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Chapter 5
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Xander emerged from the basement into the kitchen, where the ladies of the house were waiting the outcome. Looking around the kitchen, Willow and Tara were sitting beside each other and Dawn was across from them at the table, Buffy was standing near the sink, her back to the room with Faith standing beside her, facing Buffy.
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Upon seeing the dark Slayer, his eyes narrowed and he opened his mouth to say something. Willow caught his eye and shook her head, and he bit back the words he was going to say. He'd take it up with Buffy or Willow later.
Following behind Xander was the plumber friend of his that he had met through work. Looking over at Buffy's back, he started, "Basically your pipes are shot," he said, then, with a deep breath, "I mean the whole system is gonna have to be replaced. What you need is a full copper re-pipe job," he said, offering a small slip of paper.
Willow looked at Tara then across at Xander before taking the offered slip. "Full copper re-pipes?" That sounds potentially pricey," she said.
"Well, the number is one the invoice," Tito the plumber said, gesturing to the slip, then with a pat on Xander's shoulders he turned and let himself out of the house.
Before Willow could actually look at the amount needed, Dawn grabbed the slip of paper and gave it a strange look. "That's a weird phone number," she said. "Oh wait," she said, looking up at Xander, "Is that the bill?" she asked uncertainly.
Xander looked from Willow to Dawn with a glance at Buffy then gave Dawn an apologetic look. He was well aware of just how tight money for the household was. "Hey, Tito cut you a good deal down there," he said, trying to defend his friend. "Those are his bargain prices, I did a little haggling for you."
Buffy finally turned around after a look at Faith, who was ignoring everybody and watching Buffy, and looked at Xander. "Thank you," she said with a small smile. "So, we'll pay him what's the big?" she asked, not having seen the looks the others had been sharing.
There was another exchange of looks between Xander, Willow, Dawn and Tara, almost guilty in nature.
Willow got up from where she was sitting and moved over to flank Buffy, opposite to Faith. "Um, Buffy, I know you're still getting on your feet after..." Willow trailed off, trying to find a good way of saying it.
Buffy glanced at Willow and arched an eyebrow, "Lying flat on my back?" she suggested dryly.
Willow, not being able to find any better way of putting it, nodded her head, biting her bottom lip. "Yeah. Uh, but there is some money stuff we're gonna have to talk to you about."
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Ten minutes later they were all sitting in the lounge room. Now Anya had joined them and she and Xander were sharing a lounge chair, whilst Tara took the other chair. Buffy was sitting on the middle of the couch with Faith and Dawn on either side. Willow was kneeling on the ground across the coffee table, which was stacked with papers. They had been discussing the money trouble that Buffy now found herself in.
Dawn was looking from Anya to Willow then Buffy with a worried look on her face. "So what are we gonna do?" she asked, looking to her sister for answers.
For a second the lounge room was silent as everybody struggled to come up with ideas.
Buffy was the first to answer, having put no real thought into her idea at all. "Easy," she said with a smile, "We burn the house to the ground and collect the insurance," she said, looking around the room. "Plus, fire? Pretty," she said factually.
Everybody in the room with the exception of the Slayers looked at Buffy, their previously worried looks turning to scared ones, thinking that Buffy was serious.
Faith, on the other hand laughed. "Is burning your general answer for everything B?" she asked, "First school gyms, then whole schools, both pretty big set ups, and now trying for a happy medium of your own house?" she said. "The insurance wouldn't last forever and exactly where were you planning to live afterwards?"
Xander just glared at the dark Slayer from his seat, "And what? Violence is your answer for everything?" he snapped. He'd been getting more and more annoyed with the Slayers as the day had progressed. Faith was always around Buffy, trying to get close to the blonde Slayer, or so Xander thought, probably so she could stab Buffy in the back. And as for Buffy, well they were her friends, not Faith. If she was going to need help it should come from himself, Tara, Willow or Dawn. Even Anya was better than Faith, but Buffy hadn't done anything but stick around with Faith.
