity and love.
"Padme!" Padme' turns her head to the call and sees Anakin and Lucas running towards them.
"Did you find anything?"
Padme's expression stays the same, gloomy, she moves to the left letting Anakin and Lucas see what she and Lei found.
"Oh no."
"Beru told us, before she died, that a black man took Luke."
"She must of meant Darth Sidious, that means he has Luke right now. Lucas, escort Padme and Lei to the ship and try to get a reading of where Sidious might be."
"What are you going to do," asks Padme rising up with Lei?
"Bury my step-brother Owen, and his wife Beru; I owe it to them."
Padme nods to him, knowing he needs time alone; she leaves with the rest glancing at him once.
Anakin searches for some sort of shed, hoping it wasn't completely burnt yet; but then, without warning, he trips and almost falls flat on his face; he looks down to his feet and sees a handle. He kneels down and brushes off the dirt finding a door; he opens it and there he finds equipment, including a shovel, which is what he's looking for. He takes it out and shuts the door; he finds a spot next the corpses and starts digging. It took 20 minutes for each hole, when he was done he wraps Owen and Beru with cloth he found before. He first, laid Owen in the hole and buries it; then he picks up Beru and laid her in the second hole and buries it.
"Anakin," yells Luke!
"What?"
"It's your daughter, she's having a vision!" Anakin, without hesitation, runs to the ship finding his wife holding the shaking Lei. Lei's eyes pop open, she sits, hugging her legs, which brought her knees close to her face moving her head around, as if looking at something that isn't there.
"What do you see Lei," asks Padme softly?
"I can see what he sees, he's locked up in a cell, alone. There are two stormtroopers in front guarding the cage. Luke is very scared and in shock; he's shivering, but not from the cold but from fear. Something's coming towards him. A tall dark man is coming in the cage, he has something in his hand, it looks like a metal object of some sort." She squints her eyes as if trying to look at it.
"It's a needle. Ow!" Lei blinks, as if awaking from a nightmare, while holding her arm.
"Are you alright Lei," asks Padme?
"I'm alright, the man made Luke fall asleep." (What do expect, she's only 5.)
"He must be at the Sith Temple," says Anakin.
"Where is that," asks Padme helping Lei up?
"In the deserted part of Corascant." ***************************************************************************
Please review to get the next chapter.
From starwars() your story is bad. it sucks.
Well if some of you readers think this way don't tell me just don't read it anymore; because you know that really hurts my feelings you know, it lowers my confidence. So please keep that sort of thing to yourself.
Thank you. ************************************************************************
Renee: Thanks for the support, and you read my mind about Luke. *************************************************************************** The Skywalkers make it to their old apartment with Anakin and Lei bonding well; but Padme' couldn't play with them. She still isn't whole; she wants Luke to be with them. Anakin and Lei feel her troubled feelings and stop smiling.
"Are you alright Padme'?"
"I miss Luke."
"Luke, who's Luke?" Padme' realizes then on that she never told Lei of her brother.
"He's your twin brother Lei."
"Why isn't he with us mommy?"
"Because sweetie, he is very powerful, more powerful than you; he is of more value to the Sith Lords."
"Where is he?" but before could Padme' answer, something happened to Lei.
She had scrunched her eyelids closed, and fell on her butt; she opened them, but fixed her eyes on the floor, as if there is something else there.
"What's the matter Lei," asks Anakin kneeling next to her?
"I hear screaming, I see blood; two people are screaming something."
"What are they screaming Lei," asks Anakin?
"There screaming, Luke." She finally blinks and looks like she is going to faint.
"Are you alright Lei?"
"Yes I'm ok." Lei and Anakin rise and face Padme'.
"We have to go to Tatooine," Padme' says suddenly. She gets up and gathers some supplies with Lei.
"Tatooine? Why Tatooine," asks Anakin puzzled.
"Because that's where he's staying."
"With who?"
"You're Stepbrother Owen and his wife Beru. Now enough questions we must hurry." She takes her pack with Lei taking hers; Anakin leads the way in the hall to a craft. But then someone, accidentally, bumped into them.
"Oh sorry let me help you," says the strange voice picking up their fallen supplies.
"Thanks," says Anakin.
The man looked at him strangely, "I know that voice, are you a Padawan here?"
"Not anymore, I left The Order five years ago."
"It is you then, Ani it's me Lucas."
