*** thanks for all the reviews! Even the not so nice ones! ( Most ppl like
the first chapter but my reviews were divided on the second chapter. OH
well you win some you lose some right?! Haha
ok so I thought I'd address one of the issues from the not so nice review, I'm using that term cause I know they weren't flames they were just trying to give constructive critisism.. People thought Seto was too nice and out of character: well I'm trying to make him that way, I said in the first chapter that he was kinda changing his ways..being more friendly and hanging out with the group. I probably should have elaborated on that. I didn't describe it enough I think. Trust me I know Seto is usually a huge ass all of the time but I was trying to make him different. Wouldn't it be interesting to see Joey com eout on top, more dominant for once? ;) I know I would haha.
Also, someone thought that Joey was too ...shit I cant remember what the exact words were but basically too immature and stupid in the second chapter. In this story he kinda is that way (well he is that way in the show too lol). I'm basically making him out to be totally inexperienced in this whole department ( romantic). Lets face it, even in the show he doesn't seem to be. He seems too goofy and loudmouthed to be. So basically it is like his first crush and he is going through all that stupid butterflies in the stomach giggily crap that we all go through at sometime (usually when we're younger but oh well).
Does that explain it at all?? Lol no doubt ppl will still disagree and that's alright( If anyone has any ideas for me I'd love to here it! Like more of a plot? Who else should be involved??? Etc.
Also, looking up your info helped me find some good stories!! Thanks!!!
I'm not gonna write more til I hear back...i'm thinking of rewriting chapter 2. let me know what you think ok? Thanks!
ok so I thought I'd address one of the issues from the not so nice review, I'm using that term cause I know they weren't flames they were just trying to give constructive critisism.. People thought Seto was too nice and out of character: well I'm trying to make him that way, I said in the first chapter that he was kinda changing his ways..being more friendly and hanging out with the group. I probably should have elaborated on that. I didn't describe it enough I think. Trust me I know Seto is usually a huge ass all of the time but I was trying to make him different. Wouldn't it be interesting to see Joey com eout on top, more dominant for once? ;) I know I would haha.
Also, someone thought that Joey was too ...shit I cant remember what the exact words were but basically too immature and stupid in the second chapter. In this story he kinda is that way (well he is that way in the show too lol). I'm basically making him out to be totally inexperienced in this whole department ( romantic). Lets face it, even in the show he doesn't seem to be. He seems too goofy and loudmouthed to be. So basically it is like his first crush and he is going through all that stupid butterflies in the stomach giggily crap that we all go through at sometime (usually when we're younger but oh well).
Does that explain it at all?? Lol no doubt ppl will still disagree and that's alright( If anyone has any ideas for me I'd love to here it! Like more of a plot? Who else should be involved??? Etc.
Also, looking up your info helped me find some good stories!! Thanks!!!
I'm not gonna write more til I hear back...i'm thinking of rewriting chapter 2. let me know what you think ok? Thanks!