Literary Review Sheet
Title: Corrupt
Author: RoseWithThorns
Classification: Harry Potter
Setting: Hogwart's Witchcraft and Wizardry; January 26-27, 2003
Point of View: omniscient
Plot:
This work begins with the entrance of our main protagonist, Hermione Granger. A dream sequence commences a ride of emotional turbulence- bitter, full of self-hatred, and loneliness. As Draco Malfoy is examined through his interaction with Pansy and Severus Snape, the reader notes the difference between the two: while Hermione's depression is internalized, Draco's is situational, i.e. his involvement with Death Eaters. He notices that Hermione approaches Gryffindor table and Harry Potter, and this interaction causes a rage to boil in Draco, though at the time he is not sure why he should even care. Snape cautions him to be aware of her, but not to overwhelm himself with her actions.
Snape warns Hermione indirectly to be careful. Potions class commences and when Hermione consumes the Innocence Spell, she collapses. Draco and Harry fight over her, both obviously concerned for her well-being. Draco's suspicions of Snape's knowledge begin. After dropping Hermione off at the Hospital Wing, Severus contemplates her symptoms, he and Draco mainly fear Voldemort's doing in all of this. Hermione awakens, but is weak.
When Snape returns to his classroom, he meets Paxia Devastarium, and they engage in sex. Through this connection, Paxia gains control over the developments between Draco, Harry, and Hermione. Draco and Harry duke it out again over Hermione, this time being broken up by Dumbledore. In the Hospital Wing, Draco and Hermione speak, and he voices his willingness to protect her and his reasons. Harry determines it would be best to avoid Hermione at all costs.
Draco's affections towards Hermione are made known in Chapters Eight and Nine, and when the Dubious Potion is administered, their highly vulnerable hearts are torn by circumstance. Deciding that it would be easier to join the darker forces than fight against them, they make a pact to join the Death Eaters. Paxia, again through sex, manages to forge the same pact with Harry.
In the climax of the story, Harry and Hermione are discovered as muggles attempting to claim the position of Purebloods, Draco and Hermione are bled by Voldemort, who uses the sacrificed body of Paxia to fight Harry Potter, who kills his lover, then kills Voldemort and Lucious Malfoy. Snape reincarnates Draco and Hermione, and they escape.
The conclusion is the stripping of their titles and privileges at Hogwarts for higher statuses, and the discovery that Hermione is pregnant.
Characters:
1. Hermione Granger- seventeen year old 6th year student. Only true muggle to have ever been sorted into the strictly pure-blood Slytherin.
2. Draco Malfoy- seventeen year old 6th year, destined to join the ranks of father Lucious as a Death Eater under Voldemort. Expresses concern over Hermione's sorting.
Detests weaknesses of Harry as a part muggle. Closely confers with Severus Snape.
3. Severus Snape- Potions Master and teacher. Has been a Death Eater for years. Close ties to Lucious, Voldemort, and therefore, Draco. When seduced by Paxia, all concern for anything other than Voldemort's revival dissipates.
4. Paxia Devastarium- eighteen year old 7th year Slytherin. Seduces Snape, and sleeps with Harry Potter, sacrifices herself, and is reincarnated as the final enemy of Harry Potter on behalf of Voldemort's revival.
5. Harry Potter- seventeen year old 6th year Gryffindor. Torn between house rivalries and friendship with Hermione. Destined rival to Voldemort. Seduced by Paxia, and attempts initiation into Death Eaters. Defeats Voldemort permanently.
Symbols:
6. Dream Sequence- meant to illustrate the idea that easy escapes aren't always the best choices in life. Both Hermione and Draco, even Harry, look towards suicide as a means of escape- but the dream dictates that they fail, and Hermione realizes that killing themselves isn't the answer.
7. Spells and Potions- The Innocence Spell was merely a play on words, the spell was supposed to be harmless, and inflicted so much damage on Hermione. An elusion was made in Chapter 7 ("Damn Paxia's timing. If he had only known earlier, he would have never diluted the blends...") that Paxia had attempted to kill Hermione with a previous charm and that potion, but all that really mattered was that Hermione had survived because Paxia hadn't gotten to Snape early enough. The Dubious Spell was explained in Chapter 10, but basically it was Paxia being an out-right liar, telling the kids that it was an Attraction Elixir that would draw secret crushes together. When you have a crush on someone, you doubt their affections toward you, but since Hermione and Draco loved each other, they didn't doubt their love, so Hermione was "attracted" to Harry- her best friend and the one person she didn't understand at the time. Hope that clears that up.
