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Zanzibar: Well, my dear Zanzibar, you have alot to say don't ya? Ill deal
with your concerns in the order they came...
1: I'm not really TRYING for the top..When it comes to lemon, Fennec has me
beat hands down..But at least alot of people like it, right?
2: 10,000 Volts seemed like plenty to me...
3: Hes not the comic releif...hes just being the tough-guy cynic that he
is...I think...
4: Plot? I'm working on it, but my resources arent infinite, ya know..
5: ..Merge?!
6: Shes full of suger..Thats why shes afraid of the roller coaster..she
doesnt want to hurl in front of her love interest...
7: Krystal caught him off guard..
8: *anime fall* I'm getting tired of that constant complaint.. I'M DOING MY
BEST, OK!?!
9: eh? I don't get your meaning...
10: Yes I know, I suffer with you..
11: Can I call you Zanzi? Just kidding...
Gold ninetails: Oy...I'm sorry that my small lime wasn't dirty enough for you, you sick person you...j/k...I'm not naive, I just didn't want them to have wild animal sex just yet.. Have some patience, K? Maybe next date... and, I upped the rating cause Fanfiction rules say I should make the rating as high as possible...
AsiRiaWeN: Thanks
Fennec: Maybe they'll "Get Naked" Later...Not everyone has your gift for kinkiness, ya know...This is the best I could come up with without.. er...insertion x_x
Crasher:...I never know what your talking about... thanks, I think... _______
Man, that was ALOT of reviews...sorry for waiting so long:(... But yay, I have almost 50 reviews!!!!!!YEAH! Why isn't my OTHER fix this well- reviewed?! _______
Chapter 13 Fox battled his way through a horde of Sharpclaw...On the other side was his prize....Krystal...The blue beauty sat on a small Alter, reaching toward him... The Sharpclaw were everywhere! He finally knocked down the last one...He walked slowly towards her...His beautiful vixen.. And reached his paw out to her. She smiled ecstatically and reached for it...Suddenly, Wolf appeared out of nowhere...He yanked Krystal away, and shoved a dagger in Fox's chest...He spun him around, stabbed his back, and pushed him off of the altar, as Fox fell, he reached out to her pathetically as he fell. down, down, down....His life flashed before his eyes...Then some he hadn't yet seen...Him, holding Krystal, kissing her, getting married to her ...Every sight, Krystal was ripped away in a random moment...Suddenly, something bright flashed in front of him.. A Krazoa? but...It was all wrong.. It was red, and its mouth was agape in a terrible scream.. Fox fell down into the terribly open mouth, and was gone...
Fox woke up in a cold sweat, looking around wildly....There was nothing....No screaming Krazoa, no grinning Wolf...Just his room...He assured himself quickly that it was just a dream, and got up. He cleaned up, and left his room, wandering what to do...He decided to go eat something...He headed toward the galley...The choice for today? He wasn't sure.. He had a small breakfast of pancakes, and wondered where Krystal was....In fact, where anyone was....He called up Falco on the com link, and heard only dead static...He wandered what was wrong, and walked to Falco's room....He knocked on the door, but didn't hear anything....He took out his gun, and kicked the door open....
Falco was draped out on his bed, as if asleep, with one major difference...There was blood on the side of his blanket.. Not a lot, just a small dot...Fox rushed over, and yanked the blanket out. Falco was knocked out, and had a very small injury on his chest...Fox put his mouth to the wound, and started sucking, in case Falco had been poisoned...Halfway through, Falco stirred, and woke up with a start...
"Uh.. Fox...As fun as this is, I think we should just stay friends..." He said cynically
Fox sighed and backed away, saying "Falco? Are you ok?"
"Yeah, sure...Why wouldn't you think so?"
"You were knocked out.. And were bleeding.. 1I thought maybe you had been hit with some sorta dart...Ill get Slippy.. Maybe he knows what happened..."
Falco grabbed his gun, and followed Fox to Slippie's room...Fox found him, draped over the bed, with a small bloodspot on his blanket...Fox checked, and sure enough, a small wound was in his chest...He grabbed the med kit Slippy kept on the wall, and took out a small device.. He ran it over Slippie's body, and it didn't register any abnormalities.. Just that there was a small hole in the spinal cord...Easily fixed with one of the number of futuristic devices in the kit...He used it on Falco and Slippy, fixing the small hole that had knocked them out.
"Slippy, wake up!
"Huh?! Slippy here...Oh.. your right there.. Whats up, Fox?" He croaked
"Slippy, what happened?"
"I don't know, Fox.. I was just standing here, and I felt a sharp pain in my back...I collapsed, and that's all I remember.."
"Fox, do you think Krystal is all right?"
