TetsuoTsubushi:
It was a good resolution to everything. I liked the song by the way, but
what now?
Response: That's exactly what I'm asking myself right now. How do I make the rest of the story interesting with everything resolved like this? lol. But there's still Shampoo (who I owe a diary entry) and Ukyo (who I also owe a diary entry) and Ryouga (who, I don't know…he's the best man now, but I might do another journal entry), and of course I have a few hijinx planned for the wedding ceremony. ^_-
Yeah, and I wrote the lyrics myself with a little inspiration from Blink 182. lol. I actually wrote it long before I wrote the chapter itself, and I was quite anxious to finally be able to put it in the story.
Dogbertcarroll:
(24)I know it's standard in all Anime series that no one remembers what they did the night before for the first few minutes upon waking but that's never set well with me. Unless large amounts of alcohol were involved I know exactly where I am and what I've done when I open my eyes in the morning. My brain doesn't need time to boot up. Unless active thinking is required. Then I need some coffee and a couple of minutes. *grin*
Response: Well, it adds a little to the shock value of everything that happens. It's a dramatic tool, I'll admit it.
I don't get the wedding being off part. Ranma turns into a girl half the time so they need to get used to it anyway. *shrug* They didn't seem that upset except for everyone finding out. Not to mention Akane was a bit harsh to him about his fear of storms.
Response: Akane's upset because she's ashamed of what happened, Ranma's upset for a similar reason, in fact he's probably more ashamed than Akane because they were both girls when it happened. So basically, they're both freaking out because they didn't expect something like that to happen. And as far as Akane being too hard on him, she just wants Ranma to not be afraid anymore, she's concerned about his fear and knows that Ranma doesn't want to be afraid anymore, and of course that she needs to push him in order to get rid of that fear. It's also a plot device by which to get them into the "situation".
(25)Pat yourself on the back. You deserve it for this chapter. Everyone was dead on and the dialog was great. You covered everything that was important.
Response: Yeah, I actually wrote this chapter right after chapter 24, but didn't put it up right away since I obviously ended with a cliff-hanger. The next day I made some revisions that I had though of that night, which was really good because I had to make some very important changes in the dialog, and change the scene with Tofu and Akane to take place a bit after the scene with Ranma, Ukyo, and Mousse.
The Night of Saturday, August 2nd:
Ranma seemed rather fixated on the view of the thunderstorm through Akane's window.
"Ranma, I told you before you…"
"Do I look like I'm afraid anymore?"
"Well…" Akane said, looking at Ranma and giving it some serious thought, "…actually, Ranma what are you doing?"
"I'm watching the storm, what does it look like?"
"Okay…" Akane said, obviously a bit confused.
"It's just so…beautiful, I never noticed that before."
"You were too busy being scared."
"Yeah," Ranma said, "It's like ever since that night, I haven't been afraid. You know that storm last night? It was like I had never been scared of it at all, it's weird…"
"So all you need was a little lovin'?" Akane asked.
"Well…I guess…"
"You're so cute when you blush like that." Akane commented.
"Hey, just because I'm staying with this girl thing doesn't automatically give you permission to call me 'cute'!"
"Sheesh, I was only trying to give you a compliment!"
"Well, thank you then."
"Why exactly do you want to be a girl when we're sleeping until we're married? I said I'd be comfortable with you as a guy, as long as we didn't DO anything. Or do you think the temptation is too great?"
"No, it's just that…I could get, you know…"
"Aroused?" Akane asked, "That isn't limited strictly to guys, as you should probably know by now."
"You mean when...?"
"Yeah, that was it."
"Well, it isn't as uncomfortable, and I don't think it happens as easily…"
"Well, as far as the comfort part goes I can't say I know, because I've never been a guy before."
"Exactly."
"And how, do you think, would you end up getting aroused?"
"Well…uh…sometimes it just happens, like in mornings…"
"Aside from mornings."
"Akane, well…I kinda thought you'd…you know, since for one I'm not afraid of storms anymore…"
"Well, that'll make up for you not being a guy, then. Besides, there's a storm going on, I have to comfort you in case your fear suddenly returns. Still, it better not return or I'll be angry."
"Thanks, Akane-chan." Ranma said, finally cuddling up to (her) fiancé.
"Did you just call me-?" Akane asked.
"I must've been blind all that time before."
"Not a very convincing excuse, but it'll do just fine. Goodnight Ranma"
"Goodnight, Akane-CHAAAAAAHHHHHNNNNN!!" Ranma said teasingly.
Akane giggled softly before finally falling asleep.
August 3rd, 2003:
To: Diary
Still hard to believe I letting them go through with marriage. Mousse strong, but me still think Ranma stronger. Suppose Mousse is strong enough, he Amazon but that fine, he like me, I like him, good chance he become husband. Few dates first, though. At least Ranma be happy somehow with crazy girl. Me steal her mallets, be sure she no hurt Ranma. Well hidden but me find them, some diaries there too, one Ranma's, I no look, though, put back where me found. Hope Ranma be happy, hope dates with Mousse go well.
