Hey! Ok I will admit that this does start out as a Mary Sue but don't be
afraid! You see I also hate Mary Sues but this story has been nagging me
for a while. This is a completely different style of Mary Sue!
It was a cold after noon in mid winter. Bethany, or Moonie as her friends called her, shivered as she walked through the frozen greenbelt. She had just completed her last day of school before winter break and was heading home.
Moonie was a sophomore in high school and a big fan of Lord of the Rings. Many people thought her to be strange because she wasn't in love with Legolas. No, she really didn't care for Legolas that much, it was Gimli that had caught her attention. She had always been rather fond of the dwarf. He was brave and loyal, he was everything she wanted in a story book character.
Moonie blinked the snow from her eyes and continued walking, and that was when she saw it. A swish of black fabric as if from a cloak, she approached the place she had seen it slowly. She had to take off her glasses and tuck her tangled mousy red hair behind her ears to get a better look.
As she stepped into the small grove a loud piercing shriek caused her to cover her ears. She felt something metal grab her neck. She opened her eyes as she was lifted off the ground and wished she hadn't.
There standing in front of her was a Nazgûl.
It was huge. It shrieked again and began to crush her throat. She tried to scream but couldn't find her voice. Tears streamed down her face as her air supply was cut off. Black began to hover around her vision. Terrified she began to struggle weakly. Her backpack fell to the ground with a thud.
Moonie's mind was reeling. She was in utter agony. The Nazgûl shrieked again, only this time it seemed afraid. A feeling of being violently pulled away settled in her stomach. She was suddenly slammed into the ground.
Her mind began working mildly again. She was somewhere warm with several people sitting in a circle. She heard a very familiar scream nearby.
Mika?
How could Mika be here she lived several blocks away. Moonie was suddenly overcome with a feeling of severe nausea and light headedness. She looked up and around her at the blurred figures before exhaustion took over and she passed out.
~*~
Shanell , or Mika as her friends called her, stared in horror at the lifeless body of Moonie. Normally she would have turned and walked away from Moonie but right now she was terrified. She had just walked in the door of her house when she was attacked by what looked like an orc. It had hit her hard enough to send her senses into a frenzy. How she got here she didn't know. The one thing she did know was that this place looked like Rivendell and she was screaming her head off in the middle of Elrond's council.
Half the council was on its feet in an instant. A man she recognized as Aragorn approached Moonie and checked for signs of life.
Aragorn looked at Elrond, fear on his face.
"She's dying."
Elrond nodded and ran off into the palace. Aragorn gently lifted Moonie into his arms and followed Elrond. Mika watched as Legolas followed them. She smacked herself in the forehead and ran after them.
~*~
Moonie was in that place between dreams and awareness. She felt as though someone was carrying her and running. She opened her eyes blearily and looked up at the man who carried her. She vaguely recognized Aragorn and reached up to weakly touch his face. Her looked down at her.
"Help me." Moonie whispered before losing consciousness yet again.
~*~ Aragorn looked down at the young girl in worry. She was losing life fast. HE didn't care that she and the other girl had suddenly appeared in a flash of light. All that mattered now was that this girl was dying and that she had just asked for help.
He ran into the healing chamber and laid her down on the bed carefully. He stripped the strange looking coat off her and laid it on a nearby chair before pulling off her boots and pulling the covers over her. He looked at Elrond and nodded. The elf lord approached the girl and looked down at the girl.
Aragorn turned at see Legolas trying to hold back the other girl who was sobbing and trying to get into the room.
He left the room and stood in front of her, closing the door behind him. He knelt and looked at the sobbing girl.
"Don't worry" he said. " Elrond will take care of her. Now lets go get you cleaned up and maybe you can tell us what's going on."
Mika nodded numbly and let them lead her down the hallway.
So whatcha think? Please tell me!
It was a cold after noon in mid winter. Bethany, or Moonie as her friends called her, shivered as she walked through the frozen greenbelt. She had just completed her last day of school before winter break and was heading home.
Moonie was a sophomore in high school and a big fan of Lord of the Rings. Many people thought her to be strange because she wasn't in love with Legolas. No, she really didn't care for Legolas that much, it was Gimli that had caught her attention. She had always been rather fond of the dwarf. He was brave and loyal, he was everything she wanted in a story book character.
Moonie blinked the snow from her eyes and continued walking, and that was when she saw it. A swish of black fabric as if from a cloak, she approached the place she had seen it slowly. She had to take off her glasses and tuck her tangled mousy red hair behind her ears to get a better look.
As she stepped into the small grove a loud piercing shriek caused her to cover her ears. She felt something metal grab her neck. She opened her eyes as she was lifted off the ground and wished she hadn't.
There standing in front of her was a Nazgûl.
It was huge. It shrieked again and began to crush her throat. She tried to scream but couldn't find her voice. Tears streamed down her face as her air supply was cut off. Black began to hover around her vision. Terrified she began to struggle weakly. Her backpack fell to the ground with a thud.
Moonie's mind was reeling. She was in utter agony. The Nazgûl shrieked again, only this time it seemed afraid. A feeling of being violently pulled away settled in her stomach. She was suddenly slammed into the ground.
Her mind began working mildly again. She was somewhere warm with several people sitting in a circle. She heard a very familiar scream nearby.
Mika?
How could Mika be here she lived several blocks away. Moonie was suddenly overcome with a feeling of severe nausea and light headedness. She looked up and around her at the blurred figures before exhaustion took over and she passed out.
~*~
Shanell , or Mika as her friends called her, stared in horror at the lifeless body of Moonie. Normally she would have turned and walked away from Moonie but right now she was terrified. She had just walked in the door of her house when she was attacked by what looked like an orc. It had hit her hard enough to send her senses into a frenzy. How she got here she didn't know. The one thing she did know was that this place looked like Rivendell and she was screaming her head off in the middle of Elrond's council.
Half the council was on its feet in an instant. A man she recognized as Aragorn approached Moonie and checked for signs of life.
Aragorn looked at Elrond, fear on his face.
"She's dying."
Elrond nodded and ran off into the palace. Aragorn gently lifted Moonie into his arms and followed Elrond. Mika watched as Legolas followed them. She smacked herself in the forehead and ran after them.
~*~
Moonie was in that place between dreams and awareness. She felt as though someone was carrying her and running. She opened her eyes blearily and looked up at the man who carried her. She vaguely recognized Aragorn and reached up to weakly touch his face. Her looked down at her.
"Help me." Moonie whispered before losing consciousness yet again.
~*~ Aragorn looked down at the young girl in worry. She was losing life fast. HE didn't care that she and the other girl had suddenly appeared in a flash of light. All that mattered now was that this girl was dying and that she had just asked for help.
He ran into the healing chamber and laid her down on the bed carefully. He stripped the strange looking coat off her and laid it on a nearby chair before pulling off her boots and pulling the covers over her. He looked at Elrond and nodded. The elf lord approached the girl and looked down at the girl.
Aragorn turned at see Legolas trying to hold back the other girl who was sobbing and trying to get into the room.
He left the room and stood in front of her, closing the door behind him. He knelt and looked at the sobbing girl.
"Don't worry" he said. " Elrond will take care of her. Now lets go get you cleaned up and maybe you can tell us what's going on."
Mika nodded numbly and let them lead her down the hallway.
So whatcha think? Please tell me!