Please Help Me!!!!!!
I know, I know, this isn't a chapter, but an author's note, but i need help!!! I have written chapter ten three times and am stuck!! School is almost out so you can expect more frequent writings. I am so horrible at updating *looks down sheepishly*
Here is what I have right now. Please give me comments. Right now I hate this part so give me criticism!!! Tell me what you want to happen, what you want to hear!!! As soon as i can get enough input I will write chapter ten and update it. PLEASE HELP!!!
What I have of Chapter ten:
CHAPTER TEN: Announcements
Just as everyone entered the Great Hall, hundreds of owls swooped in. Except this time, instead of doing what they normally do, delivering mail, many owls flew over to Daine and perched on her. She blushed as they hooted and brushed up against her.
~Thank you for greeting me like this but i think it would be best if you did whatever you should be doing now.~ Daine said with her mind.
The owls took off and returned to their duty. The giant Hall was silent as the students and teachers of Hogwarts stared at the newcomers. Dumbledore cleared his throat. The few whispered conversations that had been started stopped and people's eyes shifted from the strange new people to their Headmaster.
"I see you all have noticed our guests. Do to a magical incident three of our students and two teachers were taken to their world. While attemping to send these five back, Master Numair, Daine Sarrasri, Sir Alanna and Baron George were taken as well. And as most of you saw there is a dragon among them, but do not panic. If you would wish to see the creature or find out more see our guests after classes. I would like you all to treat our guests with the utmost respect until we can send them home. Classes are resuming as normal so I suggest you finish your breakfest." Dumbledore said with a smile as he stared at the muddled faces. He then turned to the four (five including Kitten) behind him. "You are free to roam, if you would like I can show you around and to your rooms." They all nodded and as the students left the Great Hall to get to their classes, Dunbledore led them around the school.
So what do you think? Horrible, not too bad, good? Tell me what you think!!!
I know, I know, this isn't a chapter, but an author's note, but i need help!!! I have written chapter ten three times and am stuck!! School is almost out so you can expect more frequent writings. I am so horrible at updating *looks down sheepishly*
Here is what I have right now. Please give me comments. Right now I hate this part so give me criticism!!! Tell me what you want to happen, what you want to hear!!! As soon as i can get enough input I will write chapter ten and update it. PLEASE HELP!!!
What I have of Chapter ten:
CHAPTER TEN: Announcements
Just as everyone entered the Great Hall, hundreds of owls swooped in. Except this time, instead of doing what they normally do, delivering mail, many owls flew over to Daine and perched on her. She blushed as they hooted and brushed up against her.
~Thank you for greeting me like this but i think it would be best if you did whatever you should be doing now.~ Daine said with her mind.
The owls took off and returned to their duty. The giant Hall was silent as the students and teachers of Hogwarts stared at the newcomers. Dumbledore cleared his throat. The few whispered conversations that had been started stopped and people's eyes shifted from the strange new people to their Headmaster.
"I see you all have noticed our guests. Do to a magical incident three of our students and two teachers were taken to their world. While attemping to send these five back, Master Numair, Daine Sarrasri, Sir Alanna and Baron George were taken as well. And as most of you saw there is a dragon among them, but do not panic. If you would wish to see the creature or find out more see our guests after classes. I would like you all to treat our guests with the utmost respect until we can send them home. Classes are resuming as normal so I suggest you finish your breakfest." Dumbledore said with a smile as he stared at the muddled faces. He then turned to the four (five including Kitten) behind him. "You are free to roam, if you would like I can show you around and to your rooms." They all nodded and as the students left the Great Hall to get to their classes, Dunbledore led them around the school.
So what do you think? Horrible, not too bad, good? Tell me what you think!!!