Fox felt his blood chill...He had a sneaking suspicion...Which came out true. Krystal was gone.. He collapsed in a grieving heap, pounding the bed of his one real love...Falco came in, and saw what was going on...He shook his head, and punched the ground, cursing loudly
'Fox, who would do this?"
Fox knew...He looked up, and a hate burned hard in his eyes...A hate that scared Falco a step backwards...And he muttered a single word..."Wolf" He kept saying it, as if it had a secret meaning that only he knew...
"..Fox...I'll help you! Lets go get them!" Falco cocked his gun.. And found to his dismay that the battery gauge was on empty..."Oh no...They took out ammo, Fox..."
"Ill find a way! Time to go to Dinosaur Planet...I have...An idea..."
Silently, they jumped into their respective Arwings, which had also been de- ammo'd, and took off to Dinosaur Planet... ______________
KRYSTALS POV
Krystal woke up in a white room.. She recognized it from her earlier "Escapade"...This was Wolf's weird torture room....
"Did you sleep well, my beauty?" Wolfs mocking voice rang out
"I'm not your beauty! Now let me go, or I"
"Ooh...I'm shaking in my boots"
"Fox will save me, you know!"
"I'm counting on it! Watch this with me...Our hero, Fox, in a blind rage, comes after us! Only to find that he has no guns! but we do...You're the bait, my dear....And who knows, if you do your job well, you might have the honor of being more!" Wolf burst into crazed laughter...Obviously mad from his previous defeat...
"He will save me...I just know it...Until then, Ill just stay strong..." Krystal sat down, and defiantly faced the door... ____________
FOX POV
Fox and Falco arrived safely on Dinosaur Planet...Fox had an idea. He would ask the Krazoa for help...He went to see the Warpstone...The gargantuan rock man smiled jovially as he saw Fox approach
"Good to see ya again, Fox...How are things, my lad?"
"Warpstone, take me to Krazoa Palace...I need to talk to them!"
"Well, aren't we straight to the point...No talking with an old friend, ey?"
" Don't be like that...I don't have time for pleasantries! I have to save her!"
"Oh, its about that pretty blue vixen, is it? Well, I can't send you unless you have a Krazoa Spirit..."
"BUT...There aren't anymore! How do we get you one if there aren't any more!"
"Shh...Shh...Dont worry, Fox...Theres tales of s special one...He was a fighter, I hear..."
" A fighter? That's exactly what I'm looking for!!!!"
"Calm down! Calm down...Here, Ill tell you where to find it...No, be'er yet...I'll send ya there!"
The Warpstone picked up Fox in his huge hands, and warped him to a strange place...There were gigantic doors everywhere! Fox knuckled down, and picked one...He strained against the door, finally opening it, and ran down the narrow path, with Krystal coming in and out of his minds eye...He called to her, begging her to hold on, and kept up his steady run down the path...
Gold ninetails: Oy...I'm sorry that my small lime wasn't dirty enough for you, you sick person you...j/k...I'm not naive, I just didn't want them to have wild animal sex just yet.. Have some patience, K? Maybe next date... and, I upped the rating cause Fanfiction rules say I should make the rating as high as possible...
AsiRiaWeN: Thanks
Fennec: Maybe they'll "Get Naked" Later...Not everyone has your gift for kinkiness, ya know...This is the best I could come up with without.. er...insertion x_x
Crasher:...I never know what your talking about... thanks, I think... _______
Man, that was ALOT of reviews...sorry for waiting so long:(... But yay, I have almost 50 reviews!!!!!!YEAH! Why isn't my OTHER fix this well- reviewed?! _______
Chapter 13 Fox battled his way through a horde of Sharpclaw...On the other side was his prize....Krystal...The blue beauty sat on a small Alter, reaching toward him... The Sharpclaw were everywhere! He finally knocked down the last one...He walked slowly towards her...His beautiful vixen.. And reached his paw out to her. She smiled ecstatically and reached for it...Suddenly, Wolf appeared out of nowhere...He yanked Krystal away, and shoved a dagger in Fox's chest...He spun him around, stabbed his back, and pushed him off of the altar, as Fox fell, he reached out to her pathetically as he fell. down, down, down....His life flashed before his eyes...Then some he hadn't yet seen...Him, holding Krystal, kissing her, getting married to her ...Every sight, Krystal was ripped away in a random moment...Suddenly, something bright flashed in front of him.. A Krazoa? but...It was all wrong.. It was red, and its mouth was agape in a terrible scream.. Fox fell down into the terribly open mouth, and was gone...
