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Christian wondered where she went. He wanted to see her again. He wanted to tell her she did a magnificent job tonight, he wanted to hold her and kiss her. Then in the middle of his thoughts he felt a soft finger top his shoulder.
"So what did ya think, too raunchy?"
" No, no not at all, you were incredible."
" Why thank you, sorry about not telling that this was a strip club, I just figured you would find out on your own."
" And so I did, after I had boobs poke my eyes out."
" Oh, sorry about that, hey would you like to have dinner with me so we can talk some more in private."
"Sure."
Great, let's go."
They went to a restaurant called 'Hollywood Dreams.' Christian ordered the chicken finger platter, while Satine ordered spaghetti.
" So, how long have you been in California." Christian asked, never letting his eyes leave Satine's.
" All my life, my parents died 2 years ago so my uncle Harry gave me a job at the Elephant Hall, because he knew I wanted to be an actress, but all I've been doing is singing and dancing there."
" Oh, I'm sorry."
"For what?"
"Well, it seems like you don't really like working there."
"No, I don't, but at least I'm getting paid for it. So why did you decide to come to Cali."
"Well I wanted to get away from my father. You see he wanted me to take care of the family business, but I wanted to come here to write poems and stories, so I left."
He wanted with all his heart to say that he was glad that he did come here, and that he was very glad to meet Satine, and then give her a long passionate kiss, but he'd only just met her and he thought he would be moving to fast, so he would save it for later.
After dinner Christian walked Satine home, he felt like Jell-O as he held her hand walking past houses. Finally they stopped at an old shabby like house that Satine called home.
"Well I guess I'll see you around sometime."
"Wait, may I have your number so I can call you."
"Oh, yes."
After he wrote down Satine's number and Satine wrote down his, he leaned in a little further and gave Satine a passionate kiss on her lips. Then what seemed like a lifetime Satine pulled away.
"We shouldn't have, I cant."
"What, Why?"
"Christian, you wouldn't want me, I'm a stripper, we could never, I can't fall in love."
"I want you, I don't care what you are. I know I only just met you today Satine, but I've fallen in love with you."
"No Christian please, we can't, it just wouldn't work, please leave."
A tear ran down Satine's face, and Christian took his thumb and wiped it away, then left.
"And I've fallen in love with you too, Christian." Satine whispered as she closed the door.
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Christian wondered where she went. He wanted to see her again. He wanted to tell her she did a magnificent job tonight, he wanted to hold her and kiss her. Then in the middle of his thoughts he felt a soft finger top his shoulder.
"So what did ya think, too raunchy?"
" No, no not at all, you were incredible."
" Why thank you, sorry about not telling that this was a strip club, I just figured you would find out on your own."
" And so I did, after I had boobs poke my eyes out."
" Oh, sorry about that, hey would you like to have dinner with me so we can talk some more in private."
"Sure."
Great, let's go."
They went to a restaurant called 'Hollywood Dreams.' Christian ordered the chicken finger platter, while Satine ordered spaghetti.
" So, how long have you been in California." Christian asked, never letting his eyes leave Satine's.
" All my life, my parents died 2 years ago so my uncle Harry gave me a job at the Elephant Hall, because he knew I wanted to be an actress, but all I've been doing is singing and dancing there."
" Oh, I'm sorry."
"For what?"
"Well, it seems like you don't really like working there."
"No, I don't, but at least I'm getting paid for it. So why did you decide to come to Cali."
"Well I wanted to get away from my father. You see he wanted me to take care of the family business, but I wanted to come here to write poems and stories, so I left."
He wanted with all his heart to say that he was glad that he did come here, and that he was very glad to meet Satine, and then give her a long passionate kiss, but he'd only just met her and he thought he would be moving to fast, so he would save it for later.
After dinner Christian walked Satine home, he felt like Jell-O as he held her hand walking past houses. Finally they stopped at an old shabby like house that Satine called home.
"Well I guess I'll see you around sometime."
"Wait, may I have your number so I can call you."
"Oh, yes."
After he wrote down Satine's number and Satine wrote down his, he leaned in a little further and gave Satine a passionate kiss on her lips. Then what seemed like a lifetime Satine pulled away.
"We shouldn't have, I cant."
"What, Why?"
"Christian, you wouldn't want me, I'm a stripper, we could never, I can't fall in love."
"I want you, I don't care what you are. I know I only just met you today Satine, but I've fallen in love with you."
"No Christian please, we can't, it just wouldn't work, please leave."
A tear ran down Satine's face, and Christian took his thumb and wiped it away, then left.
"And I've fallen in love with you too, Christian." Satine whispered as she closed the door.
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