8. Latin Incantations (and Translations)- for obvious reasons, Latin is the easiest language to fit into a fic about magic, so here are the translations for Chapters 11 and 12, since those are the most important.....
~ "Incidere per obtinere il liquidus de vita. Miscere corrumpere et purus. Destruere le donares et revivere il apostolos di guerre..." literally "Incision to obtain the liquid of life (blood). Mix of the corrupt and pure. Destroy the donors and revive the disciple of war." Hence, Hermione and Draco (corrupt and pure bloods respectively) were bled, and Paxia was revived.
~ "Petrificus totalis" c'mon, that's a given! "Total Petrification"
~ "Il che captare, collabi," literally "He who chases, collapses" which Harry called to Paxia, which made her stumble and fall while she ran towards him. I felt that Petrificus Totalis wouldn't work because it was too specific, hence the need for a wand. Since Harry didn't have his wand, by calling that chant out, anyone in the room that would have been after him would have collapsed, since it was only Paxia, it worked out quite nicely, didn't it?
~ "Absorbere Vitalis." literally "Absorb Life" Snape's incantation to revive Draco and Hermione.
Themes:
9. Innocence- in every sense of the word, we are all innocent from the start. Corruption is an outside force that works its way in and can be purged. Innocence is not lost when purity is forsaken. It is always here.
10. Corruption- the main theme of this fic. Through rivalries, sex, and money, corruption forces its way into our world- no matter how sheltered or isolated- but it can be purged. Even Snape realized his own innocence after witnessing Paxia for who she was. But even Paxia had her innocence.
11. Femininity- Hermione is the quintessential doomed romantic, with her own inner strength. Paxia is the quintessential manipulative bitch, using sex to take what she wants. Both have a common bond however- both long for acceptance in a male-dominated society (i.e. Voldemort).
12. Sex- powerful, potent. Sex is shared between two people, and it doesn't matter who is involved or how they got involved- a connection is created. You could fuck in a classroom, you could make love by the fire, sex is sex and the only thing that separates devastation from exuberance is intention. Be careful who you bed...it may come back to haunt you.
13. Paxia Devastarium- did anyone get that or did it go over your heads? Literally, "Peace and Devastation." She was capable of love. She did feel awful after sleeping with Snape, didja catch the Moulin Rouge moment in Chapter 11?, but she knew her purpose in life, and she fulfilled it- which can be commendable. Keep reading, you'll understand my sympathy.
Critique:
So, you've read this far and think I'm nuts? Here's a quick list of me that covers this story. I AM HERMIONE GRANGER AND PAXIA DEVASTARIUM. Not J. K.'s version, don't get me wrong, but close enough. I am a hopeless romantic, but I know how to flirt your socks off. I long for the idea of a bad boy with a soft core. I don't need mush- I need strength. I wanna fuck, but cuddling would be nice too. That's why it stings when my reader's don't feel a little bit of pity for Paxia. Is she a self-righteous, manipulative, bitch? Of course. But somewhere in chapter five, having Snape right where she wanted him, she liked the idea of having that acceptance.
I'm a thespian. I look into character backgrounds. I thought of Paxia as coming from a path of isolation, where the only man that ever accepted her was Voldemort, and she would do anything for him. When she talks to Harry at the end of Chapter 11? She did understand what he was going through! She knew what it was like to love someone and know that those feelings would never be reciprocated because of what she'd done. I know that too. Her actions were some of the most tense lines for me to write. Can you say therapy?! Lol. Besides, I've always liked the idea of getting with Snape...something about him is just so......hot. But Draco too....best solution is to just get both of them using my split personality. *LA- jealous yet?*
As for the whole 'true to the books' thing, I've never read the books, but if you're going to age the characters this far, I think you can toss the books out of the window. Life at 17 is complicated as hell- as I'm sure most of you know. Being 17, I'm living proof. Want depth? I'm the school Freud. There are so many passages in this fiction that relate to me, its almost scary. Like I'm naked on the pages. This was my exposition....thanks for all the feedback, and don't stop sending me your thoughts! This is going to be up till they kick me off, so keep sending them. And be on the look out for my other fics, some of which are lighter- trust me. I do have my goof-ball romantic fluff moments after all. But I can't be half the writer I am without readers- so please review. I don't request flames, but hey, life is hell- a scorch or two won't kill me.
The Beauty, The Pain, A Rose With Thorns.