Fox woke up in a cold sweat, looking around wildly....There was nothing....No screaming Krazoa, no grinning Wolf...Just his room...He assured himself quickly that it was just a dream, and got up. He cleaned up, and left his room, wandering what to do...He decided to go eat something...He headed toward the galley...The choice for today? He wasn't sure.. He had a small breakfast of pancakes, and wondered where Krystal was....In fact, where anyone was....He called up Falco on the com link, and heard only dead static...He wandered what was wrong, and walked to Falco's room....He knocked on the door, but didn't hear anything....He took out his gun, and kicked the door open....
Falco was draped out on his bed, as if asleep, with one major difference...There was blood on the side of his blanket.. Not a lot, just a small dot...Fox rushed over, and yanked the blanket out. Falco was knocked out, and had a very small injury on his chest...Fox put his mouth to the wound, and started sucking, in case Falco had been poisoned...Halfway through, Falco stirred, and woke up with a start...
"Uh.. Fox...As fun as this is, I think we should just stay friends..." He said cynically
Fox sighed and backed away, saying "Falco? Are you ok?"
"Yeah, sure...Why wouldn't you think so?"
"You were knocked out.. And were bleeding.. 1I thought maybe you had been hit with some sorta dart...Ill get Slippy.. Maybe he knows what happened..."
Falco grabbed his gun, and followed Fox to Slippie's room...Fox found him, draped over the bed, with a small bloodspot on his blanket...Fox checked, and sure enough, a small wound was in his chest...He grabbed the med kit Slippy kept on the wall, and took out a small device.. He ran it over Slippie's body, and it didn't register any abnormalities.. Just that there was a small hole in the spinal cord...Easily fixed with one of the number of futuristic devices in the kit...He used it on Falco and Slippy, fixing the small hole that had knocked them out.
"Slippy, wake up!
"Huh?! Slippy here...Oh.. your right there.. Whats up, Fox?" He croaked
"Slippy, what happened?"
"I don't know, Fox.. I was just standing here, and I felt a sharp pain in my back...I collapsed, and that's all I remember.."
"Fox, do you think Krystal is all right?"
Fox felt his blood chill...He had a sneaking suspicion...Which came out true. Krystal was gone.. He collapsed in a grieving heap, pounding the bed of his one real love...Falco came in, and saw what was going on...He shook his head, and punched the ground, cursing loudly
'Fox, who would do this?"
Fox knew...He looked up, and a hate burned hard in his eyes...A hate that scared Falco a step backwards...And he muttered a single word..."Wolf" He kept saying it, as if it had a secret meaning that only he knew...
"..Fox...I'll help you! Lets go get them!" Falco cocked his gun.. And found to his dismay that the battery gauge was on empty..."Oh no...They took out ammo, Fox..."
"Ill find a way! Time to go to Dinosaur Planet...I have...An idea..."
Silently, they jumped into their respective Arwings, which had also been de- ammo'd, and took off to Dinosaur Planet... ______________
KRYSTALS POV
Krystal woke up in a white room.. She recognized it from her earlier "Escapade"...This was Wolf's weird torture room....
"Did you sleep well, my beauty?" Wolfs mocking voice rang out
"I'm not your beauty! Now let me go, or I"
"Ooh...I'm shaking in my boots"
"Fox will save me, you know!"
"I'm counting on it! Watch this with me...Our hero, Fox, in a blind rage, comes after us! Only to find that he has no guns! but we do...You're the bait, my dear....And who knows, if you do your job well, you might have the honor of being more!" Wolf burst into crazed laughter...Obviously mad from his previous defeat...
"He will save me...I just know it...Until then, Ill just stay strong..." Krystal sat down, and defiantly faced the door... ____________
FOX POV
Fox and Falco arrived safely on Dinosaur Planet...Fox had an idea. He would ask the Krazoa for help...He went to see the Warpstone...The gargantuan rock man smiled jovially as he saw Fox approach
"Good to see ya again, Fox...How are things, my lad?"
"Warpstone, take me to Krazoa Palace...I need to talk to them!"
"Well, aren't we straight to the point...No talking with an old friend, ey?"
" Don't be like that...I don't have time for pleasantries! I have to save her!"
"Oh, its about that pretty blue vixen, is it? Well, I can't send you unless you have a Krazoa Spirit..."
"BUT...There aren't anymore! How do we get you one if there aren't any more!"
"Shh...Shh...Dont worry, Fox...Theres tales of s special one...He was a fighter, I hear..."
" A fighter? That's exactly what I'm looking for!!!!"
"Calm down! Calm down...Here, Ill tell you where to find it...No, be'er yet...I'll send ya there!"
The Warpstone picked up Fox in his huge hands, and warped him to a strange place...There were gigantic doors everywhere! Fox knuckled down, and picked one...He strained against the door, finally opening it, and ran down the narrow path, with Krystal coming in and out of his minds eye...He called to her, begging her to hold on, and kept up his steady run down the path...
