First off I want to apologize for the shortness of the first chapter its
just something I was toying with in my English class and now that it's up
I'm adding to it so I apologize for shortness.
Please review this and if you've got suggestions put them in the review too
(more on this at end).
I also want to say thanks to my inspiration, Rio Dax who is really a
goddess.
Now without further gilding the lily and with no more ado chapter two Prophesy.
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He asked of her, "What is my quest?"
"That will become clear soon enough, however you must first find you name." This she said unto him, her words smooth as the crystal ballerina, gracefully dancing off the tongue. "You must first seek the abbey of La Maissontall, there your fate shall be spun for you." Swiftly as an arrow leaves the string the warrior departed in search of the abbey.
On the third night the stars were blotted out by the darkness and the moon was full, it was then that he came upon the ruins of the abbey, surrounded on all sides by creatures half rat and half man, defended by a small but devoted group of monks. Not about to let these vermin wrest his future from his grasp; he charged bellowing with rage. Slamming into their ranks the warrior fought on swinging his sword in deadly arcs, each swing sending a foe whirling down to the house of death, and so he fought, yet for each he killed two stepped forward to take its place burying him in a seething tide of bodies.
At the sight of this brave warrior attempting to save their abbey the beleaguered monks struck at the rat men with redoubled fury crushing helm and skull alike with their brilliant hammers, they fought like warrior poets, whirling, hacking, maiming a foe with each swing.
When the foe was beaten back they were able to recover the body of their savior; though he was near death they carried him into the abbey and healed his wounds. When he awoke the next dawn his armor and weapons were gone and in their stead were a brilliant replacement, armor created in dwarf forges. On the breastplate was engraved a heron with wings spread wide clutching a sword and wearing a crown. The shield was painted a brilliant crimson and on its surface a grail was etched this symbol of the lady's favor glowed brilliantly in the dim light of the room. In the corner sat a monk who spoke now as if realizing he was there for the firs time, "come my friend you must be hungry, please tell me your name." "Yes I hunger greatly, and my name, it is lost to me I was told I would find it here." "That you may for it is written that in a time of great need the lady will send a champion unto us and he shall come without a name."
Right that's it for now please review and if you've got a suggestion for our hero's name please let me know. Oh and about Rio, she is very special to me as she walked into my life in just about the manner described in chapter one. Yes she is a goddess or at least an angel. She has me on a very tight leash, though I suspect that shes trying to find he ball and chain. That's about all for chapter two, review people I want some feedback on this besides I haven't got the slightest idea what to call the hero.
Now without further gilding the lily and with no more ado chapter two Prophesy.
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He asked of her, "What is my quest?"
"That will become clear soon enough, however you must first find you name." This she said unto him, her words smooth as the crystal ballerina, gracefully dancing off the tongue. "You must first seek the abbey of La Maissontall, there your fate shall be spun for you." Swiftly as an arrow leaves the string the warrior departed in search of the abbey.
On the third night the stars were blotted out by the darkness and the moon was full, it was then that he came upon the ruins of the abbey, surrounded on all sides by creatures half rat and half man, defended by a small but devoted group of monks. Not about to let these vermin wrest his future from his grasp; he charged bellowing with rage. Slamming into their ranks the warrior fought on swinging his sword in deadly arcs, each swing sending a foe whirling down to the house of death, and so he fought, yet for each he killed two stepped forward to take its place burying him in a seething tide of bodies.
At the sight of this brave warrior attempting to save their abbey the beleaguered monks struck at the rat men with redoubled fury crushing helm and skull alike with their brilliant hammers, they fought like warrior poets, whirling, hacking, maiming a foe with each swing.
When the foe was beaten back they were able to recover the body of their savior; though he was near death they carried him into the abbey and healed his wounds. When he awoke the next dawn his armor and weapons were gone and in their stead were a brilliant replacement, armor created in dwarf forges. On the breastplate was engraved a heron with wings spread wide clutching a sword and wearing a crown. The shield was painted a brilliant crimson and on its surface a grail was etched this symbol of the lady's favor glowed brilliantly in the dim light of the room. In the corner sat a monk who spoke now as if realizing he was there for the firs time, "come my friend you must be hungry, please tell me your name." "Yes I hunger greatly, and my name, it is lost to me I was told I would find it here." "That you may for it is written that in a time of great need the lady will send a champion unto us and he shall come without a name."
Right that's it for now please review and if you've got a suggestion for our hero's name please let me know. Oh and about Rio, she is very special to me as she walked into my life in just about the manner described in chapter one. Yes she is a goddess or at least an angel. She has me on a very tight leash, though I suspect that shes trying to find he ball and chain. That's about all for chapter two, review people I want some feedback on this besides I haven't got the slightest idea what to call the hero.