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Chapter 2
'Don't it always seem to go that you don't know what you got 'til it's gone?'
Yeah, that's about right, she'd been everything to him at first but that original fire had turned to mere sparks. Little more than before the monkey pox epidemic, when he loved her but didn't know how she felt. Then he'd realised how much she'd meant to him, how their relationship had broken down into almost nothing, fire to ashes, the remnants of the best relationship he'd ever had, ever been truly happy in. He thought that proposing would help fix that, help to rekindle the flame or whatever. But it hadn't. As far as he could tell, after that, she was just trying to impress him, to make him change his mind over the proposal. Fair enough, if it were real! A sponsor.AND the smoking patch in a week? Yeah, right! Two bad habits couldn't be broken at once. But maybe she'd thought it would last just long enough to be married into the 'Carter Family Trust.' But surely she wasn't like that, or was she. All the women he'd dated in the past had suddenly become really interested when the found out he was related to one of the richest families in Chicago. But Abby wasn't like that; she was different from the rest. She didn't care about the money she couldn't, she just wanted someone strong to hold on to, to tell her everything was going to be alright. Well then what would it be like when she didn't need that, she wouldn't need him anymore. That's why he had changed his mind. About two things, the marriage and the trip to the Congo to volunteer for medicina international. So here he was, John Carter, sitting in first class on his way to the Congo, contemplating life, relationships and everything.
Chapter 2
'Don't it always seem to go that you don't know what you got 'til it's gone?'
Yeah, that's about right, she'd been everything to him at first but that original fire had turned to mere sparks. Little more than before the monkey pox epidemic, when he loved her but didn't know how she felt. Then he'd realised how much she'd meant to him, how their relationship had broken down into almost nothing, fire to ashes, the remnants of the best relationship he'd ever had, ever been truly happy in. He thought that proposing would help fix that, help to rekindle the flame or whatever. But it hadn't. As far as he could tell, after that, she was just trying to impress him, to make him change his mind over the proposal. Fair enough, if it were real! A sponsor.AND the smoking patch in a week? Yeah, right! Two bad habits couldn't be broken at once. But maybe she'd thought it would last just long enough to be married into the 'Carter Family Trust.' But surely she wasn't like that, or was she. All the women he'd dated in the past had suddenly become really interested when the found out he was related to one of the richest families in Chicago. But Abby wasn't like that; she was different from the rest. She didn't care about the money she couldn't, she just wanted someone strong to hold on to, to tell her everything was going to be alright. Well then what would it be like when she didn't need that, she wouldn't need him anymore. That's why he had changed his mind. About two things, the marriage and the trip to the Congo to volunteer for medicina international. So here he was, John Carter, sitting in first class on his way to the Congo, contemplating life, relationships and everything.
