Some of you are wondering at Seabreeze's past, and want more of it. Well,
here's a little note (or more) telling MORE of her past, as well as
explaining some things.
To Maran Zelde: I'd like you to notice that there's not that many hares on the Swiftdeath, so Seabreeze and her brother won't HAVE the perfect hare dialect. I might change some things in the story, to clean it up for some, including that dialect error that you pointed out. Thunder is the one that I want to have the most hare-like dialect, with some differences, because they did, after all, grow up on a slave ship.
To Eris: I have a hard time with names. In fact, Seabreeze and Stardust are the only one's I didn't have any problems with. Thunderstorm is completely my best friend's, and, while the others ARE mine, it took me a while to come up with them. If you have any suggestions, go ahead and make them. As you notice, I am wordy. While I know that the second chapter needs to be touched up, the first one was my pride and joy! :-( That's ok, I can touch THAT up too. :-P I'll like you to note that I AM wordy! (Well, actually, I like to build a big picture.Actually I like to give YOU the things to build on with you're imagination!)
Ok, onto Seabreeze's past. (Which I might put in the story at some point in time.) Let's see, Seabreeze obviously has a brother and a sister, which you've already met. There isn't much to her past, except being a slave for most of it. All she has left is her siblings, while the REST of her family gets killed. All she wants is a peaceful life, safe with her siblings, never having to worry about them getting killed. She doesn't even care about revenge, for her parents WERE murdered, if you'll remember.
That's all to the note. I'll get to the third chapter soon.
*SeabreezeSwiftdeath*
To Maran Zelde: I'd like you to notice that there's not that many hares on the Swiftdeath, so Seabreeze and her brother won't HAVE the perfect hare dialect. I might change some things in the story, to clean it up for some, including that dialect error that you pointed out. Thunder is the one that I want to have the most hare-like dialect, with some differences, because they did, after all, grow up on a slave ship.
To Eris: I have a hard time with names. In fact, Seabreeze and Stardust are the only one's I didn't have any problems with. Thunderstorm is completely my best friend's, and, while the others ARE mine, it took me a while to come up with them. If you have any suggestions, go ahead and make them. As you notice, I am wordy. While I know that the second chapter needs to be touched up, the first one was my pride and joy! :-( That's ok, I can touch THAT up too. :-P I'll like you to note that I AM wordy! (Well, actually, I like to build a big picture.Actually I like to give YOU the things to build on with you're imagination!)
Ok, onto Seabreeze's past. (Which I might put in the story at some point in time.) Let's see, Seabreeze obviously has a brother and a sister, which you've already met. There isn't much to her past, except being a slave for most of it. All she has left is her siblings, while the REST of her family gets killed. All she wants is a peaceful life, safe with her siblings, never having to worry about them getting killed. She doesn't even care about revenge, for her parents WERE murdered, if you'll remember.
That's all to the note. I'll get to the third chapter soon.
*SeabreezeSwiftdeath*