Ok, well, this isn't as much another Chapter as much as it is a bonus page.
Here, you get look at some of the things that were taken out or rejected
during the coarse of my writing. Also, I strongly suggest, that if you
haven't read the entire story yet, you go back and read it, then come back
to this chapter. This reveals some stuff that you would get from reading
the story.
The following piece of text, is a portion of the story that got cut and re- written. When I was writing this, it was only about the second chapter, and I realized I rushed into Amy's kidnapping, and didn't develop a relationship between Tails and Amy yet. So this whole thing was cut. I also got rid of this, because it would have messed up the spontaneous attack, Sonic made on Robotnik at the end, which he didn't think through at all. Here is that whole section now:
"Hey there little bro. Listen Tails meet me up at my hut. I've got a plan to bring down Robotnik, but I need you and Amy's help. Oh, and could you get Amy on your way over? She might be a little mad at me after I yelled at her yesterday" Says Sonic.
'I'm mad at you for that Sonic' Tails thinks.
Sonic dashes off to his hut, and Tails starts searching for Amy. He walks into the forest and sees her, still picking flowers. He stands there for a few seconds admiring her. Her beautiful smile. Her sparkling light- green eyes. Tails feels lucky that he doesn't faint. He starts to walk up to Amy. She looks over and waves at Tails, when a metal fist comes out of the shrubs and hits Amy in the head, knocking her to the ground.
While I don't have any more text from the story that got deleted, I do have plenty of ideas for the story that just didn't quite make it in:
I toyed with the idea of having the Sonic in the story, to be robot duplicate and that would explain his rather nasty behavior. I decided to throw that idea out, and instead make Sally dead, and Uncle Chuck's free will gone, so that the really Sonic slowly loses his sanity.
At One point, Sonic was going to enter Robotropolis, go into Uncle Chuck's hideout, and be ambushed my Robotnik, who would have had Uncle Chuck in custody. This idea was thrown out when I decided to have Uncle Chuck's free will taken away.
I thought about giving Amy a boyfriend before Tails told her how he felt, to make a little tougher for him. This idea was canned early on though, for pacing reasons.
Sally wasn't originally going to be mentioned. In fact, Sally wouldn't have even been in this universe. Sonic was going to be hooked up with a female hedgehog named Jewel. But that idea got thrown out, so I could implement Sally's death. Without Sally's death, Sonic's sanity wouldn't have snapped at the end.
Originally, Sonic was not going to be killed during the huge fight with Robotnik. The chaos emerald was going to protect him. However, I didn't think that it would work as well emotionally, so I took that out.
There was plenty more things I could have implemented during chapter 4, the chapter where they go to Robotropolis, and Sonic eventually destroys it, that would have revealed more about Sonic, and gave him much of the lime light. I had to take a lot of stuff out though, because I had to keep the story as much about Tails and Amy as I could, and have Sonic be basically a very small side story.
I was going to have a lot of the love stuff take place in a school in the village. You know, Tails sitting in class, staring at Amy, not being able to concentrate on his studies, etc. I took the school out, so the village wouldn't seem to modernized, and all their education comes from nature, or Sonic would teach it to them.
Now, obviously, taking stuff out also resulted in me putting some new stuff in, as well as changing a few minor details. Here are some things that got implemented into the story, after I finished writing that particular section.
At the begging, when Sonic yells at Amy, the line "In fact, I hate you!" was not originally planned. But I decided to add that, because it showed that Sonic's sanity was not nearly what is used to be.
I added the part at the very end, of them repeating the "I love you." / "I love you too." Section for one reason. At first the ending was going to be them looking at Sonic's image in the clouds, but I realized that, again, that would take away from the point of the story; the relationship between Amy and Tails.
Tails and Amy were originally going to be 14, but I decided to make them a year younger.
Well, that's about it. I hope you enjoyed this short look into my story. I also hope you enjoyed my story. When spring is in the air, and so is love, your mind can write these types of things very easily. After your done reading this whole story, why not write a review about it? Did you like it? Did you not like it? Is there stuff you would have done differently? What things from this bonus page would you have liked to see implemented in the story? Either write a review about it, or e-mail me with your thoughts at Theduck02@aol.com. I'd love to hear some feedback. Anyway, hope you enjoyed my first Fanfic. I hope to do many more in the future.
