Hello. I recently read what I'd wrote on "The Odd and Original Couple." I had 2 chapters written and they were very short and not that good. I've decided to revise "The Odd and Original Couple." Here's some notes before I begin:
Shizuka skipped a grade and therefore is in the same grade as the others.
Malik = Malik
Yami Malik = Marik
Yami Yugi = Yami
Yugi = Yugi
Yami Bakura = Bakura
Bakura = Ryou
//Yami to Hikari//
/Hikari to Yami/
'thoughts'
-----Character POV-----
And without further ado I present the revised "Odd and Original Couple"!
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Shizuka Katsuya sat at the table where she, her brother, and his friends were eating lunch. Her brother, Jounouchi Katsuya, and his friends were all talking about something or the other. Shizuka wasn't really paying attention to any of them. She was pre-occupied with her own thoughts.
-----Shizuka-----
I look over to where Malik and Bakura are sitting. They are talking about something, though I don't know what. My gaze is turned to another table, the one where Marik, Malik's yami, is sitting. He is sitting alone, as usual. He has no friends. Of course, no one expects him too. He is evil. He has killed and hurt many people. He even went as for as to kick Malik, the light half of his soul, out of his own body. But why? Why did he do all of those things? He had to have a reason. No one goes out and kills people for no reason, no matter how psychotic or evil they are. Was he really evil? Sure, he had done many bad things, but why? I remember that years ago, my brother told me not to judge people, or at least not until you know the whole truth. Does Jounouchi or any of his friends know the whole story? Have they ever asked him why he does the things he does?
-----End POV-----
"Yo sis, is everything OK?"Jounouchi asked, curious to why Shizuka hadn't said anything.
"I'm fine." Shizuka answered. There was a short pause before she started to ask them if they knew why Marik acted the way he did. "Guys, can I ask all of you a question?"
"Sure, Shizuka. What is it?" Answered/asked Yugi.
"Why does Marik act the way he does?" She finally asked.
"Cuz' he's evil."Jounouchi answered.
"He has to have another reason. He has to have a better reason than that. And is he really evil? How do we know if he's evil without knowing his reasons why?"
"Sis, he goes on killing sprees for crying out loud! Of course he's evil!"
"But why does he go on killing sprees? And why are you so quick to judge?
"Sis, I don't know what goes on in his twisted mind so I don't have no clue to why he kills people. And I think I know him enough to classify him as evil."
"Oh, so you don't know him well enough to know why he kills people yet you know him well enough to classify him as evil!?!"
"Yes! I mean no! I mean.....I don't know! Since when have you been so interested in Marik?"
"Since when have you been a hypocrite?"
"Whaddya mean?"
"You once told me not to judge a person until I knew the whole story. Do you know the whole story?"
"No, but-"
"But what?"
"Listen, sis, you're right I don't know the whole story. I do know that he caused a lot of trouble and is very dangerous, and that's enough for me."
"Well it's not enough for me!"
"Oh, and exactly how do you intend to find out the whole story."
"I don't know. I do know that I will find out, somehow."
Shizuka then stormed off, leaving the others to their own thoughts.
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After Shizuka left, an uncomfortable silence fell over the group.
Yami wasn't really thinking about anything except a certain black haired Egyptian. All the talk abou Marik made him think about Malik. Thinking about Malik made him think about his older sister, the amazing Isis.
Anzu just sat there, clueless.
Honda was wondering why Shizuka was thinking so much about Marik, and not about him.
Ryou was thinking about what Shizuka had said. She had a very good point when she said none of them knew if Marik was really evil. Except, instead of Marik, he was more concerned about why his yami acted the way he did.
Yugi also thought about what Shizuka had said. She had made a very good point. Yugi was also wondering why Yami wasn't more concerned about what had just taken place.
Finally, Jounouchi broke the silence with a question.
"Guys?"
"Yes, Jou." Anzu said.
"What's a hypocrite?"
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There's chapter 1. Please Review!
Shizuka skipped a grade and therefore is in the same grade as the others.
Malik = Malik
Yami Malik = Marik
Yami Yugi = Yami
Yugi = Yugi
Yami Bakura = Bakura
Bakura = Ryou
//Yami to Hikari//
/Hikari to Yami/
'thoughts'
-----Character POV-----
And without further ado I present the revised "Odd and Original Couple"!
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Shizuka Katsuya sat at the table where she, her brother, and his friends were eating lunch. Her brother, Jounouchi Katsuya, and his friends were all talking about something or the other. Shizuka wasn't really paying attention to any of them. She was pre-occupied with her own thoughts.
-----Shizuka-----
I look over to where Malik and Bakura are sitting. They are talking about something, though I don't know what. My gaze is turned to another table, the one where Marik, Malik's yami, is sitting. He is sitting alone, as usual. He has no friends. Of course, no one expects him too. He is evil. He has killed and hurt many people. He even went as for as to kick Malik, the light half of his soul, out of his own body. But why? Why did he do all of those things? He had to have a reason. No one goes out and kills people for no reason, no matter how psychotic or evil they are. Was he really evil? Sure, he had done many bad things, but why? I remember that years ago, my brother told me not to judge people, or at least not until you know the whole truth. Does Jounouchi or any of his friends know the whole story? Have they ever asked him why he does the things he does?
-----End POV-----
"Yo sis, is everything OK?"Jounouchi asked, curious to why Shizuka hadn't said anything.
"I'm fine." Shizuka answered. There was a short pause before she started to ask them if they knew why Marik acted the way he did. "Guys, can I ask all of you a question?"
"Sure, Shizuka. What is it?" Answered/asked Yugi.
"Why does Marik act the way he does?" She finally asked.
"Cuz' he's evil."Jounouchi answered.
"He has to have another reason. He has to have a better reason than that. And is he really evil? How do we know if he's evil without knowing his reasons why?"
"Sis, he goes on killing sprees for crying out loud! Of course he's evil!"
"But why does he go on killing sprees? And why are you so quick to judge?
"Sis, I don't know what goes on in his twisted mind so I don't have no clue to why he kills people. And I think I know him enough to classify him as evil."
"Oh, so you don't know him well enough to know why he kills people yet you know him well enough to classify him as evil!?!"
"Yes! I mean no! I mean.....I don't know! Since when have you been so interested in Marik?"
"Since when have you been a hypocrite?"
"Whaddya mean?"
"You once told me not to judge a person until I knew the whole story. Do you know the whole story?"
"No, but-"
"But what?"
"Listen, sis, you're right I don't know the whole story. I do know that he caused a lot of trouble and is very dangerous, and that's enough for me."
"Well it's not enough for me!"
"Oh, and exactly how do you intend to find out the whole story."
"I don't know. I do know that I will find out, somehow."
Shizuka then stormed off, leaving the others to their own thoughts.
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After Shizuka left, an uncomfortable silence fell over the group.
Yami wasn't really thinking about anything except a certain black haired Egyptian. All the talk abou Marik made him think about Malik. Thinking about Malik made him think about his older sister, the amazing Isis.
Anzu just sat there, clueless.
Honda was wondering why Shizuka was thinking so much about Marik, and not about him.
Ryou was thinking about what Shizuka had said. She had a very good point when she said none of them knew if Marik was really evil. Except, instead of Marik, he was more concerned about why his yami acted the way he did.
Yugi also thought about what Shizuka had said. She had made a very good point. Yugi was also wondering why Yami wasn't more concerned about what had just taken place.
Finally, Jounouchi broke the silence with a question.
"Guys?"
"Yes, Jou." Anzu said.
"What's a hypocrite?"
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There's chapter 1. Please Review!
