Really hopping for a bit of constructive criticism. Maybe a few more reviews.......
I own nothing of Tolkien's...... I do own Larien.
Chapter 4. An Evenstar
"Grandmother Galadriel! Grandmother Galadriel," Elladan and Elrohir shouted as they ran up the stairs to her. She looked down at Legolas and smiled, "Arwen has come... The Blessed Evenstar of her people. Please stay with us a while for I know there is at least one who would wish to speak with you, mellon."
Together they all climbed to the top of caras galadhon... Galadriel nodded toward a very Arragant looking elf. Legolas, Haldir wishes to speak with you. She continued to climb her way to Celeborn. Legolas watched as she disappeared into the leaves and talans. He turned to Haldir, " Mae Govannen, HAldir of Lorien. What can I do for you?"
"I wanted to ask about Larien. How does she fare?"
"She disappeared the day Arwen was born."
"What? Where is she. Why was she not found?"
"Haldir. Elrond looked.. His men looked."
The taller elf stared down at LEgolas, "But she wouldn't just disappear."
"She did friend."
Legolas turned to go until he noticed tears in the older elf's eyes. LEgolas placed a hand on his shoulder and gripped in reassuringly, "If you know that she would be all right keep faith."
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Larien float down the river for what seemed like days. Her heart broken and she did not wish to awaken.. The only thing that drew her back to consciousness was a blurry face poking at her..
"She's an elf. Look at her ears."
"I know she's an elf but why is she here."
"Halother stop it your gonna kill her."
"She's kinda pretty. I think she should be taken back to Rivendell. That would be her home as it sits on this very river."
She felt herself lifted and carried to a horse.. She looked into a pair of grey eyes as the rider climbed behind her. The one she figured was Halother spoke to the one behind her. Theoden take her to rivendell we must go home.
For two days they traveled upstream until She could see the fuzzy shapes of Rivendell. Theoden nudged her and told her Elrond waited. She was set down from his horse and two strong hands gripped hers. She recognized their strength and turned to where she thought he was, "Ada Elrond?" He touched her face and spoke no word as she was carried up into the house of Elrond.
Elrond turned to Celebrian after he examined Larien and spoke with great sadness, "My darling I do not think that she will ever fully regain her vision but let us pray to Illuvatar and wait until she can travel to Lorien. Your mother could help her better than I."
Larien cried when she heard them but refused to make a sound. They kept her room dark and her eyes bandaged. They treated her for several weeks before she was escorted to Lorien.
The first voice she heard nearly broke her heart, it was her Haldir and she was unrecognizable.
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really short and man does it suck... I will right her vision and they will get love....
I own nothing of Tolkien's...... I do own Larien.
Chapter 4. An Evenstar
"Grandmother Galadriel! Grandmother Galadriel," Elladan and Elrohir shouted as they ran up the stairs to her. She looked down at Legolas and smiled, "Arwen has come... The Blessed Evenstar of her people. Please stay with us a while for I know there is at least one who would wish to speak with you, mellon."
Together they all climbed to the top of caras galadhon... Galadriel nodded toward a very Arragant looking elf. Legolas, Haldir wishes to speak with you. She continued to climb her way to Celeborn. Legolas watched as she disappeared into the leaves and talans. He turned to Haldir, " Mae Govannen, HAldir of Lorien. What can I do for you?"
"I wanted to ask about Larien. How does she fare?"
"She disappeared the day Arwen was born."
"What? Where is she. Why was she not found?"
"Haldir. Elrond looked.. His men looked."
The taller elf stared down at LEgolas, "But she wouldn't just disappear."
"She did friend."
Legolas turned to go until he noticed tears in the older elf's eyes. LEgolas placed a hand on his shoulder and gripped in reassuringly, "If you know that she would be all right keep faith."
**************************************************************************************
Larien float down the river for what seemed like days. Her heart broken and she did not wish to awaken.. The only thing that drew her back to consciousness was a blurry face poking at her..
"She's an elf. Look at her ears."
"I know she's an elf but why is she here."
"Halother stop it your gonna kill her."
"She's kinda pretty. I think she should be taken back to Rivendell. That would be her home as it sits on this very river."
She felt herself lifted and carried to a horse.. She looked into a pair of grey eyes as the rider climbed behind her. The one she figured was Halother spoke to the one behind her. Theoden take her to rivendell we must go home.
For two days they traveled upstream until She could see the fuzzy shapes of Rivendell. Theoden nudged her and told her Elrond waited. She was set down from his horse and two strong hands gripped hers. She recognized their strength and turned to where she thought he was, "Ada Elrond?" He touched her face and spoke no word as she was carried up into the house of Elrond.
Elrond turned to Celebrian after he examined Larien and spoke with great sadness, "My darling I do not think that she will ever fully regain her vision but let us pray to Illuvatar and wait until she can travel to Lorien. Your mother could help her better than I."
Larien cried when she heard them but refused to make a sound. They kept her room dark and her eyes bandaged. They treated her for several weeks before she was escorted to Lorien.
The first voice she heard nearly broke her heart, it was her Haldir and she was unrecognizable.
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really short and man does it suck... I will right her vision and they will get love....