"Lucas? Lucas." They hug their 'manly' hug.
"It's been awhile friend," says Lucas with a smile.
"It has."
"And this must be Padme', and Lei."
"Hello," they both say politely, but waiting impatiently.
"Where are you off to in such a hurry?"
"We have to fetch our son Luke, Lei here sensed trouble brewing there, something horrible."
"I'll help then," says Lucas switching his smile to a face of concern.
"Lucas you don't hav-" Anakin would of said more, but Lucas cut him off.
"Ani, you're my best friend, of course I'll help you; and besides I won't take no for an answer."
"Alright then follow us." They all walk out the corridor, and hop on a craft; they zoom off setting their course to Tatooine. ***************************************************************************
Two hours later.
"Ok we're here," says Padme'.
"Are you sure," asks Anakin, glancing at her for a few seconds while driving?
"Yes I can feel him."
"So can I," speaks up Lei looking mostly out the window.
As Anakin flies the ship, they all see sweltering smoke rising up in the air along with the scorching flames below.
"Uh no, we're too late," says Lei.
Ani lands the ship and they all get out immediately; the house where Luke lived, they run as close as they could to the house, but the flame licked higher and almost burning their skin.
"Search for survivors, Lucas you come with me, and you two that way." Lei and Padme' nod back to him, and then run the other direction.
Lei scans her surroundings, something catches her attention.
"Look!" she points to two bodies, one moving and the other lifeless. Padme' and Lei run as fast as their legs can carry them. They stop with a halt and kneel down to the barely alive being. Padme turned the human over and sees it's Beru; she had slashes upon her once angelic face, with dried blood and dirt crusted over it.
"Beru, what happened here?"
"So many," she began vividly, "They took him." Her voice is scratchy from screaming earlier.
"Took who Beru?"
"Luke- the black man took him- He struggled- trying to- break free. {Cough} We- screamed for- him."
"Don't worry we'll save him Beru."
"Tell Luke- {Takes a deep breath} tell him- that- that Owen and I- love-him- " right then and there she passed away next to her dead husband. Padme' know they have gone to a better place, a place without pain and turmoil. Instead a place filled with serenity and love.
"Padme!" Padme' turns her head to the call and sees Anakin and Lucas running towards them.
"Did you find anything?"
Padme's expression stays the same, gloomy, she moves to the left letting Anakin and Lucas see what she and Lei found.
"Oh no."
"Beru told us, before she died, that a black man took Luke."
"She must of meant Darth Sidious, that means he has Luke right now. Lucas, escort Padme and Lei to the ship and try to get a reading of where Sidious might be."
"What are you going to do," asks Padme rising up with Lei?
"Bury my step-brother Owen, and his wife Beru; I owe it to them."
Padme nods to him, knowing he needs time alone; she leaves with the rest glancing at him once.
Anakin searches for some sort of shed, hoping it wasn't completely burnt yet; but then, without warning, he trips and almost falls flat on his face; he looks down to his feet and sees a handle. He kneels down and brushes off the dirt finding a door; he opens it and there he finds equipment, including a shovel, which is what he's looking for. He takes it out and shuts the door; he finds a spot next the corpses and starts digging. It took 20 minutes for each hole, when he was done he wraps Owen and Beru with cloth he found before. He first, laid Owen in the hole and buries it; then he picks up Beru and laid her in the second hole and buries it.
"Anakin," yells Luke!
"What?"
"It's your daughter, she's having a vision!" Anakin, without hesitation, runs to the ship finding his wife holding the shaking Lei. Lei's eyes pop open, she sits, hugging her legs, which brought her knees close to her face moving her head around, as if looking at something that isn't there.
"What do you see Lei," asks Padme softly?
"I can see what he sees, he's locked up in a cell, alone. There are two stormtroopers in front guarding the cage. Luke is very scared and in shock; he's shivering, but not from the cold but from fear. Something's coming towards him. A tall dark man is coming in the cage, he has something in his hand, it looks like a metal object of some sort." She squints her eyes as if trying to look at it.
"It's a needle. Ow!" Lei blinks, as if awaking from a nightmare, while holding her arm.
"Are you alright Lei," asks Padme?
"I'm alright, the man made Luke fall asleep." (What do expect, she's only 5.)
"He must be at the Sith Temple," says Anakin.
"Where is that," asks Padme helping Lei up?
"In the deserted part of Corascant." ***************************************************************************
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