The Abandoned Kit
Chapter 3. A moment, for my readers, if you will.
Antoinette Herrera
aka poetisa- I read your review at least three times. And I can't thank you enough for your words, and advice. I'm also very glad you liked the fic. Also, I had no idea I was spelling 'youko' wrong. Thanx for correcting me!!^0^ Taking all into consideration, I go for the third chapter. Words are insufficient. I pay, with more chaps.
I'll try to add some twists, just 4 fun.
Chap. 3:
*Hiei's pov*
I felt it the moment I had looked into the kits eyes. I hadn't recognized...no. I knew it. I just didn't let it register.
I am sitting outside his window. Where I was once able to find the fox no matter what. But.... I can't even look into the window. I don't know why I'm here.
I curse under my breath, watching as his ningen family bustle around in their useless ways. But something lags with them. They're shoulder are slumped and the demons within them have grown. "Ch', I don't need this." And I'm gone. I'm NOT going to see that..the child. I'm going to see Mukuro.
*normal* After the beginning fiasco of getting everything in order, from feeding Kurama, to dealing with playing with Kurama. The little youko, though sweet as anything, could be very demanding.
Currently, Yukina was attempting to teach him some of the things he should know as a fox spirit. The two are beside a large flower bed, roses, lilies, pansies, daffodils, forget-me-nots and a bunch of small white flowers that graced the landscape. Standing next to the short girl, Kurama looked even smaller, holding her hand and looking very cute as she told him the names of flowers, and some things about caring for each one.
Sucking his thumb, Kurama glances at Yukina, to the flowers, many times as she goes.
From the porch of the temple, Genkai and Yuusuke were watching. Genkai's eyes were narrowed, and Yuusuke looked tired as he stood. It's going to be a long day, for them.
*Click click click..*
The small youko child's attention was drawn suddenly to the stairs leading to the temple, past the gate. Two golden ears piqued this way and that, searching for the source of the sound. Yukina, and the others, did not hear it, until the noise brought with it the figure of a seventeen year old girl.
Kurama seemed unsure as to what he should do; should he run to daddy? Or stay with the soft girl that was talking to him about flowers? He seemed to puzzle over this, long enough for the girl to run right past him and Yukina.
"Keiko!" Kurama turned back to face the direction of his papa, beginning to mutter and quip about the girl getting by so fast, and watching as she practically jumped on his papa.
"Yuusuke!!!" the other grimaced. "Where have you been!? You've missed three days of school! All the teachers are mad, and Kuwabara's acting weird! You better explain!!" Yuusuke was cringing, "Heh.eheh. Um, well. I was at the Makai, and.-" "I don't want to hear it!" "But you just said-" "Not your two hour long explanation that goes in circles and means absolutely nothing!!"
Yuusuke stopped his next retaliate, as a small tug on his green pants. Looking down simultaneously with Keiko, Yuusukes and hers reactions were very different.
"Papa," the small golden hared youko child chimed innocently, his small hand gripping the fabric of his pants. Yuusukes reaction, called for him to lean down, and lift the small being into his arms.
Keikos reaction, differed much. Eyes popping out of her head exasperatedly, jumping back into a warded pose. She relaxed quickly, more in shock now, as she watched Yuusuke lift the small one and hold him in his arms. Ignoring her for the moment, Yuusuke questioned the little youko o his actions. The brown hared girl barely moved as she watched Yuusuke talk gently with the child.
"Yu-Yuusuke..." He turned his black eyes back on her, questioningly. "Yuusuke, who-what is that?" her voice seemed breathless even o her. The other blinks, and looks at her, then the quietly blinking gold-head in his arms. "Oh, this is, Kurama. I-"
*THUD*
"Keiko?" _+_
End. Ch. 3 Gomen nasai, short, hai. But the next will be longer. I just need 2 figure out how to get this into full motion. Suggestions if u have them are nice, but not required. C/C!
Chapter 3. A moment, for my readers, if you will.
Antoinette Herrera
aka poetisa- I read your review at least three times. And I can't thank you enough for your words, and advice. I'm also very glad you liked the fic. Also, I had no idea I was spelling 'youko' wrong. Thanx for correcting me!!^0^ Taking all into consideration, I go for the third chapter. Words are insufficient. I pay, with more chaps.
I'll try to add some twists, just 4 fun.
Chap. 3:
*Hiei's pov*
I felt it the moment I had looked into the kits eyes. I hadn't recognized...no. I knew it. I just didn't let it register.
I am sitting outside his window. Where I was once able to find the fox no matter what. But.... I can't even look into the window. I don't know why I'm here.
I curse under my breath, watching as his ningen family bustle around in their useless ways. But something lags with them. They're shoulder are slumped and the demons within them have grown. "Ch', I don't need this." And I'm gone. I'm NOT going to see that..the child. I'm going to see Mukuro.
*normal* After the beginning fiasco of getting everything in order, from feeding Kurama, to dealing with playing with Kurama. The little youko, though sweet as anything, could be very demanding.
Currently, Yukina was attempting to teach him some of the things he should know as a fox spirit. The two are beside a large flower bed, roses, lilies, pansies, daffodils, forget-me-nots and a bunch of small white flowers that graced the landscape. Standing next to the short girl, Kurama looked even smaller, holding her hand and looking very cute as she told him the names of flowers, and some things about caring for each one.
Sucking his thumb, Kurama glances at Yukina, to the flowers, many times as she goes.
From the porch of the temple, Genkai and Yuusuke were watching. Genkai's eyes were narrowed, and Yuusuke looked tired as he stood. It's going to be a long day, for them.
*Click click click..*
The small youko child's attention was drawn suddenly to the stairs leading to the temple, past the gate. Two golden ears piqued this way and that, searching for the source of the sound. Yukina, and the others, did not hear it, until the noise brought with it the figure of a seventeen year old girl.
Kurama seemed unsure as to what he should do; should he run to daddy? Or stay with the soft girl that was talking to him about flowers? He seemed to puzzle over this, long enough for the girl to run right past him and Yukina.
"Keiko!" Kurama turned back to face the direction of his papa, beginning to mutter and quip about the girl getting by so fast, and watching as she practically jumped on his papa.
"Yuusuke!!!" the other grimaced. "Where have you been!? You've missed three days of school! All the teachers are mad, and Kuwabara's acting weird! You better explain!!" Yuusuke was cringing, "Heh.eheh. Um, well. I was at the Makai, and.-" "I don't want to hear it!" "But you just said-" "Not your two hour long explanation that goes in circles and means absolutely nothing!!"
Yuusuke stopped his next retaliate, as a small tug on his green pants. Looking down simultaneously with Keiko, Yuusukes and hers reactions were very different.
"Papa," the small golden hared youko child chimed innocently, his small hand gripping the fabric of his pants. Yuusukes reaction, called for him to lean down, and lift the small being into his arms.
Keikos reaction, differed much. Eyes popping out of her head exasperatedly, jumping back into a warded pose. She relaxed quickly, more in shock now, as she watched Yuusuke lift the small one and hold him in his arms. Ignoring her for the moment, Yuusuke questioned the little youko o his actions. The brown hared girl barely moved as she watched Yuusuke talk gently with the child.
"Yu-Yuusuke..." He turned his black eyes back on her, questioningly. "Yuusuke, who-what is that?" her voice seemed breathless even o her. The other blinks, and looks at her, then the quietly blinking gold-head in his arms. "Oh, this is, Kurama. I-"
*THUD*
"Keiko?" _+_
End. Ch. 3 Gomen nasai, short, hai. But the next will be longer. I just need 2 figure out how to get this into full motion. Suggestions if u have them are nice, but not required. C/C!