Faith looked across at Xander and took in his annoyed look, biting back the quick retort she had. After all, she had gotten her second chance and now was the time to prove she had grown up. Looking at Buffy and noticing the tenseness in her, she ignored Xander and smiled, "Speaking of finances, I suppose I'd better check my own. If I'm to live here, I might as well pay board." Faith looked thoughtful for a second, "Perhaps I should rent out my old apartment. It was a pretty good one and should be worth a bit to rent," she said, still looking at Buffy.
Buffy blinked for a second then actually thought about what Faith said. "Well, we don't really need it do we?" she asked, "We still have access to Angel's apartment, and if we need to we can use that for storage and stuff. Maybe I could call him and ask if I can rent it out," Buffy said, with a slightly doubtful look on her face.
A deep sigh came from Willow, Tara and Dawn as the tension started to dissipate after Xander's words. Willow was well aware that Faith had changed, but still there was that uncertainty that she might still react to harsh words.
"What? Checking the blood money the mayor left you?" Xander sneered at Faith. He never liked to be ignored and she had the audacity to ignore him, that, and he didn't like the way Faith was getting on with Buffy.
Then just what Faith was proposing got to him. "You're trying to buy your way back into our good graces, you whore," he said, with a shocked look on his face. Focusing on Buffy, he was just as shocked by her, "And you're going to let her," he stated.
Faith snapped a look at Xander, her brown eyes ablaze with anger. She started to get up, but found some resistance on her thigh. Looking down, she found Buffy's hand.
Buffy laid a restraining hand on Faith's leg before she herself looked at Xander, "Get out," she said in a calm voice. Noticing Xander didn't make a move at all, Buffy's own eyes flashed a little. "Xander, I said get out. Get out of my house. When you're sorry for what you just said you can come back," she repeatedly said, her voice only slightly rising but it was nonetheless, a tone of command.
Xander flinched at the look from Buffy and glared at Faith again, got up and walked over to the front door, "Anya?" he called uncertainly after her.
The whole room watched as Xander walked out then turned as one to focus on Anya. "You don't have to go Anya, and you don't have to stay. Either way I'm well aware of exactly who said what, and I won't think less of you if you join him," Buffy said.
Anya smiled, reassured. She was still getting used to the whole friends thing and with Xander having said those hasty things she was glad that Buffy wasn't going to hold it against her. "I'll go, maybe I can talk to him," she said, getting up and walking after Xander. A few seconds later the front door closed.
After that, Buffy turned to Faith and looked at her for a second as Faith sank back into the couch. "Could we have a minute please guys?" she asked, not looking up.
Willow nodded her head, "Of course, come on Dawnie, it's getting pretty close to lunchtime," she said with an uncertain smile back at Buffy as she, Tara and Dawn walked into the kitchen.
Buffy put a hand out and put it on Faith's shoulder. "I just want to say thank you, and sorry," she said with a half smile, which was apologetic.
"For what?" Faith asked, confused. "I didn't do anything," she said, trying to work out why Buffy was saying thank you and sorry.
Buffy nodded, "Exactly," she said in agreement. "Xander said some very harsh and untrue things. Well, everything he said was harsh and untrue, and you didn't rise to the bait. I know you want to tell them about pulling me out of heaven, but it would hurt them so much to know that," Buffy said, her thoughts drifting off.
Faith squirmed a little under the attention; no matter how much she'd changed she was still unused to expressing her feelings. "Yeah, I want to tell them, but not as a weapon. No point in throwing it in Xander's face; I'd be no better than he was and just as bad as I was last time," she said with a nod of her head.
Buffy smiled and nodded her head, getting up off the couch and offering Faith a hand, "Which is why I said thank you and sorry."
Faith took the offered hand to help herself out of the couch even though she didn't really need it. She was, however, slightly surprised when Buffy kept hold of her hand as together they walked into the kitchen holding hands.
