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*Lizzie*
I got to Kate's house and rang the doorbell. Her mom answered. "Well, hello Lizzie. I haven't seen you around here in a while." She said. I replied, "Well, actually, I'm here to see Kate - is she home?" Her mom points to the backyard. "Thanks," I said and ran across the room to the door. "KATE!!" I yelled when I got outside. I saw something black running in the corner of my eye. I turned around and saw the tree house. I thought I'd go check up there.
When I got there, I saw Kate's body lying on the floor. She had a huge bruise on the side of her head, and a large stick was lying beside her. I panicked. "MS. SANDERS!!! COME HELP!!!" Her mom came running out and up to the treehouse. She picked her cell phone out of her pocket and dialed 911. Then we just stayed with her until the ambulance came.
*Kate*
I woke up the next day in the hospital. Everything was blurry. I just let my eyes close. I heard the doctor talking to a lady in the room. "She has amnesia - we're not sure if it's permanent, or it's temporary. Please, just be patient with her, and surround her with things that might bring old memories. We'll release her in 2 to 3 days." Then I heard the door close. I finally pulled together enough strength to open my eyes. I found an older woman, that I took to be my mom, and a young blonde haired girl, who looked as though she had been crying. I groaned and both come running towards me.
"Kate - it's me - your mom!" the woman exclaimed. "I figured that," I moaned. "Looks like she still has her spunk. Oh Kate - by the way - I'm Lizzie. We are...umm...used to be best friends," the blonde said. I just answered simply, "Explain." Then they filled me in from when I was young to what happened the day before. (I'm too lazy to write word-for-word)
*Next day at school*
I stuck around Lizzie most of the day. She introduced me to a curly, brown haired guy, Gordo, and a girl with good fashion sense, Miranda. She explained to them what happened to me. They looked at me funny, but they just took me under their wing. This cruel girl, who Lizzie said was Claire Miller, kept looking at me and saying "Loser". Then this REAL cute boy, (but EXTREMELY dumb) guy walked up and started talking to me as though I had known him for years. Lizzie and Miranda just kinda looked at him with a weird, dazed expression. I think they have a crush on him. Then, it came for algebra - the only class that I don't have w/ the rest of the gang. The teacher just sat there and read the Sunday comics, so this was the perfect chance for Claire and her posse to pick on me.
"What were you doing today hanging out with those...freaks?!" she asked. "Their not freaks!" I said as I got practically inches from her face. "They are my friends! And if you ever say anything like that again, just make sure you have enough money to pay for surgery when I break that little perfect nose of yours!" She just huffed and walked away when the rest of the class just clapped. I sat down in my desk, satisfied.
*Lizzie*
I looked in the algebra room to check up on Kate. I saw the whole scenario with Claire. I guess I got through to her - in a way.
Sorry guys - It's a bad place to stop, but I really have some homework I need to finish. It'll be longer next time!! R/R!!! §heavensangel688§
*Lizzie*
I got to Kate's house and rang the doorbell. Her mom answered. "Well, hello Lizzie. I haven't seen you around here in a while." She said. I replied, "Well, actually, I'm here to see Kate - is she home?" Her mom points to the backyard. "Thanks," I said and ran across the room to the door. "KATE!!" I yelled when I got outside. I saw something black running in the corner of my eye. I turned around and saw the tree house. I thought I'd go check up there.
When I got there, I saw Kate's body lying on the floor. She had a huge bruise on the side of her head, and a large stick was lying beside her. I panicked. "MS. SANDERS!!! COME HELP!!!" Her mom came running out and up to the treehouse. She picked her cell phone out of her pocket and dialed 911. Then we just stayed with her until the ambulance came.
*Kate*
I woke up the next day in the hospital. Everything was blurry. I just let my eyes close. I heard the doctor talking to a lady in the room. "She has amnesia - we're not sure if it's permanent, or it's temporary. Please, just be patient with her, and surround her with things that might bring old memories. We'll release her in 2 to 3 days." Then I heard the door close. I finally pulled together enough strength to open my eyes. I found an older woman, that I took to be my mom, and a young blonde haired girl, who looked as though she had been crying. I groaned and both come running towards me.
"Kate - it's me - your mom!" the woman exclaimed. "I figured that," I moaned. "Looks like she still has her spunk. Oh Kate - by the way - I'm Lizzie. We are...umm...used to be best friends," the blonde said. I just answered simply, "Explain." Then they filled me in from when I was young to what happened the day before. (I'm too lazy to write word-for-word)
*Next day at school*
I stuck around Lizzie most of the day. She introduced me to a curly, brown haired guy, Gordo, and a girl with good fashion sense, Miranda. She explained to them what happened to me. They looked at me funny, but they just took me under their wing. This cruel girl, who Lizzie said was Claire Miller, kept looking at me and saying "Loser". Then this REAL cute boy, (but EXTREMELY dumb) guy walked up and started talking to me as though I had known him for years. Lizzie and Miranda just kinda looked at him with a weird, dazed expression. I think they have a crush on him. Then, it came for algebra - the only class that I don't have w/ the rest of the gang. The teacher just sat there and read the Sunday comics, so this was the perfect chance for Claire and her posse to pick on me.
"What were you doing today hanging out with those...freaks?!" she asked. "Their not freaks!" I said as I got practically inches from her face. "They are my friends! And if you ever say anything like that again, just make sure you have enough money to pay for surgery when I break that little perfect nose of yours!" She just huffed and walked away when the rest of the class just clapped. I sat down in my desk, satisfied.
*Lizzie*
I looked in the algebra room to check up on Kate. I saw the whole scenario with Claire. I guess I got through to her - in a way.
Sorry guys - It's a bad place to stop, but I really have some homework I need to finish. It'll be longer next time!! R/R!!! §heavensangel688§