Butterfly: Don't worry about other characters, you don't have to have them all. I mean, even Takahashi doesn't put all of them in every single episode... rnI liked the entries, though I guess Akane would be talking about her last school day too, not only about he being bisexual (which seemed a bit unconnected to the rest of the story at this point). Oh well, hope you update soon!
Response: Probably something I'll add in 2.0, once that I come up with stuff that would happen. I found from my own last day of school that's it's fairly uneventful, maybe some final tests, but those are for the most part probably gotten out of the way by then so the Seniors can really enjoy the day. Still, I find that it was almost boringly average for me, so Akane might just feel the same way about it, and she never really mentions school days in other entries, except for things that she finds unusual during the day, such as Nabiki hatching her "plan". Since nothing particularly usual happened that day (in this version, anyway, 2.0 may have a revision, as stated before), she doesn't really note the events of the day.
The review from yesterday was a bit weird, as I said, but I received an e-mail from the reviewer showing that there was a lot more in it, and after asking what the hell fannon and cannon mean, which I'll also outline for people like myself who have no idea, I'll give responses.
Fannon: Unofficial things, usually coming from fan fiction, perceived to be actually come from the series.
Cannon: Official information, from the anime and/or manga and/or creator.
Now
Goku90504's full review: your right it is hard to do akane i have an uncanny ability to figure out how well written stories are going to go because i understand many differently personalty types much better that collage grad psychologist but even i have trouble with Akane
Response: The one poor thing about spell-checkers is that you still have to go over what you wrote to make sure you didn't type the wrong words, like "that" instead of "than" and "collage" instead of "college". Anyway, my mom majored in psychology @ ISU, she hasn't gotten a post-grad or whatever it's called degree, but she plans on getting one perhaps at some point in the future. I have done a little research into psychology, although it's mostly just from the diagnostic criteria, and most of it is about my dissorder: Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder, for a thesis paper on whether or not Godzilla has it (something I did in 8th grade for a project, lol).
Also, in the e-mail explaining cannon/fannon, you mentioned that Akane has some kind of fear of being raped, which makes sense on some kind of level, however considering that Ranma's mainly just supposed to be a fun series, that's just too much deep angst to really incorporate in the story. Consequently, I'll go no deeper than the boyophobia concept.
there is almost no cannon info on the styles Ranma uses other than kempo and amazon wu shu which is most of his advanced stuff like the hiru shonta ha any ways the style anything goes is supposed to be a mix of a lot of different styles with out the weakness of each style with kempo as the base style and even that is mostly fannon as far as i know some one did calculations on cannon info and it seem with the kactu tenshin amaguri ken he can punch faster than sound and can pick up something like 2 ton's (i might be off on that as its been along time since i read those calculations but i clearly remember that he punches faster than sound)
Respone: I went to a site that had those calculations (looks it up): http://www.wot-club.org.uk/RanmaFAQ/
"Ranma could lift 15 tons - though not necessarily hold it for a long time"
Specific Page: http://www.wot-club.org.uk/RanmaFAQ/arts/ranma.html
I'm still planning on continuing to study the kenpo (that's how it's spelled, I think…unless there's one style spelled kenpo, and other spelled kempo, which is seriously confusing, and then I just wasted a bunch of printer paper. lol) information.
it's cannon that akane can not cook well even with detailed instructions there are many fannon reasons given but as far as i know there is no cannon reason my favorite fannon reason is that she has some sort of curse on her to prevent her from having house wife skill's while making her blind to the fact but as i said this a fannon reason not cannon the cannon does not give a reason as far as i know
Response: Here I'll be basing it purely of cannon, except for maybe the instructions part, but she'll be taken under the wing of the best cooker in the world (Ukyo), so there might just be hope…but the whole curse thing would make even that impossible, unless there would be some way to remove it.
it is fannon with a **little** cannon support that akane is bi but see's liking girls as bad which would go along way to explaining akane's anger with perverts because she angry with herself for being a pervert but wont admit it
Response: I already responded to this particular part, but now I know what fannon with a *little* cannon support means. Still, there isn't much else to say that I haven't already.
Gohan22:Why the hell did you make akane bisexual?! How does that relate to the story?
Response: She mentioned it before, just not in incredible detail…maybe I shouldn't have mentioned it so soon…it pertains to late late late late late in the story. I've discussed this in other review responses, and perhaps you're just homophobic, although I must admit I do not necessarily condone these kinds of things, I just write about them because they have apparently become part of our modern society. I really just wanted to introduce it early on because it just needed to be discussed at some point, that's all. I guess I did write it at a fairly unusual moment, I thought that just starting the entry with the whole issue straight off would help make it work better so I wouldn't have to flow from one subject into an entirely different subject. Unfortunately, it seemed to backfire on me by making it seem totally out of place when there was no particular event or anything to make her go into thought about her sexual orientation. This will probably be another thing to put on my list of stuff to add-in for version 2.0.
