Here I am, back for a new round of review answers.
Miracle Chick, you flatter me. Of all my reviewers, none has put quite as much feeling into reading my story as you (though I must give props to Charmedfan03 for her happy dance). When I print out my story and all it's reviews, yours will be the ones I will treasure the most. Every time I updated, it was your response I would wait for, always hoping that you would enjoy the chapter. You only had nice things to say, and yet you managed to give me very informative feedback. It's nice to see someone who cares for Lance as much as I do. To answer your question, I will go into my description of the original epilogue in a minute. It contained a paragraph explaining that Pietro joined the acolytes.
Take care, and good luck with all of your writing endeavors.
Sailor X, thanks for all the complements and feedback. I like Pietro too, and ending it the way I did was kind of hard, but I really couldn't see him living with the X-Men the way I could see Lance doing it. As for the cussing, well, I look at a character and think to myself, "how would they respond in real life?" I know on the cartoon Lance can't cuss, but he also can't cut himself up. In this context, it just made sense for the character to use some bad language.
Ex-xox plus three- yeah, I thought it was sort of different, but hopefully not *too* far-fetched. After all, Lance doesn't really *want* to be a teacher, he just wants someplace to live where he can feel safe. Lance as a construction worker? Isn't that ironic (don't you think?)
Thanks to all.
Original Epilogue Idea:
I have this theory about Lance. Underneath everything there's this really good guy, but no one ever bothers to try and bring him out. Kitty managed for a while, but we all know how that ended, so now when I write him into fics, I can't help but turn him into the hero. Maybe I'm just fooling myself, but if you look at episodes like "Joyride", the ending of my fic makes sense on some level.
My original plan for the epilogue was to set it about 10 years in the future, when Lance would be about 27. I was going to have him still working for Xavier as a teacher (English, if you were wondering) even though he no longer had to. The atmosphere of the whole mansion would be something like in the movie, with lots of kids. It would have been written in first person, with Lance thinking back on a lot of stuff, with some funny antic dotes, and in the process explain everything you could *ever* want to know about how things ended up for him, and a few things you probably wouldn't. One part would explain how Pietro joined the acolytes and how they attacked the mansion. Lance still isn't an X-Man, but he helps defeat Magneto's crew.
This concept played all right in my head, but it *sucked* once put on the paper. For one thing, Lance is a cartoon character forever trapped at the age 17. To attempt to mature him as much as I was trying to do is a daunting task at best. The character that was speaking was simply not Lance.
Furthermore, it was *boring*. I realized I didn't care that Lance didn't get along with Summers or that he liked the mansion. It was redundant. Some of the stuff where Lance talks about his job was all right, but like I said, it just wasn't Lance. One thing I kind of liked was a funny story about Lance loosing his virginity and how it was the biggest disaster one could imagine, but it *didn't fit*. At all.
Well anyway, thanks a bunch to my reviewers. And in case you were wondering, "Between the Bars" is a song on the Good Will Hunting soundtrack. When I was uploading the first chapter, I realized I was going to need a title. That song was on my CD player, and the lyrics vaguely fit, so I went with it.
Between the Bars, by Eliot Smith-
Drink up baby
Stay up all night
With the things you could do
You wont, but you might
The potential you'll be
That you'll never see
The promises you'll only make
The people you've been before
That you don't want around anymore
That push and shove and wont bend to your will
I'll keep them still
Miracle Chick, you flatter me. Of all my reviewers, none has put quite as much feeling into reading my story as you (though I must give props to Charmedfan03 for her happy dance). When I print out my story and all it's reviews, yours will be the ones I will treasure the most. Every time I updated, it was your response I would wait for, always hoping that you would enjoy the chapter. You only had nice things to say, and yet you managed to give me very informative feedback. It's nice to see someone who cares for Lance as much as I do. To answer your question, I will go into my description of the original epilogue in a minute. It contained a paragraph explaining that Pietro joined the acolytes.
Take care, and good luck with all of your writing endeavors.
Sailor X, thanks for all the complements and feedback. I like Pietro too, and ending it the way I did was kind of hard, but I really couldn't see him living with the X-Men the way I could see Lance doing it. As for the cussing, well, I look at a character and think to myself, "how would they respond in real life?" I know on the cartoon Lance can't cuss, but he also can't cut himself up. In this context, it just made sense for the character to use some bad language.
Ex-xox plus three- yeah, I thought it was sort of different, but hopefully not *too* far-fetched. After all, Lance doesn't really *want* to be a teacher, he just wants someplace to live where he can feel safe. Lance as a construction worker? Isn't that ironic (don't you think?)
Thanks to all.
Original Epilogue Idea:
I have this theory about Lance. Underneath everything there's this really good guy, but no one ever bothers to try and bring him out. Kitty managed for a while, but we all know how that ended, so now when I write him into fics, I can't help but turn him into the hero. Maybe I'm just fooling myself, but if you look at episodes like "Joyride", the ending of my fic makes sense on some level.
My original plan for the epilogue was to set it about 10 years in the future, when Lance would be about 27. I was going to have him still working for Xavier as a teacher (English, if you were wondering) even though he no longer had to. The atmosphere of the whole mansion would be something like in the movie, with lots of kids. It would have been written in first person, with Lance thinking back on a lot of stuff, with some funny antic dotes, and in the process explain everything you could *ever* want to know about how things ended up for him, and a few things you probably wouldn't. One part would explain how Pietro joined the acolytes and how they attacked the mansion. Lance still isn't an X-Man, but he helps defeat Magneto's crew.
This concept played all right in my head, but it *sucked* once put on the paper. For one thing, Lance is a cartoon character forever trapped at the age 17. To attempt to mature him as much as I was trying to do is a daunting task at best. The character that was speaking was simply not Lance.
Furthermore, it was *boring*. I realized I didn't care that Lance didn't get along with Summers or that he liked the mansion. It was redundant. Some of the stuff where Lance talks about his job was all right, but like I said, it just wasn't Lance. One thing I kind of liked was a funny story about Lance loosing his virginity and how it was the biggest disaster one could imagine, but it *didn't fit*. At all.
Well anyway, thanks a bunch to my reviewers. And in case you were wondering, "Between the Bars" is a song on the Good Will Hunting soundtrack. When I was uploading the first chapter, I realized I was going to need a title. That song was on my CD player, and the lyrics vaguely fit, so I went with it.
Between the Bars, by Eliot Smith-
Drink up baby
Stay up all night
With the things you could do
You wont, but you might
The potential you'll be
That you'll never see
The promises you'll only make
The people you've been before
That you don't want around anymore
That push and shove and wont bend to your will
I'll keep them still