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Chapter 5
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Xander emerged from the basement into the kitchen, where the ladies of the house were waiting the outcome. Looking around the kitchen, Willow and Tara were sitting beside each other and Dawn was across from them at the table, Buffy was standing near the sink, her back to the room with Faith standing beside her, facing Buffy.
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Upon seeing the dark Slayer, his eyes narrowed and he opened his mouth to say something. Willow caught his eye and shook her head, and he bit back the words he was going to say. He'd take it up with Buffy or Willow later.
Following behind Xander was the plumber friend of his that he had met through work. Looking over at Buffy's back, he started, "Basically your pipes are shot," he said, then, with a deep breath, "I mean the whole system is gonna have to be replaced. What you need is a full copper re-pipe job," he said, offering a small slip of paper.
Willow looked at Tara then across at Xander before taking the offered slip. "Full copper re-pipes?" That sounds potentially pricey," she said.
"Well, the number is one the invoice," Tito the plumber said, gesturing to the slip, then with a pat on Xander's shoulders he turned and let himself out of the house.
Before Willow could actually look at the amount needed, Dawn grabbed the slip of paper and gave it a strange look. "That's a weird phone number," she said. "Oh wait," she said, looking up at Xander, "Is that the bill?" she asked uncertainly.
Xander looked from Willow to Dawn with a glance at Buffy then gave Dawn an apologetic look. He was well aware of just how tight money for the household was. "Hey, Tito cut you a good deal down there," he said, trying to defend his friend. "Those are his bargain prices, I did a little haggling for you."
Buffy finally turned around after a look at Faith, who was ignoring everybody and watching Buffy, and looked at Xander. "Thank you," she said with a small smile. "So, we'll pay him what's the big?" she asked, not having seen the looks the others had been sharing.
There was another exchange of looks between Xander, Willow, Dawn and Tara, almost guilty in nature.
Willow got up from where she was sitting and moved over to flank Buffy, opposite to Faith. "Um, Buffy, I know you're still getting on your feet after..." Willow trailed off, trying to find a good way of saying it.
Buffy glanced at Willow and arched an eyebrow, "Lying flat on my back?" she suggested dryly.
Willow, not being able to find any better way of putting it, nodded her head, biting her bottom lip. "Yeah. Uh, but there is some money stuff we're gonna have to talk to you about."
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Ten minutes later they were all sitting in the lounge room. Now Anya had joined them and she and Xander were sharing a lounge chair, whilst Tara took the other chair. Buffy was sitting on the middle of the couch with Faith and Dawn on either side. Willow was kneeling on the ground across the coffee table, which was stacked with papers. They had been discussing the money trouble that Buffy now found herself in.
Dawn was looking from Anya to Willow then Buffy with a worried look on her face. "So what are we gonna do?" she asked, looking to her sister for answers.
For a second the lounge room was silent as everybody struggled to come up with ideas.
Buffy was the first to answer, having put no real thought into her idea at all. "Easy," she said with a smile, "We burn the house to the ground and collect the insurance," she said, looking around the room. "Plus, fire? Pretty," she said factually.
Everybody in the room with the exception of the Slayers looked at Buffy, their previously worried looks turning to scared ones, thinking that Buffy was serious.
Faith, on the other hand laughed. "Is burning your general answer for everything B?" she asked, "First school gyms, then whole schools, both pretty big set ups, and now trying for a happy medium of your own house?" she said. "The insurance wouldn't last forever and exactly where were you planning to live afterwards?"
Xander just glared at the dark Slayer from his seat, "And what? Violence is your answer for everything?" he snapped. He'd been getting more and more annoyed with the Slayers as the day had progressed. Faith was always around Buffy, trying to get close to the blonde Slayer, or so Xander thought, probably so she could stab Buffy in the back. And as for Buffy, well they were her friends, not Faith. If she was going to need help it should come from himself, Tara, Willow or Dawn. Even Anya was better than Faith, but Buffy hadn't done anything but stick around with Faith.