I think I might start making some 2.0 changes starting today, the chapter after this, if I have time to write it, will indicate whether or not the update has been made.
Ver: 2.0
Update: Any revisions to this chapter will take place after additional feedback is received, thank you.
"We're moving on and we can't slow down, these memories are playing like a film without sound, and I keep thinking of that night in June. I didn't know much of love, but it came too soon…" -Vitamin C.
Graduation:
"…and once beyond the confines of Furikan High, you will discover a vast world of possibilities, and opportunities. And while one may think this is a simple change, alas, for it is not…"
The snores rung loudly through the vast auditorium, while the people in the school administration and staff listened with pride.
"…but the road goes on, the road goes on…"
The aforementioned people started the applause, which woke up the students whole started applauding and cheering not because the speech was good, but rather because it was over.
"Thank you." Kuno said before leaving the stage and taking a seat next to the other guest speakers.
The rest of the graduation ceremony was not too much more than waiting for the row in front of them to sit so they can stand up and then wait for their own names to be called. Nabiki once again has worked her magic to insure that Ranma and Akane would end up sitting next to each other in the seating arrangement, however, they could only really talk before and after the graduation ceremony. It was kinda cute, though, when Ranma had his head on Akane's shoulder when he was sleeping. Of course, it kind of irritated Akane, but she feel asleep just in time to not act on that irritation.
Ranma and Akane finally had their names called and their pictures taken, and returned to their seats to await the end of the ceremony, and when that was done, they said goodbye to their friends and headed home.
When they got there, Akane asked Ranma to meet her in her room, because she had something she wanted to tell him.
After putting his diploma and everything in a safe place in his room, he walked over to Akane's room and knocked on the door.
"If you're Ranma, you can come in, if you're anyone else, please leave a message."
Ranma opened the door.
"You don't want anyone else in here?"
Akane hung a "do not disturb" sign up outside and locked the door.
"Yeah."
"Uh…you're making me nervous now…"
"Don't worry, I'd have to kill myself if I did anything of the things you're probably thinking of right now. I'm just locking the door so no one can interrupt what I'm going to say to you. I might add that if you tell anyone…well, it just goes without saying."
Ranma was wired more than an undercover agent now.
"Great! I haven't even told you and you're already freaking out! THIS IS NOT HELPING MY SITUATION!" Akane said, "And now I'm freaking out which is freaking out you even more and it's a treacherous circle. Ranma, for my sake, please calm down!"
"Uh…I'll try…"
"Ranma, I'm bi."
"What, you're leaving or something?"
"BISEXUAL DAMMIT! DO I HAVE TO SPELL IT OUT!!"
Ranma was silent.
"Sorry, I forget you didn't go to the school until Junior year, and Health class was a sophmore course."
"I took health class in middle school, so I know what the "sexual" part means…"
"You're IQ may be higher than I thought it was, but missing however many years of education during your training trip is obviously enough for me to continue calling you a baka."
"Hey!"
"Well, you're a semi-baka, maybe not a full-fledged and hopeless baka."
"Whatever, I still don't know what that whole buysexual thing means."
"It means I like both guys and girls."
"I thought you hated guys…"
"But I had a thing for Dr. Tofu and now there's this really weird thing with you I can't explain…"
"You mean you LIKE LIKE girls?"
"Well, there was only one…way back…I guess maybe it might not have been enough to really earn that label, but I know I'm capable of having strong feelings for a girl-and, well…I wouldn't have too many problems about getting physically intimate with one, I mean…one that I would have strong feelings for."
"Are you trying to tell me that you have a thing for my girl-form?"
"NO! It's just that if you would for some reason want to do something like that after we get married, it'd be okay, you wouldn't have to hesitate unless you had problems with it yourself…personally, I'd have no problems if you didn't either, I'm just saying in case…and I feel it's important that you know about this sooner as opposed to later."
"Well, I don't know if I'd…I mean, I really don't want to think about anything like that right now…it's too early…and you thought I was perverted all this time…"
"Hey! I'm just nervous about it, okay! I was afraid you'd freak out or something! So I wanted to tell you before things got to a point where I'd have a lot to lose something like that!"
"Akane, I'm sorry…I'm a bit confused about all this myself…we may be adults, but we're still teenagers, we still don't know quite how to sort out our feelings."
