Yeah, I think I'll stop trying to make conversation and just get it over with! I'm tired, and I want to get this finished! Please read and tell me what you think!!

"Talking"
'Thinking'
(My two cents.)


Disclaimer: No, I don't own Dragon Ball anything, if I did, I wouldn't be writing a FANfic….unless I just like hearing myself talk..er…type…*ahem*
Trouble in Paradise

Chapter Two! She's awake...what'd she just say?! (Revised!)

Goten touched down in front of a medium-size house. He walks up to the door, shifts the girl's weight in his arms, and stood to where he was on one foot, using his knee to prop up against the door to steady her and make sure that he didn't drop her. 'Hey, she's pretty light, not that she's fat or anything…' He then knocked on the door with his free hand and went back to holding the girl with two hands and standing on two feet. Goten heard some bustling behind the door and a girl's voice mumbling something about salesmen. When the door opened, a slightly younger girl appeared with shoulder-length black hair tied back with an orange bandana and a red t-shirt with khaki colored knee-length pants. "Hi Goten!! Who ya got there?" beamed the girl. She moved aside to let him in.

Goten walks inside the door and shuts it with his foot. "She's just a friend. Is Gohan home?"

"Yeah! Hang on," turning around she yelled, "HEY DAD!! YA GOT A VISITOR!!!" making Goten cringe. Gohan soon came walking in with the same pained expression on his face.

"Dangit girl. How many times have I asked you! Don't holler so...Hey Goten! Who's the girl? Your new girlfriend?" teased the older brother. Gohan walked straight to him and nudged him on the shoulder. Pan giggled.

"N-Nah! She's just a girl that I met today and she got knocked out. She was doin' pretty good though."

Gohan smiled. "Oh, ok. Whatever you say, you can set her on the couch and I'll go get Videl." he said as he walked out of the room. Goten walked into the very nice looking living room and set the girl on the couch as instructed. No sooner than he set her down, he felt a new weight on his back.

"Hey Uncle Goten! What kind of deed did you do today to pick up this chick?" exclaimed a way too happy Pan. Goten only laughed at her choice of words.

He stood up and beared his niece. "Well, I was fighting with these nasty guys who were trying to rob a poor old woman. And when I was fighting them, one of the leader's of the pack started to transform into this big, UGLY…"

Pan sat up straight, "Uncle Goten!!! I KNOW that's not what happened! If it did, I would have sensed it and came to your rescue!" Pan said while lightly bopping him on the head for emphasis.

Goten moved and kneeled to the ground in an open space. "Oh yeah? You help me? Yeah right!! What about the time I had to get you out of that tree or away from those lions around my house? Hmm??" said Goten teasingly as he flipped the girl off his back and onto the floor. He then dove on her to tickle her.

"Watch out!! It's the attack of the Killer Tickler!" he yelled, not too loud though.

Pan squealed, "Ahh!! Help!!!" she said in a sarcastic voice.

"Alright, alright!! Break it up! I thought Gohan told me that there was a hurt girl in here! Maybe you two should go outside with that, eh?" said a dark headed girl as she walked in carrying a First Aid Kit.

"Oh, hey Videl, I didn't hear you come in. Gomen." Goten said as he got off of Pan. He got to his feet and helped Videl set out her stuff beside the couch. Pan went to her mom's side.

"Can I help?? Please??" she pleaded.

"No, I got this one, why don't you and Goten go sparr outside?" she asked.

Goten fidgeted, "Err…If it would be alright, I'd like to stay in here a little bit…umm…in case she freaks out or something." he said, pointing to the still conked out Kaminari.

Videl raised a brow. 'Oh…so I guess Goten's got something for the girl, eh? I can still remember the first time I saw Gohan….' she sighed. "Well, Pan honey, go find your father and see if he needs any help," she replied.

"Ok…" muttered a reluctant Pan as she trudged slowly out.

"So, does the girl have a name?" Videl said while walking past Goten and to the girl on the couch.

"Kaminari. I was in town fighting against some robbers when one ran away. I was about to go after him when I saw her going after him so I decided to follow. She's pretty fast.." 'And pretty good looking, too.' he added mentally. "…She caught him in no time flat. She also dodged his attacks pretty good and knocked him into a wall. But, when we were…talking…He came up behind her and knocked her out." finished Goten. Videl raised her eyebrows in an accusing glare, then started her 'examination'. "N-no! It's not like that!" he hurried and put in scratching his head. "W-we just met and all!" Videl just had to laugh at his rambling. Goten sighed, 'Man! Now I know how Gohan felt when we would pick on him! I hope she'll be alright.' Videl looked at Goten, he had a worried look on his face.