Title: Corrupt
Author: RoseWithThorns
Classification: Harry Potter
Setting: Hogwart's Witchcraft and Wizardry; January 26-27, 2003
Point of View: omniscient
Plot:
This work begins with the entrance of our main protagonist, Hermione Granger. A dream sequence commences a ride of emotional turbulence- bitter, full of self-hatred, and loneliness. As Draco Malfoy is examined through his interaction with Pansy and Severus Snape, the reader notes the difference between the two: while Hermione's depression is internalized, Draco's is situational, i.e. his involvement with Death Eaters. He notices that Hermione approaches Gryffindor table and Harry Potter, and this interaction causes a rage to boil in Draco, though at the time he is not sure why he should even care. Snape cautions him to be aware of her, but not to overwhelm himself with her actions.
Snape warns Hermione indirectly to be careful. Potions class commences and when Hermione consumes the Innocence Spell, she collapses. Draco and Harry fight over her, both obviously concerned for her well-being. Draco's suspicions of Snape's knowledge begin. After dropping Hermione off at the Hospital Wing, Severus contemplates her symptoms, he and Draco mainly fear Voldemort's doing in all of this. Hermione awakens, but is weak.
When Snape returns to his classroom, he meets Paxia Devastarium, and they engage in sex. Through this connection, Paxia gains control over the developments between Draco, Harry, and Hermione. Draco and Harry duke it out again over Hermione, this time being broken up by Dumbledore. In the Hospital Wing, Draco and Hermione speak, and he voices his willingness to protect her and his reasons. Harry determines it would be best to avoid Hermione at all costs.
Draco's affections towards Hermione are made known in Chapters Eight and Nine, and when the Dubious Potion is administered, their highly vulnerable hearts are torn by circumstance. Deciding that it would be easier to join the darker forces than fight against them, they make a pact to join the Death Eaters. Paxia, again through sex, manages to forge the same pact with Harry.
In the climax of the story, Harry and Hermione are discovered as muggles attempting to claim the position of Purebloods, Draco and Hermione are bled by Voldemort, who uses the sacrificed body of Paxia to fight Harry Potter, who kills his lover, then kills Voldemort and Lucious Malfoy. Snape reincarnates Draco and Hermione, and they escape.
The conclusion is the stripping of their titles and privileges at Hogwarts for higher statuses, and the discovery that Hermione is pregnant.
Characters:
1. Hermione Granger- seventeen year old 6th year student. Only true muggle to have ever been sorted into the strictly pure-blood Slytherin.
2. Draco Malfoy- seventeen year old 6th year, destined to join the ranks of father Lucious as a Death Eater under Voldemort. Expresses concern over Hermione's sorting.
Detests weaknesses of Harry as a part muggle. Closely confers with Severus Snape.
3. Severus Snape- Potions Master and teacher. Has been a Death Eater for years. Close ties to Lucious, Voldemort, and therefore, Draco. When seduced by Paxia, all concern for anything other than Voldemort's revival dissipates.
4. Paxia Devastarium- eighteen year old 7th year Slytherin. Seduces Snape, and sleeps with Harry Potter, sacrifices herself, and is reincarnated as the final enemy of Harry Potter on behalf of Voldemort's revival.
5. Harry Potter- seventeen year old 6th year Gryffindor. Torn between house rivalries and friendship with Hermione. Destined rival to Voldemort. Seduced by Paxia, and attempts initiation into Death Eaters. Defeats Voldemort permanently.
Symbols:
6. Dream Sequence- meant to illustrate the idea that easy escapes aren't always the best choices in life. Both Hermione and Draco, even Harry, look towards suicide as a means of escape- but the dream dictates that they fail, and Hermione realizes that killing themselves isn't the answer.
7. Spells and Potions- The Innocence Spell was merely a play on words, the spell was supposed to be harmless, and inflicted so much damage on Hermione. An elusion was made in Chapter 7 ("Damn Paxia's timing. If he had only known earlier, he would have never diluted the blends...") that Paxia had attempted to kill Hermione with a previous charm and that potion, but all that really mattered was that Hermione had survived because Paxia hadn't gotten to Snape early enough. The Dubious Spell was explained in Chapter 10, but basically it was Paxia being an out-right liar, telling the kids that it was an Attraction Elixir that would draw secret crushes together. When you have a crush on someone, you doubt their affections toward you, but since Hermione and Draco loved each other, they didn't doubt their love, so Hermione was "attracted" to Harry- her best friend and the one person she didn't understand at the time. Hope that clears that up.