Faith looked across at Xander and took in his annoyed look, biting back the quick retort she had. After all, she had gotten her second chance and now was the time to prove she had grown up. Looking at Buffy and noticing the tenseness in her, she ignored Xander and smiled, "Speaking of finances, I suppose I'd better check my own. If I'm to live here, I might as well pay board." Faith looked thoughtful for a second, "Perhaps I should rent out my old apartment. It was a pretty good one and should be worth a bit to rent," she said, still looking at Buffy.
Buffy blinked for a second then actually thought about what Faith said. "Well, we don't really need it do we?" she asked, "We still have access to Angel's apartment, and if we need to we can use that for storage and stuff. Maybe I could call him and ask if I can rent it out," Buffy said, with a slightly doubtful look on her face.
A deep sigh came from Willow, Tara and Dawn as the tension started to dissipate after Xander's words. Willow was well aware that Faith had changed, but still there was that uncertainty that she might still react to harsh words.
"What? Checking the blood money the mayor left you?" Xander sneered at Faith. He never liked to be ignored and she had the audacity to ignore him, that, and he didn't like the way Faith was getting on with Buffy.
Then just what Faith was proposing got to him. "You're trying to buy your way back into our good graces, you whore," he said, with a shocked look on his face. Focusing on Buffy, he was just as shocked by her, "And you're going to let her," he stated.
Faith snapped a look at Xander, her brown eyes ablaze with anger. She started to get up, but found some resistance on her thigh. Looking down, she found Buffy's hand.
Buffy laid a restraining hand on Faith's leg before she herself looked at Xander, "Get out," she said in a calm voice. Noticing Xander didn't make a move at all, Buffy's own eyes flashed a little. "Xander, I said get out. Get out of my house. When you're sorry for what you just said you can come back," she repeatedly said, her voice only slightly rising but it was nonetheless, a tone of command.
Xander flinched at the look from Buffy and glared at Faith again, got up and walked over to the front door, "Anya?" he called uncertainly after her.
The whole room watched as Xander walked out then turned as one to focus on Anya. "You don't have to go Anya, and you don't have to stay. Either way I'm well aware of exactly who said what, and I won't think less of you if you join him," Buffy said.
Anya smiled, reassured. She was still getting used to the whole friends thing and with Xander having said those hasty things she was glad that Buffy wasn't going to hold it against her. "I'll go, maybe I can talk to him," she said, getting up and walking after Xander. A few seconds later the front door closed.
After that, Buffy turned to Faith and looked at her for a second as Faith sank back into the couch. "Could we have a minute please guys?" she asked, not looking up.
Willow nodded her head, "Of course, come on Dawnie, it's getting pretty close to lunchtime," she said with an uncertain smile back at Buffy as she, Tara and Dawn walked into the kitchen.
Buffy put a hand out and put it on Faith's shoulder. "I just want to say thank you, and sorry," she said with a half smile, which was apologetic.
"For what?" Faith asked, confused. "I didn't do anything," she said, trying to work out why Buffy was saying thank you and sorry.
Buffy nodded, "Exactly," she said in agreement. "Xander said some very harsh and untrue things. Well, everything he said was harsh and untrue, and you didn't rise to the bait. I know you want to tell them about pulling me out of heaven, but it would hurt them so much to know that," Buffy said, her thoughts drifting off.
Faith squirmed a little under the attention; no matter how much she'd changed she was still unused to expressing her feelings. "Yeah, I want to tell them, but not as a weapon. No point in throwing it in Xander's face; I'd be no better than he was and just as bad as I was last time," she said with a nod of her head.
Buffy smiled and nodded her head, getting up off the couch and offering Faith a hand, "Which is why I said thank you and sorry."
Faith took the offered hand to help herself out of the couch even though she didn't really need it. She was, however, slightly surprised when Buffy kept hold of her hand as together they walked into the kitchen holding hands.