Please read this and review this, tell me what I need to improve and what is good.
This story isn't a full original I basically took the slug scene from the second book of Harry Potter and just added some stuff in and basically played around with it.
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Harry Potter And The Slugs And Salmon
Harry and Ron ran as fast as they could to Hagrid's hut. He would know what to do. He always knew what to do.
"I can't believe you tried to curse him again Ron, You knew that your wand is broken and that it always backfires."
"Yeah but Harry, you can't say that you wouldn't have done the same thing if you were there. Blimey, he called my girlfriend a mudblood, a mudblood! *Glorg* I feel terrible, I would've done a worse curse if my wand wasn't broken."
"Then maybe it's a good thing you wand is broken then, could you imagine if Snape found out you were trying to curse his favourite student."
"Ah . . . Harry, can we please not talk, these slugs . . . "
"Sorry Ron, lets just get to Hagrid's hut."
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"Hagrid, can you help Ron?"
"What happened here?" Hagrid asked Harry while bustling around for a bucket.
"Malfoy called Hermione a . . . "
"Mudblood" Harry finished Ron's sentence as a fresh wave a slugs appeared.
"So Ron tried curse him but his wand backfired."
"Ah, same thing happened to me once, but it was salmon, and it came from me nose."
"What happened?" Ron managed to say before more slugs came from his mouth.
"Well, it was while I was still at Hogwarts, I was in me third year, when one boy got on me nerves." Hagrid said uncomfortably.
"It was late at night and I was . . . mindin' my own business, when a boy called Tom somfin' started accusin' me of . . . well stuff I didn' do, so I tried a curse on him, but somfin' strange happened an' it backfired on me. Salmon came out of me nose for a month after that." Hagrid said as he reminisced.
"Will it take that long for Ron to stop spewing up slugs?"
"Nah, I don' imagine it should, my curse was stronger an all as I was in my third year."
"So . . . what can we do?" Ron said quickly before sticking his head back into the bucket.
"We just have to wait it out. Treacle anyone?"
This story isn't a full original I basically took the slug scene from the second book of Harry Potter and just added some stuff in and basically played around with it.
*~*~*~*
Harry Potter And The Slugs And Salmon
Harry and Ron ran as fast as they could to Hagrid's hut. He would know what to do. He always knew what to do.
"I can't believe you tried to curse him again Ron, You knew that your wand is broken and that it always backfires."
"Yeah but Harry, you can't say that you wouldn't have done the same thing if you were there. Blimey, he called my girlfriend a mudblood, a mudblood! *Glorg* I feel terrible, I would've done a worse curse if my wand wasn't broken."
"Then maybe it's a good thing you wand is broken then, could you imagine if Snape found out you were trying to curse his favourite student."
"Ah . . . Harry, can we please not talk, these slugs . . . "
"Sorry Ron, lets just get to Hagrid's hut."
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"Hagrid, can you help Ron?"
"What happened here?" Hagrid asked Harry while bustling around for a bucket.
"Malfoy called Hermione a . . . "
"Mudblood" Harry finished Ron's sentence as a fresh wave a slugs appeared.
"So Ron tried curse him but his wand backfired."
"Ah, same thing happened to me once, but it was salmon, and it came from me nose."
"What happened?" Ron managed to say before more slugs came from his mouth.
"Well, it was while I was still at Hogwarts, I was in me third year, when one boy got on me nerves." Hagrid said uncomfortably.
"It was late at night and I was . . . mindin' my own business, when a boy called Tom somfin' started accusin' me of . . . well stuff I didn' do, so I tried a curse on him, but somfin' strange happened an' it backfired on me. Salmon came out of me nose for a month after that." Hagrid said as he reminisced.
"Will it take that long for Ron to stop spewing up slugs?"
"Nah, I don' imagine it should, my curse was stronger an all as I was in my third year."
"So . . . what can we do?" Ron said quickly before sticking his head back into the bucket.
"We just have to wait it out. Treacle anyone?"