8. Latin Incantations (and Translations)- for obvious reasons, Latin is the easiest language to fit into a fic about magic, so here are the translations for Chapters 11 and 12, since those are the most important.....
~ "Incidere per obtinere il liquidus de vita. Miscere corrumpere et purus. Destruere le donares et revivere il apostolos di guerre..." literally "Incision to obtain the liquid of life (blood). Mix of the corrupt and pure. Destroy the donors and revive the disciple of war." Hence, Hermione and Draco (corrupt and pure bloods respectively) were bled, and Paxia was revived.
~ "Petrificus totalis" c'mon, that's a given! "Total Petrification"
~ "Il che captare, collabi," literally "He who chases, collapses" which Harry called to Paxia, which made her stumble and fall while she ran towards him. I felt that Petrificus Totalis wouldn't work because it was too specific, hence the need for a wand. Since Harry didn't have his wand, by calling that chant out, anyone in the room that would have been after him would have collapsed, since it was only Paxia, it worked out quite nicely, didn't it?
~ "Absorbere Vitalis." literally "Absorb Life" Snape's incantation to revive Draco and Hermione.
Themes:
9. Innocence- in every sense of the word, we are all innocent from the start. Corruption is an outside force that works its way in and can be purged. Innocence is not lost when purity is forsaken. It is always here.
10. Corruption- the main theme of this fic. Through rivalries, sex, and money, corruption forces its way into our world- no matter how sheltered or isolated- but it can be purged. Even Snape realized his own innocence after witnessing Paxia for who she was. But even Paxia had her innocence.
11. Femininity- Hermione is the quintessential doomed romantic, with her own inner strength. Paxia is the quintessential manipulative bitch, using sex to take what she wants. Both have a common bond however- both long for acceptance in a male-dominated society (i.e. Voldemort).
12. Sex- powerful, potent. Sex is shared between two people, and it doesn't matter who is involved or how they got involved- a connection is created. You could fuck in a classroom, you could make love by the fire, sex is sex and the only thing that separates devastation from exuberance is intention. Be careful who you bed...it may come back to haunt you.
13. Paxia Devastarium- did anyone get that or did it go over your heads? Literally, "Peace and Devastation." She was capable of love. She did feel awful after sleeping with Snape, didja catch the Moulin Rouge moment in Chapter 11?, but she knew her purpose in life, and she fulfilled it- which can be commendable. Keep reading, you'll understand my sympathy.
Critique:
So, you've read this far and think I'm nuts? Here's a quick list of me that covers this story. I AM HERMIONE GRANGER AND PAXIA DEVASTARIUM. Not J. K.'s version, don't get me wrong, but close enough. I am a hopeless romantic, but I know how to flirt your socks off. I long for the idea of a bad boy with a soft core. I don't need mush- I need strength. I wanna fuck, but cuddling would be nice too. That's why it stings when my reader's don't feel a little bit of pity for Paxia. Is she a self-righteous, manipulative, bitch? Of course. But somewhere in chapter five, having Snape right where she wanted him, she liked the idea of having that acceptance.
I'm a thespian. I look into character backgrounds. I thought of Paxia as coming from a path of isolation, where the only man that ever accepted her was Voldemort, and she would do anything for him. When she talks to Harry at the end of Chapter 11? She did understand what he was going through! She knew what it was like to love someone and know that those feelings would never be reciprocated because of what she'd done. I know that too. Her actions were some of the most tense lines for me to write. Can you say therapy?! Lol. Besides, I've always liked the idea of getting with Snape...something about him is just so......hot. But Draco too....best solution is to just get both of them using my split personality. *LA- jealous yet?*
As for the whole 'true to the books' thing, I've never read the books, but if you're going to age the characters this far, I think you can toss the books out of the window. Life at 17 is complicated as hell- as I'm sure most of you know. Being 17, I'm living proof. Want depth? I'm the school Freud. There are so many passages in this fiction that relate to me, its almost scary. Like I'm naked on the pages. This was my exposition....thanks for all the feedback, and don't stop sending me your thoughts! This is going to be up till they kick me off, so keep sending them. And be on the look out for my other fics, some of which are lighter- trust me. I do have my goof-ball romantic fluff moments after all. But I can't be half the writer I am without readers- so please review. I don't request flames, but hey, life is hell- a scorch or two won't kill me.
The Beauty, The Pain, A Rose With Thorns.