LOTR Fan - Again, Thankyou for your review - honest, constructive, and encouraging. Sorry if Sirius is a bit cartoonish -I didn't really mean him to be that way, I guess I'm just not that good at writing believable bad characters. I suppose I've watched too many cheesy movies, or something like that. Thankyou, again. ;0)
innocent-penguin - Thankyou so much for your wonderfully informative and constructive review. It is so nice to know that you took some time out of your obviously busy schedule of flaming other people's hard work to write such lovely comments about mine. *finishes being sarcastic*
Have Mary-Sue's changed drastically in the last few seconds? Because I shall only say this one more time about my story - it is not a Mary-Sue. There is not a character in it called Mary-Sue, there is no romance between Legolas and Edie. The reason Legolas is helping Edie will be revealed in the last chapter - why are people so goddamn impatient about these things? There is a reason, it's a good reason. (Also, just for the record 'Just' and 'his' don't have the letter 'z' in them.)
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"You cannot fight!" Legolas practically snaps at Edie. "What are you going to do? Stand there and swing your knife around aimlessly, hoping to hit something before you get cleaved in half yourself?"
Edie is taken aback. She is stunned, and for a moment does not speak, just stands looking at Legolas with her mouth half open and her hands down loosely at her sides.
"I...I thought I could help."
"I just think you would be safer if you went and hid somewhere." Legolas says, calm once again, gesturing to the trees and bushes that surround them.
"I am no coward!" Edie says defiantly.
"You have no skill with sword or bow. I know you are no coward, you showed that the second time we met. I worry for you, I don't want you to be endangered unnecessarily and your leg will hold you back."
Edie snorts, "Legolas, let me fight."
"No, I will not. No more arguing. You will hide." The Elf says, and ushers her off into the trees.
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Sirius Goldsbane brings his men forth and sends them into the clearing. While the Elf is busy with them, he will have the honours of applying his trade to the girl.
He watches from the bushes as the men creep up behind the Elf, who turns and shoots Darathorn with an arrow. Fast as ever. Down he goes, five left.
Sirius looks around, he would bet his trade that the girl is hiding somewhere in the bushes. He strolls casually around the perimeter of clearing where the Elven Prince fights, looking for any sign of movement with his sharp eyes.
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Edie is hiding in a bush where she has a good view of Legolas fighting, but will not be seen.
She watches him as he now uses his sword to fend off the enemy and his skill causes her admiration for him to grow, despite what she has previously said.
Legolas has disposed of all but one of the attackers, who is battling bravely against him.
Then Edie spies a pair of legs walking past, and recognises them as those of Sirius, the man from the tavern. She freezes, and tries to breath as quietly as she can.
Edie reaches down for the 'fruit' knife in her boot, and pulls it quietly out, holding it in front of her as if its very presence will protect her.
She sees Sirius walk past her, and he goes a little way into the trees. She almost sighs with relief, but he turns and strides towards the bush where she is hiding.
Edie stays still, and hopes that if she makes no noise, then Sirius will just go away. No such luck.
He looks down at her. "'Hidin' from someone?" he leers down upon her.
Quick as a flash, Edie gets up and bolts despite her aching leg, cursing along the way. She tries to run to where Legolas is - she can see him in the clearing - but Sirius is too fast and catches up with her.
He grabs her round the waist and takes the knife off her, wasting no time before he stabs it deep into her side.
Edie gasps and falls as Legolas comes up behind Sirius and gets him by the throat, slamming him up against the nearest tree.
Edie rolls over and looks numbly at her side. It seems that everything is running in slow motion as she runs her bloodied hand in front of her eyes, gawping at the iron red. She can't feel anything. She is in shock.
Legolas holds the man by his throat against a tree. "Who sent you?" he asks, giving the assassin the hawk-eyes.
Sirius does not answer, but stares at Legolas defiantly.
"Who sent you?" Legolas repeats, this time pressing a little harder on the man's throat.
"I'll never tell ya!" Sirius spits at Legolas.
"Who sent you?" Legolas asks and narrows his eyes. "It was Lord Antinous."
Sirius looks at Legolas with contempt, and Legolas can see in his eyes that he has guessed right.
"Why?" he asks. "Why would Lord Antinous send a man like you to kill an innocent?"
"I don't know. I'm just doin' ma job." Sirius confirms Legolas's suspicions once and for all.
