Hey! I know that my first story was very stupid and didn't make sense so I
decided to remake my story. Sowee! But I made Sakura and Syaoran kiss each
other a bit too fast and there was hardly any action so here's my new
story. Hope you'll like this one![It has the same topic.
Hate at first then Love Chapter one: Roommate
Sakura was very excited. She was going to move to a new apartment and live on her own! She packed so much stuff that her father was like "Do you really need that? I mean their just stuff!"
"Dad, I'm living on my own and I do need some supplies", Sakura replied as she tried to keep her stuff in her duffel bag. She just can't wait to her new apartment.
Meanwhile.
"I can't believe I'm finally going to live on my own with tons of privacy!" Syaoran said to Eriol as he started packing his stuff. Eriol frowned. "Actually, you're going to get a roommate". "WHAT?!" Syaoran yelled.
"Tomoyo said that since there is 2 rooms in the apartment, she wanted you to make some room for her friend." Eriol said while he helped Syaoran pack.
"All you ever do is listen to your stupid girlfriend. Don't you ever make decisions on your own?" Syaoran said annoyed. "Are you dissing me?" Eriol asked suddenly angry.
"Maybe" Syaoran replied. At that moment Eriol tackled him.
Ding-dong. 'I wonder who could that be?' Sakura thought to herself as she tried to get through her messy room to the door. "Hey!" a girl with violet hair greeted. "Oh hey Tomoyo. Didn't know you were going to come", Sakura said a little surprised.
"What? Why would I not come to see how you're doing and how your new apartment going to be" Tomoyo said sort of shocked now knowing that her friend didn't even plan to invite her.
"Well anyway, I'm going to the apartment right now. Are you coming" Sakura said as she got her car keys. "Of course! That's what I came for" Tomoyo hollered.
"Nice apartment" Syaoran said as he went into his room and unpacked his things. He later on walked to the couch and turned on the T.V.
"Well, we're here" Sakura excitedly said as the car pulled up into the driveway. The 2 girls went in the building and later on found them selves in front of the apartment. "Here we are", mumbled Sakura.
She opened the door. She was shocked to see a boy about her age sitting on the couch watching T.V. She suddenly yelled "WHY THE HELL ARE YOU IN MY."and found that Tomoyo had cut her off. "What are you doing? Can't you see that there's a boy in my apartment" Sakura said angrily, making the apartment sound like hers. "Well I forgot to tell you. You have a roommate." Tomoyo said, not knowing what will happen next. "What?!" Sakura asked angrier then before. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
So, how was it? Was it good? Pleaz tell me and review. I would reali like to know what's wrong with my story.I would love to hear all your opinions.
Hate at first then Love Chapter one: Roommate
Sakura was very excited. She was going to move to a new apartment and live on her own! She packed so much stuff that her father was like "Do you really need that? I mean their just stuff!"
"Dad, I'm living on my own and I do need some supplies", Sakura replied as she tried to keep her stuff in her duffel bag. She just can't wait to her new apartment.
Meanwhile.
"I can't believe I'm finally going to live on my own with tons of privacy!" Syaoran said to Eriol as he started packing his stuff. Eriol frowned. "Actually, you're going to get a roommate". "WHAT?!" Syaoran yelled.
"Tomoyo said that since there is 2 rooms in the apartment, she wanted you to make some room for her friend." Eriol said while he helped Syaoran pack.
"All you ever do is listen to your stupid girlfriend. Don't you ever make decisions on your own?" Syaoran said annoyed. "Are you dissing me?" Eriol asked suddenly angry.
"Maybe" Syaoran replied. At that moment Eriol tackled him.
Ding-dong. 'I wonder who could that be?' Sakura thought to herself as she tried to get through her messy room to the door. "Hey!" a girl with violet hair greeted. "Oh hey Tomoyo. Didn't know you were going to come", Sakura said a little surprised.
"What? Why would I not come to see how you're doing and how your new apartment going to be" Tomoyo said sort of shocked now knowing that her friend didn't even plan to invite her.
"Well anyway, I'm going to the apartment right now. Are you coming" Sakura said as she got her car keys. "Of course! That's what I came for" Tomoyo hollered.
"Nice apartment" Syaoran said as he went into his room and unpacked his things. He later on walked to the couch and turned on the T.V.
"Well, we're here" Sakura excitedly said as the car pulled up into the driveway. The 2 girls went in the building and later on found them selves in front of the apartment. "Here we are", mumbled Sakura.
She opened the door. She was shocked to see a boy about her age sitting on the couch watching T.V. She suddenly yelled "WHY THE HELL ARE YOU IN MY."and found that Tomoyo had cut her off. "What are you doing? Can't you see that there's a boy in my apartment" Sakura said angrily, making the apartment sound like hers. "Well I forgot to tell you. You have a roommate." Tomoyo said, not knowing what will happen next. "What?!" Sakura asked angrier then before. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
So, how was it? Was it good? Pleaz tell me and review. I would reali like to know what's wrong with my story.I would love to hear all your opinions.