"Ranma, could you go now, I want to be alone now…"
"Alright…but could you unlock the door first…"
Akane did that, and Ranma left, leaving the sign up because obviously she was in no condition to be disturbed by anyone, and really, neither was he…
Author's Conclusion: No that took a lot out of me…making the characters emotional just makes me emotional. *breaks into tears* WHY CAN'T THEY JUST LOVE EACH OTHER! *sobs*
Response: Probably something I'll add in 2.0, once that I come up with stuff that would happen. I found from my own last day of school that's it's fairly uneventful, maybe some final tests, but those are for the most part probably gotten out of the way by then so the Seniors can really enjoy the day. Still, I find that it was almost boringly average for me, so Akane might just feel the same way about it, and she never really mentions school days in other entries, except for things that she finds unusual during the day, such as Nabiki hatching her "plan". Since nothing particularly usual happened that day (in this version, anyway, 2.0 may have a revision, as stated before), she doesn't really note the events of the day.
The review from yesterday was a bit weird, as I said, but I received an e-mail from the reviewer showing that there was a lot more in it, and after asking what the hell fannon and cannon mean, which I'll also outline for people like myself who have no idea, I'll give responses.
Fannon: Unofficial things, usually coming from fan fiction, perceived to be actually come from the series.
Cannon: Official information, from the anime and/or manga and/or creator.
Now
Goku90504's full review: your right it is hard to do akane i have an uncanny ability to figure out how well written stories are going to go because i understand many differently personalty types much better that collage grad psychologist but even i have trouble with Akane
Response: The one poor thing about spell-checkers is that you still have to go over what you wrote to make sure you didn't type the wrong words, like "that" instead of "than" and "collage" instead of "college". Anyway, my mom majored in psychology @ ISU, she hasn't gotten a post-grad or whatever it's called degree, but she plans on getting one perhaps at some point in the future. I have done a little research into psychology, although it's mostly just from the diagnostic criteria, and most of it is about my dissorder: Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder, for a thesis paper on whether or not Godzilla has it (something I did in 8th grade for a project, lol).
Also, in the e-mail explaining cannon/fannon, you mentioned that Akane has some kind of fear of being raped, which makes sense on some kind of level, however considering that Ranma's mainly just supposed to be a fun series, that's just too much deep angst to really incorporate in the story. Consequently, I'll go no deeper than the boyophobia concept.
there is almost no cannon info on the styles Ranma uses other than kempo and amazon wu shu which is most of his advanced stuff like the hiru shonta ha any ways the style anything goes is supposed to be a mix of a lot of different styles with out the weakness of each style with kempo as the base style and even that is mostly fannon as far as i know some one did calculations on cannon info and it seem with the kactu tenshin amaguri ken he can punch faster than sound and can pick up something like 2 ton's (i might be off on that as its been along time since i read those calculations but i clearly remember that he punches faster than sound)
Respone: I went to a site that had those calculations (looks it up): http://www.wot-club.org.uk/RanmaFAQ/
"Ranma could lift 15 tons - though not necessarily hold it for a long time"
Specific Page: http://www.wot-club.org.uk/RanmaFAQ/arts/ranma.html
I'm still planning on continuing to study the kenpo (that's how it's spelled, I think…unless there's one style spelled kenpo, and other spelled kempo, which is seriously confusing, and then I just wasted a bunch of printer paper. lol) information.
it's cannon that akane can not cook well even with detailed instructions there are many fannon reasons given but as far as i know there is no cannon reason my favorite fannon reason is that she has some sort of curse on her to prevent her from having house wife skill's while making her blind to the fact but as i said this a fannon reason not cannon the cannon does not give a reason as far as i know
Response: Here I'll be basing it purely of cannon, except for maybe the instructions part, but she'll be taken under the wing of the best cooker in the world (Ukyo), so there might just be hope…but the whole curse thing would make even that impossible, unless there would be some way to remove it.
it is fannon with a **little** cannon support that akane is bi but see's liking girls as bad which would go along way to explaining akane's anger with perverts because she angry with herself for being a pervert but wont admit it
Response: I already responded to this particular part, but now I know what fannon with a *little* cannon support means. Still, there isn't much else to say that I haven't already.
Gohan22:Why the hell did you make akane bisexual?! How does that relate to the story?
Response: She mentioned it before, just not in incredible detail…maybe I shouldn't have mentioned it so soon…it pertains to late late late late late in the story. I've discussed this in other review responses, and perhaps you're just homophobic, although I must admit I do not necessarily condone these kinds of things, I just write about them because they have apparently become part of our modern society. I really just wanted to introduce it early on because it just needed to be discussed at some point, that's all. I guess I did write it at a fairly unusual moment, I thought that just starting the entry with the whole issue straight off would help make it work better so I wouldn't have to flow from one subject into an entirely different subject. Unfortunately, it seemed to backfire on me by making it seem totally out of place when there was no particular event or anything to make her go into thought about her sexual orientation. This will probably be another thing to put on my list of stuff to add-in for version 2.0.