From: Shampoo
Author's Conclusion: I hope the diary thing from Shampoo made up for the shortness of this chapter, I'm running out of computer time so I had to end it here. I'll be sure to update again tomorrow, though. ^_-
Response: That's exactly what I'm asking myself right now. How do I make the rest of the story interesting with everything resolved like this? lol. But there's still Shampoo (who I owe a diary entry) and Ukyo (who I also owe a diary entry) and Ryouga (who, I don't know…he's the best man now, but I might do another journal entry), and of course I have a few hijinx planned for the wedding ceremony. ^_-
Yeah, and I wrote the lyrics myself with a little inspiration from Blink 182. lol. I actually wrote it long before I wrote the chapter itself, and I was quite anxious to finally be able to put it in the story.
Dogbertcarroll:
(24)I know it's standard in all Anime series that no one remembers what they did the night before for the first few minutes upon waking but that's never set well with me. Unless large amounts of alcohol were involved I know exactly where I am and what I've done when I open my eyes in the morning. My brain doesn't need time to boot up. Unless active thinking is required. Then I need some coffee and a couple of minutes. *grin*
Response: Well, it adds a little to the shock value of everything that happens. It's a dramatic tool, I'll admit it.
I don't get the wedding being off part. Ranma turns into a girl half the time so they need to get used to it anyway. *shrug* They didn't seem that upset except for everyone finding out. Not to mention Akane was a bit harsh to him about his fear of storms.
Response: Akane's upset because she's ashamed of what happened, Ranma's upset for a similar reason, in fact he's probably more ashamed than Akane because they were both girls when it happened. So basically, they're both freaking out because they didn't expect something like that to happen. And as far as Akane being too hard on him, she just wants Ranma to not be afraid anymore, she's concerned about his fear and knows that Ranma doesn't want to be afraid anymore, and of course that she needs to push him in order to get rid of that fear. It's also a plot device by which to get them into the "situation".
(25)Pat yourself on the back. You deserve it for this chapter. Everyone was dead on and the dialog was great. You covered everything that was important.
Response: Yeah, I actually wrote this chapter right after chapter 24, but didn't put it up right away since I obviously ended with a cliff-hanger. The next day I made some revisions that I had though of that night, which was really good because I had to make some very important changes in the dialog, and change the scene with Tofu and Akane to take place a bit after the scene with Ranma, Ukyo, and Mousse.
The Night of Saturday, August 2nd:
Ranma seemed rather fixated on the view of the thunderstorm through Akane's window.
"Ranma, I told you before you…"
"Do I look like I'm afraid anymore?"
"Well…" Akane said, looking at Ranma and giving it some serious thought, "…actually, Ranma what are you doing?"
"I'm watching the storm, what does it look like?"
"Okay…" Akane said, obviously a bit confused.
"It's just so…beautiful, I never noticed that before."
"You were too busy being scared."
"Yeah," Ranma said, "It's like ever since that night, I haven't been afraid. You know that storm last night? It was like I had never been scared of it at all, it's weird…"
"So all you need was a little lovin'?" Akane asked.
"Well…I guess…"
"You're so cute when you blush like that." Akane commented.
"Hey, just because I'm staying with this girl thing doesn't automatically give you permission to call me 'cute'!"
"Sheesh, I was only trying to give you a compliment!"
"Well, thank you then."
"Why exactly do you want to be a girl when we're sleeping until we're married? I said I'd be comfortable with you as a guy, as long as we didn't DO anything. Or do you think the temptation is too great?"
"No, it's just that…I could get, you know…"
"Aroused?" Akane asked, "That isn't limited strictly to guys, as you should probably know by now."
"You mean when...?"
"Yeah, that was it."
"Well, it isn't as uncomfortable, and I don't think it happens as easily…"
"Well, as far as the comfort part goes I can't say I know, because I've never been a guy before."
"Exactly."
"And how, do you think, would you end up getting aroused?"
"Well…uh…sometimes it just happens, like in mornings…"
"Aside from mornings."
"Akane, well…I kinda thought you'd…you know, since for one I'm not afraid of storms anymore…"
"Well, that'll make up for you not being a guy, then. Besides, there's a storm going on, I have to comfort you in case your fear suddenly returns. Still, it better not return or I'll be angry."
"Thanks, Akane-chan." Ranma said, finally cuddling up to (her) fiancé.
"Did you just call me-?" Akane asked.
"I must've been blind all that time before."
"Not a very convincing excuse, but it'll do just fine. Goodnight Ranma"
"Goodnight, Akane-CHAAAAAAHHHHHNNNNN!!" Ranma said teasingly.
Akane giggled softly before finally falling asleep.
August 3rd, 2003:
To: Diary
Still hard to believe I letting them go through with marriage. Mousse strong, but me still think Ranma stronger. Suppose Mousse is strong enough, he Amazon but that fine, he like me, I like him, good chance he become husband. Few dates first, though. At least Ranma be happy somehow with crazy girl. Me steal her mallets, be sure she no hurt Ranma. Well hidden but me find them, some diaries there too, one Ranma's, I no look, though, put back where me found. Hope Ranma be happy, hope dates with Mousse go well.
From: Shampoo
Author's Conclusion: I hope the diary thing from Shampoo made up for the shortness of this chapter, I'm running out of computer time so I had to end it here. I'll be sure to update again tomorrow, though. ^_-