The Ham-Girls Become Human!
By Caroline, a.k.a. puppyeyes
Hamtaro by Someone, but not me!
Bijou went outside, hoping that her friends would not be terrified of her. Especially not Hamtaro. Bijou met up with a girl who had brown hair that went just past her shoulders. She had brown eyes and wore a pink scarf. She was dressed in a sailor-style school uniform, which was popular in some parts of Japan. "What's your name?" she asked. "It's Bi-I mean Marie. Yeah, Marie," Bijou lied. "Well, mine's Pashmina," the girl said, "Wanna know a secret?" "Sure!" Bijou said, excited to be meeting a human friend, other than her owner. Pashmina leaned closer and whispered in Bijou's ear: "I'm a hamster, but I turned into a human!" "Really?" Bijou said. "Really, "Pashmina repeated. "Well then, I'm a hamster too. I'm Bijou." "You don't come from France, do you?" "Yes, Pashmina, you're not a ham-ham, are you?" "Yes, I am," Pashmina replied, "Bijou, the same thing happened to Sandy and Penelope, they're at the park, let's meet up with them there," "Okay," Bijou replied. The two ham-girls ran to Tokyo Park. Sandy had long, orange braids, brown eyes and a very freckly face. Penelope had brown hair that ended at her ears. Bijou took some money from her pocket. "Where did you get that?" Sandy asked. "It was on Maria's dresser, I'm sure she wouldn't mind. A couple thousand yen is nothing compared to what she has in her twenty bank accounts. We'll buy a nice lunch," Bijou explained. When the girls took their hamburgers and fries, Pashmina spit hers out. Penelope opened her mouth and let the chewed-up French fries fall out. Sandy let all of her apple cider fall back into her paper cup, through the straw. All of the kids who were once playing noisy games of tag, stopped to stare at these disgusting girls. Only Bijou kept on eating. She politely chewed on her fries, daintily sipped the cider, and pulled the lettuce and tomato out of her burger, to eat. The only thing that she was not pleased with was the burger itself. Pashmina and Sandy stared at her with their mouths open. Finally, Pashmina said, "How-do you eat that stuff?" "Why that's what we have for dinner at my Maria's home!" Suddenly, a storm started. The girls started to run for cover, but they found that their legs wouldn't move. When they were the only ones in the park, a voice boomed out: "Now, I shall tell you why this had to happen."
Okay, review questions to answer: Did I actually write a reasonable-length chapter, or are they still too short? Based on the quality of my writing, how old would you assume that I am? Suggestions? Flames? Other comments/questions that you feel like asking, related to me or Hamtaro. Lastly, Is this an interesting idea?
Bijou went outside, hoping that her friends would not be terrified of her. Especially not Hamtaro. Bijou met up with a girl who had brown hair that went just past her shoulders. She had brown eyes and wore a pink scarf. She was dressed in a sailor-style school uniform, which was popular in some parts of Japan. "What's your name?" she asked. "It's Bi-I mean Marie. Yeah, Marie," Bijou lied. "Well, mine's Pashmina," the girl said, "Wanna know a secret?" "Sure!" Bijou said, excited to be meeting a human friend, other than her owner. Pashmina leaned closer and whispered in Bijou's ear: "I'm a hamster, but I turned into a human!" "Really?" Bijou said. "Really, "Pashmina repeated. "Well then, I'm a hamster too. I'm Bijou." "You don't come from France, do you?" "Yes, Pashmina, you're not a ham-ham, are you?" "Yes, I am," Pashmina replied, "Bijou, the same thing happened to Sandy and Penelope, they're at the park, let's meet up with them there," "Okay," Bijou replied. The two ham-girls ran to Tokyo Park. Sandy had long, orange braids, brown eyes and a very freckly face. Penelope had brown hair that ended at her ears. Bijou took some money from her pocket. "Where did you get that?" Sandy asked. "It was on Maria's dresser, I'm sure she wouldn't mind. A couple thousand yen is nothing compared to what she has in her twenty bank accounts. We'll buy a nice lunch," Bijou explained. When the girls took their hamburgers and fries, Pashmina spit hers out. Penelope opened her mouth and let the chewed-up French fries fall out. Sandy let all of her apple cider fall back into her paper cup, through the straw. All of the kids who were once playing noisy games of tag, stopped to stare at these disgusting girls. Only Bijou kept on eating. She politely chewed on her fries, daintily sipped the cider, and pulled the lettuce and tomato out of her burger, to eat. The only thing that she was not pleased with was the burger itself. Pashmina and Sandy stared at her with their mouths open. Finally, Pashmina said, "How-do you eat that stuff?" "Why that's what we have for dinner at my Maria's home!" Suddenly, a storm started. The girls started to run for cover, but they found that their legs wouldn't move. When they were the only ones in the park, a voice boomed out: "Now, I shall tell you why this had to happen."
Okay, review questions to answer: Did I actually write a reasonable-length chapter, or are they still too short? Based on the quality of my writing, how old would you assume that I am? Suggestions? Flames? Other comments/questions that you feel like asking, related to me or Hamtaro. Lastly, Is this an interesting idea?