Ok I'm not the best young writer ever as people claim I bloody am. Ok well anyway please review. It might help me, especially because I really need suggestions. And I'm warning everyone who hates long stories this could be a long story very very long. So I suggest you keep up. With me as I am the slowest bum ever when it comes to writing. Thank you. Ps this story may sound a little ghetto and not how they talk in the movies and the books but I'm black I'm from Trenton so I really can't help it. Sorry.
Chapter 2: back to the 5th year
"Hermione!" a voice yelled from a round the corner of platform nine and three quarters.
"Huh?" She thought. "Who could that be?" As she turned around her straight long brown hair flashed in the sun then she saw Harry standing behind her.
"Harry! Where have you been? You didn't answer my owls!" She screamed. Harry now 5'6 was smiling shyly. He was muscular not too muscular but just right. His black hair sleeked back with just a hint of hair gel. He was wearing a white shirt and back pants and Reeboks sneakers.
"Wow... Harry you look, nice." She commented trying not to sound rude
"Thanks you look very nice yourself." He said as he admired her black diamond outlined flared jeans, her light blue sleeveless shirt, and her Nike sneakers. "Wait till Ron sees you. He'll start snogging you all over." Harry smiled as she started to blush.
As if on cue Ron ran around the corner, looking very unusual in a white muscle shirt, black pants, and new Reeboks sneakers.
"Hermoine?" he asked.
"Ron?" she replied. "Ron is that you? I can't believe how much we've all changed."
"Oh we're not the only ones...look at Malfoy." Harry said pointing at Draco, Crabbe, and Goyle. Malfoy was 5'6 just a little taller than Harry was, but it didn't really show much. He was in black muscle shirt, which definitely served its purpose. Black baggy pants and new sneakers did the trick to make some Slytherin girls faint.
"It's worse than when Viktor Krum was here for the Triwizard Tournament." Ron said shaking his head in disbelief. "They all want him. What's he got that we don't, Harry?"
"A larger crowd." Harry replied as though he was in a daze. Suddenly out of nowhere Hedwig appeared.
"Hey look it's from Sirius." Hermoine noted.
"Yea, Harry read it." Ron added in.
Dear Harry, How are things going? So you're 15 now. How does it feel? Oh well never mind. I just wanted to say hello to everyone and your uncle and aunt, how are they doing? Even though they probably still hate me for Apperating into your aunts' kitchen. Anyway tell them I say hello. I am starting to understand why you hate that Dudley character. A bit porky isn't he. Ok well Beaky here is bothering me so I will write back some other time. Say hello to Ron and Hermoine for me. And stay away from Malfoy. He's bad news since his father was thrown into Azkaban. Ok well I must go. Good bye,
Sirius
" Ok?" Ron said.
"Well well well if it isn't weasel, potter, and the mudblood. You finally grew up." Draco taunted.
"Screw you Draco!" Hermoine yelled.
"Whoa the mudblood has a temper. Better change that if you want ever want to be Head girl."
"Oh I will be head girl Draco Malfoy. Just you wait and see."
"Whatever you say." He said and walked off over to board the train.
"Guys let's just get on," Harry said.
"Aight." Ron replied.
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On the train:
"What a jerk that Malfoy is" Hermoine mumbled to Harry, Ron, and Ginny who just stared at her.
" 'Mione I'm not going to lie to you. You have been talking about Malfoy FOR AN HOUR! Give it a rest!" to everyone surprise Ginny yelled.
"Wow, Sorry." She replied. "Ill try to shut up now."
"Its aight." Ron said.
"Students please begin to put on your robes as we will be reaching Hogwarts in 10 minutes!" the PA blared.
"I'll be right back," Hermoine said. As she walked down the aisle she thought to herself " I may pass Malfoy but whatever he does my final destination... bathroom" [dumb I know but live with it] as she walked towards her destination she turned around and bumped into Malfoy (he was facing the other way to.)
"What is your problem Granger?"
"ME!?!?!?!? You bumped into me you jerk!"
"Whatever. Just... stay away from me."
"Gladly." She smiled and walked to her "destination."
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So now I have revised chapter 2. I think it might be much better now, but I really didn't want to change much. It's still my old style of writing, but oh well. Review if you want.