Videl noticed, "Hey, she'll be ok. Not unless she was hit that hard, then she'll be fine." assured Videl. Goten looked at the girl on the couch, then back at the woman tending to her.

"Ok, but it's just that…I think she was hit kind of hard, with a metal pole might I add. She fell pretty hard." 'Even though she was kinda close.'

"Hmmm…That hard, ne? I guess anyone would have been knocked out. But she looks ok. Wow, she must be pretty strong. She's probably stronger than my dad." Videl laughed at her own joke. Goten just laughed a little, he never knew Mr. Satan that well. All he knew about him was that he claimed to have beaten Cell when it was actually Gohan, but everyone knows that now.

"So, that means she's pretty strong, huh?" 'She's strong, fast, and cute! Woo hoo!! So maybe that has something to do with why she's so fast and stuff.' thought Goten.

"Well, that or she's got a really hard head. But, either way, she'll be fine." Videl said, while looking Kaminari over for more wounds. "Hey, what's this?" she said, pointing to the indention above the girl's collar bone.

"Huh?" He looked to where Videl was pointing, and blushed. "I-it looks like a tattoo." he said as he looked away, still kind of blushing. 'Woa!'

'Aww, how kawaii! He's so modest…or just naïve,' She glanced at the guy in question. 'Nah! Not naive. Can't be with Gohan, Kri l l in, and Master Roshi around.' thought Videl. "I guess it does, it looks cool! I want one!"

"You want one what?" asked a tired Gohan.

"A tattoo like this one…" she answered, not even turning around and again pointing to the spot. As Gohan followed her finger direction, he blushed, too. "Oh." he simply stated. Looking away he caught Pan just as she jumped on him. "Oof!" Videl turned and looked at her husband.

'Well, I guess it didn't come from Gohan. He's so cute when he blushes.' Videl thought while laughing again. She turned back.

Pan jumped off her dad and on to the ground. "Hey mom, when is she gonna wake up? And when are you gonna tell me what really happened, Uncle Goten?" she said excitedly. With a leap and a bound, she was on top of Goten, with him sprawled out on his back. "Huh, huh, HUH?!"

"Alright, alright! Man Videl, what do you feed this girl? Sensu beans?" laughed Goten. He looked over at her.

Videl looked at him, "N-"

"Mmmm…" grumbled the log on the couch. Everyone looked to her, and watched her shoot up to a sitting position, "MAN that hurt! Ouch!!!" she cried, while clutching her head. "I think I need to go blas-aya ya ya...? Um….Hi!" Goten and Gohan looked at each other in a questioning look as if to say "Blast? Nah…" Gohan shrugged it off as just a head injury. Goten gave it a little thought before doing the same.

Goten reverted his attention back to Kaminari. "Everyone, this is Kaminari; Kaminari this is Videl, my brother Gohan, and this bag of energy is Pan."

Author's Notes!
Hey! It's a little bit longer!! I would have kept on going, but then I'd start rambling…and that wouldn't be good. The story already sucks! My friends at school like it!! Yay!! And one person reviewed!! Thank you TypoNumber5! You're cool! *hands out sucker* Here! ^.^ ok….
Don't worry, this story's gonna go a whole lot further! There's more to this story than meets the eye..er…eyes…..lol….well, I'll shut up now! Please R+R!! PLEASE?! Lol!

Okay! That's the same notes from the first 'draft'. I guess I'm just gonna leave them, but I don't have enough time to go over all of the chapters, so I'm just gonna put these up for right now. I'm working on it! I think I only have like, 3 more chappies to look over. I know that even after I redo them, they'll still prolly suck, but oh well! At least I'm still trying! I'll try to get those other chappies done, and I'm writing the 7th one. I think I'll keep the other's up (3 through 5). I'm almost positive chapter 6 will be good enough to leave. I may change a few things. But ne who! Please review and tell me what you think of the 'improvements'. Help me with stuff in the chapters I haven't done yet too! My e-mail addy is teenager_kaminari@yahoo.com if you want to e-mail suggestions to me! Thank you!