Heya!! Ok...This is the revised part. I tried to go through and fix some stuff to make it better, I don't know if it will be, but I tried!! Enjoy!
"Talking"
'Thinking'
(My two cents.)
Disclaimer: No, I don't own DB or any of the characters, except the one that's made up….She's mine!! Lol!
Trouble in Paradise
Chapter One Fight, Fight, *WHAP!* (Revised)
It's a beautiful day in town, people are laughing and children are playing. A girl is walking down the street in a light blue and orange gi. With her long dark hair pulled back in two pigtails, she started to look at the market, but decides she can't get anything…Then she sees a teenage looking guy with a white t-shirt on and pants fighting with some other guys who were apparently trying to rob and old lady. 'He's a cute guy at that!' she thought. While watching, she notices a robber slipping off and running down an alley way. 'Oh no you don't!' She thought as she ran after him. She catches him in the darkest part. The girl jumps and lands on the robber's back, knocking him down. She jumps back off and takes a fighting stance. The robber took one look at her and laughed, "What do you think your doing, girl? You're way to pretty to be fighting with me…" the guy pulls out a knife while getting to his feet, "…because you might mess up your pretty little face." With that the guy launched himself at her and she dodges easily. She jumps and taps him into a wall.
"Hmp! To pretty to fight my bootie…" she mumbles.
"Bravo!" said a voice behind her, while clapping. She jumps, and whirls around to see who it is. 'Oh! It's that cute guy…' she thought, relaxing a little.
"Your not too bad yourself." She replied.
The guy cocked an eyebrow, "Oh really? I was just warming up." He takes a couple steps forward, to get a closer look.
She stands straight and walks towards the guy, "Same here."
He stops a few feet away from her. "So, what's your name?"
"Denkou Kaminari. What's yours?" she stops also and takes a knee.
"Son Goten. Nice to meet you Kaminari." 'She's not that bad looking…hmm…' Goten thinks and looks away.
There's an awkward silence, then Kaminari asks, "How long have you been watching?"
Startling him, he looks back at her, to find her looking at him curiously. "Hm, oh…uh, just long enough to see that guy run off with you chasin' him, then I followed you, I was just curious. I didn't want you, or anyone, to get hurt, I mean, the guy does have a gun and a knife."
Her curiousity turns into disbelief. "Oh!! I get it, just because I'm a 'pretty little girl' means that I can't fend for myself?" She mocks the robber on the 'little girl' get up, 'So much for nice, cute guys…'
"No, no, no! I didn't say that!" said Goten putting his hand behind his head in the traditional Son way. "Sorry…I just meant that, ya know, since most girls aren't that strong and stuff…"
Kaminari's now standing to her full 5' 4'' height. "OH!! So now your saying that all girls are wusses and that your not affected by guns and knives?!" she says in an annoyed tone. 'I thought that I was the only one!'
Goten puts up his hands in surrender, "No! I'm not saying girls are wusses! I mean, look at my mom and sister-in-law!!! And, well, I'm not affected by them, erp! I mean…heh heh…" *sweat drop* 'Geeze! What did I get myself into now?!'
'Hm...I wonder that's supposed to mean. He's so cute when he's nervous! I think I'll just play with him a little. *evil grin*' "Oh, I get it…you think you're a big, strong, powerful, hot thang aren't 'cha?" She circles him to where her back is to the street. "So wimpy girls like little ol' me just flock to you and faint when you smile at them, eh?" cooed Kaminari, walking Goten to the wall with a small teasing smile. "You're just, soo…irresistible…"
Goten panicks, "H-Hey!! I-I didn't mean that!! Ack!! D-Don't do that!!!" 'What is she doing?!?! Man she looks hot like that. Wait!! Aw man!' Goten, not looking where he's going, backs up in a corner and trips. A figure stirs in a pile of rubble a couple feet away from them. Kaminari keeps walking till she's just a few feet away from him. She stands to get to eye level with him, on top a box.
She leans in to where her nose in inches from his. "Don't do what?" she said innocently "…I just want to play." 'This is too hilarious!' Just when she was about to kiss him, she smiled really big and winked. "Gotcha!"
*WACK!*
Kaminari falls limp into Goten's arms, revealing the previously knocked out robber, holding a pipe, behind her. Goten is knocked out of his trance. "What?? Oh, it's just you." said Goten as he kicked the robber in the stomach sending him gasping for air, and into the wall. "Hmm…that should teach you, never pick on a beautiful girls." he blushed . 'I hope she didn't hear that, she might do that…thing again. Not that I didn't like it... I can't believe she was joking with me! Was she really gonna kiss me?!' Goten smirked as he shifted the girls weight in his arms and took to the sky. 'I guess I could just bring her home, Mom would be happy…well, a little too happy' Goten cringed at the thought of bringing an unconscious girl home…'I think I'll just go to Gohan's he's near by and it's time to visit him again. I bet Pan's gotten big!' he thought as he changed directions and headed to the house right outside of town.
AN: I'm sorry! Where did Gohan move to after he married Videl??? Oh well, in this FF he moved there…And also, what does Goten wear?!? Oh well, I don't think it really matters! I'll just make something up! Like I did! Hey! This is a fanfic! What do you expect?!?!?! Lol…
So how did ya like it?! It sucked huh? Oh well! If you don't like it, then don't read it, just R+R please!! I don't care if it's a flame, I could prolly learn from them any way!! And don't expect a chapter a day! There's a such thing as life goin on right now and it's got me all tied up! (Okay! That's the previous notes, I didn't feel like changing them! ok?) Ato for now!!!
