Mary: Woah. Akane's bisexual. You know even though she's always been a "man-hater," I've never seen her as liking girls. I mean I hate boys, but I don't "hate" boys. See what I mean?
I hope that Chapter 13 kind of makes up for all of that by explaining that idea a little more. It was just one incident, and she's a bit uncomfortable about that, I also have made some changes to the chapter to make it sound more natural and to put a slightly higher emphasis on the fact that she's never felt that way for another girl since then. I also had a very inspired way of making her remember about it, so go and read up on a few of the changes, each is pointed out, so you can probably just skip over to the parts I indicate as having changed. Future chapters will be referred to as Ver.: 2.0 when I receive feedback that indicates I could make a change. I made sure that all the changes were subtle enough as to not disturb the flow of the story.
I'd like to take this opportunity to thank everyone who's reviewed the story up to this point in offering me advice that I can use for these revisions.
I'd also like to apologize, because I think I may have typed up about Akane being bi in one of the chapters where the program crashed and then forgot to mention it again when I re-typed it. I have no added it to any of the 2.0 revisions because for one I cannot remember where I wrote it originally, and for another thing it makes some sense that Akane would discus it in such a familiar sense, because it had been on her mind and she might, as I have, falsely believed she wrote it down before. lol
Anyway, on to the journal entries regarding the events of the last chapter.
June 3rd, 2003: I feel like a total baka now, not knowing what the hell Akane was talking about, that whole buysexual thing. I'm not sure, I think I might have thought about the possibilities once or twice (I did hear a few things while traveling about girls "doing it" with other girls, but never actually believed these things to be true up until now), I mean, how couldn't I? I always sorta tossed those thoughts aside, thinking Akane wouldn't go for that. Now she's telling me completely different…and she's right, I AM freaked out! I mean…I don't know about that whole girl thing…even as a guy, the idea of sleeping-sleeping with her makes me feel uncomfortable. Maybe it's just the whole "save-it-for-marriage" thing my mom raised me with. Obviously, I just don't have those kinds of feelings for Akane yet, which should ease my fears a bit about everything going so fast. Although I suppose things are going a little faster than I'd like them to.
Dear Diary,
I told him, and now I'm not really sure if I should've said anything at all…it was only that one time, and it was years ago, and I'm not even sure if that really makes me bisexual…other than no minding…well, that's something I'd rather save the thought for closer to the wedding, that is, if it'll happen at all. With things going as they are, I'm not at all certain what will happen. On yet another note, it seems that Ranma's a bit oblivious about any other type of sexuality but heterosexuality. Let another reason why thinking he's seriously perverted would be overestimating his intelligence. He's capable of learning, I'm sure, but he missed out on so many years of school that I'm surprised they actually allowed him to graduate.
Author's conclusion: Yes, this is my shortest chapter yet, but I already did a whole update of all the other chapters, which should make up for that. I'll try and keep up writing two a day, and making updates when I feel necessary. I hope you've enjoyed the story thus far and are pleased with the updates.
I hope that Chapter 13 kind of makes up for all of that by explaining that idea a little more. It was just one incident, and she's a bit uncomfortable about that, I also have made some changes to the chapter to make it sound more natural and to put a slightly higher emphasis on the fact that she's never felt that way for another girl since then. I also had a very inspired way of making her remember about it, so go and read up on a few of the changes, each is pointed out, so you can probably just skip over to the parts I indicate as having changed. Future chapters will be referred to as Ver.: 2.0 when I receive feedback that indicates I could make a change. I made sure that all the changes were subtle enough as to not disturb the flow of the story.
I'd like to take this opportunity to thank everyone who's reviewed the story up to this point in offering me advice that I can use for these revisions.
I'd also like to apologize, because I think I may have typed up about Akane being bi in one of the chapters where the program crashed and then forgot to mention it again when I re-typed it. I have no added it to any of the 2.0 revisions because for one I cannot remember where I wrote it originally, and for another thing it makes some sense that Akane would discus it in such a familiar sense, because it had been on her mind and she might, as I have, falsely believed she wrote it down before. lol
Anyway, on to the journal entries regarding the events of the last chapter.
June 3rd, 2003: I feel like a total baka now, not knowing what the hell Akane was talking about, that whole buysexual thing. I'm not sure, I think I might have thought about the possibilities once or twice (I did hear a few things while traveling about girls "doing it" with other girls, but never actually believed these things to be true up until now), I mean, how couldn't I? I always sorta tossed those thoughts aside, thinking Akane wouldn't go for that. Now she's telling me completely different…and she's right, I AM freaked out! I mean…I don't know about that whole girl thing…even as a guy, the idea of sleeping-sleeping with her makes me feel uncomfortable. Maybe it's just the whole "save-it-for-marriage" thing my mom raised me with. Obviously, I just don't have those kinds of feelings for Akane yet, which should ease my fears a bit about everything going so fast. Although I suppose things are going a little faster than I'd like them to.
Dear Diary,
I told him, and now I'm not really sure if I should've said anything at all…it was only that one time, and it was years ago, and I'm not even sure if that really makes me bisexual…other than no minding…well, that's something I'd rather save the thought for closer to the wedding, that is, if it'll happen at all. With things going as they are, I'm not at all certain what will happen. On yet another note, it seems that Ranma's a bit oblivious about any other type of sexuality but heterosexuality. Let another reason why thinking he's seriously perverted would be overestimating his intelligence. He's capable of learning, I'm sure, but he missed out on so many years of school that I'm surprised they actually allowed him to graduate.
Author's conclusion: Yes, this is my shortest chapter yet, but I already did a whole update of all the other chapters, which should make up for that. I'll try and keep up writing two a day, and making updates when I feel necessary. I hope you've enjoyed the story thus far and are pleased with the updates.