I think I might start making some 2.0 changes starting today, the chapter after this, if I have time to write it, will indicate whether or not the update has been made.
Ver: 2.0
Update: Any revisions to this chapter will take place after additional feedback is received, thank you.
"We're moving on and we can't slow down, these memories are playing like a film without sound, and I keep thinking of that night in June. I didn't know much of love, but it came too soon…" -Vitamin C.
Graduation:
"…and once beyond the confines of Furikan High, you will discover a vast world of possibilities, and opportunities. And while one may think this is a simple change, alas, for it is not…"
The snores rung loudly through the vast auditorium, while the people in the school administration and staff listened with pride.
"…but the road goes on, the road goes on…"
The aforementioned people started the applause, which woke up the students whole started applauding and cheering not because the speech was good, but rather because it was over.
"Thank you." Kuno said before leaving the stage and taking a seat next to the other guest speakers.
The rest of the graduation ceremony was not too much more than waiting for the row in front of them to sit so they can stand up and then wait for their own names to be called. Nabiki once again has worked her magic to insure that Ranma and Akane would end up sitting next to each other in the seating arrangement, however, they could only really talk before and after the graduation ceremony. It was kinda cute, though, when Ranma had his head on Akane's shoulder when he was sleeping. Of course, it kind of irritated Akane, but she feel asleep just in time to not act on that irritation.
Ranma and Akane finally had their names called and their pictures taken, and returned to their seats to await the end of the ceremony, and when that was done, they said goodbye to their friends and headed home.
When they got there, Akane asked Ranma to meet her in her room, because she had something she wanted to tell him.
After putting his diploma and everything in a safe place in his room, he walked over to Akane's room and knocked on the door.
"If you're Ranma, you can come in, if you're anyone else, please leave a message."
Ranma opened the door.
"You don't want anyone else in here?"
Akane hung a "do not disturb" sign up outside and locked the door.
"Yeah."
"Uh…you're making me nervous now…"
"Don't worry, I'd have to kill myself if I did anything of the things you're probably thinking of right now. I'm just locking the door so no one can interrupt what I'm going to say to you. I might add that if you tell anyone…well, it just goes without saying."
Ranma was wired more than an undercover agent now.
"Great! I haven't even told you and you're already freaking out! THIS IS NOT HELPING MY SITUATION!" Akane said, "And now I'm freaking out which is freaking out you even more and it's a treacherous circle. Ranma, for my sake, please calm down!"
"Uh…I'll try…"
"Ranma, I'm bi."
"What, you're leaving or something?"
"BISEXUAL DAMMIT! DO I HAVE TO SPELL IT OUT!!"
Ranma was silent.
"Sorry, I forget you didn't go to the school until Junior year, and Health class was a sophmore course."
"I took health class in middle school, so I know what the "sexual" part means…"
"You're IQ may be higher than I thought it was, but missing however many years of education during your training trip is obviously enough for me to continue calling you a baka."
"Hey!"
"Well, you're a semi-baka, maybe not a full-fledged and hopeless baka."
"Whatever, I still don't know what that whole buysexual thing means."
"It means I like both guys and girls."
"I thought you hated guys…"
"But I had a thing for Dr. Tofu and now there's this really weird thing with you I can't explain…"
"You mean you LIKE LIKE girls?"
"Well, there was only one…way back…I guess maybe it might not have been enough to really earn that label, but I know I'm capable of having strong feelings for a girl-and, well…I wouldn't have too many problems about getting physically intimate with one, I mean…one that I would have strong feelings for."
"Are you trying to tell me that you have a thing for my girl-form?"
"NO! It's just that if you would for some reason want to do something like that after we get married, it'd be okay, you wouldn't have to hesitate unless you had problems with it yourself…personally, I'd have no problems if you didn't either, I'm just saying in case…and I feel it's important that you know about this sooner as opposed to later."
"Well, I don't know if I'd…I mean, I really don't want to think about anything like that right now…it's too early…and you thought I was perverted all this time…"
"Hey! I'm just nervous about it, okay! I was afraid you'd freak out or something! So I wanted to tell you before things got to a point where I'd have a lot to lose something like that!"
"Akane, I'm sorry…I'm a bit confused about all this myself…we may be adults, but we're still teenagers, we still don't know quite how to sort out our feelings."
"Ranma, could you go now, I want to be alone now…"
"Alright…but could you unlock the door first…"
Akane did that, and Ranma left, leaving the sign up because obviously she was in no condition to be disturbed by anyone, and really, neither was he…
Author's Conclusion: No that took a lot out of me…making the characters emotional just makes me emotional. *breaks into tears* WHY CAN'T THEY JUST LOVE EACH OTHER! *sobs*