The Elf shakes his head bitterly and lets go of Sirius's neck, steps back, and shoots him in the heart with an arrow before Sirius can draw another breath.
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More to come...;0)
innocent-penguin - Thankyou so much for your wonderfully informative and constructive review. It is so nice to know that you took some time out of your obviously busy schedule of flaming other people's hard work to write such lovely comments about mine. *finishes being sarcastic*
Have Mary-Sue's changed drastically in the last few seconds? Because I shall only say this one more time about my story - it is not a Mary-Sue. There is not a character in it called Mary-Sue, there is no romance between Legolas and Edie. The reason Legolas is helping Edie will be revealed in the last chapter - why are people so goddamn impatient about these things? There is a reason, it's a good reason. (Also, just for the record 'Just' and 'his' don't have the letter 'z' in them.)
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"You cannot fight!" Legolas practically snaps at Edie. "What are you going to do? Stand there and swing your knife around aimlessly, hoping to hit something before you get cleaved in half yourself?"
Edie is taken aback. She is stunned, and for a moment does not speak, just stands looking at Legolas with her mouth half open and her hands down loosely at her sides.
"I...I thought I could help."
"I just think you would be safer if you went and hid somewhere." Legolas says, calm once again, gesturing to the trees and bushes that surround them.
"I am no coward!" Edie says defiantly.
"You have no skill with sword or bow. I know you are no coward, you showed that the second time we met. I worry for you, I don't want you to be endangered unnecessarily and your leg will hold you back."
Edie snorts, "Legolas, let me fight."
"No, I will not. No more arguing. You will hide." The Elf says, and ushers her off into the trees.
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Sirius Goldsbane brings his men forth and sends them into the clearing. While the Elf is busy with them, he will have the honours of applying his trade to the girl.
He watches from the bushes as the men creep up behind the Elf, who turns and shoots Darathorn with an arrow. Fast as ever. Down he goes, five left.
Sirius looks around, he would bet his trade that the girl is hiding somewhere in the bushes. He strolls casually around the perimeter of clearing where the Elven Prince fights, looking for any sign of movement with his sharp eyes.
***********
Edie is hiding in a bush where she has a good view of Legolas fighting, but will not be seen.
She watches him as he now uses his sword to fend off the enemy and his skill causes her admiration for him to grow, despite what she has previously said.
Legolas has disposed of all but one of the attackers, who is battling bravely against him.
Then Edie spies a pair of legs walking past, and recognises them as those of Sirius, the man from the tavern. She freezes, and tries to breath as quietly as she can.
Edie reaches down for the 'fruit' knife in her boot, and pulls it quietly out, holding it in front of her as if its very presence will protect her.
She sees Sirius walk past her, and he goes a little way into the trees. She almost sighs with relief, but he turns and strides towards the bush where she is hiding.
Edie stays still, and hopes that if she makes no noise, then Sirius will just go away. No such luck.
He looks down at her. "'Hidin' from someone?" he leers down upon her.
Quick as a flash, Edie gets up and bolts despite her aching leg, cursing along the way. She tries to run to where Legolas is - she can see him in the clearing - but Sirius is too fast and catches up with her.
He grabs her round the waist and takes the knife off her, wasting no time before he stabs it deep into her side.
Edie gasps and falls as Legolas comes up behind Sirius and gets him by the throat, slamming him up against the nearest tree.
Edie rolls over and looks numbly at her side. It seems that everything is running in slow motion as she runs her bloodied hand in front of her eyes, gawping at the iron red. She can't feel anything. She is in shock.
Legolas holds the man by his throat against a tree. "Who sent you?" he asks, giving the assassin the hawk-eyes.
Sirius does not answer, but stares at Legolas defiantly.
"Who sent you?" Legolas repeats, this time pressing a little harder on the man's throat.
"I'll never tell ya!" Sirius spits at Legolas.
"Who sent you?" Legolas asks and narrows his eyes. "It was Lord Antinous."
Sirius looks at Legolas with contempt, and Legolas can see in his eyes that he has guessed right.
"Why?" he asks. "Why would Lord Antinous send a man like you to kill an innocent?"
"I don't know. I'm just doin' ma job." Sirius confirms Legolas's suspicions once and for all.
The Elf shakes his head bitterly and lets go of Sirius's neck, steps back, and shoots him in the heart with an arrow before Sirius can draw another breath.
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More to come...;0)