Yay! I got one reveiw ^_^ constructive criticism with a hint of chastisement
Anonymus-yeah my grammer sucks Im sorry so sue me I write pretty fast. Also the storie is not really supposed to be very seriouse its kinda just supposed to be funny in a stupid sort of way. But thanks I'll work on my grammer I hope it gets better for you.
On with chapter three!!
The Green Dragon
Our heros continue to trudge down the lane getting a bit bored very fast.
"Hey Pippin" Merry says "Want ta get a pint?"
"PINTS?! it comes in pints"
"of course it's not like it comes in barrels" Pippin looks slightly crestfallen
"Merry you ruined the moment"
"what moment?"
"the whole drooly pint moment"
"oh you mean like the drooly mushroom moment?"
"yeah"
"good"
they continue to walk down the lane towards the Green Dragon in the dark. "hey Merry"
"wot?"
"theres something Ive forgotten to tell you about last night" Merry rubbed his nose in aggrivation"well you see as I was clombing up the window sill the ring slipped off"
"so?"
"I think she saw me"
"why didnt you tell me this before?! youve got me in deep with her now!"
"well its the first time shes had anyreason to not trust you , its me thats in trouble"
"I suppose your right Pip...well except for that beer incident."
"and the snake incident"
"and the whole Maggot incedent"
"and the branch incedent, and the picture in the window thing , and...."
"OK OK ! Your not helping Took, I could always just blame those things on you yno"
"what?! come on then she'll hate me!"
"I'll have to think about that one. Besides she probably didnt get a very good look at you anyways it being dark and all"
"......."
"say something!"
"well, um...hehe"
"blast it Pippin, dont even tell me what you did" he said exhasperated "I need a pint"
"b-b-but what if shes in the Green Dragon?"
"well pippin" Merry said putting his hand on Pippin's shoulder "I'll let you figure that one out" and he walks into the inn. Pippin stands hesitantly out side for a moment and decides that a pint would be really god right about now. They grab two seats and go to order two pints.
"Oi Merry!" someone called across the noisy room.
"hallo Frodo"
"you boyos want to join us?" he asked
"us?" Merry said
"Me and Carrie over in the corner"
"Well I'll be seeing you" Pippin trys to get away but Merry grabbs him by the collar.
"oh no you dont your coming with us"
" camon Pippin" Frodo says "shes been asking about you at least talk to her"
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WANANAAAAAA! yes chapter three is done YAY! I have to chapter five but Ive Been writing all day and Im lazy. This chapter isnt very interesting its kind of a filler chapter so bear with me . Te spelling seems kinda odd but its that way for a reason. this Chapter is dedicated to my health teacher Ms Rikard coz shes the only teacher I know that would ever eat during "the Miracle of Life". this chapter is brought to you by: Hippopotomonstrosesquippedaliophobia . Ah yes Hippopotomonstrosesquipedaliophobia the fear of long words which ironically thirty five letters long. Its not good for a whole lot . Filling up term papers and scaring your Hippopotomonstrosesquipedaliophobic friends
REVIEW! PLEASE?
Anonymus-yeah my grammer sucks Im sorry so sue me I write pretty fast. Also the storie is not really supposed to be very seriouse its kinda just supposed to be funny in a stupid sort of way. But thanks I'll work on my grammer I hope it gets better for you.
On with chapter three!!
The Green Dragon
Our heros continue to trudge down the lane getting a bit bored very fast.
"Hey Pippin" Merry says "Want ta get a pint?"
"PINTS?! it comes in pints"
"of course it's not like it comes in barrels" Pippin looks slightly crestfallen
"Merry you ruined the moment"
"what moment?"
"the whole drooly pint moment"
"oh you mean like the drooly mushroom moment?"
"yeah"
"good"
they continue to walk down the lane towards the Green Dragon in the dark. "hey Merry"
"wot?"
"theres something Ive forgotten to tell you about last night" Merry rubbed his nose in aggrivation"well you see as I was clombing up the window sill the ring slipped off"
"so?"
"I think she saw me"
"why didnt you tell me this before?! youve got me in deep with her now!"
"well its the first time shes had anyreason to not trust you , its me thats in trouble"
"I suppose your right Pip...well except for that beer incident."
"and the snake incident"
"and the whole Maggot incedent"
"and the branch incedent, and the picture in the window thing , and...."
"OK OK ! Your not helping Took, I could always just blame those things on you yno"
"what?! come on then she'll hate me!"
"I'll have to think about that one. Besides she probably didnt get a very good look at you anyways it being dark and all"
"......."
"say something!"
"well, um...hehe"
"blast it Pippin, dont even tell me what you did" he said exhasperated "I need a pint"
"b-b-but what if shes in the Green Dragon?"
"well pippin" Merry said putting his hand on Pippin's shoulder "I'll let you figure that one out" and he walks into the inn. Pippin stands hesitantly out side for a moment and decides that a pint would be really god right about now. They grab two seats and go to order two pints.
"Oi Merry!" someone called across the noisy room.
"hallo Frodo"
"you boyos want to join us?" he asked
"us?" Merry said
"Me and Carrie over in the corner"
"Well I'll be seeing you" Pippin trys to get away but Merry grabbs him by the collar.
"oh no you dont your coming with us"
" camon Pippin" Frodo says "shes been asking about you at least talk to her"
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WANANAAAAAA! yes chapter three is done YAY! I have to chapter five but Ive Been writing all day and Im lazy. This chapter isnt very interesting its kind of a filler chapter so bear with me . Te spelling seems kinda odd but its that way for a reason. this Chapter is dedicated to my health teacher Ms Rikard coz shes the only teacher I know that would ever eat during "the Miracle of Life". this chapter is brought to you by: Hippopotomonstrosesquippedaliophobia . Ah yes Hippopotomonstrosesquipedaliophobia the fear of long words which ironically thirty five letters long. Its not good for a whole lot . Filling up term papers and scaring your Hippopotomonstrosesquipedaliophobic friends
REVIEW! PLEASE?