The following piece of text, is a portion of the story that got cut and re- written. When I was writing this, it was only about the second chapter, and I realized I rushed into Amy's kidnapping, and didn't develop a relationship between Tails and Amy yet. So this whole thing was cut. I also got rid of this, because it would have messed up the spontaneous attack, Sonic made on Robotnik at the end, which he didn't think through at all. Here is that whole section now:
"Hey there little bro. Listen Tails meet me up at my hut. I've got a plan to bring down Robotnik, but I need you and Amy's help. Oh, and could you get Amy on your way over? She might be a little mad at me after I yelled at her yesterday" Says Sonic.
'I'm mad at you for that Sonic' Tails thinks.
Sonic dashes off to his hut, and Tails starts searching for Amy. He walks into the forest and sees her, still picking flowers. He stands there for a few seconds admiring her. Her beautiful smile. Her sparkling light- green eyes. Tails feels lucky that he doesn't faint. He starts to walk up to Amy. She looks over and waves at Tails, when a metal fist comes out of the shrubs and hits Amy in the head, knocking her to the ground.
While I don't have any more text from the story that got deleted, I do have plenty of ideas for the story that just didn't quite make it in:
I toyed with the idea of having the Sonic in the story, to be robot duplicate and that would explain his rather nasty behavior. I decided to throw that idea out, and instead make Sally dead, and Uncle Chuck's free will gone, so that the really Sonic slowly loses his sanity.
At One point, Sonic was going to enter Robotropolis, go into Uncle Chuck's hideout, and be ambushed my Robotnik, who would have had Uncle Chuck in custody. This idea was thrown out when I decided to have Uncle Chuck's free will taken away.
I thought about giving Amy a boyfriend before Tails told her how he felt, to make a little tougher for him. This idea was canned early on though, for pacing reasons.
Sally wasn't originally going to be mentioned. In fact, Sally wouldn't have even been in this universe. Sonic was going to be hooked up with a female hedgehog named Jewel. But that idea got thrown out, so I could implement Sally's death. Without Sally's death, Sonic's sanity wouldn't have snapped at the end.
Originally, Sonic was not going to be killed during the huge fight with Robotnik. The chaos emerald was going to protect him. However, I didn't think that it would work as well emotionally, so I took that out.
There was plenty more things I could have implemented during chapter 4, the chapter where they go to Robotropolis, and Sonic eventually destroys it, that would have revealed more about Sonic, and gave him much of the lime light. I had to take a lot of stuff out though, because I had to keep the story as much about Tails and Amy as I could, and have Sonic be basically a very small side story.
I was going to have a lot of the love stuff take place in a school in the village. You know, Tails sitting in class, staring at Amy, not being able to concentrate on his studies, etc. I took the school out, so the village wouldn't seem to modernized, and all their education comes from nature, or Sonic would teach it to them.
Now, obviously, taking stuff out also resulted in me putting some new stuff in, as well as changing a few minor details. Here are some things that got implemented into the story, after I finished writing that particular section.
At the begging, when Sonic yells at Amy, the line "In fact, I hate you!" was not originally planned. But I decided to add that, because it showed that Sonic's sanity was not nearly what is used to be.
I added the part at the very end, of them repeating the "I love you." / "I love you too." Section for one reason. At first the ending was going to be them looking at Sonic's image in the clouds, but I realized that, again, that would take away from the point of the story; the relationship between Amy and Tails.
Tails and Amy were originally going to be 14, but I decided to make them a year younger.
Well, that's about it. I hope you enjoyed this short look into my story. I also hope you enjoyed my story. When spring is in the air, and so is love, your mind can write these types of things very easily. After your done reading this whole story, why not write a review about it? Did you like it? Did you not like it? Is there stuff you would have done differently? What things from this bonus page would you have liked to see implemented in the story? Either write a review about it, or e-mail me with your thoughts at Theduck02@aol.com. I'd love to hear some feedback. Anyway, hope you enjoyed my first Fanfic. I hope to do many more in the future.