"Talking"
'Thinking'
(My two cents.)
Disclaimer: No, I don't own DB or any of the characters, except the one that's made up….She's mine!! Lol!
Trouble in Paradise
Chapter One Fight, Fight, *WHAP!* (Revised)
It's a beautiful day in town, people are laughing and children are playing. A girl is walking down the street in a light blue and orange gi. With her long dark hair pulled back in two pigtails, she started to look at the market, but decides she can't get anything…Then she sees a teenage looking guy with a white t-shirt on and pants fighting with some other guys who were apparently trying to rob and old lady. 'He's a cute guy at that!' she thought. While watching, she notices a robber slipping off and running down an alley way. 'Oh no you don't!' She thought as she ran after him. She catches him in the darkest part. The girl jumps and lands on the robber's back, knocking him down. She jumps back off and takes a fighting stance. The robber took one look at her and laughed, "What do you think your doing, girl? You're way to pretty to be fighting with me…" the guy pulls out a knife while getting to his feet, "…because you might mess up your pretty little face." With that the guy launched himself at her and she dodges easily. She jumps and taps him into a wall.
"Hmp! To pretty to fight my bootie…" she mumbles.
"Bravo!" said a voice behind her, while clapping. She jumps, and whirls around to see who it is. 'Oh! It's that cute guy…' she thought, relaxing a little.
"Your not too bad yourself." She replied.
The guy cocked an eyebrow, "Oh really? I was just warming up." He takes a couple steps forward, to get a closer look.
She stands straight and walks towards the guy, "Same here."
He stops a few feet away from her. "So, what's your name?"
"Denkou Kaminari. What's yours?" she stops also and takes a knee.
"Son Goten. Nice to meet you Kaminari." 'She's not that bad looking…hmm…' Goten thinks and looks away.
There's an awkward silence, then Kaminari asks, "How long have you been watching?"
Startling him, he looks back at her, to find her looking at him curiously. "Hm, oh…uh, just long enough to see that guy run off with you chasin' him, then I followed you, I was just curious. I didn't want you, or anyone, to get hurt, I mean, the guy does have a gun and a knife."
Her curiousity turns into disbelief. "Oh!! I get it, just because I'm a 'pretty little girl' means that I can't fend for myself?" She mocks the robber on the 'little girl' get up, 'So much for nice, cute guys…'
"No, no, no! I didn't say that!" said Goten putting his hand behind his head in the traditional Son way. "Sorry…I just meant that, ya know, since most girls aren't that strong and stuff…"
Kaminari's now standing to her full 5' 4'' height. "OH!! So now your saying that all girls are wusses and that your not affected by guns and knives?!" she says in an annoyed tone. 'I thought that I was the only one!'
Goten puts up his hands in surrender, "No! I'm not saying girls are wusses! I mean, look at my mom and sister-in-law!!! And, well, I'm not affected by them, erp! I mean…heh heh…" *sweat drop* 'Geeze! What did I get myself into now?!'
'Hm...I wonder that's supposed to mean. He's so cute when he's nervous! I think I'll just play with him a little. *evil grin*' "Oh, I get it…you think you're a big, strong, powerful, hot thang aren't 'cha?" She circles him to where her back is to the street. "So wimpy girls like little ol' me just flock to you and faint when you smile at them, eh?" cooed Kaminari, walking Goten to the wall with a small teasing smile. "You're just, soo…irresistible…"
Goten panicks, "H-Hey!! I-I didn't mean that!! Ack!! D-Don't do that!!!" 'What is she doing?!?! Man she looks hot like that. Wait!! Aw man!' Goten, not looking where he's going, backs up in a corner and trips. A figure stirs in a pile of rubble a couple feet away from them. Kaminari keeps walking till she's just a few feet away from him. She stands to get to eye level with him, on top a box.
She leans in to where her nose in inches from his. "Don't do what?" she said innocently "…I just want to play." 'This is too hilarious!' Just when she was about to kiss him, she smiled really big and winked. "Gotcha!"
*WACK!*
Kaminari falls limp into Goten's arms, revealing the previously knocked out robber, holding a pipe, behind her. Goten is knocked out of his trance. "What?? Oh, it's just you." said Goten as he kicked the robber in the stomach sending him gasping for air, and into the wall. "Hmm…that should teach you, never pick on a beautiful girls." he blushed . 'I hope she didn't hear that, she might do that…thing again. Not that I didn't like it... I can't believe she was joking with me! Was she really gonna kiss me?!' Goten smirked as he shifted the girls weight in his arms and took to the sky. 'I guess I could just bring her home, Mom would be happy…well, a little too happy' Goten cringed at the thought of bringing an unconscious girl home…'I think I'll just go to Gohan's he's near by and it's time to visit him again. I bet Pan's gotten big!' he thought as he changed directions and headed to the house right outside of town.
AN: I'm sorry! Where did Gohan move to after he married Videl??? Oh well, in this FF he moved there…And also, what does Goten wear?!? Oh well, I don't think it really matters! I'll just make something up! Like I did! Hey! This is a fanfic! What do you expect?!?!?! Lol…
So how did ya like it?! It sucked huh? Oh well! If you don't like it, then don't read it, just R+R please!! I don't care if it's a flame, I could prolly learn from them any way!! And don't expect a chapter a day! There's a such thing as life goin on right now and it's got me all tied up! (Okay! That's the previous notes, I didn't feel like changing them! ok?) Ato for now!!!
